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Review of February 28  
Review by GerMac
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Stickynotes, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your writing pieces, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This diary entry describes the last days of winter.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your writing piece and appreciate your humor about tolerating the fog. You have used many sentence fragments in your diary entry. You might want to think about the fragments and how they enhance style used sparingly.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Summer Salutation  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This free verse poem paints a splendid picture of the end of summer, autumn.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem. I find that "Summer Salutation" is full of poetic technique. Consonance is used in your poem, eg subtle shades. Personification is very effective, eg The wind sighs in the branches,
Enjoying its last dance
among the verdant leaves.

Your description is vivid, eg The coneflowers, resplendent in brilliant yellows. Your poem is free verse. There is a smooth flow of words. One is taken on a lovely tour of nature with your poem.
Think about using a comma after summer has peaked with a capital letter in the beginning of the next line, The first blush of fall.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of how many Days  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Moarzjasac, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the philosophy of an old man.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem. and appreciated your outlook on enjoying the small things in life, not the highly intellectual answers that most don't have the answers for. Your thoughts are interesting.

Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Nice description. You have many errors in punctuation, typos, capitalization, spelling, and language usage. You might want to evaluate your poem in those areas. I counted 23 errors, although they are errors that are repeated, eg using a comma when you shouldn't use one. Taking a class online in punctuating/capitalizing poetry might help, perhaps New Horizons Academy.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sum1, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the sentiment of losing a close friend.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I fully enjoyed reading your poem, "Please Don't Pass Me By". My sympathies. I've lost male and females this way hand get meloncholy when I think of them, especially when I hear a song we enjoyed as friends earlier. Please note suggestions below. They are related to punctuation, capitalization and usage.
Stanza 1: sought, NOT sought
Stanza 2: I NOT me (technically)
we NOT We
sitting NOT Sitting
home. NOT home
Stanza 3: day, NOT day
good-bye. NOT good-bye
Stanza 4: by NOT by,
much, NOT much

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of LOVING  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Mary Ann, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, , which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the many ways to express your love.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem and treasured your thoughts of different ways of expressing your love. I have noted several suggestions below: some typos, to punctuation to capitalization to language usage.
Line 1: There are many NOT There many
Line 2: from a gentle NOT From a gentle
Line 3: to the mighty Lord above NOT To the mighty Lord above
Line 4: for the very NOT for very the
Line 6: kitten's NOT kittens
Line 8: special friends NOT special friend.
Line 10: you'll be friends NOT you'll be I friends
Line 14: other's NOT others

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Sarah  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sarah, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's friendship with Sarah, who has helped him with W.D.C.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed hearing about your new friend. I appreciate friendship; I'm fairly new to WDC also! Your poem has a consistent rhyme pattern. The rhythm is upbeat and fun to read. Your description is vivid, eg From the fabled land of Golden Fleece. Second line of each stanza should have a comma at the end, not a period. Your punctuation of the poem is generally good.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Joy, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a special creature.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem about the canine creature. Good onomatopoeia, eg A low rumble through the clouds. Your description is vivid, eg Onset of grey storm on white sky. You might want to use a caesuras to indicate a pause rather than ellipsis dots. eg Stanza four: secrets of plotted torture~~. You have a plethora of poetic techniques in your poem. You had me hooked from the beginning.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Schnujo, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your Christmas songs which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This Christmas song is set to the tune of Winter Wonderland. Imagine that Warming Fire's Glow.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I fully enjoyed reading your Christmas song. I sang it to the tune of Winter Wonderland too. Your rhyme pattern in your song is consistent except for Stanza three, which distracted me a little in my reading. Description in your poem is vivid, eg Snowflakes race toward the fire. Your refrain is pleasant and part of the title, eg Nestled by the warming fire's glow. This tells me you have reminisced for many years. Nice job!


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of yourdiamante poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This diamanté poem describes the dual nature of a human being, body and soul.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Thank you for sharing your very thoughtful diamanté poem. The earthly body and the heavenly soul are infinitely different. I have to ask myself which do I prefer? There is no question in my mind. I am thankful that our Lord has given us a soul. Your poem is very well written. Thank you for the helpful explanation of the diamanté.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Communion  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a poem of a celebration of nature.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your Pleidaes form poem. What you have to say about Catholicism and lilting birds is delightful. This poem would be perfect in honor of St. Joseph's a Day and the return of the swallows to San Juan Capistrano which is not far away.

Chorus of Cardinals, NOT Chorus of Cardinals;
musical grace NOT musical grace. Periods are usually used at the end of the stanza.
Consumed in the backyard, NOT Consumed in the backyard.
I find punctuating poetry is quite complicated, unless no punctuation at all is used.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Rain  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Louise, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the sadness in a relationship.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your free verse poem. I really like watching the rain and having the warmth and comfort of being inside.

Stanza one: snow melt, no longer white NOT snow melt- no longer white If you want a pause here, try a caesuras, eg ~~
Stanza two: disarray while you look out NOT disarray-while you look out.
Stanza three: stanzas usually end in periods, NOT ellipsis dots.
I find that punctuation for poetry is very complicated. You might try an online class, eg New Horizons Academy.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Rejuventated  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Intuey, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the ensuing spring, cont out of cold winter months.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I truly enjoyed reading your poem and found it to be upbeat with spot on pacing. Your rhyme pattern is very consistent. Punctuation-actually the lack of it- enhances the reading aloud of your delightful poem. Description is vivid and inline rhyme is pleasant,, eg soaring high in the azure sk y.


