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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Eros,

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What I liked: The suspense as he creeped into the other room, and the feeling that something was wrong, seemed almost real. I liked the way that you ended the chapter. It gave the reader something to think about. Wondering who this guy on the wall is, would make me want to read more to find out. *Smile*

Grammar/Punctuation: You may need to go through and check for a couple of missing commas *Quill*

Observations/suggestions: *RollEyes*

name of all things all things holy, (name of all things holy)

Thoughts/feelings: You have done a good job writing this first chapter. I enjoyed it. You have some good detail, and it all works together, and I can't complain about the flow. You did a good job with that. Good job. *Reading*

This is my personal review of this piece of your work. These remarks are for you to either use or discard as you see fit. If you do not agree with any of my comments, feel free to delete this review. Since you have your own writing style, Please practice safe editing. *ThumbsUp*

Thank you for allow me to read and review your writing. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer like yourself. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing. *Delight*

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Review of Birthday Surprise  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Amay,

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What I liked: I thought that your choice to use a cowboy as a main character was a good idea. They sometimes have a reputation as being a little slow, so I thought that it was nice to see one outsmart a magician. The addition of the dog worked into the story allowing for the whole story to come together. *Smile*

Grammar/Punctuation: None that I noticed *Quill*

Observations/suggestions: No suggestions or observations. *RollEyes*

Thoughts/feelings: This story had some very unique qualities in it. I don't think that I could have ever thought of putting a magician and cowboy together to rob someone. The story had a good flow to it and good characters. I got a little lost at the end though. I couldn't figure out from the first reading why he put the dog in the box, or how he seemed to snap so fast. I got the impression at the end that Mr. Vanderbilt may have been the boss since they returned to the party, but I couldn't figure out why he would have someone rob him. I did think that it is a good story, and I enjoyed reading it. Good job. *Reading*

This is my personal review of this piece of your work. These remarks are for you to either use or discard as you see fit. If you do not agree with any of my comments, feel free to delete this review. Since you have your own writing style, Please practice safe editing. *ThumbsUp*

Thank you for allow me to read and review your writing. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer like yourself. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing. *Delight*

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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Hello brom,

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What I liked: The basis of the story was different from anything I've ever read, and it is truly unique. I enjoyed the journey from beginning to end, and I was glad that it had a happy ending. I am glad that they finally gained some common sense and didn't have to go tho war to defend their land and people. *Smile*

Grammar/Punctuation: You should check over your punctuation, spelling, and grammar. I found several of both. I have listed quite a few here, but I found several more, *Quill*

Observations/suggestions: *RollEyes*

Long ago of there existed (Long ago there existed)
evil lived (evil, and lived)
remained there. So (remained there, so)
person would something (would do something)
wealth and he planned (wealth, so he)
Meanwhile, in idiotsville (in Idiotsville)
held to his throat.” (held it to his throat.)
amass such great (such a great)
I and he were (he and I)
get in?”he said (space between in?" and he)
magic can defeat can defeat magic (magic can defeat magic)
release the woman.” ,the wizard (the woman," the)
As the wizard followed after Darvy. But (The wizard..Darvy, but)
put stone in his hand and whispered. (put a stone....Whispered,)
human and all humans (human, and all)
understand all that that he said (all that he)
Well I suppose (well, I)
take this with me.”, she (with me," she)
bushes.” he (bushes," he)
could think anything (could think of anything)
not even breathing.” Princes (breathing," Princess)
better get moving.” she (moving," she)
Then she more of the strange (then more)
for his abuse that (for the abuse)
his death.” The Princes (death," the princess)
said as she reached him before the guards could intercept him and put a sword to Darvy’s throat. (she said, reaching him and putting a sword to his throat before the guards could intercept her.)
didn’t know what was quite happening (know quite what was happening)
searching himself for words (searching for words)
for several sentences (for several minutes)
I and sense it (I can sense)
you can sense it? (you can too.)
Not only will this but (Not only that, but we will soon)
happen to kingdom full (to a kingdom)
“You’re right, I can sense it. But (right. I..it, but)
what way rest would (what ways the rest)
“What’s’ a “something ("What's a something)
have ben as small foolish (have been)
forward to tell an intelligent (to say an)
like I’m suddenly (like I've suddenly)
window and where his (window where his)
moment that No longer (that no longer)
overcame any contra wise sentiment (contra wise ?)


