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Review of Bleeding pain  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with WDC's Guiding Light  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: My heart breaks for this person. Writing is one of the best therapies there are. As prose, this was very well written.

What I liked most:
Always falling but never caught, always loving but never loved, never cared for or considered to be, never known of any happiness yet never afraid to love, never had the fear of sharing the love, but always had the fear of loosing, loosing the battle never had the courage to fight, the strength to stand.

I love what was said and the way it was said. It might be better broken up to be stronger but that is up to you. I think most women can identify with these feelings.

loosing should be losing



Suggestions for change: just what I mentioned above




This writing made me feel: I love the way that you end this-the strength is what we all need to hang on to. Keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of I Love You  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: This is a beautiful explanation for that wonderful thing called love. I am not a excellent judge of poetry but you brought up feelings in your reader and that is writing


What I liked most: The following was the best-
When my lips touched hers, my mind went quiet.
All the noise it’s constantly making
disappeared with that act of love.



Suggestions for change: When it comes to free verse poetry, I don't like to make any recommendations.




This writing made me feel: Aahh, I know that feeling, it is so sublime. If it has happened to you, that is better than money, fame or anything else I can think of. The older I get, the more I believe. Keep writing and loving.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Growing Up Pains  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Well, between the two of us we have cried a lake. I hope you have some wonderful memories from when your daughter was younger. Your daughter is a grown woman now and I know things have changed. You write so eloquently of your love for her and wanting to do the right thing.


What I liked most: I love that you thought you were doing the right thing when you remarried and with the cell phone. I had a Dad that felt if he was "bringing home the bacon", that was love. It was the way he was raised and he just didn't know what to do with a teenage daughter so Mom tried to rein me in.




Suggestions for change: I believe there was one punctuation error I saw but it was wonderful other than that.




This writing made me feel: It makes me feel so good to know that Dads really do care because you are never too old to hear "I love you" from your father. (I spent the last few weeks with my Dad before he died and those times were some of the best).
Thanks for supporting my writing.


Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Beautifully said! I had tears in my eyes reading this. I love your description of the service being a family. I have counted on that because I have two soldier sons.


What I liked most: I loved everything you had to say. The fact that you spoke of your family and how hard it is to accept that you are gay. I hope you have the support of your family now that you have come out. You are such a courageous man and deserve to be loved as we all do.




Suggestions for change: None. This was perfect in every way.




This writing made me feel: I am very touched because I have a gay son who is forty and he has been out for many years with his friends. It has only been in the last year that he has spoken to me about it. I am about the most progressive Mom you could have and I knew since he was about twelve. He is in a relationship right now and very happy. But I also have a son in Afghanistan right now and one that fought in Iraq and was injured. They are both married with children. I am very proud of all my children and love them all the same.

Thank you for serving our country. I hope you have someone to love and you are a beautiful writer.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I enjoyed the positive message, the rhyme and rhythm are perfect.


What I liked most:
It's living through pain and through heartache
While knowing in the end you'll be fine.
It's accepting that nothing is perfect
and finding some peace from within,




Suggestions for change: Your punctuation is off. I believe it would make more of an impact if you used a period more often. For instance,

Those who truly enjoy life
know something that others can't see.
The secret to living the good life
(i)s just learning to live gratefully.
It's learning to dance when it's raining
(a)nd knowing the sun will soon shine.


This writing made me feel: I love the message of the poem itself. It made me feel like singing in the rain. Keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I enjoyed the pride and joy you have in your daughter's musical ability. It shines through in your writing.


What I liked most: I loved the following-
Your personal best needs no judge.
Your soul is sacred,
And need not begrudge.
For you have within you,
The power to shine.




Suggestions for change: I think you could have left this out-my personal opinion.
In big ways,
Big hurdles you'll climb.

You repeat the word big and both it and hurdles are not very poetic terms. You don't need them.




This writing made me feel: Even if your child doesn't take the Gold medal, she will always be your star and her own. Children need that in this world. Write on!


Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Things I Love  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I had to smile as I read this. It is full of positive feelings and the love of life. Being a writer is all about bringing up feelings in your reader and you have accomplished that.


What I liked most: In a free form poem you seem to have written beautifully of whatever came into your head that makes you happy.




Suggestions for change: This is just a personal thing but I would love to hear about your dreams.



This writing made me feel: When you write poetry, no one should tell you what you should write. It should come from what you feel and you have done that and I love it.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: You kept my attention through your first two chapters so that says you can write. I wanted to find out what had happened that was causing your nightmares. I also wondered how someone as christian-minded as Addison was going to fit into a journalism career that wasn't a religious blog or paper. San Francisco is a pretty huge liberal city and you mention the Editorial Column. You should read Barbara Walters book "Audition". That is a woman that does know something about journalism for the last fifty years.


