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Review by Preacher
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I love the humor coming through your account. Even though this must have been very frustrating at the time, your account is an enjoyable read.

I could find no grammar or punctuation errors. As I have said, I am no expert in poetic meter or styles, but I know what I like.
Your determination to get home is one I can identify with.

Thanks for entering the Forty or More Winter contest.

Good Luck with the contest!

George
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Review by Preacher
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You sound like quite the daredevil. My right arm has been broken only once, but it was in three places.

I can see why this would stand out as a memorable snow event. The account is well-written with only a minor typo I could see:

"and our doctors unique ability" should be an apostrophe in doctor's .

Thanks for entering the Forty or More Winter contest.

Good luck in the contest! (and stay off the fences *Smile*)

George
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Review of Culling  
Review by Preacher
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinon.

Title

I'm not quite sure how the title fits.

Content

As I read this, I was reminded of Edger Allen Poe. This piece also created an impression of something written in the Victorian era. Your descriptions work to create a very distinct mood. Perhaps I have been reading too much Poe lately, but I could see his influence in your style for this story. This is not a criticism, just an observation.

You have a strong vocabulary and use it very well. This piece is certainly one of classic horror and foreboding.

Technical

The biggest thing I noticed is your use of "that." I guess it stands out to me because I tend to use "that" way too much. Allow me to make some suggestions:

Try substituting "that" with "which." For example:

"sitting by a receding fire that burned within a"

Try:

"sitting by a receding fire which burned within a"

You might also be able to leave it out completely:

"The candles that I had lit were long lifeless"

Try:

"The candles I had lit were long lifeless"

I would suggest you look at each use of "that" and see if it can be eliminated or replaced with "which."

Overall Impression

A very spooky, disquieting read. Thanks for sharing. I much prefer this to graphic blood and gore.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of The R Word  
Review by Preacher
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title

The title intrigued me. I think that's a good thing for a title to do.

Content

This story of the world economic problems affecting one couple makes the issues very real and personal. This takes the issue beyond what "the country" is going through, or what "the world" is going through. The clear reality is found in what the individuals are going through. I like the way you developed the story out, not immediately revealing what the "R word" is.
I also like how you ended it on a positive note, probably because I have had to start over more than once, including a couple of career changes. There is always hope.

Technical

I didn't really notice much needing attention. All I really saw was the last sentence:

"The R word didn’t take that away from us7`" I' m not sure how the 7' got in there.

Overall Impression

I liked the story, especially the hopeful ending. Thanks for sharing.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of Ghosts  
Review by Preacher
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This reveiw is intended to be helpful. it is also just one person's opinon.

Title

I don't see any reference to ghosts in the story, either in the spectral sense or in the metaphorical sense. Are you referring the ghost of memories of Sarah?

Content

You do a good job setting the scene and I like your descriptions. You did not make the cemetary seem a wicked, forebodding place. It is a place of quiet reflection. The protagonist is able to come here, collect her thoughts, release her emotions, and be strengthened to carry on.

Technical

Just a couple of things I noticed.
You seem to have the same issue I do with the word "that." Try either eliminating it from the sentence, or replacing it with "which" or "who" where appropriate. Here's a sample of what I mean:

"There is only one place that remains barren." Try re-writing this as:

"There is only one place which remains barren."

" It was Sarah that brought me here" Try this:

"It was Sarah who brought me here"

"when I was so lost that I may have" Try leaving it out:

"when I was so lost I may have"

Overall Impression

This is a very good look into a character. It would be interesting to see this character in other settings, Perhaps you could explore the turns her life has taken a little bit. All in all, well done.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of The Frozen Tea  
Review by Preacher
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title

I understand the reference to tea, but not to frozen tea. I guess I am missing something.

Content

In this flash fiction, we see a small slice of life. I am left with many questions. What has she imagined? Did she imagine it? What are the man's motivations? Why is she in bed? Where is he going? Why is he going?
To me, the questions mean I came to care about the story and the characters.

Technical

"walked to the door and as he turned off the light-switch which was already off, and as he left the room" I would suggest a re-write of this:

walked to the door, turned off the light-switch which was already off, and left the room

This would reduce the word count by five and tightens up the action a little.

