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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
It was really cute iKïyå§ama, I was immediately captured by the theme of one student being surprised by the possibility a relationship and then I fall into a place where I am in the writing.com world. It was a refreshing twist with a disclaimer in the end. I made a good connect with the theme of looking beyond appearances and then knew where to go to get better. Thanks. It was fun.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hello Mitsu, an interesting rendition of what airs like the movie twilight werewolf style. The story line seems okay. Vincent is the good guy and Eric the werewolf trying to get love that Lexus reserves for Vincent. The broken English is distracting. An example: the figure had stab the wolf in....It is a consistent motif and yet I am not connecting with the reason for broken dialect. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of House of Solitude  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello joy, you offer an intense biographical sketch through the mirror of a house. I love the way you paint an internal picture with a ruffling stone façade, cobwebs and bay windows as if keeping people at a distance. By the time I get to the end I feel like I know you and I know where to go to find you. Well done!!

Artless arms embracing lofty prayers,
an open book cuddled in my lap,
I nestle in my no-man's land.

Wherever I dwell, I'm alone.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (2.0)
Hello Q, I think you know what is going on here. Likening a tetris game to life is a stretch. The content is interesting and keeps my attention, I am distracted by a lot of misspelling and, small letters and lack of punctuation keeps me from reading you at your best. Rewrite it with a grammar check and I could give it another look. Thanks for taking time to share. Keep writing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Kind of a curious and wild ride Neva. I enter a story in which Miss Snow talks to Rodger, who just happens to be related to understanding the various compartments of the stomach. I get confused by the time I get to the end. Is this in any way real or is it just a Snow job. (please excuse humor)Thanks for sharing
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Review of The Nemesis  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A fun twist to idea of mentoring. Kelvin has a sister who has a pointed message. The kicker is in the end. He reads about mortuary science. St least the dead don't talk. Thanks
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Review of Bound in Chains  
Review by drifter
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello Proton, a very provocative poem that invites the reader to identify the chains and decide/determine to break free. These few verses speak loudest:
The truth forever
Remains quietly
Shrouded inside the
Womb of mystery.
I can either continue to remain caught by the allusion of what might be called freedom and mercy by the world of find my way with others to escape the chains.
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Review of Soar  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the way that you stretch me to look beyond and soar into a place that I might not know about otherwise. The picture offers a beautiful entry into understanding how spirituality can arise out of a rock solid foundation to the stars. The tree as metaphor points the way, all we need do is follow. Thanks, well done.
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Review of Her Smile  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (2.0)
Hello Juan, I think you mean well in sharing the essence of attraction between a man and woman. I think you capture well the role of the smile, I think you mean "soul" when you talk about eyes. It is curious to think about this being written for an ex. Tell me do you mean soul or sold.
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Review of Fragmented Minds  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Panille, It was a fun read. I am sure you write from the heart, I have a brother who has struggled for over forty years with the enigma. I like that you offer understanding and a way to connect along with an apt description of a schizophrenic bind. You want it but you don't and in the end it is just a reality that can not be avoided by the one affected! thanks for sharing and god bless.
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Review of Heat Lightning  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Finch, I was caught when I got to the last line. Are we indeed the lightning rod, rather than the object of wrath? I like the way that you build to your conclusion. I am a little confused about how the view of heat lightning climaxes in the crescendo of a tornado. The descripting is incredible. The rippling of the sky, rain fell like heartbreak's tears. I think I might have gotten caught in the title. In your tale there is more to heat lightning than meets the eye.
Well done, thanks for sharing.
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Review of Autumn Interlude  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I can feel myself laughing at the magnitude of the task. There are words to exclude and others to include. I like the way you spin your autumn interlude. I can see the scarlet pages drifting around, the shuffling scuffling and a viable reason to share about grief in the light of the letting go that is a sign of grief, the chiming of a clock as if midnight approaches and the dusk of farewell.
Thanks a nice offering
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Ghost, it reads like an exciting revelation with dire consequences. The action sequences are emotionally stirring. The Metas are on the loose. It had a comic book feel. I was mostly stirred by the young child who asked the question "why".
I wonder about the "a" accenting. In some ways it is provocative and in other ways I just wonder why.
Thanks for writing
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Review of New Character  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (2.5)
Hello Cowgirl, I am not too sure what you are looking for in a name for a character. Are you wanting a name that reflects the plot of what you write. Names provide definition, so that any word could provide a sense of meaning to a person wanting character.
choose a name and fill it with meaning and value and the name you crave will come to you.