What I liked most: You kept moving the story along. I like the descriptive touch about the kitten and when you were jogging, the scenery. You have some editing to do also. Your dialog needs to be broken up instead of being in the middle of a paragraph.




Suggestions for change: I am curious about Addison's education-where did she go to college? Many places you have divided up words (af-ter, es-cape). I didn't understand this. I wish you told us more about Heather's friend's accident. I am sure you are planning on it but considering the way the religion has affected her friend so deeply-it might be a good idea to explain.




This writing made me feel: Confused because of the constant reference to her faith. I am a woman of faith also and worked as an RN for over twenty year but you don't minister to your patients. It is not allowed. You show your faith by your actions of unconditional love and silent prayer. I feel like this will be a problem with Addison's career. You do want to be realistic (I believe). As far as Heather is concerned, the things she will see and hear-well, that I personally know about. I was working in Atlanta during the AIDS crisis and many nurses wouldn't touch those those young dying boys. What is so sad is we are considered the Bible Belt down here and few followed Jesus' examples.

Best of luck. I think you are a good writer and Addison may be in for a few bumps but that is good writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of The Children  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: The poem itself has rhyme, rhythm and an emotional issue that chills me.


What I liked most: You don't hold back with the honesty.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Hopeless, because teenagers are going to listen to their peers. Since we have no proof of what awaits any of us, it is a great sell. One person can feel fear in suicide but if you are with your peers, the fear disappears. This becomes a righteous cause and a relief if life here on Earth is miserable enough. Our job, as parents, is to make sure our children are close enough to their parents to talk with their children. Very good reading and writing-keep it up.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I recognized the song lyrics about halfway through the piece. I would like to say I was touched emotionally to the story as I was the song but I can't. Bobby Gentry had a Janis Ian soulful voice and she could get to you plus I always thought it was the remains of an aborted or miscarried child that was put in the water. There was a movie made that showed a rag doll being thrown into the "muddy waters".


What I liked most: I think this was a novel idea to write about this song.




Suggestions for change: First I want to know the time period we are talking about for this story. Was this the time the song was written? The attempt at hillbilly speech and the girl dressing in a skirt for dinner etc., the religious references might be late 1960's. The SUV and gas grill were modern. I was confused. You might have been better to not worry so much about way of speaking and showed the emotions going on with your character that had a relationship with the boy that killed himself. Even if she just stormed from the table and the father wanted to know what was wrong.




This writing made me feel: Like I said, the song is a great one. I never thought about writing about it but the object being thrown from the bridge is what I would have gone with. The song had great drama and left you wondering. I am sorry but I couldn't find it in your story.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Yesterday  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I found this to be a n honest reflection of life which isn't always easy to do. I was sure that by the time I reached the third act of my life, I would have some sure answers, Now I just question myself more


What I liked most: I am reminded by your piece that writing brings answers. The way you end on a positive note is helpful. Take pictures of your grandchildren and immerse yourself in the joy they are. I had a great time on the 4th catching up with what they are interested in. I was surprised it wasn't just more games for their many techno gadgets.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: There is always time to change your life for the positive. Thanks for the reminder.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of SEA WOMAN  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Women and the sea seem to be a common theme. I have written a couple of poems comparing the two and I am a woman. You do this comparison justice. Your rhythm and rhyme are well done.


What I liked most: I love the mystery, power and beauty you bestow on your lady of the sea. If we didn't have these qualities, what interest would a man have in the first place?




Suggestions for change: The following stanza ends in a comma so it isn't uniform like the rest of the piece. Yet it is completed by the following stanza as the tsunami comes along. This is some powerful woman.

Those waters may look placid and
Gentle may look the wind.
He may be sailing carelessly
But almost, like a fiend,





This writing made me feel: How do you really feel about women? Write on, since you do it so well. Haven't I seen you on television here and there?



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: This story had my emotions on a roller coaster. You are a wonderful writer that has a natural talent for dialog and descriptive language. I read this rapidly and then went back and took it in slowly to savor it.


What I liked most: The story was a perfect length and you managed to get so much of this couple and their life in it. Being a senior, I can imagine what this would be like. Without children to call and without money, it would be very hopeless. Losing a spouse makes one feel like committing suicide even if there is support. I can identify with this lady. You did a wonderful job with your characters. Bravo!




Suggestions for change: I saw a couple of punctuation errors but couldn't tell you where they where. Nothing major.




This writing made me feel: A variety of emotions and that is what I ask for in great writing. Keep it up.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I can see this all on stage. Well written but the sad fact is it echoes the truth in our society.

What I liked most: I love a piece that makes me think. Any one of us could be the guy begging, being ignored and dying. I like the line about giving the food to the dog. How many times I have thrown leftovers out, I always think someone could be eating this but there isn't a starving person right outside the door. They are on TV or in a book not crouching in the suburbs.




