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Meg Thanks for your story "Taxidermy. In a few paragraphs you created a story with suspense and the end of your story leaves the reader with the question, "I wonder what's going to happen next?" Congratulations on your story, it's fine as it is but if you ever decide to expand your story that would be great. Keep Writing, Keep Creating, and Enjoy the Journey.
Your poem is a great reminder that we all have unfinished business. I like that you took all the what if's and added the ghostly element. I especially like the last stanza where there is hope for change until time and routine appear again. Probably, most of us have ghosts chasing us while time keeps marching on. Also,I like your comparison that time is an incessant dog whining to be let out. Good Poem! Keep Writing, Keep Creating and Enjoy the Journey.
Nihil - I really like your poem and especially the edit points(this is the first time I've seen them). I'm a real amateur at writing, but I didn't seen any need to edit this. Each reader will have their own perception and what this poem means to them. Since the first stanza mentions "a skull in gloom" I took that to mean death. Your poem is well written, interesting to read and causes the reader to reflect upon the words. Good Job! Keep writing, Keep creating, and enjoy the journey.
What a beautiful poem! This is a delight to read. First I read it silently and then out loud. I especially like the second stanza. Keep Writing, Keep Creating and enjoy the journey.
Thanks for your story, you have created one that begs for more. What I mean is you have created a scene that has the groundwork to develop in so many ways. I liked your descriptive phrases. I glanced at your portfolio and saw( Coyote and I think Whiskey entry0 plan to read them later as it's time for my grandchildren to show up. Keep Writing.
Ray - Thanks for the poem. I especially like the third stanza. When I read poem the first is silently, but the next read is out loud. The words work well together and there were no hitches or pauses for me when I read it. Keep Writing!
Thanks for sharing your story. You ask a lot of important questions and it gives the reader a time to reflect on their relationship with God and their relationship with others. I especially like the ending, "Have a bumper crop." Keep Writing.
Bob - Just read your story and I think the title is the perfect choice. One application I made(which is just my opinion and may not be what you meant) is that sometimes we are drawn to things that harm us, but we cannot see or resist the voice that is pushing us on). This is an interesting story to me because it made me stop and think about what drives us on and the rationalizations we use to silence the voice. I do have one question and maybe as I read it again I will see the answer - the owl was suppressing the shining sun, then in the next to last sentence you mention the black night sky. I'm wondering if this means there is a passage of time(it's now nighttime) or did darkness arrive when the owl left? This is really not that important but I'm giving you a view of how my mind works when I read a good story. I enjoyed it. Keep writing.
Sherry - Thanks for your poem, my favorite stanzas are the third and the next to last one. Whether it's fictional or not it provides the reader a chance to stop and think about the homeless, each one has a story and sometimes our thoughts are off base. That's why I like your poem because after reading it I thought - when I see a homeless person have I already formed an opinion about them. Good poem. Keep writing.
gocreate Thanks for your story, it causes the reader to reflect on how they live their life - complaining or being thankful. I especially like the sentence, "I am not going to be worried about anything." No spelling or sentence mistakes that I can see. My only suggestion which probably younger people wouldn't even notice is spacing. Paragraphs separated with a line or two makes it easier reading for my older eyes. That's just my opinion and others may not have a problem reading your story. I enjoyed it, keep writing.
Juniper Garden - Thanks for your poem and expressing the emotional turmoil that one can experience in a relationship. I like that you chose a window pane as the barrier that separates you from the one you care about. Also, the first line "beautiful colors array" I interpret as a situation that is hopeful, things might get better or the willingness to give up and move on (to start focusing on the beautiful colors). This is just my take on you poem and it may not be what you had in mind. I am not a spelling whiz and didn't check on these words but the ones I noticed are: piece and separating also a skipped letter in the word sometimes. I liked your poem. Keep writing.
ardere I enjoyed your poem. I like the line about not wanting to punish you but my subconscious begs me to. Your 5 lines are packed with emotion and allows the reader to remember when they may have experienced a similar situation. I agree that empty promises can result in apathy. Keep writing!
Gotee - Your story is quite unique, the first one I have read about a Cringe Specialist. I like to read creative stories and you certainly have written one. Even though you have chosen Inspirational as your genre I experienced some laughs as I read your story. Thanks for sharing your creativity and keep writing. The only suggestion I have is to use some spacing, maybe paragraphs. Since I'm older my eyes sometimes skip a line. I imagine younger readers don't have that problem. Spelling and sentence structure is fine. Keep writing.
IsaHarry - Congatulations! In one short paragraph you have laid the groundwork for a great story. Each sentence provides an idea that can grow and become an intriguing story. Maybe that's not in your plan but if it is you have several ideas to work with. When I read it I wanted to know more. Keep Writing
Forbes Thanks for sharing your "Borderline" story. Since you listed emotional, personal as the genres, I'm taking this as a true story about you. If it is fictional your description of borderline personality disorder is described in a realistic way and allows the reader to feel the distress of the disorder. Thanks for the story.
Thanks for your article. My husband mentions this quite often (wealth gap). His interest in this is one reason I read your article. The guaranteed universal income is an interesting concept, but I don't know if it will ever happen. Thanks for sharing your thoughts on finance.
Ray - Just wanted to let you know that I like your poem, especially the last two stanzas.
Also, the line "Just witches racing bristled brooms" That line created a picture in my mind plus the words flow together nicely. Thanks for the poem, keep writing.
garlictonic Just started this review and my husband is wanting to got to town, so will be brief. I enjoyed your poem and it struck me as one I shall read again because for me it seemed to contain some hidden message. Does that make sense? I mean it in a good way in the fact that it has a teachable truths that I need to explore. Sorry to cut this short (hubby in the car)
Thanks for the poem. Keep writing!
Ray - I enjoyed your poem and the emotional nuances I experienced when I read it. I especially like the last stanza that gives one a sense of hope, new beginnings, etc. Also, liked the lines, "We all hated living here, And yet, we loved it. Keep Writing!
HandMadeLife 76 - Thanks for sharing this. To me hope and faith is what this writing is about.
Hope that anyone's life can change. Recovery, God, and helping others is a powerful message. Your words may help others. Glad I read it.
Writerlady - Thanks for your testimony. Reading about your experience makes one realize how quick situations can change. The fact that you could eat(especially hamburger)so soon after your near death illness is amazing. Thanks for the story and your testimony about the Lion of Judah.
DragonBlue2 - Just read "If You Really Think So" and your prose is thought provoking. For me, after reading this I went from looking at the world situation to looking at myself- my thoughts, actions, and "how am I contributing to the problem?" Thanks for this piece, keep writing.
Thanks for your story, the truth about Humpty Dumpty. Nice job on filling in the blanks. We always knew he sat on a wall, but we didn't know why. A fun read, keep writing.
hoosierpen - You captured in very few words a story that makes the reader stop, think, and feel. What more can you want in a story? I thoroughly enjoyed your entry and it is a wonderful piece of writing. Linda
Grace - Thanks for your poem. I enjoyed it and the message. Two of my favorite lines are:
"I am intertwined within your makeup" and "I am the Ultimate Source in human form" With Christmas approaching this a good time for your poem. Thanks Again!
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