"Then she heard him walk down the stairs and out the front door and down the outside brick steps and though she couldn't hear him after that, she listened anyway."

Same type of thing with this sentence. Try eliminating some words"

She heard him walk down the stairs, out the front door, and down the brick steps. Though she couldn't hear him after that, she still listened.

This re-write eliminates words and tightens up the sentence.

Overall Impression

This is a good story. I would encourage you to expand this into a much larger piece.

Please use any suggestions you find worthy and disregard everything else. This is your story and should be told your way.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of Stage Fright  
Review by Preacher
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title

The title caught my attention. To me, that's what makes a title good.

Content

I was drawn to this because I did stage for four years in high school and I still remember the feeling of stage fright. You did a good job capturing the feeling. I have seen experienced actors forget their lines and have to be prompted from off-stage. I have also been on the other end waiting for someone to do their lines or make their entrance. However, you must press on just as your character did.

Technical

I am not experienced enough with the various types of poetry to speak on whether or not you meet a certain style requirement. To me, if the poem says what I want it to say, then it is what it should be.

I could find no spelling errors.

Overall Impression

This poem brought back memories and I was able to connect with the story it told. Thank you for sharing.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review by Preacher
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title

The title is appropriate to the story.

Content

Flash fiction stories are always intersting to me. Having written several, I understand the challenge of trying to get the story done under the word limit. This story reads well although I am not clear on who Keith is. Pehaps too many characters are introduced for the word limit.

Technical

"departed, leaving Peter and I to ourselves." This is a common error. Using "I" is drilled into us, but it is not always the correct word to use. In this case, the correct word would be me. To determine which one to use, write the sentence leaving out any reference to Peter:

"depated, leaving me to myself" We would not say, "leaving I to myself."

Overall Impression

A good story. I am left wanting to know more.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review by Preacher
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title

A good title. It caught my attention.

Content

This story of the end of the world captivated me and pulled me right along. I could not stop reading it as the action was quick, the descriptions were clean and clear. I enjoyed seeing things from the aliens' point of view.

Technical

I only noticed one thing.

"spectacles from and end table" should be an.

Overall Impression

In a word, "WOW!" A very enjoyable story. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Keep Writing!

George
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Review of Sadness  
Review by Preacher
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title

I am not sure the title fits. I don't see the protagonist showing any sadness, just anger.

Content

This is a story of a jilted lover pushed to the brink (if not over the edge). I follow the story until the very end. The last line kind of throws me. Did she really have a gun? If so, why would the nurses let her have one. Is the whole scene described at the beginning just in her head? I became kind of confused.

Technical

" found out that it was over I" You don't need the word that.

"or the fact that it was my sister?" You don't need the word that

" she thought she was better than me. No – guess what you are not!" You changed from third person (she) to second person (you). Try to do one or the other, not both.

"my eyes, I can feel the tears" This is a little redundant. Try something like: I can feel the tears start

" always said that I had to study hard" You don't need the word that.

Overall Impression

I like psychological stories and this has great possibilities. Consider the things I have noted and decide what makes sense for your story.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of The City Life  
Review by Preacher
Rated: E | (4.5)
This review is intended to be helpful. it is also just one person's opinion.

Title

Appropriate to the piece

Content

You state that your intent is to portray a feeling. The feeling I take away is one of soul-crushing despair. The character is oppressed by his life and the conditions of his existence. Every sight and sound serves to push his spirit further and further from any form of happiness.

Technical

I did not notice any spelling or grammar errors..

Overall Impression

I am completely depressed and dejected now (just kiddng *Smile*). This is powerful in its negativity. I think you achieved your intent. However, I think this could part of a much larger piece. Perhaps he becomes the leader (or maybe a pawn) of a movement to change things. Perhaps something or someone comes along to help him change his point of view. If you want to keep it dark, then perhaps he is led to suicide or murder. The options are many, if you so choose.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of Internet Ted  
Review by Preacher
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title

Very appropriate title

Content

It's stories like this that make me glad I'm not in the dating pool *Smile*
This is a very well written tale. Ellen's nervousness seems very genuine and believable. I found myself hoping for the best for her. Maybe the guy won't stutter so much once his nervousness wears off...

