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Review of Home  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I enjoyed this poem. It is easy to identify with the writer, having had these feelings myself.


What I liked most: It flows well and speaks to me. It stirs the emotions of loneliness and also, hope.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Nostalgic, reminds me of how similar we are in this very divisive world. You are a very good writer, keep it up.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: First, I am not a church going person and feel that teenage kids should have sex education and access to condoms just in case. But I am open minded and know that teenagers aren't really ready for the commitment of a sexual relationship. Both myself, my husband and all four of our boys didn't wait for marriage.


What I liked most: You tell a story very well and that is what this is all about. I really enjoyed this one and at the ending I was laughing out loud.




Suggestions for change: I really didn't see anything I would change.




This writing made me feel: Like we are all writers about our own lives and the ones in our imagination. I write about many subjects and all kinds of characters and that is what keeps us interesting. It is also a great way to learn about other people because we share more than we are really different. You are very talented.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I enjoy the way you write. You challenge your reader with thinking. You are the kind of person I love to discuss topics with.


What I liked most: You write with a straight forward honest manner. I admire that and I will be back to read more. I want to know how you feel about Ghandi's and MLK's non-violence movements. I watched the 1960's south go through integration and it was something that changed my own life and feelings.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Someone else knows how I feel. It took me years to bring the activism I felt for other people into my own life. It empowers a person to realize how important their feelings are. Keep writing for you excel at it.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: You were just what I needed to read tonight. At times like these, a person must have a sense of humor and enjoy literature. Very well written.


What I liked most: The sense of freedom from the chains I feel from too much media coverage.




Suggestions for change: Nothing really.




This writing made me feel: Lighter but not without a reminder of what the cost is if we don't make some BIG changes in America this year.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Beautifully written poem. I feel like I know this person's story; his painful journey is revealed to me.


What I liked most: With everything that is gained, something valuable is left behind. He/she come to a place with water which is needed for life but family is left behind. Your emotions come through.




Suggestions for change: The beginning was very repetitive with "standing in the rain" and I was at the point of frustration and then I reached the 2nd stanza-much better.




This writing made me feel: The pulling someone feels in coming to a better place, yet we are driven to change or we perish.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Anger  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: The subject is very appropriate right now. This poem is well written and stirs emotions.


What I liked most: You are being honest about the way you feel. I like the first verse with its use of metaphors.
Anger courses its way through our walls,
Crawling its way into our halls.
Like a spider after her prey,
We all fall into its wicked way.




Suggestions for change: Nothing special. Poems are personal and you have given your feelings about how you see the world.




This writing made me feel: Personally, I would like to see people communicate-praying is fine but talking to each other is better if we are going to move forward. We are always going to disagree about things-that is what keeps us progressing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I love this, so very true in this day and time. The answer I guess is do you enjoy what the thieves offer you? After all the time is going to tick away no matter what we do and stressing over the waste of it is also ridiculous.


What I liked most: The honesty and cleverness is great.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Guilty and that is not a good feeling but I am afflicted with the same condition.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Interesting story that you managed to make very believable. It is hard to keep the word count down for me. You did an excellent job.


What I liked most: If I didn't already know this was about a ghost, I would have been surprised.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Inspired to write today and that is the best compliment I could give anyone.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: You pulled me into this story right away. It kept my interest all the way through. I kept thinking of the movie "Poltergist". "They're here!" It left me with a frightened feeling of too much technology.


What I liked most: The intrigue of the story that kept me reading. You developed this very well and I reacted emotionally to the ideas.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Like I have already said I had a visceral reaction to this story. Really good writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: This is an intense, well written poem that expresses your concerns about our democracy.


What I liked most: It is short, to the point, rhymes and has a rhythm that I enjoyed. Also, I like your choice of words.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Disturbed about our government and determined to do all I can to change the situation as it is now. Thanks for the read.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of I AM SO TIRED  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Having experienced the death of my first husband, I can understand these feelings. You did a wonderful job of voicing what most of us think when we lose a loved one.