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Whitemorn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a delightful picture of nature.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I thoroughly enjoyed your free form about nature. The description is vivid and your imagery is exquisite. I thought I was present on the scene. Perfectly lovely. You have used ellipsis dots in your poem, eg resting...resting...resting. Usually caesuras are used to show pause; hence, you would have resting~~resting~~now silent. No other suggestions noted.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of When It Dries  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Pony Tale, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's making of a masterpiece just with a dab of paint here and there.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and found your pacing to be upbeat and spot on! You must be good with a paint brush, painting masterpieces everywhere you look. Did you mean ship's prow or should it be bow?

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of baseball inspired by the legends of the game.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem inspired by the legends of baseball, no matter the level or even the demanding fans in the crowd. Stanza one: pastime NOT pastime. Stanza two: sought after NOT sought-after.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Intuey, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the special meaning of butterflies.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your thoughtful poem about butterflies that affect your soul. When their time is here, they fly away. Periods are not usually used in poems except at the end of the stanzas. Punctuation is very sensitive in poetry.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Cynaemon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes an apology and a token of love.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I really enjoyed reading your poem and liked what you had to say about keeping things in the proper perspective and not getting angry, remembering to keep love at the forefront. I loved how you gave your heart to help someone else mend. Beautiful! Stanza five: The rhyme scheme was moving along nicely, rhyming lines two and four of each stanza except for Stanza five, where the rhyme was lines one and three. That threw me off a little in my reading of your poem.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of A-mused  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sabaka, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints an interesting picture of an unexpected discovery on a woodland walk.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem. There are so many clever nuances in your poem, such as the title..."A-mused" you are, which is a play on words, dear muse. You conclude: Musing near a muse is a-musing. After all, the dancing fliying creatures are also muses.

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Description is vivid, eg from the circular wood stump. Onomatopoeia is a poetic technique you have used well, eg footsteps crunching. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Goodbye  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi DebKatAna, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of you poems, which which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a unrequited love.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You said goodbye because your beloved is into alcohol. I can't say I enjoyed reading your sad poem, but I learned something from reading your poem. Sometimes goodbye is the only answer. .

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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your free verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Peter, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the unlicensed review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Thie poem paints a picture of a beautiful day. Care and worry were offered no sanctuary at the Plaza.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem, and found it was loaded with poetic technique, from personification, description, metaphor and creativity. . I especially enjoyed hearing about the conversation of the two friends and the wonderful imagery of nature. A day so fine will not call again soon.

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Nice use of personification, eg The Plaza offered its embracing arms. Description is vivid, eg Your use of metaphor is effective, winter's last cry for attention. The rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
Line 24: with whom NOT with who.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Hooves, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our February Animal Awareness Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of Finnegan, a bull who saved Ireland.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I fully enjoyed your historical story poem told through the eyes of a bull. He is a most believable animal. You hooked me from the beginning of your poem. Very excellent historical story poem.

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Personification is used very well throughout your poem, eg He rang the castle bell. Description is vivid, eg And so he wandered day and night over field and emerald green. Poetic convention of consonance was effectively used, eg Sputtered the snotty servant type. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
Stanza 4: At NOT As (typo).

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our February Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the poet's plan to travel with his basset hound Charlie to Oregon.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem about your plan to visit your sister in Oregon with Charlie, your old basset hound. It appears that your plan to travel on the airlines with Charlie didn't work out. I wonder if you were serious when you told the travel agent you couldn't possibly teach him those tricks overnight. It seems he might never learn to sit, turn and stand. It would be too hard on him even though he's a spry for his age. Perhaps you can drive to Oregon. Very excellent pacing and rhythm. . Rhyme pattern is consistent. Written in a very clever way. You're the most smooth flowing poet I know.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Zacharie, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our February Animal Awareness Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This children's poem paints a picture of Blue, the poet's adorable pet.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your children's poem. This is a sweet poem that children could easily memorize. Children would enjoy the humor of your poem as well. Your rhyme pattern is consistent. The flow of words is quite smooth.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi KneelingHands, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles for our February Animal Awareness Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article describes cruelty toward animals.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Interesting article. Good job. I think you need to explain paragraph 4. A man held a khukri in his hand and the elephant's ears were torn. Further explanation would help the reader. Paragraph 5 reads roughly. You might want to read it aloud and edit to improve the language.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
Paragraph 1: made its presence NOT making its presence.
Paragraph 2: I humane NOT inhuman.
Paragraph 3: It was one sunny jobless afternoon. A couple of friends and I... NOT It was one sunny jobless afternoon, a couple of friends and I. (comma splice).
Paragraph 4: steep NOT sleep


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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi S-J, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our February Animal Awareness Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. . This poem is rated E for the reading enjoyment of everyone.

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the meaning of a rooster's crowing.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your interesting poem the meaning of a oostr's written in couplets. Couplet eight you might think about using voices can be quite loud rather than their voice can be quite loud. Couplet eight: another's NOT anothers. You should have a period after each couplet.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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