Technical
It's a small point but there is supposed to be an apostrophe after the d in maitre d'.

Overall impression
I liked the story very much. I get the feeling Ellen won't be seeing Ted after this date, but you never know.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review by Preacher
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title

A good title. Fits the story. Perhaps a suggested change would be to focus on the main part of this story which is Love Perfected.

Content

I liked the fable-like feel of the story telling. Instead of telling this like an actual event, the fable or parable kind of feel allows for the reader to see a greater truth.

Technical

I noticed only a couple of things:

the purpendicular waltz should be spelled perpendicular

only because they are unaware of true love."

"But my Queen and I are soulmates," continued the Dreamsearcher. "And although I was


You don't need the quotation marks after love since the same person continues to speak.

Overall Impression

Very nicely done. I enjoyed the read.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of Him  
Review by Preacher
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title
Appropriate for the piece.

Content
This is a nice beginning to a story. It might be interesting to learn more about these city boys and what kind of trouble they got into. I am not sure enough detail is there to understand why she would so willingly leave in the middle of the night with him. Perhaps a little more about them "falling in love". Also, the other boy seems to disappear. How does he feel about Stry's interest in Lizbeth? What about Cole? Secondary characters can make for great plot points and conflicts. Something to think about...

Technical
You need to watch your capitalization. In one place you capitalize Papaw and in another you don't. I would recommend keeping it capitalized since you are using it as his name. The same thing happens at one point with Stry. I am sure it is a typo, but little things like that can be a distraction from your story.

"Your cute kid." Should be You're

"twords the pig pen" Should be towards. I guess you could be using it as "hick slang" type of thing, but it really stuck out as I was reading this.

"barn grroming my horse" Should be grooming

"Whats so important" Should be What's

"grabbedmy blue jeans" Should be grabbed my (you need a space between the two words}

There may be some more. I would encourage you to re-read this and see what catches your eye.

Overall Impression
This really is a good start to the story. Just pay attention to the details of spelling and typos. I hope you will continue this and see where it goes.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of Empty Window  
Review by Preacher
Rated: E | (4.0)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title
Kind of an interesting title. The reader is left wondering about the window and it drew me into the story.

Content
Flash fiction is a challenge due to the limited word count. The story creates a spooky kind of atmosphere and I am left wondering about the sanity of the protagonist. The mirror at the end was unexpected.

Technical
Just a couple of typos:

"dense, balck surfaces. It is a cold adn unpleasant" Should be "black" and "and"

Overall Impression
As with most flash fiction I have read, I am always eager to learn more about the characters and events. This story is no exception. But, alas, this is not always within the scope of a flash fiction story.
Thank you for sharing this.
Keep Writing!
George

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Review by Preacher
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title
I like the title. I am glad you put the part at the beginning to set things up. It helps to see how the title fits in.

Content
The dialogue seems very believable to me. The protagonist shows appropriate emotions during this short piece. The characters seem to be realistic.

Technical
I did not notice any spelling errors. You seem to use a lot of commas, perhaps too many. But that may be a personal decision.
"I had been working over time, when the boss came to me and said I was wanted on the phone. " I don't think the comma is really necessary here. This is just an example.

For me, it would read easier if you set your dialogue off by it self. This is what I mean:

"“This is Sgt. Jenkins, of the County Sheriffs department.” “Yes, sir, what can I do for you?” I replied questioningly,"

Perhaps re-structure this something like:

"This is Sgt. Jenkins of the County Sheriff's department."

"Yes sir, what can I do for you?" I replied.


The word "questioningly" is not really needed since you have the question mark in the sentence.

You may also want to re-visit your use of quotation marks. In the last paragraph, you have Sgt. Jenkins speaking with every sentence surrounded by quotation marks. If the character is speaking multiple sentences at once, kind of like a monologue or series of sentences, you need only put quotation marks at the beginning of the speech and at the end. Also, any punctuation in the dialogue needs to be within the quotation marks. I make the following suggestion to re-write the last paragraph:

The morgue looked exactly the way it should: dismal and a place no one would ever want to visit. I was met by a tall, rather heavy-set man who held out his hand.

