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Review of In Dreams  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Purple Princess, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of your loved one and the dreams you have of him.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your heart thunders; your skin's on fire with burning desire. Savoring kisses of last night's dream. Now morning's light takes him away. In the night dreams come true and you are with him.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of anticipation in your poem. The title "In Dreams" is appropriate in that you are savoring him in dreams. Areas of improvement: See suggestion.

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Effective use of metaphors, eg your heart thunders. Description is vivid, savoring kisses of last night's dream.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
morning's light NOT morning's light.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a limited imagination, which is the only thing that slows us down.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Fingers stirr wishing stars as dandelionn seeds dance on a breeze. Cartwheel snowflakes catch the golden glints of the midnight sun. Magical meanderings are limited only by imagination. Anything is possible.

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Description is vivid, eg fingers stirring wishing stars. Metaphors are effectively used, eg cartwheeling snowflakes. Consonance is used well, eg golden glints.
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Unrequited  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This Shakespeare sonnet paints a picture of unrequited love.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Pale echoes from the past fail and hide in silence beneath a lover's veil. We started as friendly but she moved on. She never saw the love that grew . Had you courage but that time is gone, fading before the sun. You will remain apart in silent suffering. To open your heart is asking for more pain than you can bear, and still stand on your feet. Time heals all. You'll hold her in your heart until that day.

I enjoyed reading your sonnet as there is an underlying tone of patience and courage. The title for your poem is appropriate in that there was no return from the woman you were infatuated with. Areas of improvement: N/A.

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Your poem is a Shakespeare sonnet of 14 lines with iambic pentameter. Rhyme pattern is consistent. Cadence provides a smooth flow of words. Effective use of simile, eg like morning dew. Good use of metaphor, eg lover's veil.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
The line To bare my heart is asking for more pain than I can bear and still stand on mt feet seems redundant to me even though bare and bear are homonyms. Perhaps, use to open my heart vs. bare my heart.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, ,
which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a lost friendship.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You have suffered a loss of a once loyal friendship. Your hearts now saddened are yearning to mend. The cause of your loss was your search for happiness and love. Once happy times are remembered. Past, broken friendships are a finality structured in dreadful haste.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of regret over a lost friendship that ended in dreadful haste. The title of your poem, "Lost Friendship: A Deep Sadness" is appropriate in that you are experiencing deep sadness over a loss of this friendship. Areas of improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. Simile is used effectively, eg like a songbird's perch. Description is vivid, eg Past glories in our hours of waste.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Pat, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes an adopted son who suffers from Attachment Disorder.
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*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Is it worth another try? In a way you have cared too much. You tried to do the impossible and tried everything new that came along. You now have a therapist to help. Will that bring success? Will you give your all to the difficult journey ahead? After all the disappointment, can you still find faith to believe? The therapist has taught you how to parent a child with Attachment Disorder in the home.

I enjoyed reading your poem as there is an underlying tone of finding the courage to persevere. The title for your poem "After All This Time" is appropriate.in that it took you several years to find a therapist capable of helping your adopted son with Attachment Disorder and help you with parenting a child who has this disorder. The statement made in your poem is have faith and courage.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. Logical development is good. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi x.Amaranthene, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a picture of the contagious aspect of abuse.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You say in your poem that he has lied to you, deceived you, despised being seen with you, makes you believe that he loves you. He has wounded you, damaged you and for what reason? Does it make him feel whole and complete? A woman he had a relationship with gave him the same deceptive treatment. Why does he treat you the same way she treated him?