Thoughts/feelings: This is a unique story about an unbelievable land of people. The storyline was good, but I thought that it could use a little tweaking and detail. I think that with a little editing it can be an even better story. Good job. *Reading*

This is my personal review of this piece of your work. These remarks are for you to either use or discard as you see fit. If you do not agree with any of my comments, feel free to delete this review. Since you have your own writing style, Please practice safe editing. *ThumbsUp*

Thank you for allow me to read and review your writing. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer like yourself. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing. *Delight*

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Review of It's Too Late  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Jim,

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What I liked: The interaction between Kevin and Dave was unlike most of the interrogations that I have either read elsewhere, or seen on television and movies. It was a nice change of pace for Dave to show such concern for Kevin's mental state, and taking the time to talk to him as a friend. The whole idea of the world being destroyed by a black hole is interesting, and the ending was good. I guess the old Professor knew what he was talking about. *Smile*

Grammar/Punctuation: None that I noticed. *Quill*

Observations/suggestions: No observations or suggestions. *RollEyes*

Thoughts/feelings: This is a truly interesting and enjoyable story about the end of the earth. Everything flowed well, and the conversations were good. It kept my interest, and left me wanting to read more. You did a good job of giving the details in a simple way that were easy to understand, yet believable. The ending could have went either way, but you did choose the best one to end the story with. It actually left me wanting to read more. Good job. *Reading*

This is my personal review of this piece of your work. These remarks are for you to either use or discard as you see fit. If you do not agree with any of my comments, feel free to delete this review. Since you have your own writing style, Please practice safe editing. *ThumbsUp*

Thank you for allow me to read and review your writing. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer like yourself. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing. *Delight*

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Review of Next Time Around  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Joe,

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What I liked: The truth and feeling behind this poem felt real. I could get a sense of an inner struggle about your past, and your desire to change the things that have gone wrong. *Smile*

Grammar/Punctuation: Since you have used some punctuation in a few lines, it seemed to hurt the flow when you didn't use it all throughout. *Quill*

Observations/suggestions: No observations or suggestions. *RollEyes*

Thoughts/feelings: I enjoyed reading this poem. We all wish that we could go back and change things in our life, and you touched that part of me. The words you rhymed fit together well, but some lines seemed a little shorter than others which seemed to affect some of the flow. Despite these feelings, you did a good job writing this poem, and I felt what you were trying to say. Good job. *Reading*

This is my personal review of this piece of your work. These remarks are for you to either use or discard as you see fit. If you do not agree with any of my comments, feel free to delete this review. Since you have your own writing style, Please practice safe editing. *ThumbsUp*

Thank you for allow me to read and review your writing. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer like yourself. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing. *Delight*

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Review of The Dead Letter  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Liam,

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What I liked:I liked the little details that you added such as the age and appearance of the letter. I can only imagine how Mary Stewart must have felt when she saw that it was from her deceased son. It was a nice idea to add the details of his drive, especially the traffic. It was refreshing to know that through all of that he didn't fall into the road rage frame of mind like so many people do. *Smile*

Grammar/Punctuation:I didn't see any mistakes with the grammar or punctuation. *Quill*

Observations/suggestions:No observations or suggestions. *RollEyes*

Thoughts/feelings:You did a great job of writing this story. It had a relaxed and laid back feeling that I enjoyed. For the length, you seemed to create a nice detailed look into Malcolm's personality. Good job. *Reading*

This is my personal review of this piece of your work. These remarks are for you to either use or discard as you see fit. If you do not agree with any of my comments, feel free to delete this review. Since you have your own writing style, Please practice safe editing. *ThumbsUp*

Thank you for allow me to read and review your writing. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer like yourself. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing. *Delight*

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Review of A Writer's Soul  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey firegoddess,

This is a review from a member of"Showering Acts of Joy Group. *Delight*


I enjoyed reading this poem. I felt that I could relate to it on many levels. I especially liked this part:

No one knows the true me
They might not like what they see
Showing the same fake smile
Not having cried in a while


I feel this way each day. I have very often pretended to be someone that I'm not just to please other people, and this has caused me a lot of pain. You did a great job of expressing your feelings and capturing mine. Thank you for writing this.


Thank you for sharing this with us. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer. Keep up the good work and best of luck with all of your writing. *Reading*


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Review of Sadness  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hey Heterodox,

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I thought that this was an interesting story. A crazy person works pretty good in a story I think. I was surprised that she had just imagined killing her sister and wanting to kill herself. I didn't think that it flowed as well as it could have because of some punctuation problems. There were several places that a comma could be used to help the reader to process the story better. This was a good idea for a story and you used some good ideas.

Thank you for sharing this with us. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer. Keep up the good work and best of luck with all of your writing. *Reading*


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Review of Red Phone  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hey Luis,

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Posted on "Newbie Help & Support Writer's Hideaway *Delight*


This is a good story. I liked reading it. It kept me interested and wanting to see Who was talking to Dan. The plot was very good and easy to follow. It was a fresh look at selling your soul to the devil. Your Idea for devil to talk to him through the television set and show him parts of his life was great. you did a good job with the ending also.