"Mr. Marshall? I am Sgt. Jenkins. I spoke with you on the phone. Would you come with me, please?"

I did not want to be here and I didn't want Beth to be here, either.


You will notice I removed some words. Too many words can get in the way of the story. I would recommend to you a book titled, "The Elements of Style" by Strunk and White. Professor Strunk was a big believer in eliminating words. This book might give you some ideas.

Overall Impresssion
This is a very interesting beginning to a story. I would be very excited to see where you take this. Does the husband become a suspect? Does he play amateur detective? Does Sgt. Jenkins help or hinder him? So many possibilities. But I guess that's why we write: to explore possibilities.

Again, please use any of this you find acceptable and forget the rest. This is your story, your creation. Write it your way. It should be your voice, no one else's.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of Yue and Sithe  
Review by Preacher
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The review is intened to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title
The title is appropriate.

Content
This is an interesting start to a story. It reads almost like a fable or some morality story. I can only guess you intend a conflict of some sort to disturb Yue and Sithe's peaceful life. It will be interesting to see how you play this out.

Technical
I didn't notice any mis-spelled words. The big thing which stood out is that the third paragraph is repeated. Probably a cut and paste error.
Also, the transition from the third (and fourth) paragraph and the fifth seems a little abrupt. You mention the stars not teaching Yue to dance a certain dance, but there is no previous mention of dancing. Also, what happened to the original tiny prince? He raises Yue and then seems to disappear. How does he feel about Sithe? He is still alive?

Overall
As I said, this reads to me like a morality story. Perhaps one of love conquering all, devotion, dedication, or any other such noble ideals. A good start to what could be a very interesting story.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review by Preacher
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title
The title is good, except that "beginning" is mis-spelled.

Content
As a prologue, this piece sets up events which create interest. As a reader, I am wanting to know more about what is going on and what is behind all this.

Technical
You have several run-on sentences strung together with commas. Here is an example:

"Ragan watched out the small window of his bedroom as the military vehicle pulled up to the parking area of his apartments, he counted as four soldiers stepped out of the transport vehicle all with guns drawn, they looked ready to kill."

One suggested re-write would be:

"Ragen watched out his small bedroom window as the military vehicle pulled into the parking area of his apartments. Four soldiers stepped out with guns drawn looking ready to kill."

By eliminate some words and commas, the overall story will become stronger. This is just a suggestion. You may come up with a better way to re-do this part.

There are other run-on sentences. I listed just the one to give you the idea of what to look for.

One other thing to consider is to separate your dialogue from your narrative. Example:

"and said "get that tank up to 7-XR3DKJ-9M..."

By leaving your dialogue in the middle of the narrative, it becomes difficult for the reader to follow along with a conversation. I would suggest beginning each dialogue break on its own line:

Jovan turned to them and spoke.

"Get that tank up to 7-XR3DKJ-0M..."

Overall Impression
This is a good introduction. I would recommend you look at the items I listed and see how you can make it even better. Be sure to fully develop your characters. Give them backgrounds, habits, solid reasons for why they do what they do and why they are the way they are. This will serve to make the characters more real.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of New Sunday  
Review by Preacher
Rated: E | (3.5)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title
The title is appropriate.

Content
This is a story of the everyday which suddenly changes. As the beginning to a larger piece, this definitely has a lot of potential. It is not capable of standing alone. You create a very peaceful scene from the beginning, which could stand in stark contrast to the events beginning to unfold by the end.

Technical
There are a few things you will need to fix.

"was chilly, and" you don't need the comma

"realized that he had forgotten that today was Sunday" try taking out both of the thats. The sentence should flow better.

“Why I make some breakfast?” I believe this should read:
"Why don't I make some breakfast?"

"went back up stair and" there should be an "s" at the end of "stair"

"think differently, he thought" a comma is not appropriate her. Try a period or maybe a semi-colon

"followed and ended up and ended up at" obviously you don't need the second and ended up

There are some other areas where a comma may not be necessary as well as place where you could eliminate the word "that." Try saying the sentence out loud with and without the word "that" and see if it still makes sense. If it makes sense and sounds good without it, then don't use it.

