First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
Beautiful poem. Yes, self-confidence is one of the most important things in our life. We cannot go forward without it even to achieve the smallest goal of the daily routine we need self-confidence and positive thinking.
I like the words in your poem though I get a sadness woven in this poem. I think it wrote from life experience.
Let the past go far away
Embrace presents come what may
I am a chocolate lover. Hershey, Cadbury, Lindt, Nestle, Ghiradelli, Reeses, brings joy in my mouth. They melt in my mouth. Yes they are Irresistible, delightful and enchanted. I like this sweet poem about chocolate. You brilliantly put valentine day and chocolate together.
I am taking part for July Challenge for "The WDC Angel Army" , I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "Flight Home" This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I really liked this sestina poem because of the way you painted life. I like the metaphor and the bright rhyming. I like the story of Flight Home. The words “falling snow” “ geese” “slow motion waves” “wintery sky” all the things blended together creates a lovely nature scene. I could imagine where they are.
I like the architecture of lines and shapes, scenes and stories. I feel that it wrote from life experience, senses and emotions, and it looks great.
The poet uses the colors and shapes, sounds, smells, touch, and feelings to create the images.
I like the last stanza
Overhead the geese are shaftless arrows shot
from an instinctual bow piercing the morning sky
with their raucous goodbyes. Time waves.
It has good message.
I think you can add a photograph of nature so that readers could visualize what the author is conveying.
It's a good story. I appreciate your thought process and the way he displayed it. You have good descriptions to your story. I think you can make this story a little longer.
First I want to say that I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: I like this story, and how you contrast the two worlds it's interesting to think about. I like the suspense as well. I understand you wrote this for a contest with limited words count and it looks great. All the characters are believable. I especially like the endings.
DIALOGUES: Dialogue floated beautifully. I like the presentation.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed.
SUGGESTION: I didn't find any mistake.
FINAL THOUGHT: Beautifully told and written. You are a good storyteller.
This poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming. I like the title as well. This is a beautiful poem for a friend. I got a sense of sadness laced in this poem.
Your words are so pure and true. When we have lost a good friend and it's hard to describe the feelings. I feel this poem is strong emotional, bright and inspirational.
I like the last stanza what had happened to distill your essence
such that we vainly grasp
yet find nothing
except a wisp of words.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank for sharing!
I am taking part for July Challenge for "The WDC Angel Army" , I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "The Frog and the Bucket" This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
Excellent poem. This narrative poem of yours is rather epic. It has important messages about why we never give up no matter what the situation would be. I like the way you crafted it through the frog and boy story.
I like the rhyme shapes, scenes and stories. I feel this poem is positive, cheerful and amusing.
I like the lines
He had to get out.
There just must be a way.
So he breast-stroked and paddled
Until the next day.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I like reading stories taken from life. I like this thoughtful piece. It is full of wonderful thoughts. I feel that it wrote from life experience, senses and emotions, and it looks great.
Yes, it is very awful that some people fight over religion. All religions ask for simplicity and love.
You paint a nice picture of your early days as well as life. I like the messages conveyed in this piece. Especially in the lines the most radiant lesson is that people are important, no matter who, what, or where they are.
Great write, It's so inspirational. Thanks for sharing!!
I am taking part for July Challenge for"The WDC Angel Army" . I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "Why?" This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
You seem to write this story with selective word choice. For example, color, spear and attack. I understood this was written for this kind of contest but it still looks great. You managed it well. This is really a good story.
I enjoy the character Paul and Ellen and the suspense. I think you can make a bigger story from this piece. This would be interesting.
I am taking part for July Challenge for"The WDC Angel Army" . I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "Inside the Darkness" This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
FIRST IMPRESSION: I love reading stories written with the prompts. This is clever story of you. I appreciated the way you told this story. I like the title as well, it fits this story.
SETTING:In a modern time.
CHARACTERS : The characters are believable and the storytelling is very good.
DIALOG:I like the dialogues. It floated beautifully between Kathi and Beth
I like the ending.A laughing, 108 year old reflection of herself, staring back into the eyes of a 40 year old screaming Kathi.
suggestion: I felt your story was a little rushed. I think you needs to mention the Writer’s Cramp prompt to understand the readers. Otherwise it’s a great story. I enjoy it reading.
Indeed the Autumn changed everything in nature but not our hearts. Autumn represented the sad reflections of life. Yet it represented as the melodies of colors of love and affection.
I enjoy the scents, colors and sounds this poem “Royal purples and vibrant reds,
Orange pumpkins and Indian corn,”
I like the image and symbol you have used here. You metaphorically compared the natural object with human nature.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank for sharing!
I am taking part for July Challenge for"The WDC Angel Army" . I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "Friendship" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This is a beautiful gratitude poem for heartfelt friendships. You wrote beautifully about the importance of friendship.
The importance of friendship not express in a words. Friends make us laugh, and we can share our thoughts with them. They are always there for us when in need. Your words are very true. I like the repeated verse of this villanelle poem “A touch of kindness to inspire.” And “A heart for honest desire.”
For me, I never would be a writer without them. I think they are the reason we stay glued. I like this poem!
I understand you wrote for Game of Thrones contest and you managed it well. I enjoyed your poem. It followed the prompt
I am taking part for July Challenge for"The WDC Angel Army" . I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "The Lighthouse Keeper" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
General Impression: {/b} This is a good story about a women who attracted to the unusual lighthouse keeper.
It’s beautifully written and told. I especially like how each paragraph starts. I like the descriptions.
Dialogues: {/b} Dialogue floated beautifully between the characters.
Characters: {/b} All the characters (Audrina, Damian ) are well developed.