If you would indulge me, these are just some observations I have made. Feel free to use or dismiss as you see fit. *RollEyes*

All of the spaces between the lines make it hard to read. I was having a hard time keeping my place.
You don't have to indent the first line of the paragraphs unless you just want to, but it doesn't work well when the characters speak.
I noticed that every line begins with a capital letter even if it doesn't start a sentence, this throws off the flow because the each time I thought it was a new sentence.
It would read better if you wrote it across the whole page and left one line between each paragraph. It would make it much easier to read.
You need to look over your punctuation. Especially when it comes to the quotes.
There were a couple of typos, but I think you may find them when you go back over it, and where you wrote throw up, I think that vomit would be better.


Thank you for sharing this with us. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer. Keep up the good work and best of luck with all of your writing. *Reading*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey Rodly,

This is a review from a member of"Showering Acts of Joy Group. *Delight*


This article had so much information and detail. You seemed to know what you were talking about. I can tell that it took quite some time to come up with this idea, and to write it all out. You make it sound so simple. I could have almost believed it, but who is going to be around for eons just waiting for all of these changes to take place. It was very creative and entertaining. Good job.

If you would indulge me, these are just some observations I have made. Feel free to use or dismiss as you see fit. *RollEyes*

finished your duties (finished with your duties)
may have to ten (may have to happen)
we'll will no longer (we will)
so we won't go into at this (go into that)
be the stellar wind (by the stellar)
have also notice that (noticed)
I may have missed some other little mistakes along the way.


Thank you for sharing this with us. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer. Keep up the good work and best of luck with all of your writing. *Reading*


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Review of Nashville  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey Joe,

This is a review from a member of Showering Acts of Joy. *Delight*


Since I am also from Tennessee this caught my attention. I thought that you did a good job writing it, and I can see that you love your city. This felt so honest and real to me. I try not to review poetry, since I feel that it is the writer's personal feelings. That being said, I felt that the last line (That's Nashville) took away from the flow of the poem. This is my opinion and I'm in no way suggesting that you to change your version. That is your personal choice.

Thank you for sharing this with us. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer. Keep up the good work and best of luck with all of your writing. *Reading*


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Review of "Crystal Tear"  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey shnyzz,

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This was a lovely poem. it's so full of painful emotion. You did a good job writing it. The rhyme seem to flow easily, and the point and feelings were clear. Good job.

Thank you for sharing this with us. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer. Keep up the good work and best of luck with all of your writing. *Reading*


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Review of FREAKSHOW 2  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hey markymark,

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You did a good job writing this story. I was surprised to learn that all of the freaks came from the house of mirrors. I liked the way you described each change that he went through and how he didn't realize what was going on until it was too late. I was troubled by the end of the last sentence. It may be better to end it with 'center stage'. The part about his fiance didn't seem to make sense because although you told explained the pictures she received, I didn't se why that would cause her to leave. How did she know that he wouldn't be coming back, along with their friends?

If you would indulge me, these are just some observations I have made. Feel free to use or dismiss as you see fit. *RollEyes*

her breathing as (breathing while)

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hey drboris,

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This Christmas story would do wonders for a few kids that I know. There is nothing like a scare to get them moving in the right direction. You did a good job writing this story. I liked the part about the warning about Dale's naughty actions. I liked the way you ended the story. It was a surprise. If that really were to happen, I don't think Santa would have to worry about visiting very many houses the next year. Good job.

If you would indulge me, these are just some observations I have made. Feel free to use or dismiss as you see fit. *RollEyes*

final caught item caught his (final item caught)

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hey breshke,

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I enjoyed reading this story. It was very creative. I liked the personality that you gave Joseph Cricket. I found him pretty amusing. Poor Valerie was put in a worse situation than when she started.I didn't see any obvious mistakes through it. I was a little curious about why Joseph Cricket didn't fall in love with her when she spoke. I guess it was a fairy thing. *Smile* Good job.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hey Amanda,

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You did a good job writing this story. It captured my attention and made me want to keep reading. I guessed that it was all just an imprint of what had happened to Lisa, or if you prefer, her ghost haunting the woods where she was killed. The ending caught me a little by surprise because of the coincidence of them being out there that night and then the article in the paper the next morning.