What I liked most: Your honesty and expression of uncertainty about destiny and death was enlightening.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: I felt the love that you have for someone who is no longer a human presence. Also the pain that comes with loss.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely poetry that beats with truth. It is like a stranger come to call bearing diamonds but you can't see the grenade in their pocket. This piece flows with nice metaphors, a perfect length, and even if we knew the pain; wouldn't we invite delight in every time? Write on.

Kat
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Review of Ode To Bob Dylan  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: A really good poetic answer as to why be "Bob Dylan" in another life.


What I liked most: the content is factual and lovely-I would prefer much more but Bob spoiled us




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: I am a child of that era so it was very relevant to my life but he speaks to all generations. Technology changes but people want the same things. I like the case you made.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: The feelings of loss and helplessness are deep and touching.


What I liked most: The fact that you care for your children's happiness and well being more than your own loss. Your last stanza is beautiful and shows your loving heart.




Suggestions for change: Try to cut down on repetition. A poem is more powerful with less words.
Maybe replace my children with "them or loved ones".



This writing made me feel: Very sorry for your loss and I hope you will be successful in your search.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Ship of Survivors  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Your beginning peaked my interest. I feel like you have the bones of a interesting story.


What I liked most: The pace is good and I loved the idea of the company she built.




Suggestions for change: A lot of run on sentences that could easily be broken up. A number of spelling errors. The instructions about what you can bring was confusing (maybe that is just me).




This writing made me feel: Interested in what will happen next.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Saving Andy  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: You pulled me in and kept me interested from almost the beginning. Your storytelling skills are remarkable.


What I liked most: The suspense was great. I loved the relationship shown between the brothers. I also enjoyed the detail about your father's woodworking abilities.




Suggestions for change: There were a few grammar errors.




This writing made me feel: Very emotional-I was screaming "Find a branch!"



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Words  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I really liked this. So much writing is too full of words. You give flashes of images and the reader can fill them in.


What I liked most: The feeling behind the words is very familiar. The path from brain to hand is a rough one, sometimes jumbled and overburdened. The following is perfect.

That may be forgotten with age,

Words of love,

A first kiss,

A passing phrase,

A stream of tears,

A way to cope,

No memories past,



Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: I have been here but wish I had written this well. Write on!



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of I Know A Girl  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Excellent writing that came from the depths of your being. It doesn't get any better than this kind of passion. Whether this is your own story or another soul, it is stirring and so true.


What I liked most: Your last stanza brought tears to my eyes although I could see it coming.
I know a girl,
But I've haven't told a soul.
How whenever now I see her,
I think I don't know her at all.
For she could've been my salvation,
But she became my silent killer.
And when I tried to shut her up,
I smashed my fist into a mirror.





Suggestions for change: Thie line 'How whenever now I see her', just isn't very smooth. I believe this might read better as: Now whenever I see her


The only other suggestion I have for change would be punctuation. You are capitalizing the beginning of each line but you are using a comma at the end. I am not an expert with poetry so perhaps this is fine. It just throws me off a bit.




This writing made me feel: I could visualize a young woman struggling with secrets about herself. As long as she cannot face the world with her true self, she is looking to destroy what is eating at her. Suicide is a possibility. Very well done, you are an excellent writer with a lot of passion. Keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: You expressed this pesky problem very well with this poem. I can identify in this age of anxiety.


What I liked most: You gave your thoughts the attributes of a human that should be destroyed and i liked that.

The rhyme and rhythm is well done.


Suggestions for change: This didn't quite feel right:

We pay for them in sleepless nights
And turns(turn) to stone our daily bread.




This writing made me feel: Like I could identify with the hate for these thoughts that keep you up and eat into your joy. Keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression:
I like the way you capture the mood and setting for a family coping with the death of a husband/father/grandfather. You have shown how different members face this death. I was very surprised at the end.
It didn't make sense to me that a woman that had just seemed in denial of her husband's upcoming death would grab a gun and shoot herself and him. But grieving people do strange things. It made for a surprise ending.



