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Review of L'aura del Campo  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Seems like Haiti was just hit and many died. I have noticed that all the news has spoken about today is Afghanistan so they can blame Biden on all channels. No one hardly mention these poor people in Haiti. The next thing will be about all the Muslims being brought into the country from Afghanistan. I don't understand this world. I keep seeing the helicopters leaving Saigon. Many of those people came here and became wonderful citizens. Pol Pot went into the corrupt government of South Vietnam and slaughtered all kinds of people. We forget all these attempts at trying to make other countries into democracies-we aren't even holding our own together.

Sorry, Rant over! Wanted to compliment your lovely but sad poem. It is very visual and a reminder of the force of weather changes that we have a hand in also. I have been reading your blog. Love it. Be well and safe, my friend.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
What a lovely well written tribute to both your Dad and hospice. I agree with you, the hospice staff is usually wonderful. I lost my Dad in 1989 at the age of 65 after 1 year of fighting Lymphoma. Chemo took an awful toll on him also. They have better drugs now-even vaccine therapy for some cancers. Then my Mom(83) had hospice for only 24 hours before she died, she had Alzheimer's plus several other chronic conditions. The latest, last year, was my husband's Mom and it was more like the hospice you described. It was more round the clock care for quite a while. Depends on the patient's needs also. I love the way they do as much as you might need or give you privacy. As a working RN when my Dad was in hospice, he wanted it to be just the 3 of us. They were not as strict about narcotics then either because I had to give him extra doses. So I did a lot of the work which was fine. He died with just Mom and I with him. The hospice Nursing assistants came to my mother-in-law's funeral mass. So nice!
After working in the hospital for many years, hospice is a much more personal experience where you are supported as family. Nice read. Sorry about your Dad-we are never really ready. Death seems to come as a wonderful friend to the dying patient though.
Peace,
Kat
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Review of Who Do I Believe?  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I wish there was a way that people with all types of faith could feel comfortable around each other. I have been searching for this for some time. There is such a need to announce that you are a believer even when you might know the other person is not. Now I understand this because part of the point of being a Christian is to bring others to be "saved". I have been a part of the Christian world (mostly Presbyterian where saving is not a big issue, whether you believe in God or not is) for many years and enjoyed studying and going to church but never wanted to "preach" to anyone. I liked your essay on this but it is totally geared to someone who believes completely, some of us aren't sure and are okay with that. Peace to you.
Kat
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Review of [ References ]  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I read this poem several times and am still confused what you are trying to say. It doesn't seem like you have any trust in anything; religion, institutions, science, politics. Maybe I am getting this all wrong. The structure of the poem is good, flows well and I don't see any errors. I don't have to understand, it is your opinion and writing. I hope you stay safe and continue to write.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was well written and very realistic. I had to laugh because it has happened to me. I spent years getting my hair done by a stylist, highlights put in and all. Then I ended up on disability and didn't have the money to keep it up so I bought a do-it-yourself. It was awful. I drove to my usual stylist and she took a look. "What have you done?" I felt so bad. She stripped the color, cut it, and told me not to use what I had bought again. She was understanding when I explained. She ordered some color for me and gave me some tips so I could do my own. That is a real friend. Most people are willing to help in unfortunate situations. Keep writing. Stay safe.

Peace,
Kat
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Review of HOMECOMING.  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is such a beautiful piece. The visuals are breathtaking and if I close my eyes I can smell the grass, feel cool water on my lips and be at peace. I have never been to Vermont but you paint such a wonderful picture, I am ready to fly away (oops, no wings). Maybe someday I will get there. We all should have a wonderful place for a final rest. Take care.

Kat
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Review of The Lion Sleeps  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent read from a seasoned journalist. You are always spot on with your entries and I love to read them. I may not always comment but I usually read yours and am never surprised at how well you write. I look at it this way, your history of journalism and being published makes me work a little harder. Your ending was pitch perfect. I loved it.
Keep writing, you are a very good motivator. Stay safe and have a great weekend. Congratulations!!!