If you would indulge me, these are just some observations I have made. Feel free to use or dismiss as you see fit. *RollEyes*

sleep came over me. (overcame)
situation, having trouble (situation, and)
running through. (through them)
eyes real tight (eyes tight)
passed by when finally, I heard (passed when I)


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Review of A Rough Start  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hey KrisAnn,

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I like the way that you wrote this. You did a great job of keeping my attention from the end of the world to trying to escape the restaurant. I enjoy reading this type of story, especially when it's written in a way that seems like you are telling me something that happened to you in common language. I would guess that the Rocky Road ice cream did it. What can you expect with a name like that? *Laugh* Good job.

If you would indulge me, these are just some observations I have made. Feel free to use or dismiss as you see fit. *RollEyes*

being chase by (chased)

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey frontierman,

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This was a good story. It certainly sounds like it could happen. I guess that as much as they wanted everything to stay the same, they couldn't stop progress. I was worried at the end that the High Priest would have them blindfold poor Aunt Zruska, so that she could fix the Holy of Holies. The ending had a good message in it. Good job.

If you would indulge me, these are just some observations I have made. Feel free to use or dismiss as you see fit. *RollEyes*

“Oh-Oh.” ("uh-oh")
inches thick. (wide)
to haven to (have)
what happened.” (happened?")
he stopped and asked, (he asked,)


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Review of Dig a Hole  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Thank you for asking me to review this for you. You did a great job with this part. I liked all of the detail that you put into it.I could almost see and feel everything that was happening to her. The only thing that I can possibly comment on is that you could maybe separate some of the longer sentences into a few smaller ones. It would make it just a little easier to read. Other than that, I have no other suggestions. I look forward to reading the next part. It felt like it had a good flow and it was real. Really good job. I can see so much improvement from the very first part that I reviewed. I look forward to reading more of your writing in the future. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hey Anastasia,

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I liked this story. That seems to always be the way things go. I liked that he had decided to change and treat his wife better. I guess it was a little too late. I felt sorry for him at the end. If only she would have waited a little longer. You did a good job capturing Howard's different feelings and ideas before he made his life changing commitment. Good job.

If you would indulge me, these are just some observations I have made. Feel free to use or dismiss as you see fit. *RollEyes*

Howard He made(He made)
There are several places that could be changed from Howard to He.)


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Review of Gnomes?  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hey Mark,

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You wrote a very entertaining story. It is so unique and different than anything I have read so far. Who would have thought that a Gnome could be so much fun to read about. I think that the British accent worked because I could hear it in my head. I think you did a good job with the whole story. It felt like you were telling me about an actual event in your normal day. Good job.

Thank you for sharing this with us. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer. Keep up the good work and best of luck with all of your writing. *Reading*


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Review of The Kiss  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hey Joey,

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I believe that this is a good storyline. I did find it a little hard to keep up with who was who and all of their various information though. I don't know your plans for the story line so I can't say one way or the other at this point if it's too much all at once. It is a believable story and it caught my attention once I got past the introductions and history of each person. I hope that you are planning on somehow separating each couple and maybe more of their history, then throw in some background into their relationship before you move on to the next couple. From this example that you have given, I think that I would be interested in reading more about these characters.

Thank you for sharing this with us. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer. Keep up the good work and best of luck with all of your writing. *Reading*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey michael,

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I enjoyed reading this Tribute to your friend Bob. He must have had a time getting that motor home through those woods. Good thing you had that 4-wheel drive. He may have never gotten it out of there. The flow of your story seemed a little off, and it could use a little tweak here and there, but otherwise a good story.

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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Hey Marleigh,

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This is a good start to your story. When I got to the end, it made me curious about what they were doing there and why she seemed to be so important in what was going on. In a few places your detail was good while in other places it seemed rushed, throwing off the flow. I liked the characters and the fact that Josh was in the military and now seems to be getting involved in some type of seemingly sinister business with the Colonel.

If you would indulge me, these are just some observations I have made. Feel free to use or dismiss as you see fit. *RollEyes*

as he scrambled around his dad as he swung. (his dad and swung.)
When did the three of them go into the house after her husband came home?
I would think that the kitchen would be in the back of a large house where it wouldn't be seen by visitors.


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Review of The Party Line  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hey Harry,

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You wrote a very good story. I remember those stupid party lines. I hated them. Every time I called someone, I wondered who might be listening. It was hard to have a private conversation. I guess the only people who ever missed it was all of the gossips. I know how they are. I live in a small town and they are every where. This was a fun story to read and It actually told so much truth about small towns. I enjoyed reading the part where Sadie finally fought fire with fire and put those old biddies in their place. It was just so crazy all of the things they were saying about her. I felt so sorry for her. It's amazing how much gossip can get started from just looking at someone. I always heard that when they are talking about you, they are giving someone else a rest. Good job with this story.

Thank you for sharing this with us. I'm not a professional, just a reader and writer. Keep up the good work and best of luck with all of your writing. *Reading*


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