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Review of Torn  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression:Interesting-I would like to read more.


What I liked most:the idea behind the story- I have a gay son and he dated girls in high school-they are all still friends but I could imagine a painful love affair.




Suggestions for change: you have some grammar errors



This writing made me feel: anxious for more



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I wanted to read more. I think you need to get some more info about the Mayflower voyage and use some of those events in here. I am curious about her age.
What I liked most: It is a great subject with a lot of potential. Keep writing-maybe something between her and John could happen.




Suggestions for change: I don't understnad why no one will tell her why they are going to America-that dosn't seem possible. Why did the seaman die? She just accepts this without question.




This writing made me feel:anxious for more information



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Stand With Me  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Lovely poem about the joy of being with someone you love. That magic is so fleeting you have to capture it while you can. Write on.
Kat
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Review of The Day Will Pass  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
A masterful poem with good desrciptioms, nice flow and rhyme.
I really enjoyed the last stanza-so very true-

Things run their course and have a season
And for that there is a very good reason,
Because, ALL days pass into yesterday;
Good and bad times all fade away.
Nothing lingers long...no NOTHING will stay

I have tried to use the change of seasons to sum up life and it didn't turn out this well. Great job.
Write on!
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: a beautiful expression of the power of love


What I liked most: the change from the darkness to the light, the rhythm and rhyme, the poem is short but has a lot to say flowing well




Suggestions for change: nothing




This writing made me feel: pain and despair at the beginning and then the dawn of hope, I love the last stanza with love being the healing



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Brick by Brick  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: the feeling of personal power, ability to appreciate this life we have been given


What I liked most: the truth between the words, someone who has been there




Suggestions for change: none




This writing made me feel: I was having one of those feeling sorry for my self days and I think I just found the poem.
It is like looking into my grandson's eyes.




Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: a feeling of sadness and the beginning of healing


What I liked most: you know what pulls at the reader's heart strings and that is so important so you must keep writing.




Suggestions for change: use your spell check and learn punctuation-there is plenty of help on the Internet. The Elements of Style by William Strunk, Jr. is On line and very simple-it has saved me many times




This writing made me feel: I felt this character's struggle with her love for her brother and how much she misses him. You built up the characters and story very well. If the grammar and punctuation was better I would have given it a 4.0. Keep writing. Welcome to WDC



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: emotional, I have a friend I feel the same way about


What I liked most: you shared feelings that rang true, the rhyme and rhythm were just right
the 2nd stanza rang really pure-your best friend is the person you never have to lie to because they will love you no matter "the crime"-sometimes even your spouse can't fill that role.



Suggestions for change: none




This writing made me feel: warm and fuzzy but most of all I compliment the authenticity.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Butterfly  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I love butterflies so this got my attention


What I liked most: The reason I love butterflies is the changes they go through to become free; difficult amazing changes- for example; a woman giving birth, coming into her own from a girl to an independent woman




Suggestions for change: none




This writing made me feel: free and strong, fragile and beautiful-only another butterfly can appreciate this-you are a talented writer



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: a very emotional piece that pulls at the heart strings.


What I liked most: the description of the love between two people, you can feel it leap off the page- you are a good writer




Suggestions for change: on you shoulder (your)




This writing made me feel: sad that these lovers cannot recreate their magic



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Mom's Hands  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: This is beautiful writing.


What I liked most:I can see your mother's hands and imagine her life through your writing. I can picture her taking care of children, her home and giving herself to others. I love the way you added that she loved colors so I can see her at an easel.

The folowing made me cry.
Who could ever imagine that one day
Those beautiful hands would be still


Suggestions for change:None




This writing made me feel:a great deal of love and inspiration.
I love the entire poem. You have a lot of talent and I hope many people stop by and read this. Keep writing.


Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of My Miracle  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.
As the writer, you must decide what your story, characters or message is saying.

My overall impression: emotions all over the place-I don't have a daughter but I sure miss my Mom and believe she and I had a very special relationship and you captured that.




What I liked most: I love the feelings that flow through this. t is so important to let people in your life know how important they are to you while they are still here.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: I appreciated having the love and friendship of an amazing Mom and Alzheimer's couldn't erase that. Thanks for the memories. Keep writing.





Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Beautiful poem. I love the imagery and the way you end each line with 'Together you and I'. I felt a sense of fantasy and sweetness reading it in this heavy world of ours. Thanks for brightening my day. Write on.
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
First of all I love what this has to say. It is a wonderful metaphor for life. The problem is the grammar. It needs some major editing. At the very beginning you aren't sure who is speaking to who. Please go back over this gem and reread it. I believe you will see what I mean. With some common sense and polish, you will have a good piece of writing.
Welcome to WDC and keep writing.
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.
As the writer, you must decide what your story, characters or message is saying.