Peace,
Kat
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Review of A New Beginning  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Excellent story telling skills with descriptive language and a mysterious suspenseful plot line. I was intrigued from the very beginning. I love Michael Connelly books and it read something like one of his with a mix of Stephen King. You are a very talented writer. Is this a part of a series? I didn't see any errors. Would love to continue with the story, let me know if there is more. Stay safe, keep writing.
Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: This short story has so much going for it. You are an excellent writer that touches a reader's heart. The descriptive language is very good and I become drawn into the story easily.


What I liked most: The idea of someone who has been saved coming to another in their time of need and talking to them. The patient is unconscious (you have said) so the story that you tell is to give the reader a reason for the devastation she speaks about and how he has saved other people.




Suggestions for change: First, I think maybe you should spread this out a little more. Maybe double space between paragraphs. The only other problem I had was you speaking to this person who can't hear or comprehend. I love the background story but maybe it should be you thinking about these occurrences.
If you read it out loud, would you speak to someone this way? I think it might be more informal. He already knows what he did to help people. The info is all needed and great reading, maybe just present some of it differently.




This writing made me feel: I think this is really good over all but could use some editing. I might be wrong about the changes. Keep writing. Stay safe and thanks for a good read.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke


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Review of Tinder Box  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent free verse poetry that really speaks to our society right now, the divisions and taking sides. It makes for an atmosphere that could lead to violence over almost anything. The metaphor of using a tinder box is very creative and accurate. I think we are naive over what could possible happen if we keep up this denial of the truth. Your descriptive language is excellent and I loved the ending. I wish it wasn't true though. Stay safe and keep writing.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wonderful writing that any senior can relate to. Your descriptive language is so stimulating to the senses, I can visualize laying beneath the ebony drape and the stars sparkling. I believe we become part of this universe after death and that is a lovely thought. We are made up of the same energy as the stars around us. This poem rhymes and has a smooth soothing rhythm.
I love this stanza:
When I was young, I ran ahead of time
In sweet, exuberant discovery,
Life stretched far ahead and waited for me,
Time was kinder, dealt with me patiently.
My mind travels to the past so much of the time anymore. It is hard to become excited about a future yet the past has been a wonderful accomplishment. But being grateful for each day is enough. No depression, just realistic and there is still magic and learning.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a enjoyable read and deserved to win. I have read Steinbeck and watched documentaries of the cruelty of the bull fights. Like dog fighting, it is disgusting to me. I know other people don't feel that way but I hate any kind of violence and am worried about America right now. Anyway, your piece was well written with realistic descriptions that made me feel like I was there. It also gave me a sense of hope and a chuckle. Congrats!

Kat
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Review of Ghosts of Summer  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am so very glad that I saw this short story. You pulled me in and I forgot everything happening around me. I could see the young sister shooting up and the clutter of the house that had fresh flowers at one time. I was at the beach during happier days when a family was there. Then at a loved mother's bedside who no longer has hope of coming back to a normal life. Jump to a sister in Rehab doing very well and becoming a sober version of her better self. Then the ending at the writer's auto accident and death is knocking at the door. An acceptance is the ending of a life that is completely at peace with nature. You spin a very realistic account of someone who is an addict also and drugs are dragging her away each time she tries to grab a helping hand. Tears are in this reader eyes. Excellent writing, keep it up.


Kat
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Review of Purest Joy  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Any comments are only my personal ideas and meant as suggestions.

My overall impression: Well, you answered the question of the meaning of joy for you without dialogue. Your writing is very good and I was involved in the story immediately. Your description of dormitory life reminds me of my oldest son coming home after freshman year. He wanted so badly to stay in the dorm but was unable to study because of the social life around him. He partied on weekends, not like his roommate and so many others.


What I liked most: Your writing flows and is easy to follow. I love your descriptive language of the church and the feelings you express about the peace and joy you find there. You have a good introduction paragraph and then take us through to a satisfying ending.




Suggestions for change: I didn't see any errors and no suggestions for change.




This writing made me feel: I believed in the emotions of the writer and that is what is most important to me as a reader. Keep writing.



Always make the time to write. Your characters will speak to you, if you take the time to listen.
Keep writing!