You need to look at typos and a sense of what it means to be in transition.
thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Fameland, you offer great wisdom and a springboard of what does not work in relationship. I am left with something to mull over. Am I satisfied with knowing about or the importance of knowing with others learning connections. After all the pretty girl in the coffee shop depends on a person open to entering her world. You make an excellent case for touting versatility. There are typos and your formatting makes me feel cramped. I am forced to get close to the computer screen and look at small lettering. The oo's amd parliii are distracting for me. Keep writing you have lots of good things to share. Just make it easier for me to want to pore through it. God bless
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Review of Hope  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nathan, I like the way you begin your writing journey. The image of the dark walls of a screaming heart stays with me. You offer a reason for hope, the heat of passion is met with the soothing ice of life and the reality that only in the relationship with a loved one is their relief.

My only critique is the title of the work impaled. The title feels overly violent. It leaves me with little or no hope as I make my way to the end.
Well done
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Review of Ghost of a Chance  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed reading your description of fog that climaxed at the dawn with seeing the unseen terror that calls one out of this life to the next. I love the metaphor and how repetition can march one toward the realization of who I am and what become of me.
thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Fynordian, the rhythm was catchy and the rhyming was consistent throughout. It reads like a song about a song. I have not seen the movie and yet can picture men in the mountain country (Ozarks) strumming ballads about life. I am glad you take me to this place. After finishing your poem I am deciding it is a place that I want to go back to.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Iveltac, I enjoyed entering to the action. It reminded me of the various shows that have shared about dogs that came to the rescue. In this case it is Trolly who is willing to face danger and freezing temperatures to save the day. The piece is well written grammatically as near as I can see. I just think it is a bit mechanical. I think there needs to be more description and expression of feelings.
Thanks for sharing!!
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Review by drifter
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Pat, I enjoyed the humor. I have read about the eggs in a basket. This kind of adds to it. When I hear about kicking the bucket.I am faced with how I want to leave the wife, with the eggs or with a new lease on life. Just my spin.
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Review of The Longest Day  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hello chief, IT was original. I can nearly see the picture, a man on an ostrich enjoying the night life. I work in garages as a security guard. I will be on the lookout.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,Marvelgirl,I applaud your affirmation of lefthand dominance. My grandmother was beaten in the early 1900's for her aberration. Much has changed since then. I am not a lefty. I will take time to celebrate this if you celebrate with us righties.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
I left with a smile thyone. I never thought of the idea of a BB bed. It kind of fit with the whole gangster genre. There is a sense that the main characters are not getting needs met. I do leave wondering what W pg means and how the title reflects the reality. On with level I can see the surprise. I wonder about: We have a support worker who has been barred from the coffee room, and a place two relax and watch movies
thanks for writing, I hope I am being helpful
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Review of Doughnut Saga  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A big smile attends my face and not because I got to eat the donuts Choconut. I enjoyed the way that you playfully guided us into a fitting conclusion. Temptation catches us all. I am drooling wishing that I would have got to the donuts before Randy did. But that is for another story.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Sum1, The poem takes on the clothing of a fable. Who would have thought that a snail could free a mouse from a mouse trap. The conclusion left me scratching my head. Maybe old Silas got tired of chasing after mice and decided that friendship was a tastier treat.
God bless thanks. I can almost see the mouse on the snails back. A moral to the story might be in order.
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