I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of seeking the truth and understanding it. The title of your poem "Love, Lies and Deceptions" is appropriate, as those are the thins that happen in your poem. P Areas of improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. Remember to paint a picture; use detailed description to show your poem not tell. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Echoes  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi ltmliam98, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a love poem about a newly married couple.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
A lucid dream of the exchange of vows and the knot you tied is still wondrous. Refrain repeated three times. It states echoes of laughter ring in your ears. You're gone but you won't disappear. You and he don't want to age nor die. You sit and drink, feeling sorry for yourself. Take the pain out on someone else. Birds chirp, Babies scream and awaken you from your daunting dream. You say to excuse you if your words are too loud. The sun.with its fiery rays disappears.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as it reflects on a newly married couple's enthusiasm for each other. There is an underlying tone of young people trying to adjust to marriage. The title of your poem "Echoes" is appropriate in that there are echoes of laughter; you might be gone but you won't disappear thanks to the knot you tied. Areas for improvement: I found the message of your poem was not really clear. You might try reading it aloud and writing an outline. If it makes sense as an outline, your poem will make sense. Then write it again for the sake of clarity.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the wilderness home of the beaver.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Nestled on a cool, restful lake in the mountains in the expansive wilderness of the Northwest is home to an historic and symbolic creature. The beaver exists among tributaries of the lake He dams the stream by his home, hoping to slow down swimming fish in an untame environment. He builds the dam, then rests and eats. The dam dissipates. He casts aside any fear of a relentless flow being tamed for good. The cyclical tone continues unabated.

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Stylistically, rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. Description is vivid, eg expansive wilderness. The adjective mountainous in the phrase mountainous shores seems awkward to me. You might think of re-wording this line of your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Musing and reality DLP, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you in a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture for balance in an unbalanced world.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
There is disdain for cruelty and worldliness: You are pursuing compassion in an unbalanced world. Some days are cloudy confusion. Others are quite still on starry nights. You perceive reality fairly clearly . What lies ahead in unseen realities? Love is the substance; wisdom guides. Though you might not grasp it yet, there is a reason for everything. Keep on searching with curious concern to mend our souls and see what we can learn.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as it makes a real statement of looking for balance in an unbalanced world. There is an underlying tone of searching for a way to mend our souls. The title of your poem "Meaningful Perplexity" is appropriate, in that there is a reason for the perplexity you feel so make it meaningful. Areas of improvement: Check the use of the word distain. Most memorable: The statement your poem makes.

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Stylistically, you have used metaphors well, eg, starry night of stillness. Nice job with the poetic convention of consonance, eg curious concern. Description is vivid, eg unseen realities. Logical development is excellent.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion: I think you meant to use the word disdain NOT distain. Disdain makes ore sense in context.

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Review of Destiny  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your , which I found on the. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the poet's and others' destinies.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Life may be what we make it. It can lead us on a wild chase, a problem we all face. You alone can pay the toll for dreams you hope will come true. When you think you have time to waste that extra day, think about why you went with your chosen way.

I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of seeking understanding of how we end up in a certain path. Areas for improvement: You might want to think about the logical development in some of your stanzas. The title for your poem "Destiny" is fairly appropriate. Check the meaning of the difference between destiny and destination.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
Stanza 2: our destinies NOT our destiny's
Stanza 3: your destiny NOT you're destiny

Thank you for sharing.j

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Review of Dark Thoughts  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Archie, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of dark thoughts, literally, in the middle of the night.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The dark, cool, delicious night set the stage for your poem. Stars devour the dark. If there are enough stars in the sky, they devour the dark sky. After night has had its way, birds sing in the dawn. Your poem had a syllable count of 7,6,5. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of appreciation of nature. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Stars devour the dark.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your free verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your , which I found on the. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of Fire Station No. 9 and a young boy's birthday celebration.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Cody's 4th birthday celebration is full of banners and balloons. Nine boys and girls are given fireman's hats atop their heads. They walk to Fire Station No. 9. Lt. Tom greets them and the children board the engine. He takes them on a tour, circling around the block. When they return, the children re-assemble and say their good-byes to Lt. Tom and Fire Station #9. This party seems to be the party of all times for young boys and girls. The message of your poem: It's possible to learn while celebrating.

I enjoyed reading your poem and felt I was there. There is an underlying tone of enthusiasm. and going for the gusto at Fire Station #9 and the engine. The title of your poem "Fire Station #9" is appropriate, Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: the fireman's hats!

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Dark Alliance  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Steph, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a dark alliance.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
What is wrong! What is right! When life's lines are so ambiguous? They hide in the shadows of reasonable men's minds. Dark Alliance, framed in men's hearts, make callous decisions. The sword of neutrality waivers when neutrality and strength are lacking. It is often consumed too fast. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of objectivity that the author is trying to bring out. If life's lines are ambiguous, nothing is said. If there is a dark association, decisions are not well brought out. Neutrality is a must. The message? Be committed; stand on principle, don't be partial. The title of your poem is appropriate "Dark Alliance". Areas for improvement:N/A.

