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Review of What was once  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I love your intensity, you really paint your feelings in language


What I liked most: honesty


Suggestions for change: a spell check would help you
3rd line should be each day
my wants of being dead-I know you are trying to rhyme but this is poor use of language
5th line-I'm supposed
10th line-lay
12th line- every day

This writing made me feel: the sadness and desperation felt-keep writing



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of The 4 Seasons  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I like your images


What I liked most: the descriptive language, the rhyming
Fall is my favorite season and I loved the following-
Fall reminds me
of all the different colors of the leaves on the trees
my hair flying crazy in the cool air breeze
kids with costumes on halloween day



Suggestions for change: fireplace sipping on hot cocoa -leave out the "on"
the fresh smell that they have when placed in a room-perhaps, the fresh smell when placed in a room
I think you need to go through and take out unnecessary words-you use the word "the" a lot-
the poem is a really good one and deserves the best, editing would make the images more intense


This writing made me feel: experience the joys of each season



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: a lovely poem that lifts the spirit


What I liked most: the tone of hope-I loved the following stanza
embrace this day
full of blessings and say
I'll write with might so my spirit will take flight




Suggestions for change: none




This writing made me feel: lighter and more blessed



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Old Age  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: A beautifully written poem, filled with truths, about old age.


What I liked most: The 1st stanza is my favorite-
Silently alone I sit and think of times gone by,
My memories are crystal clear, they sometimes make me sigh,
Please take some time, to listen, come on now, take a seat
And let me talk of bygone days when kids played in the street
And twopence bought a chocolate bar and Bobbies walked the beat..




Suggestions for change: It flows well without errors in punctuation and grammar.




This writing made me feel: I feel slightly depressed because I am getting closer to that point in my life. I admire the writing due to the writer's ability to speak the truth through the character's eyes. You are very talented. Write on.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.



My overall impression: Excellent writing about the emotional cost of being honest with other people and sometimes getting hurt.


What I liked most: It is very difficult to write a poem that flows well, rhymes and is easily understood. I am very impressed-you should submit this for publication.




Suggestions for change: So don't let these things dwell on your mind,
For no good will you find.




This writing made me feel: It really made me think about being vulnerable to others and how sometimes you need to just keep things to yourself. You are a really good writer. Write on!



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of losing you  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
A heartfelt poem that shows the pain of loss and the power of love. The only thing that takes away from your writing being better is your spelling errors. You just need to use a spell check. I am sorry for your loss. Keep writing and welcome to writing.com
Write on,
Kat
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Review of Untitled  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I was mesmerized by this piece. It keeps your attention and your descriptive language is wonderful.


What I liked most: The sight of the child picking up the syringe-I could see it vividly and wanted to walk into the story and grab it away. Then to use that to show how the world has lost it's innocence and we are at fault-great idea and well presented.




Suggestions for change: nothing




This writing made me feel: depressed-There are many days that I feel like the student that summed up life and I am at the point of retirement with poor health. Then I remember my 5 grandchildren and their intelligence and curiosity about the world and I believe they will make it better. People accept others different then themselves now and we talk about self destructive behaviors. There is help for drug addiction and I could go on. I want to stay here and see what happens.
Great story and very well written.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Life's A Beach  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I feel like I have just spent a day at the beach-I feel the warmth of the sun, see the sky as it changes over the day and watch what is going on


What I liked most: your descriptive ability is lovely




Suggestions for change: none-I love the changes in word structure-a great free verse poem




This writing made me feel: like I said before, I am ready for a nap now-keep writing



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: the sincerity of feelings ring true in this lovely ode to marriage


What I liked most: The fact that a man wrote it- what a treasure to meet and marry a man whose heart sings a love song




Suggestions for change: none-this piece rhymes and flows well




This writing made me feel: all those special promises I felt on my wedding day-and I hope my groom felt the same



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of i am a flamingo  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.


My overall impression: I can feel the fright of the bird as it is trapped and then it's elation when it has escaped harm


What I liked most: the picture you painted




Suggestions for change: change wile to while




This writing made me feel: the actions and feelings of the bird

You are good at descriptions. Write on!

Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Unknown Road  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I loved the descriptive language used in this piece. The metaphors used to define who you are and where you are in your life.


What I liked most: Your ability to make this place come to life-right off the page. I loved the following:
No longer the terrible sounds of unknown things in the night,
but the murmuring of a brook nearby,
that pure, fresh water cleared the dust and dirt from my throat.
And a frog choir sang for me.



Suggestions for change: none




This writing made me feel: like I wanted to join you on this path and experience the feelings of despair and loneliness
only to walk into the beauty that is here if you are open to it. The abundance life can bring if only you open your eyes and heart wide enough. Beautifully written.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Passion's sake  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Beautifully written. I can feel the emotions in this lovely poem that speak to the heart. The love we all desire and then it never measures up to that wonderful feast.


What I liked most: the passion felt- the rhythm and rhyming pattern is perfect.




Suggestions for change: none




This writing made me feel: The few times I have felt this kind of passion -the short lived kind that tears at your soul.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Perfect  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I was very interested and felt sympathy for this person but was left wanting to know more.


What I liked most: You are very good with descriptions. You also have a wonderful beginning to what can be a great story.




