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Review of We'll Carry On  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings awesomesauce12,
I love the title of this poetry. It offers hope, encouragement and very inspiring. I enjoy the rhythm and the ryme too.
My suggestion:
How about making this into four stanzas and in every stanza has four lines.
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing.
WriteOn.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Kare Enga,
These days are the lowest point of my life as far as my health is concerned. This survey made my day as I come to think that TOMORROW I will be in perfect Health enjoying happy moments with my family and with that DECLARATION, I thank you for being the instrument to move on inspite of all the pain and the un-easiness.
YES! I WILL BE IN PERFECT HEALTH soonest than I expect.
Thank you for letting me realized my POWER!
GOD BLESS and my best regards.
See you again in this awesome community.
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Review of Widow Watcher.  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Morgan Kelly,
A poetry that describes true love, loyalty and the sadness of death.
My suggestion:
The word rosery......Please change it to...rosary
"Holding tight to her rosary"
"From there wedding day"
Please change the word there to...their
From their wedding day.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Greetings TIM CHIU,
The poem has a good rhythm and rhyme. It also gives a lot of information about this particular insect, the stinging bee that produces the sweet honey.
Another job well-done.
Thank you once again for a wonderful read.
WRITE ON !
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Review of One In A Million  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello captainmskitty,
AHA ! Well, anything is possible under the heat of the sun, so who knows, you might be a millionaire today and you can follow your dreams.
Anyway, I enjoy reading your work with a very exciting topic.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON
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Review of Lighting  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Taryn Spence,
Not all people are amazed by Lightning, and I am one of them. Truly it scares me.
But it amazes me that you can write a story out of three lines. That's Great !
I believe that you've got the talent to write, so when thoughts keep pouring, write them.
My suggestion in this piece:
The only words to so....Please change the word so to..say
The only words to say
Also this, Why do you stair....Please change the word stair to....stair
Why do you stare...
Thank you for sharing your short story.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Speak  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetingsdlvanveelen,
An Editorial written so wisely with a very intersting topic to share.
The presentation is great and the whole work itself is perfect as it describes the realities of life and our existence.
I have nothing to correct and nothing to add.
I admire it the way it is.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings Christina,
Congratulations for winning.
Nice story and the characterization, the plot and the story itself is intriguing.
Descriptive, well-written and well-presented.
I admire your talent to write Supernatural Stories, not everybody can do that.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of A Sinner  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings piewhackett1,
This poem is perfect and right timing for me to read as it gives me reflecting moments of realization on being a big sinner that I am thatthe LORD JESUS suffered so much in the cross for His love for me and the rest of mankind.
Thank you for sharing such a great work.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Five Minutes  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Carlee,
I felt I just came out from the moviehouse teary-eyed as in Sad movies make me cry.
You are a very talented and convincing author with a unique style of writing especially the countdown.
SAD PIECE yet SO PERFECT.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
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Review of Be who you are  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings eccentricities,
This is an inspiring piece from the beginning to the end. I agree with you because the truth remains the truth and being oneself is sacred and most of all pretensions never wins.
My suggestion in this work is about the presentation, some of the lines are not aligned and I am sure you can retype this and this will be perfect.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings starsburnfyre,
Love, broken promises and the feelings remained yet so confused perhaps is the message that I understood reading this prose.
My suggestion....
The first sentence, possibly you can change it to...
"Sometime ago, I broke a promise to you."
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Apropos  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings debmach,
A poetry that rhymes with an inspiring message and it speaks of the truth and sincerity.
The last two lines made a wise conclusion, but my favorite lines are the last two lines of the second stanza.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Space Pages  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello pegiAnne,
A poetry that describes the modern world. The generation where computers overrules worldwide.
Like the facebook, the U tube and many more.
I admire the creativeness.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Space Pages"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Human Hope  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings kingsnake,
The title attracts my interest simply because I am a firm believer of the word hope.
There is one line that I dis-agree(my own personal opinion only)
"religion is foolish in which we defend"
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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Review of Melting  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello yacolt,
Truly an erotica item with a very intriguing title. I believe there is more to write about the story behind the poetry.
I admire your creativeness and your talent as a poet, as an author.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings JustForYou,
Beautiful image with a wonderful message. It shows that you yourself is a very important individual and so blessed.
Thank you for sharing this to all of us that also proves that this awesome community has caring and loving people.
More power to you.
WRITE ON !
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Review of An Old Skillet  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Tim Chiu,
Nostalgic with a sweet touch !
Nice poem and it rhymes so well.
I look forward to read about your food or cooking because Chinese cooks the best as far as my Oriental taste is concerned.
Thank you for sharing once again your talent.
Write On and Best Regards.
God Bless !
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Review of Eulogy  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings kyndig,
A Prologue.... with a captivating title.
There is a good flow and the characterization is interesting.
I look forward to read more of this story, from the first chapter to the last.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Delia,
A very inspiring and touching piece to one and all. You are a blessing to yourself as well as a blessing to others. A story or a column worth sharing as well as reading.
My suggestion...
Please divide this into three paragraphs for the best presentation.
Thank you for the opportunity for me to read in your wonderful topic to share.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings jessijean,
The true feelings of the heart.
The last three lines ....sad to note
However this poem would be more meaningful, fruitful, gainful when the person that this poem is dedicated can read this and surely appreciates and loves you more and more.
I like the poem, it has a good flow. it makes the world going. So full of life inspite of the sadness and the I miss you part.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Loneliness  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings beholder,
A very sad story and very heartbreaking.
I felt my soul was paralyzed after reading it. Very convincing author.
My suggestion...
The title..
Please capitalize the first letter instead of loneliness please change it to...
Loneliness
i heard the utter of distant noises.
Please capitalize the letter I......I heard the utter of distant noises.
SUGGESTION ONLY .
Thank you for sharing.
Write On !
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Review of Whisper Of A Name  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Elemonopy,
A very captivating and intriguing title and the storyline is like a heavy drama connected with some lines like a beautiful prose.
A whisper that sounds so clear in everyway.
The presentation is great. The grammar and punctuation is perfect and I consider the whole story perfect itself.
I like your style of writing.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On !
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Review of Is it worth it?  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings poeticsyble,
Interesting title, interesting story and what makes it great is that it has a lesson to share. Very talented author to write a short story out of fifty-five words.
I strongly believe this is a winning piece.
Thank you for the read and for the insight gained.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Greetings !
I always find time to read horror stories in this awesome community whose authors are so brilliant and so talented.
Well, For me what makes a good horror story , first and foremost IT MUST BE CONVINCING and
REALISTIC that the story takes your breath away.
Thank you for the opportunity for me to join your intersting poll.
See you again.
WRITE ON !
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