I understand you wrote for Game of Thrones contest and you managed it well. I enjoyed your story. It followed the prompt probably and you can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be interesting.
I am taking part for July Challenge for"The WDC Angel Army" . I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "The Lighthouse Keeper" . This review reflects my opinion only,and I am not a writing expert.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
General Impression: This is a good story about a women who attracted to the unusual lighthouse keeper.
It’s beautifully written and told. I especially like how each paragraph starts. I like the descriptions.
Dialogues: Dialogue floated beautifully between the characters.
Characters: All the characters (Audrina, Damian)are well developed.
I understand you wrote for Game of Thrones contest and you managed it well. I enjoyed your story. It followed the prompt probably and you can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be interesting.
I read this poem from read and review page. This is a sweet poem. It feels like breathing a fresh air. I enjoy the scents, colors and sounds of this poem. You painted life so beautifully. I understand you wrote this from personal life experience and it looks great. I like the last stanza
"Night has fully fallen; the heavens burn bright.
My questions, now answered, fall by the wayside.
I breathe in the cool air and stare into the night
knowing you're with me, held tightly inside."
This is a good thoughtful piece about the tact and charisma. I appreciate the way you displayed it.
It makes me read it to the end. Your words are very true that knowing one's own vision are all factors inside a person who combines charisma and tact. Yes, personal attractiveness may influence others for a certain periods of time but not forever. Both Charisma and skills combined together make a winning profile.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I learn many from this piece.
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I am taking part for July Challenge for"The WDC Angel Army" . I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "A Journey To Love" This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming. It has lovely romantic thoughts woven inside every line. You started beautifully In the city, an expanse of rubble, Hopes, smiles, sins, radicals and trouble. Your words are so pure and true. Yes, true love is hard to find because it is extraordinary in your words “tough job for mortals where angels fall”.
I feel this poem is strong, positive, and bright and inspirational. I like the last stanza His image faded, though mine stayed, you see, From the deep, his voice said, "I'm you; you are me." It packed with message.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank for sharing!
I am taking part for July Challenge for"The WDC Angel Army" . I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "Inside the Darkness" This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I like this supernatural story about hunting vampire. I appreciated it’s descriptions and presentations. You have good characters descriptions for example “He looked rather magnificent as reddish sparkles radiated out of his eyes, forming a direct contrast to his sparkling white pointed teeth” . The setting and the plot is absolutely fantastic. The dialogues floated beautifully between the characters. I loved the endings “That's when I feel, in my blood, a wild wind swirling, singing, pulsating from a center so bright. “ it is certainly different than the usual vampire mysteries stories I have read!!
I am taking part for July Challenge for"The WDC Angel Army" . I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "Beneath the Spring Rain" This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I really liked this poem because of the metaphor you have used here for examples: “ash-colored veins” “millions of eyelids blink “the steel needles of spring “Twisting in her hands her keys to rebirth “
You painted the season spring beautifully. I like the little rhyming and
the architecture of lines and shapes, scenes and stories.
The poet uses the colors and shapes, sounds, smells, touch, and feelings to create the images.
I like the last stanza “splashes in question marks on the slippery street,
while she laments frizzled hair,
instead of frizzled dreams.” and I feel that this is positive. It has good message.
This is my second review for your poem, as I am taking part for July Challenge for "The WDC Angel Army" ,
I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "Marking the New Year" This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
Beautifully started with the lines “December's blue moon still hung heavy in the sky”. I really liked this celebration poem because of the enchanted scenery you have painted here.
It feels like a beautiful light awakening in the darker shadows of winter and shines bright. I found it reflected in the lines “of new beginnings, stretched out
into the moon-gilded night.”
I like this because it’s wrote from life’s experience . I like the little rhyming of your poem and how each line breaks. I feel this poem is positive and soothing.
I am taking part for July Challenge for "The WDC Angel Army" . I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "Shattered Ice" This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I really liked this poem because of the way you painted life with the breathtaking beauty of winter. You beautifully used the quote Snow provokes responses that reach right back to childhood. I like this epic poem. I like the little rhyming and how you ended the word “breathe” in every line, “for a brief moment I cannot breathe” “air trailing as they breathe.” “It takes more than air to breathe.”
I like the architecture of lines and shapes, scenes and stories. I feel that it wrote from life experience.
The poet uses the colors and shapes, sounds and smells, touch and feelings to create the images. For example “Crystal clings to every branch” “a sharp crack of winter’s whip” “Boots crunch, footstep designs break virgin white” “a crimson memory flash.”
I like the last stanza and I feel that this is positive. It packed with message.
I just read this from read and review page.
This is a sweet tribute for a heartfelt friendship.
The story: The story is about a pet.You wrote beautifully what pets do for us.
Sometimes pets makes us laugh, and we can share our thoughts with them. I like the lines "This friend of mine always makes me happy, makes me laugh and wherever I go, he always follow me. I love the way he used to come to me and play with me." Yes friends should be like this. The way you wrote can easily read. I also like the ending.
Closing Comments: Friendship is a good subject for poetry. I enjoyed it reading. I understood this was written from personal experience and it looks great. I like the thought woven in this piece. Thank you for sharing.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Best of luck with all of your writing.
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First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
I like this journal poem. I like how you express your feelings accumulated your thoughts. it is wonderful that you record your thoughts, feelings and observations in a poetic style.
I like your poem, It is full of lovely romantic thoughts inside every line. I like how each line breaks. yes, love should be like that. I find this poem is positive tone. I especially like the end stanza
"We smile at one another
Entwined in each others arms"
I enjoyed it reading.
Mina
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Beautifully started with the lines “December's blue moon still hung heavy in the sky”. I really liked this celebration poem because of the enchanted scenery you have painted here.