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Review of A Working Life  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. . This poem is rated E for everyone to read.

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the hope for a quiet, pleasant workday as we approach the weekend.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Work keeps us busy, pays the bills and gives us a sense of purpose. A job, a raise, and a hope that we pass the test. Often we're too sick to work, drag ourselves in and wonder where to begin. I always enjoy reading your poems which are very straight forward.

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The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent, an abab scheme. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Sounds Unseen  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi RF, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of you poems, which I found on public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the incongruity of sights and sounds.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You say sounds are unseen and sights are unheard. This is not what I would expect. I would expect the opposite. You don't see the frogs or crickets nor hear the search lights or cell phone towers.

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Description is vivid, eg Water on moonlit lake is smooth. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Keaton, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the loss of a close friend who will never replaced.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You lament the loss of a very close friend of yours. I enjoyed reading your poem, even though I felt sorrow for you. What you had to say was beautiful.

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Your Unrhymed verse is heartfelt and well-stated. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Whitemorn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. . This poem is rated E for everyone to read and enjoy.

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes what it takes to gain an animal's trust.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You have correctly analyzed what it takes to make friends with Mama Grey and her kittens. It is unusual for a mother cat to allow a stranger around her babies. The kittens were not frightened and enjoyed the treats you gave them. The mama cat was the timid one, not wanting any food unless she thought you were sleeping. Usually, the mama won't have anything to do with you or let you around her babies. You must have a special quality that allows the babies to approach you right from the beginning. Now that all are grown, I guess your house is a home! I enjoyed reading your adorable poem about Mama Grey and her kittens. I smiled the whole time I read it.

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The rhyme pattern of your poem is consistent and there is a smooth flow of words. The description in your poem is vivid, eg a quaint little house nestled low in the glen. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Pat, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your limerick, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes an age old problem of putting all your eggs in one bucket.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
This limerick describes a man from Nantucket whose put all his eggs in one bucket. When he dropped the eggs, she had a fit because there were no more eggs. This lesson could be applied to our daily living. When all your opportunities are gone, life gets much more difficult. I always enjoy reading a limerick. Thanks.

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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi. Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes an historical event in Scotland.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I truly enjoyed your historical poem and the intrigue of the courageous maid of the master and lady of high birth who delivered the crown jewels of Scotland to safety. I's like to know more of the history of this era.

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Description is vivid, eg Sun-rising rugged rocky cliffs. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Last Train  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Carly, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public reviewing pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's darker teenage angst.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of mystery. He leaves alone on the last train. Her child is covered with care as she waits for her lover on the last train.


*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled through your verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Songs of our life  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Cadie Laine, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your love poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This love poem describes the poet's beloved.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You speak of your beloved and how you two didn't start your friendship. Someone else ignited the spark. He's the inspiration in your life. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of a love connection. What could be better on Valentine's Day 2017.

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Rhyme s sprinkled through your verse. Good use of metaphor, eg ignited the spark. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Marriage  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Pony Tale, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The poet never realized she was so revolting until marriage. What's

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You bring out rotten, decaying and dying in her. Worms are spewing from her. She's vomiting all the time now. .

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Your poem is Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of If not for you  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Conformonot, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem lyriccs,, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem lyrics was written by the lyricist when he was twenty.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
This song has a way of telling how infatuated the lyricist is with his girlfriend. Beautiful girl with beautiful thoughts. I will crave your flavor forever. I want only you. Lovely refrain in your song lingers: If not for you I want nothing at all.

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Good metaphor, eg park my mind in your garage. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
Stanza 4: it's NOT its
Stanza 5: you're NOT your.

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Review of September Rain  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, , which I found on the public review pages. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes an autumn collage.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I really enjoyed your highly descriptive poem and your many metaphors and similes. You leave a sense with the reader of being in touch with the past and the present seasons. Nice job.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Nice use of simile, eglike the curtain which falls at the end of the play. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of ROSA PARKS  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Dr. Gupta, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes Rosa Parks and the starting of the movement for the liberation of American Blacks.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You have written one fine historical poem, which I fully enjoyed reading. There is an underlying tone of social conscience in your poem. I wish there were more historical poems like yours.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. Syllable count contributes to a smooth flow of words. Excellent pacing. Write on! I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Men suffer too  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Chris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a tribute to a charitable man who died of breast cancer.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Sadly, your friend was charitable in helping others find a second chance, but he was not given another chance in life. Christ had other plans for him. He was the giver and helper of others. That was Christ's plan for him. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of love and good will from him to others and vice versa. Those left behind will try to defeat cancer.


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Your pacing is excellent in this poem. Your rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Very Thankful, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a Christian experience.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
It seems that your poem is referring to a relationship that man might have with Christ if they could see the opportunity. Christ would help them to rid themselves of drugs, sin and even complacency when they're in church, thinking everything is okay and not realizing they could rid themselves of sin if they accepted Christ. The one thing that stops me from this thought is you did not capitalized H as in He. You used a small h throughout. Off that, I have to think "he" must be a man representing Christ, a disciple or minister or lay person wanting to do good for others.

