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Review of Dark Eyes  
Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A very dramatic poem about love and loss. The imagery shows a picture of the pain and doubt that can accompany love. The flow kept up its relentless pace, pulling the reader along with it. The end effectively points out that love does not always end happily. Good poem.

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Review by sadorose
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An intriguing story. The characters were engaging and believable. The story was compelling, carrying the reader through the story. Ending the story right at the beginning of a take-over makes a perfect cliffhanger.The reader is left wondering what happens next. I enjoyed reading this story.

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Review by sadorose
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An intense short story that never let up the pace, from beginning to end. The story was compelling, pulling the reader through it.The characters were believable and relatable. Using them to show the dichotomy of mankind by giving them each another character that was the opposite of the regular one. Leaving them on the verge of their journey for his revenge leaves the reader wanting to read more.

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Review of the sky  
Review by sadorose
Rated: E | (5.0)
A lot of imagery contained within a very few words. I think the personification of the clouds and birds was effective in getting the reader involved very quickly. The flow was like a nice stroll in the park looking at the clouds. I enjoyed reading this poem.

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Review of The Deadline  
Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A relatable and entertaining story. It read like a real story. The character was engaging, believable and likeable. I liked how they used the condition of the envelope to give reason to accept it after the deadline. The happy ending leaves the reader feeling good. I enjoyed this story.

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Review of Hide and Seek  
Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This story was a nice snapshot of a beautiful moment, gone wrong. There was only one small typo in the first line. When describing her eyes, "round white sea" needs a comma between "round" and "white". The reader gets pulled into the game with the grandpa and Annie.The characters were believable and the story engaging. The twist at the end was spooky, but not spooky at the same time. This was nice to read.

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Review of Episodic Delerium  
Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (4.0)
An intense psychodrama of a story. The story was engaging, giving the reader a good look into the mind of a killer. There were some typos throughout. Since "nine-fifteen" is a time, it should be expressed as 9:15. "Candy crush" is a title so need to be capitalized and put in quotes. When he says,"hey" it needs a comma after it. Did you intend to have "Ben looked at her with empathy"? or was she looking at him with empathy? When he gets his trench coat from the car, a comma belongs between "cold" and "as". "The bible" is a title and needs to be capitalized and put in quotes. "The lord" is a proper noun and needs to be capitalized. Ending the story just as he was leaving the hospital to "finish off the rest of her side of the family," leaves the door open for another story while permitting the reader to formulate their own ideas. I really enjoyed reading this.

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Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A very intriguing and touching story. The story was compelling, allowing the reader to connect with Joel. There were some typos (nothing major):in the first paragraph in the line about the noise the alarm clock makes,it could use a comma between the words, "racket" and "the", in the line where he is looking at his hair, a comma between "disheveled" and "short" which does not need to be capitalized. "Fey land adventures" is a proper title, so it needs to be in quotes or underlined and everything capitalized.A comma belongs between "straight" and "pearly". In the second paragraph, "Joel" needs to be "Joel's". In the third paragraph, "leave it to beaver" is a proper title and the same rules apply as "Fey Land Adventures."In the fourth paragraph, "Hey dad" needs a comma after "dad" which is being used as a proper name and needs to be capitalized.In the fifth paragraph, "Not true," needs a comma between them. In the sixth paragraph, the same things as the fourth paragraph. Paragraph eight only needs a comma after, "Dad" and "fathers" needs an apostrophe before the "s"."In Front of Joel Propped" should be "In front of Joel, propped". "Written on the front was the words for Joel's eighteenth birthday Sorry. The last words," should be, "Written on the front were the words,"For Joel's eighteenth birthday, Sorry. The last word's." The reader begins to become invested in Joel. Leaving the questions about his mother unanswered leaves room for another story and permits the reader to guess at the answers. I really enjoyed reading this story.

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Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Extremely brief and very true. Many people could make use of this advice, it would make them so much happier. I find it also flows the other way, where the cynical words produce a cynical heart, making it a positive feedback loop. This very brief poem does lighten the soul. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.

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Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (4.0)
An intriguing story. The characters were engaging and relatable. There were just a few typos, in the line, “Custer is short for a name that is thirty letter in it," the is should be has, or was Custer speaking like that? If that is the case, it works. The same type of typo is found in the line, "That’s why we life..." the life could be live, unless it is a deliberate language thing.In the last line you left out the word "last". The story was compelling, pulling the reader into their world. Not explaining about the shakes, allows the reader to create their own ideas. I really enjoyed reading this story.