My overall impression: I kept agreeing with the writer. I was reading between the lines and I am a liberal pro-choice person.




What I liked most: The one stanza that got to me emotionally was about the crack addict.




Suggestions for change:This poem needs more heart tugging. Few women use abortion as birth control, each abortion is a painful experience in some way-a loss.




This writing made me feel: political rather than emotional and maybe that is what you wanted. I wrote a story about taking a woman for an abortion and the pro-life angry people and bloody signs that greeted her. She changed her mind and had the child. It was a bad situation to bring another baby into and the father was irresponsible. She was only 8 weeks along. I draw the line at 12 weeks and wish that was the law except in cases of rape, incest etc.


The poem was well written with good rhythm and rhyme-no errors. Keep writing.





Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of The Diagnosis  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.
As the writer, you must decide what your story, characters or message is saying.

My overall impression: Well written story of a wife's reaction to her husband's diagnosis.




What I liked most: You did a good job of going through her emotions as she is learning about this disease. I was impressed that she was given literature. Being an RN, I am dissapointed the RN didn't go over it with her or at least ask if there were questions ( a personal thing with me since that is part of her job)




Suggestions for change:none-very realistic




This writing made me feel: anxious for the wife and frightened yet relieved for the husband as he is dealing with a chronic painful disease. Relief because it could have been colon cancer and the symptoms suggested advanced colon cancer. There is hope here-very well written-keep it up.





Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Paper World.  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Have I lived in a world with paper bonds? he inquired within.
I loved this-perfect for the situation.
The last line was a great follow up.
Lovely writing for a 55 word limit.
Write on.
Kat
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Review of REMEMBER  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.
As the writer, you must decide what your story, characters or message is saying.

My overall impression: a flood of emotions




What I liked most: I believe you covered it all-I have vivid images in my mind and a heaviness in my heart-I am also proud of America and how we responded as a country




Suggestions for change: none




This writing made me feel: I expressed it above. Thanks for an excellent piece of writing.





Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Reading this as an older woman, I did so with a tear and a smile. You have captured beautifully the true night life of the average baby boomer. Nice job with the rhyme and rhythm plus the subject. Thank goodness we have our memories-at least fleeting ones.
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.
As the writer, you must decide what your story, characters or message is saying.

My overall impression: a lovely piece of writing-very inspirational.




What I liked most: I love the ending- a perfect way to sum this up.
“Never to worry what path grace

All paths go….. To same place.”





Suggestions for change:None




This writing made me feel :I felt peace while reading this.





Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.
As the writer, you must decide what your story, characters or message is saying.

My overall impression: This is a very interesting absorbing story. I didn't expect to get so taken in by it. The character is changed by taking something from the trash and then becoming attached to it.




What I liked most: Its skin glowed white in the streetlight, like a pearl freed from the oyster’s flesh to bathe in moonlight. He slipped it into his coat pocket and immediately felt both guilty and exhilarated for doing so.
This description took my breath away-it reminds us that life is special and a miracle-not trash.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Sad for the fetus, the mother, whoever disposed of it and then the recipient. This changes his life in a significant way.





Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I enjoyed the way you wrote this piece with different points of view, pointing out the positive and negative of actions taken. We are not always aware of the effects we have on others. Bravo, a poem that makes one think. Write on!
Kat
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Review of Go Ahead  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.
As the writer, you must decide what your story, characters or message is saying.

My overall impression: I can feel your emotions of hurt and anger




What I liked most: a free verse poem, you wrote what you felt without a rhythm




Suggestions for change:




This writing made me feel: your pain





Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.
As the writer, you must decide what your story, characters or message is saying.

My overall impression: this is the beginning of an interesting story




What I liked most: you are very good with details plus the storyline had the reader hooked




Suggestions for change: there are quite a few punctuation and grammar errors-it would help to shorten the sentences





This writing made me feel: interested in the characters and anxious to learn more





Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.0)
You have talent but need to edit this piece. It has quite a few punctuation and grammar mistakes and needs to be broken down into paragraghs. It is confusing like it is-running together.
On the positive, you are good at details and descriptions plus your storyline. Read it out loud and see how it sounds to you. Keep writing. Practice is the best thing you can do. Welcome to Writing.com
Kat
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