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Your poem is Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Camp California  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jeff, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This double reverse etheree poem describes the influence of camp life in the country for children from Brazil.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You speak of some experiences country life can give to poor, intercity children who have never seen a tree or swum in a pool. Even Mother Nature pulled through for these children and shared her incredible beauty with them. You must have had a joyful experience helping these children see the hope of a verdant countryside.

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Your double reverse etheree form poem is quite interesting with syllable count. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of burning slash  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Chazzz, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of burning slashes..

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I read your poem several times and had different thoughts of the meaning of your poem. I went to the dictionary and reviewed the definition of slashes used a a noun. That's what you had written in your description. I found that there are many meanings of slash used as a verb, but only one used as a noun. Slashes is a tract of wet swampy ground overgrown with bushes. I re-read your poem for the third time and truly enjoyed what you said, especially your relaxation time of sipping chardonney after working hard.all day. Thank you for the tour of your project.


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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of A LIFELONG BOON  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dr. Gupta, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes why a book is man's best friend.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I agree with you, a book is always valuable. A new dress or lipstick wears out somewhat like depreciation, and then you throw it away. A book is always cherished. I have friends who when first married went without food so they could buy one book a month. Still cherished by the family. I enjoyed reading your poem as there is a love of precious objects. Areas for improvement: N/A. My favorite part: recognizing a book as precious.

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Your rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes 'the river horse'.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
With your description of this animal you have to be speaking of a hippopatomous, a giant of an animal at 8,000 pounds. His small ears and ivory tusk gives him away in my book. I am interested to learn that he doesn't swim. He must swim in the rivers. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of appreciation of large, land, herbivores. The title of your poem is appropriate "The 'River Horse'" in that he looks a little like a horse when in the river.

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Unrhymed verse. Good scientific detail on this hippo. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi. Princess Megan, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the mermaid princess of the ocean.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
A beautiful mermaid splashes with her dolphin friends. The lighthouse shines a beacon light and the mermaid hides. Her whale friends greet her. The tidal waves come in and she swims to shore. She escapes just in time. Sailors watch her day and night. She is beautiful and an illusion of fantasy. I enjoyed reading your story poem. There is an underlying tone of appreciation of ocean life. The title of your poem is appropriate. Areas for improvement: N/A. My favorite part: the love of the ocean community for the mermaid.

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Your story poem is Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the. public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This free verse poem describes travel in America.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Sightseeing beginning in Boston, then to New York, on to our nation's Capitol, then to Florida and Louisiana and the French Quarter,now into Texas, New Mexico, Arizona, Nevada, now California. You are stuck with those places you haven't been to, yet you'll be there in time. I enjoyed reading your organized and easy to follow poem. There is an underlying tone of a person educated in travel. The title for your poem "Sightseeing in America" is appropriate in that a lot of time is not spent in any one place,: it is sightseeing, Areas for improvement: N/A. My favorite part: Washington D.C. and New York.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. Well-written. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of God is alive  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's spiritual side.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
God is alive, not dead. He will survive in spite of man. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of faith in God and what He can do. Even though man's dark nature can try to kill God, God won't let this happen. He will revive man's soul and help man survive. The title of your poem "God Is Alive" is appropriate in that He is forever present. Areas of improvement: N/A. My favorite part: God will revive man's soul with His infinite strength.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. Well-written. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Mopsy and Oliver  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi ConnieAnn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes two strangers who found common ground.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:She and this new cat got along very well.
Two friends, one not too old, one not young. Before he touched her things, he'd better think twice. The porch was hers but he lived there now. Could they share it? She hissed and spat. They might make a good team. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of friendship between animals. Areas of improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Andy, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

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This poem describes how broken hearts mend over time.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Have you been betrayed and the wound ripped open again. Don't be bitter or vindictive because in the long run you'll pay. Try to forgive and forget. They'll end up paying for their debt.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Ten to One  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Intricate Mind, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your writing pieces, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

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This piece describes the personality traits of an author. N

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Your piece has an interesting approach in that you describe your own trains and drop off the ones you don't especially want to include. If you wanted to play a game like charades, you could give this a title and drop off traits that are lower in your personality strata or lower priorities and call it Ten To One. I enjoyed reading your piece, as there is an underlying element of psychology. The title "Ten to One" is appropriate. Whether you intentionally drop off traits or not. My favorite part: identifying your traits. (I've done some of this online based on a battery of tests. I might do it myself for fun. Areas for improvement:

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Good job. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Muse  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Shubham, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for your account anniversary. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture about how you feel when you're muse is inspired.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your mind searches and your soul hides. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of fascination with the ability of the imagination. The muse does amuse. The title of your poem "The Muse" is appropriate in that it is the center of your poem. Areas for improvement: N/A. My favorite part: you can feel the emotions in your heart, then they subside.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your heart. Metaphor is good, eg the hearth of your heart bursts into flames of inspiration. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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