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Well written. Logical development is very excellent. Rhyme sprinkled through poem. Excellent use of metaphor, eg hiding in the shadows of reasonable men's minds. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Jesus is Lord!  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ruwth, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your essays for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This essay paints a picture of the most important relationship in the monthly featured writer's life.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You begin your essay with "The Lord's Prayer" and show with examples that Our Lord did not mean for the Disciples to pray for, deliver, forgive ME, He meant for them to deliver US, and forgive US, He meant for US to pray, deliver, forgive in everything WE do. Prayer applies across the board to the whole body and family of Christ. I enjoyed reading your essay. There is an underlying tone of a real Christian spirit. The title "Give Us This Day, Our Daily Bread" is appropriate in that "The Lord's Prayer" from which your title is taken is a major part of your essay. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Pray for Us, not Me.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Evenings Walk  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mamac60, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with aone of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of perspective on life.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Solitude speaks to you on your evening walk and you understand. Joy and sadness are mixed with memories of youth. Everything that was and is brings you to darkness where you are able to heal. Night is your peace and where you go to think, remember and forget. I enjoyed reading your poem, in which there is an underlying tone of self-evaluation and putting things in perspective. The title of your poem "Evenings Walk" is appropriate, as this is where you examine your life. Areas for improvement: You might want to think about your use of the word darkness. It has a connotation of the devil or seamy side of life. I think you mean to say the darkness of the night. Perhaps, use the term darkness of the night, rather than darkness. Most memorable: Solitude speaks to you on your evening walk.

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Unrhymed verse. Descriptive n is vivid and expressive, eg memories of joy and sadness are mixed with my youth. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Mexical  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Fivesixer, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Who is to say anything is for certain?

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Any man can tell you he speaks three languages. What do you do when the third one stands out in colors and colons? When diplomacy works at its best, you'll be at the border between romance and war. The fine line is as big as a country, like my heart or my grudges, but how would you know differently if you didn't know the difference? I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of desiring to seek answers, especially when you don't understand the straigh forward, diplomacy or fine lines. The title of your poem "Mexical" may be appropriate. It needs to be researched for clarification. Online research tells me Mexicali is the capital of Baja California. I don't see anything on Mexical. Areas for improvement: See suggestions. Most memorable: caught at the border between romance and war. What is the message of your poem? It is not really clear to me.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
tell you NOT sell you
misjudgment sis NOT misjudge nets.

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Review of My Love  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of loving someone from afar.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You need her so much, you have to feel the warmth of her body. How I long for you to say those three magic words. I'm willing to wait for you forever. Even if you don't feel the same, you'll always be the keeper of my heart.

I enjoyed reading you poem, as it reminded me of infatuation. There is an. underlying tone of fascination with another person from afar. The title of your poem "My Love" is appropriate, in that this love could be one-sided. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: The long list of ways the woman satisfies the needs and love of man. If you can't have her in reality, you can have her in your dreams.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
You're so beautiful NOT your so beautiful
You're my princess NOT Your my princess


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Review of Darkness Lies  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the lies of depression.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:.
Depression is only an illusion of your mind. Dawn gives the hope and faith that dispel the dark devil of depression. I enjoyed reading your insightful poem, as there is an underlying tone of discernment and honesty. The title of your poem "Darkness Lies" is very appropriate in that a lack of faith and the presence of the devil lies. Areas of improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Dawn give faith that dispel darkness. Message of your poem: Always use discerrnment and honesty.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Metaphor is used effectively, eg Darkness lies. Unrhymed verse is used well. Poem is well-written.
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of your regular time together with your friend.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:{/b
You busily plan your weekly production schedule then dial her cell phone number, and eagerly plan your next meeting time together. Your memories of sweet loyalty and young passion intimately are obvious as you gently show care through your hand held devices. The message of the poem is appreciation of a device that allows all communication.

