Hello, Leslie Loo . This is a review of "Jesus Vs. Santa" by invitation from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" ! I have the following comments to offer.
Reader Experience
A discussion between Jesus and Santa over their relative importance to the Christian festival of Christmas or the Commercialised festival of present giving.
Commentary: Content, Characters and Plot
It is difficult for me to read pieces like this. I remember feeling physically sick watching Monty Python's Life of Brian for example as I felt it was irreverent and even blasphemous. Later I watched it again and realised he was not directly attacking Jesus but rather how Jewish culture was all too ready to accept false Messiahs. It was a difficult adjustment for me which I still struggle with. So any contest between Jesus and Santa suffers from the immediate view that Jesus is real and Santa made up. Jesus is the Son of God, fully God and fully man in one person, through him we were created, by Him we are saved, He will Judge us all.
But let me start from the assumption that this is a comedy sketch designed to draw out deeper truths which is the essence of all good comedy.
So Jesus in your piece is portrayed as the Messiah, the Great I AM, the Prince of Peace, the Way, the Truth and the Life, the true King of Christmas who gives eternal life, the one who died for us on the cross to redeem us from our sins, miracle maker, on who rose from the dead, heals the sick, casts out demons, omniscient, available 24-7 - 365 days a year to all. All true.
Santa disbelieves scripture, doubts Christ's Divinity, and models himself on Nicholas of Myra the one who punched Arius in the face at the council of Nicea for doubting Christ's Divinity. Santa is the present giver, the self-proclaimed King of Christmas, who brings happiness with toys, who owns a flying reindeer sleigh, who gives 2 billion kids presents in less than a day...
The contrast between the two has great comedic value although I find it hard to laugh at this because the sides are so unequally weighted. I trace the giving of presents to the actions of the Magi giving presents to Jesus, not to some commercialized fiction invented in the last century or so. St Nicolas Day here in Germany is separated from Christmas and has its own special day so it is the Christkind that brings the presents, not Santa anyway. So I found this commentary to be culture-bound.
Santa calling Jesus Beard Boy is quite funny except there is a chance that Jesus was clean shaven, we do not know one way or another. Early depictions of him from the Roman catacombs had him without a beard and short hair for example.
I think I might have been the wrong person to ask about this piece as I lack a sense of humor about attacks on Jesus or it brings out the vindictive side of me when I hear them and I just want to destroy the person making these attacks. BAD - I know. Also, I found the piece to be culture-bound, to violate the spirit of this particular competition regarding the use of non-dialog, and really to be a play on stereotypes. I am sure that other people will think I am being too harsh here.
Mechanical issues
As someone who has entered the Dialog-500 contest many times I have to say I think you cheated a little in this one. You include narrator descriptions in brackets on various occasions. The point of the contest is surely to put everything into the dialog. So not (he waved his arms around) but rather 'Why are you waving your arms around?'
Thanks for sharing.
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