Hi Arakun. Ten years of membership? Now that's something to be proud of. My review is celebrating your anniversary month, if not the exact date.
The Hook
I was browsing the 'anniversary page' and recognized your user name from a while ago. And, of course, from your contest. I chose this story because, and this sounds ludicrous, the title rhymed. I had a feeling the story would be light and breezy, and this plot did not disappoint.
Lovely cover art! Brief and intriguing description.
The prompt words never seemed forced, and the story was as much comedy as educational. I didn't research to check for accuracy, but this certainly sounded convincing. "The prairie the most endangered ecosystem..." Okay, then I did investigate, and the statement is indeed true. The category of 'environment' should have been a major clue, but I dove headlong into the plot, and then mulled over what I'd read.
A closer look/Characters/Setting
Who can resist two old(er) women sitting on a porch, watching their husbands toil. Both men came from different backgrounds, but enjoyed the same hobby, or so it seemed, until the conclusion.
Katie and Harry are a lovely couple. I was delighted by the image of him twirling his wife around. When Katie said she was about to ask Harry what xeric meant, I thought, yeah, me too! Dang, he never answered, so I had more research to do. Either I'm incredibly uneducated, or you're extremely well read on this topic.
The baby's birth interrupted the plot in a pleasant way. The reader is becalmed and amused listening to the conversation when the couple jumps into action. The one paragraph describing their experience with the newborn was sufficient enough to bring the reader back to the main plot with a satisfaction of expectation. Too much interruption might have disrupted the flow, but not so in this case.
Voice/mood
Without insult, I'd say this story was told in a down-home, honest-to-goodness lighthearted manner, which I thoroughly enjoyed. Your voice is friendly and inviting.
Emotions evoked
It's so weird what stories bring to mind. Martha was fretting over Fred wrestling farm equipment from the truck. Three years ago, my dad passed, and I remember my mom being so upset with him when he wanted to garden in the Florida sun.
A closed book=lasting impression
I imagine Harry's shocked look will remain in my mind for the rest of the day. Despite the disaster, I couldn't help smiling.
An awesome write!
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