Suggestions for change: There isn't enough written to get into the story and you have quite a few spelling and punctuation errors. It has potential-please expand and let me know. I would love to read more.




This writing made me feel: Heartbroken for the character-keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Blossoms Maligned  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I could feel the fear and anticipation of probable death for these teenagers.


What I liked most: The progression of a friendship into love for two children-well done. I like the way you left the ending open so you don't read the details of their deaths.




Suggestions for change: There was a couple run on sentences-nothing major that detracted from the story.




This writing made me feel: As I said before I could feel the emotions of the main characters.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Raising Sons  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I am impressed by the strength of this woman


What I liked most: almost all of it- her choice of words, the love for her sons and determination that they become good responsible and strong men from a strong WOMAN
I loved the following:
I’m raising sons to be strong black men, not victims
Men with conquering minds, hearts of love,
Who walk in the footsteps of righteousness
Whose calloused hands mold, shape and create,



Suggestions for change: none




This writing made me feel: From listening to so many successful black men, I have often heard them credit their mothers.
So many men leave homes for other women, crime, depression etc and they don't pay child support. What a hard world it can be.

Keep writing!



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Ms N.O.R.T.  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: this is an interesting story that kept my attention-I felt that kids of this age might be a little more crude

What I liked most: Your main character-she is discovering how she feels about things, death is a hard concept to take in




Suggestions for change: I hope you tell us more about their deceased teacher and why she was so special




This writing made me feel: reminded me of being twelve, how confusing life can be (I have to say I was more interested in guys-rock stars in particular) Write on!



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I really enjoyed the images and what you had to say.


What I liked most: I just love the following images.
Like hugs so hard you almost explode,
Like the Lady whose Bible doesn’t seem to close,




Suggestions for change: This is just a personal feeling-in a lovely poem about positive feelings, I don't care for smashed. How about "pushed against the glass"? That is probably just me. It is a sweet image otherwise.




This writing made me feel: Everyone feels love in different ways and you expressed that well. The flow is a little erratic but doesn't interfere with the content of the piece. Keep on writing and Welcome to WDC.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Perfect Moments  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: lovely poem-I think most of us can relate


What I liked most: simple, beautiful, honest




Suggestions for change: none




This writing made me feel: "I'm going to remember this moment."
And I never do.

This is what I say with my grandchildren all the time. They say and do the funniest, sweetiest and honest things that I want to remember and copy. I should write them down. :<




Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: a nice visual that gives you a sense of peace


What I liked most: I could see ths in my mind




Suggestions for change: none-maybe longer




This writing made me feel: I wanted to be a part of the poem-to be transported to New Zealand



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I really feel the despair and emotional pain in this poem. You have captured the feelings beautifully.


What I liked most: These lines really stand out-
I smile at the empty room, but it can't reach my eyes,
Near hysterics, her tears wash over me,
Blinding the last bits I could still see.




Suggestions for change: You have a couple of spelling errors




This writing made me feel: I could feel the depression and the need to get away from reality. I loved the ending, the idea that leaving all the awful things behind can be easy and painless. You have talent-please keep writing. Welcome to WDC-a great place to be.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Video games  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I love the subject and there is a lot to be said about the addiction of video games. They are like any other addiction.


What I liked most: the subject and honesty behind it




Suggestions for change: you start out well with flow and rhyming then the last two stanzas are not consistent-it is like you were in a hurry to finish this up -the last two lines need to be reshaped-just my opinion




This writing made me feel: I like the poem, I have children in their 30's that play games far too much and know it with children of their own. You have talent-just need to work on the flow of the poem. Welcome to WDC-keep writing!



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Rage Within  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I was touched by the honesty and pain felt from beginning to end of this piece. I am so sorry for the child that had to endure this life.


What I liked most: the honesty




Suggestions for change: You have indented some paragraphs and not others. I wondered why.




This writing made me feel: deep feelings for those involved-both the child and mother-addiction is an awful disease and affects everyone involved-very well written



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of In A Relationship  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Very clever and unique-I really enjoyed this short playful and creative story


What I liked most: the story was enjoyable from beginning to end




Suggestions for change: nothing, maybe longer




This writing made me feel: happy and in the mood to write-you are talented-continue to delight us with your writing



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Words  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I believe this situation one of the hardest ones we all have to face, no matter which side you are standing on. An excellent job of giving it a voice-you are a very talented writer.


What I liked most: the honesty of your words




Suggestions for change: none




This writing made me feel: as if I was standing there, my face red and hot, tears in my eyes, knowing whatever I say it won't be the right thing to comfort.
If I have suffered the loss, I want to run away, be alone, turn back the clock, hit something, hate this ridiculous routine, want a massive tranquilizer-you are never ready to lose someone you love (even if they are a hundred and lived a productive happy life).



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: You are a wonderful writer, putting me in the same room with your characters and feeling what they feel.


What I liked most: the way you began this with an ordinary family scene, showing the strength, love and humor of your Mom-then you told the story of the kudzu that creeps around invading a vibrant person slowly.
It is so familiar-we are the same age. When you spoke of the grocery store and bills, I remember that stage. Now when I forget things, I worry I am going down the same road.




Suggestions for change: None.




This writing made me feel: like we both fought and then reluctantly accepted a war we couldn't win
Write on.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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