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Review by sadorose
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A very amusing story. You captured the Mock Swedish Chef so perfectly, I could almost hear his voice and see him waving that clever. You managed to get a lot of story using only dialogue. The reader develops some sympathy for the poor turkey. I am glad that he got away. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this humorous story.

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Review of In the closet  
Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (5.0)
An intriguing and insightful essay. Your ideas on the meanings associated with various furniture related sayings were very interesting. I like the idea of wearing different clothes, my idea was that being in the closet was like hiding, akin to skeletons in the closet.I liked reading this essay.

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Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A touching story. Your character was intriguing and believable. This story brings to light that death is not always sad and ugly. Having him be dead too and finding his wife again in the end was a beautiful twist. The story itself was compelling and pulled you into Harry's world. I enjoyed reading this story.

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Review of Echo  
Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A very visually rich poem. I particularly liked the line, "though we crossed paths yet to find." it tells of the circular nature of time. The imagery paints a rich picture of the drama and angst that goes hand in hand with life. The flow was dramatic yet not overwhelming. I enjoyed reading this.

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Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A very amusing little story. The characters effectively capture the issues youth have with friends giving them a hard time. The end was a perfect illustration of adolescent embarrassment when dealing with the emotion of love/crush. The characters were engaging and realistic. I enjoyed reading it.

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Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem shows your vulnerability and you bare your heart for the reader. There is a small typo in the title, the wrong "your" is used. The imagery and tone of the poem work together to show your pain of being without the one you love. The flow was easy to go along with. I enjoyed reading this.

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Review of Lesson Learned  
Review by sadorose
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Rated: E | (5.0)
An inspiring poem, that also makes the reader feel uplifted and empowered. The imagery illustrates a rich, beautiful picture of "planting your seed." The flow was a leisurely, scenic stroll through the park. I enjoyed reading this poem. Thank you for sharing it.

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Review of 1,000 True Fans  
Review by sadorose
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A very informative article. The points it raises are discussed in a clear, concise and easy to access way. I like how you used a bite-size number for your example, it made it seem a lot less daunting. The article sparks thoughts of ways to generate that fan base, and anything that sparks that chain of thought is a worthwhile read. I enjoyed this article.
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Review by sadorose
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An extremely engaging chapter. The character is relatable and believable. This chapter ends at a perfect point to leave the reader wanting to continue. The reader becomes emotionally invested in Isog and want to learn what happens to the poor boy/man. Good job.

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Review of Out of Sync  
Review by sadorose
Rated: E | (5.0)
A successful rise to a challenge. The imagery paints a rich picture of the transition of summer into autumn. The reader can almost feel the summer heat and smell of the bar-b-Que mixing with all of the wonderful smells of summer. Th flow carried me easily through the poem. I enjoyed reading this.
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Review of Meaning  
Review by sadorose
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very emotional poem. A poignant, and intense expression of the love you feel for your daughter and how important to your survival she is. The imagery illustrates the desperate struggle to find meaning in life and finding it in the eyes of your child. I enjoyed reading it.

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Review of Airow  
Review by sadorose
Rated: E | (5.0)
An intense little (referring to length and not quality) story. It was hard to muster any sympathy for the main character. She happily watched her brother and people she used to live among get slaughtered on her orders. It screams for character back story to build that sympathy, but the fact that you do not, only adds to the intensity. I really enjoyed reading this.
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Review by sadorose
Rated: E | (4.5)
An interesting story. The characters were engaging and likable. There was one typo, that I noticed, "Rhyme" should probably by rhythm. I liked how you made the "help" vague, giving the reader the opportunity to work out the nature of the help for themselves. I really enjoyed reading this.
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Review by sadorose
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A nice example of an acrostic poem. The imagery illustrates the fun and mild regrets (for lack of better word) perfectly. The flow carries me easily through the poem. It seems like it was a nice birthday (when you finally had it.) I enjoyed reading it.
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Review of Dance in the rain  
Review by sadorose
Rated: E | (5.0)
A lovely and tranquil piece. The imagery perfectly captures the feeling of being in a nice, warm rain. I love the rain as well. Your love for the rain shows clearly in every word. The reader can almost feel the rain on their face. I really enjoyed reading this.
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