Kat



In the deepest hour of the night, confess to yourself that you would die if you were forbidden to write. And look deep into your heart where it spreads its roots, the answer, and ask yourself, must I write?
—Rainer Maria Rilke


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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Excellent writing complete with details and a sense of actually being there. I love history also and enjoy researching and writing about it. You drew me in and had me completely absorbed in this actual awful destruction of property and lives. You gave it a personal touch. Keep writing. Good luck with the contest.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a well written poem that flows beautifully and shows the esteem and love you hold for God as a fatherly figure for you. The rhyme and rhythm are perfect. Stay safe and keep writing.

Peace,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I liked the way you wrote this, sharing personal hopes and plans until Covid changed everything for everyone. The fact that out of negative circumstances we grow and change, gaining adaptive skills continuing to learn, finding blessings. I know that you did this for a contest so you probably had a limit on words. I wish you had mentioned those who weren't as fortunate as you were but that is the healthcare worker in me. The written work itself is without flaws and very thoughtful. Stay safe and keep writing.

Kat
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Review of The Passport  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed this story. I was completely absorbed and feeling anxiety and terror for this person. It is amazing the adrenaline and other neuro chemicals that rush in to paralysis with fear and the worse scenario. I believe those of us that write might be more prone to "anything might happen".

You did an excellent job of writing this. A great beginning to bring the reader in and interested, a plot that stirs the emotions with a hook and then a wonderful ending so I could stop holding my breath. Keep writing and stay safe.

Kat
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Review of Generation  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really enjoyed reading this poem and related to it. As a fellow baby boomer, we share a lot of history in common and experiences. I am partial to the last stanza which echoes how I feel and write about today's craziness. I try to compare it to what we experienced and how did we get here and not make more progress in changing this world? I love your history of growing up in a world I recognize.
A wonder bread world of
Tree shaded sidewalks
In small town America

Since then I have learned
Many hard won lessons,
Neither to quickly nor too well.
As to the madness which seemed
Always to impinge I just don’t know.

The times are still a changing,
But they don’t seem to be any
Less full of madness.

And the ending is perfect-I still have no idea how to end the madness. Maybe 2 steps forward and one back is an answer for some but I want more! Keep writing.

Stay safe,
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed reading this. When I saw the prompt, my 1st thought was of Superman too. Can't believe the guy is still making an impact on American culture. I suppose the idea that someone can protect us from harm will always be popular so the Super heroes plus Gods will always have their place. You did an excellent job writing this. I miss phone booths but haven't needed one in years now. Of course with the cyber security problems, I think some of these relics might be handy to keep around cause waiting for Superman really doesn't work.
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A sad and emotional love poem/song. It is well written and flows with rhythm. I hope it isn't a personal story. You captured the loneliness for many people after a love has been rejected. Life goes by so very fast. Congratulations on being published. I have never tried-never felt like my writing was good enough. It has always been a happy hobby for me.Thanks for the read. Stay safe and keep writing.
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Review of The Collapse  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem is very creative with a sad cautionary tale of truth. I enjoyed it. Stay safe and keep writing.
Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Excellent poem with great imagery and use of metaphor, enjoyed this very much. One suggestion: 3rd stanza, I think you mean watch.


My eyes focus on a white clouds,
as it moves across the sky.

I what it change,

Stay safe and creative.

Kat
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Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Excellent write filled with the emotions I feel and don't know what to do with. My sons both served and so did my Dad. I have always been so proud of that. To find out so many military have turned to the "darker side is disturbing". I do pray there will be a healing in this divided country of ours. I still believe the majority of people are against violence as an answer because it never is, as war never is but sometimes necessary. Thanks. Stay safe.

Kat
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Review of Joy In Death  
Review by Redtowrite
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
You have written a lovely story about the sad fact that sometimes children die.It is like the kind you would tell a child about the death of a friend. I know you said this fictional and it truly is. I just want to say I enjoyed reading it and I wish it could be so easy, maybe for some people it is. I am an RN and children do seem to handle a terminal cancer diagnosis much better than many adults.But they all go through a lot of procedures etc. I think you could have been more descriptive with treatments and do more showing and not telling about this child's life and death. Maybe add a little about his family and the things he liked doing for fun and how it got harder to make it more real. Keep writing.
Stay safe and creative.

Kat
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