Suggestions for change: Could have been longer.




This writing made me feel: Sad and more determined to help others. That is what writing is supposed to do-make the reader feel. Keep writing!



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I don't usually like fantasy stories but this had elements that interested me. The two main characters are intriguing.


What I liked most: Your description of this planet and the creature.




Suggestions for change:There are some spelling errors- exsistance (existence ).
Layle choked (I thought choked was a strange way to describe speaking unless he was being choked literally). crame (should be came)



This writing made me feel: Interested in reading on



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Cloudbursting  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: This poem gave me a sense of hope and peace.


What I liked most: I loved the positive message in this writing, a truly beautiful and innocent poem. I loved Old Mother Goose showing up and pointing out some wonderful words of wisdom.




Suggestions for change: You do have some errors in spelling and punctuation. I believe if you just give it a look over, they will stand out.
For example: Feeling wonder and amazement (switch to- of all) all of the beautiful(sp) birds in mid-flight.
So I guess that how quickly I became almost completely mesmerized should not have been(any-take out no) no big surprise.
I believe you could take out some words that are repetitive and this piece will mean more.



This writing made me feel: Like I was in this lovely dream with you and I learned to look at the world in a different way.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
My parents used to take us to Gulf Shores on vacation back in the 1960's. I loved it. You brought the beauty and simple pleasure of being there back to me. So different from the Disney World and cruise ship vacations we think are so great now. A lovely poem. Keep writing.
Kat
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Review of Lady Misery  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: You are a very special artist with an ability to help people understand something they have no knowledge of.


What I liked most: I love it all even though it makes me sad for those that struggle with this awful disease. I like the beginning because it opens the mind for the rest.

an apple that tastes of cotton
a styrofoam cup decays
a knife made of fingernails
and a dial tone is rotting at the bedside



Suggestions for change: None.




This writing made me feel: I feel like I really understand the despair after reading this. Kudos for excellence.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of A promulgate  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: An emotional journey that satisfies. Your descriptive language is lovely, painting a picture of loss and then finding a way into the light.


What I liked most: I love poetry with sea images.
For my shadow is now lost to me;
lost beneath the darkness of sea—
cast away into the screaming breeze,
‘neath the sorrow of the weeping trees—




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: You have a beautiful voice for poetry. I look forward to reading more. Welcome to WDC and keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of AND GOD SAID -  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Very beautiful, heartfelt and well written.


What I liked most: I enjoyed the entire piece.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Even if you are not a believer, I think there is something in this wonderful poem that will speak to your heart. Thank you and write on.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I was impressed with the way that you asked the question and then asked questions to try to answer it. We certainly fall short of who we claim to be. You keep this short and to the point.


What I liked most: I liked the examples given and I agree with you. There are days when I wonder just how far we have come. Slavery does still exist, just in a different form. since poverty is a form of slavery.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: Frustrated with the fact that we seem to be stuck with two parties that seem to clash and nothing gets done. I didn't understand what you meant about taking our choices away although women are losing their choices and voting rights seem to be a problem. Thanks for writing this, it made me think.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Dear Me  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I can appreciate this resolution since I identify with many of the goals. It is well written.


What I liked most: I like your goals very much and might just steal from them. What do you think of taking a character from one of your own stories and using them as a kind of champion/ comforter?
I loved the following- The coaches/comforters will come raining out of the sky.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: It is always comforting to hear someone else is struggling with some "low" times. 2013 was a hard year for us. I hope that you achieve your goals-have a happy and productive year.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of A "Gay" Book...  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Some day we will live in a world where a person is a person. It is amazing how simple that place will be-less adjectives will be needed.


What I liked most: You are a great writer.




Suggestions for change: None




This writing made me feel: I just enjoyed this. The day is coming when the dictionary will run out of ways to describe the uniqueness of human beings. Keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review of Girls  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: A bittersweet poem of young love


What I liked most: this poem has a good rhythm, my favorite stanza is:
does she already know?
I think she does,
us being together,
would set the town abuzz,

I loved the last line.


Suggestions for change:None




This writing made me feel: This could be love at any time in life but it sounds like innocent feelings. Falling in love is such a precious time, maybe next time. Keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: I really enjoyed this piece. Your mother was a woman that had an appetite for learning and passed it on to you.


What I liked most: You kept this simple and didn't try to explain finances or how your dad felt. I always enjoy learning about other women's experiences.




Suggestions for change: There were a couple of punctuation errors and the formatting was off. The content was enjoyable.




This writing made me feel: Like I had learned interesting facts about another life. It was inspirational and your Mom is someone you are proud of and rightly so. Write on!



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
-Rainer Maria Rilke
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