Overall Impression
As I have already said, this is a good start to an interesting story.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of Justice or Vice?  
Review by Preacher
Rated: E | (3.0)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title
Very appropriate.

Content

An article such as this has to be judged and reviewed on its merits, without regard to whether or not I agree with the author's position. Obviously, you feel very strongly about the death penalty. Your passion clearly comes through. However, in this type of argument or debate, passion alone is not enough to carry your point. You make passing references to instances where innocent people were executed, but you do not give specifics. Specific names, places, and situations will give your argument strength which passion alone is unable to do.
Do not presume to speak for victims of violent crimes. You question whether or not the death penalty brings closure or relief to these victims. Bolster your argument with victims' accounts which support your position.
It seems you wrote this out of passion and emotion for the topic but did not consider how it would flow. As a result, it is a little choppy. This is a good framework. I would suggest you now do the research to give teeth to your argument and strengthen your points.

Stay passionate and Keep Writing!

George
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Review by Preacher
Rated: 18+
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinion.

Title
While the necklace is not an integral part of the story, the title still works well.

Content
There is a lot of heart in the story and the emotions of the characters comes through. I have a suggestion for you to consider. You have a strong vocabulary and it shows. However, if a reader has to keep referring to a dictionary to understand some words it becomes a distraction which interepts the flow of the story. You may want to change some words:
harangue, parsimonious, perquisites, temerity, mala fide

At one point, Neil mentions some pineapples:

"Thanks, Abena. The pineapple was so sweet. Where did you get it?"

I don't read of him eating any pineapples. Up to that point, he has eaten the bananas and the honey.

The phrasing seems a little awkward when Neil finds out about Rosa's illness.

"One day, my admin head, Robert came to my office.

“Did you meet her, Robert?”

“Yes, sir. She is down with malaria.”


It is unclear, at first, who "her" is. There was no mention up to this point about Rosa being absent, sick, or anything else. Perhaps you could re-work this part so it is not quite so abrupt.

Technical/Grammar
There were some parts where I wondered about comma usage. There is one which sticks out most to me:

"Accra, the location of our country headquarters had" There needs to be a comma after "headquarters".

Overall Impression
This is a very good story of temptation, desire and overcoming both.

Keep Writing!

George


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Review by Preacher
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This review is intended to be helpful. It is also just one person's opinon.

Title
I'm not sure if the title fits. I'm not sure how the blonde is the problem.

Content
An interesting story of a sniper making a hit. I am left wondering who hired him, will he get away, what was the lawyer not supposed to tell and how does the blonde fit into all this. Could make for a good longer story, if you so choose.

Technical
One spelling error: sheriff has one "r".

Overall Impression
Overall, a good read. I would enjoy seeing how this might develop out.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review of Family Business  
Review by Preacher
Rated: E | (4.0)
This review is intended to be helpful. it is also just one person's opinion.

Title
Very appropriate title. Fits very well.

Content
A very engaging story about discovering a family secret. Makes one wonder what might be hiding in their own family history...
A very realistic story well told.

Technical
I just have a couple of suggestions.

"most of which either have" I would suggest "most of whom either have"

There are a couple of places where I am not sure a comma belongs.
For Example:

" the oldest, private accounting " I don't believe a comma is appropriate here.

Overall Impression
I was caught up in the story. I would love to see how your protagonist deals with the issue of her family money coming from such a horrid business.

Keep Writing!

George

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Review by Preacher
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very good use of the prompt. I am left wanting to see if they get out their predicament.
It's always a pleasure to read your stories.
Good luck in the contest.
George
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Review by Preacher
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is really a very sweet, endearing story. I don't know if it's true or not but it did connect with me, so I guess it doesn't matter. I remember sitting with my great-grandmother when she would go through her old photo albums and tell me all about each person in every picture.

As far as a review goes, I did not see anything I could suggest to improve this piece.

Thank you for sharing this.

Keep Writing!

George

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