What I liked most: I liked the characterization of the mother (She reminded me of a wolf or lion that located its prey, keen to the scent of blood in the air.) . I can see her and the way she believes she is doing the right thing but always taking care of herself. I like the way you describe the room and the grandfather's condition. There is no doubt he is close to death. The character of his breathing alone is a clue. I would like to know if he has any sense of consciousness. Since someone is reclining on him I am assuming that is negative.




Suggestions for change: First, I wish I knew a little about the grandparents marriage, just for a background. The other thing is you need to go over it one more time for punctuation. There are quite a few periods missing and a couple of commas.




This writing made me feel: A little confused. I like so much of it. The very end where you have the mother telling the son to call the family was very good. I really liked her character build up. I guess I want some hint somewhere about why the ending is the way it is.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen. Good luck on being published.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I love this beautiful poem. It flows perfectly with rhyme and rhythm and the subject matter holds the reader's attention. My only problem was with the punctuation. It isn't consistent and with poetry it is often forgiven. I am no expert but it is something you might want to look at. All in all, an excellent read.
Kat
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Review of life isnt fair  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: This was a beautiful piece of writing about love and loss. Not many people even understand how a first love can color the rest of your life.


What I liked most: The intensity of emotions and the descriptions. I loved the following:
while lost in the colors of his eyes and the way his skin next to mine sparked madness that I'd never felt before, I myself overlooked one small detail: the things that seem the most flawless often speak the deepest secrets.




Suggestions for change: I believe you should have broken this up some. Perhaps two or three paragraphs. I think you could change this i(her)t to her. Some of your sentences are too long. I think they would have more impact if you shortened them. There were a couple of punctuation errors.




This writing made me feel: An understanding for intense feelings that some people can not change. Keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke


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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: This is so sad yet beautiful. I can't imagine the pain it causes to write about a lost love.


What I liked most: The emotion it brings in the reader. I can feel your pain. I love the last stanza-
So the sun may shine and the rain will come
but I know I must be stronger.
For over the mountain high and the valley deep
I shall walk a while longer




Suggestions for change: I want to know more about this woman you loved.




This writing made me feel: So sad for you-I pray for strength for you to get through the days until it gets easier. Keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: What a creative and strong emotional argument you make, one to be proud of. I really understand why you feel the way that you do. I believe my husband would defend his family should harm come calling. With the history of persecution of the Jewish people, a strong reaction is in order.


What I liked most: Your passion is evident in your writing. Like you, I don't want weapons, war, pain, hate and know that a loving God does not.
I particularly like
The cradle of civilization
Has become a wasteland
For far too many nations
Faith and hope
Are no longer born here
They are grudgingly murdered here



Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Your agony right now and I am sorry for it. I don't understand the racism that seems to surround us at every turn. I guess I was living in a cotton ball world because things seemed to have settled down between different religions and races. Now it seems like our world is becoming out of control. You are a gifted writer and I feel every word. I pray for Peace for all of us. War has never been the answer.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Reading this broke my heart. I am so very sorry for the loss that you, as a little girl, had to go through. To even write it down must bring back all that pain. You did an excellent job of writing this. I felt like I was right there with you.


What I liked most: The feelings come through, not only yours but your Mom and Dad. It is difficult to write about pain like this. When you tell about your father being angry over the burial and wanting to dug up the coffin, that was really hard to read.
I remember my Grandma telling me about losing both her little girls to a wood burning stove fire in the kitchen and there was nothing she could do. They were sharecroppers and that was during the Depression in the 1920's.




Suggestions for change: Nothing




This writing made me feel: I am so sorry that this happened to your family. Most of us are so blessed here in America. If you live a middle class life or better, you are used to having medical care available plus a roof over your head etc. I believe we are about the same age and when I was a little girl, my Mom took us to a family physician and I remember the Polio vaccine coming out. My Mom had a baby boy that died when he was four days old of a condition that can easily be treated now.
Being an RN, I wanted so badly to put an IV into your brother and give him medicine to save him. Sounds like he was a very special little guy and I would like to believe he did not suffer. I love the way that you ended it. Keep writing because you are very talented.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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