This title "A Love That Rings True" is appropriate, as you communicate over the cell phone. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of convenience. Most memorable: Regular endearing correspondences. Areas for improvement: N/A

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
Stanza 1: I think you meant production NOT productive.

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Review of FRED AND COCO  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi WhoMe? I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. The My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the antics of two family dogs.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Fred loves his toys and Coco loves to take them from her. She growls when Fred tries to get his toys back. Fred runs around the gazebo, hoping she'll chase him.

The title of your poem is appropriate, but could be more creative. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of playfulness between the two dogs.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jane, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the poet's childhood spent near a field of clover.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
A clover field got your attention one day as your drove by. You walked to the field and walked with the cool ground beneath your feet and bees nearby. She then began thinking of her childhood when her parents took her to a clover field. You learned the day you were stung by a bee that bees are to be watched not touched!

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion: learned NOT learnt
Thinking about using past tense at the beginning of the poem, took my shoes and socks off NOT take my shoes and socks off.

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Review of 1994  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi B. M. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of tragedy in 1994.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:{/b
You say 1994 was a year of budding romances and second chances.. It was instead a year of heartbreak and strife. You recall that your best friend died that year. It didn't seem to matter to anyone else. They had their plans for the year of all years. They didn't care if Iyou lost your best friend. It was a cold, cloudy day when you lay him to rest. You drowned in sorrow's pool that year. Something died inside of you. I am so sorry to hear of your sadness. I truly Hope that the Lord protects you against this sorrow.

The title of your poem "1994" is appropriate. I'm sure that day is ingrained in your mind. I felt sympathetic reading your poem. I hope you've been able to soothe that which died inside you the day he was buried. Areas for improvement: N/A

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Nice job with consistent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Near the Fountain  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Nikola, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of voices blended with the water's symphony.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Young people talk and laugh. Voices blend with water in a song of joyful symphony. The refrain "Near the fountain" is repeated four times. Lovers part ways with tears as the fountain gushes its own tears of symphony. People dare to dream. The hopes, joys and sorrows calmly reflect in cooling harmony. I find this poem is refreshing with the combination of music and a water fountain.

The title of your poem "Near the Fountain" is appropriate, in that being near the fountain brings out the harmony of people and the beauty and a refreshing quality of water. I enjoyed your poem, as there is an underlying tone of bringing out hopes, joys, and sorrows and real people. Areas for improvement: N/A
Most memorable: appreciating of joyful symphony' and cooling water. .

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Metaphor is effective, eg water's song in a joyful symphony. Onomatopoeia is used well, eg gushes. Description is vivid, eg cooling harmony. Unrhymed verse is pleasant.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of wisdom  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tank, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture for witless poetry.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:{/b
Your poem is short in length and long in wisdom. This seems to me like it is fabulously witty. A word for the wise one would surmise would be sufficient. It isn't.

The title for your poem is "Wisdom", in that if you have any common sense, a word for the wise would be enough said. The listener would know it is time to button up thou lips, and learn from the moment. All you should need to inculcate is one or a few words that will keep you in the pink. You should have faith that this teacher of sorts has knowledge and wisdom to correct the problem. The last line of the poem: IT ISN'T. A person never learns the easy way. It always takes more time than it should; a person almost always learns better from his own mistakes. That's unfortunate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of: practicality vs. impracticality. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: the whole poem I refer to as a saying.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled in your poem. The poetic convention of consonance, eg word to the wise.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Cypollo, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a girl whose smiles have stopped.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
When your smiles have stopped, your face turns away, and your eyes drop, your thoughts seem to stray to those quiet, secret places deep behind your eyes. . When your soul wanders through memories and lies, that is when you age with a heart's rage. I know not your sorrows or fears, nor words to put a stop to your tears and restore what life cheats. I have only a kiss where your sad heart beats.

The title of your poem "When Your Smiles Have Stopped" is appropriate, as smiles are connected to a person's overall outlook. I enjoyed reading your poem in that there is an underlying tone of truth seeking and understanding human nature. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: I have only a kiss where a sad heart beats. Something to ponder. I believe you are telling the girl not to get involved in lies, rages and the complexities of life.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
heart's NOT hearts

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