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Review of Embrace Yourself  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
The title itself scoops me up and embraces me Brittany. It is written for all persons that are not afraid to dream and express to others what is hidden within. There is more to any one person than meets the eye. It is in this realization that we learn to enter into the future boldly.

Suggestions, thoughts: I like the way I am encouraged to embark on a journey. I am not sure what this means for me in the here and now moment.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Thanks Princess, you offer a personal encounter that puts one in touch with the soul of a dog. I enjoy the various vignettes that follow a walk along the beach. There is a crab, the sun, and the touch of an angel. There is the aura of blessing that makes one feel like the top dog. In the end we see how dreams can come true. In a sense we try in our own ways to reflect a loved dogs paradise.
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Review by drifter
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Pandora, the death of another is never easy for any of those who are fighting to reestablish connection. Too often death becomes the wall that keeps people away. After all how can I know it will not happen to me! Your words offer concrete sustenance. There is NO word that can bring the person back and yet the warmth of a hug and shoulder are a reminder that love is forever worth the risk. It is all about learning to be a caring presence.
God bless and thanks for risking to share.
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Review of Pleasure Dome  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Jatog, thanks for sharing your impressions about what the sky means for you. I like most the aura of mystery, a serious blue starting anew. The main word used to describe the sky is bountiful, as if one can never have enough.

You offer different cloud formations (ie. cirrus), why not offer what the clouds mean from a skyward perspective.
Stars in the night are beautiful too, (I would like to know what it means to have a serious star point of view.) It comes across as vague and ambiguous.
Sirius, serious, star point of view.

thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
hello Lobo, I like the reflective nature of your poem. There is an invitation for others to discover what you are finding and feeling. The foundations are surety and realizing the importance of seeing. I do wonder about the idea of rage and darkness ruling in absence of inhabiting each other's space. The next step is seeing how two different persons can be one.
thanks for sharing
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Review of It's Up To You  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Kat, without knowing more, I would say that your poem has to do with growing up and letting go. I read this as I consider my own mothers passing in October. I can resonate with much that is said, and at the same time feel jolted by the reality that she will not always be there.

Thoughts: in leaving are you taking mom's place or asking her to leave you alone?
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Review of Simplicity  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the premise. You offer a reflection on what it means to look at Mona Lisa. The subject that invites exploration is the word simplicity. I enter into this world expecting something worth knowing and enjoying. In this world of increasing complexity you offer a viable alternative. Where does simplicity begin and how do I get there?

I wonder about the entitlement (deserving to be recorded). I tend to think that it is merely worth the effort for one to see for oneself.
Thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Kat, The season of your poetic schema is very obvious. You offer up Halloween and the changing leaves of fall as your tools to get to your goal. I like the idea of breezes splashing on my face, while colored leaves fly all over the place. The rhyming sequences are consistent. The rhythms seem inconsistent. The last line is an example. It might sound better if you say "any" reason. Thanks for sharing.
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Review by drifter
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Antimony, it was a fun read. Who says relationships do not have some element of probability. I like the fractional dissertations. I am not sure about all the logic that leaves me pondering what is so impossible to understand. Love is the only sure thing and as you say in the end it is worth it. I feel like I am left out in a scary world. How does one cope? Thanks for sharing
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Review of A Feeling  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello cotton, very stirring in a romantic kind of way. I celebrate most of all your use of personal impressions to form a vision of what love can be like. It is in the cold and dry time that there is a need a quenching warmth.

I suggest that you look at the spellings. They detract from the good job you are doing.
God bless
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Review of Eminent Domain  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Thanks for sharing Rhychus, my overall impression is one of being creepy and dark. I hate to think that my grandkids could be a part of this new alienation rule. It was well put together. I wonder only about the target audience. Aliens sound kind of mean or is it us who are mean since we see them that way? God bless
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Review of Columbine  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Fyn, well said and expressed. I think why is one of the most under rated questions we have in supply. One of the reasons is that it makes us feel defensive, as if we were to blame. It is the one question that allows us to gather as a community to confront suffering and pain. We are not alone!!! God uses each of us to be with others in hurt the essence of compassion. It begins with the question why and ends with be cause there is a cause.
God bless
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello cotton. I wish I had a penny for every time I heard this during my youth. I love the way you set the mood. I guess you are describing something spiritual. I hope I do not assume that. My only critique is wanting to know more about the smile that is seen. I have no question that is the best part of "me" -all of us I mean. thanks for sharing
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Review of Smile  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Cyanide, you say it very well. Look closer and see ME! I recall well my mother's own mask. On the outside she was always the clown. It was not until you got to know her that you could see and know who she really was. I pray that you can see the fruits of your own labor. Words are like seeds that can grow. Others need to know the truth. Look closer and get to know me!!
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Longfellow thanks for sharing. I believe that work is the evidence of worship. We celebrate what we are able to be and do because of God's creating.
Suggestions: watch out for typos and word spacing. They distract from the truth you are saying.
Thanks for sharing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Chelonius, this is a curious piece from all kinds of angles. You offer a wonderfully enticing beginning. I look at the beauty of the experience of nature and celebrate that "It's she". On the one hand I see mother nature. I see I am whole by the beauty of spring. There is a feminine iridescent presence. One can not wait to see her. On the other hand there is the idea of God not creating any one to be alone. In verse of the bible God says it is NOT good that man be alone. Man is excited to see, a helpmate woman. Together they are reminders of new birth and the eternal nature of spring. Thanks for sharing
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Review of Hill Spring  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for sharing your sentiments Kings. I am always reminded of the fact that God's presence is at hand. I can see myself with you as you take off your shoes and get ready to be baptized into a new way of being. I pray that you may know God in all His fullness and grace. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Mirror Image  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Neva, thanks for sharing your reflection. I can see you trying to sort through what seems to be I unclear. I am reminded of a scripture that says we see dimly and then face to face. On the other hand I see the looking glass of a wonderland that has yet to be discovered. The inner child can hardly wait to explore and yet their is the distorted image that calls one to carefully reflect. Maybe the dying grass is a reminder of what can come back to life.
God bless, thanks for sharing.
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Review of Tough Times  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Jay, a very humorous piece that lets the reader get baited into any number of imaginative twists and turns only to discover in the end that it is about trying to get Tina in her favorite dress. At first I wondered what was being inserted and even considered an erotic tension. By the end I felt like I got what I came for. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of The Real Monsters  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Simone, I think your story may have potential. You share something that reminds me a bit of dystopias that are filling the movie theaters of late. The story line I can catch is that a young man is seeking to escape the mass of chaos that he feels within and without in "The real monsters" talked of in the end.

Suggestions/thoughts: find a grammar check or have someone read back to you what you are wanting to say in written form. I have no question that you know exactly what you are saying. My difficulty is in seeing the story amidst all the static which consists of grammar glitches and missed words. I am not sure if the man in the tank is dead or alive for example, or even which character is speaking.

Try again and you are more likely to get more constructive instructions. Thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thanks Laura, it was just what I was needing to hear for the day. I know about the pains of dealing with bipolar and anxiety also and have struggled since 1976 to make something out of my life. I applaud your courage and willingness to be real. Mental illness has a stigma and yet if understood correctly has a mother lode of potential for compassion and love for those who need it most. You are not alone!! Thanks for speaking out and letting your voice be heard.
Rev. Gary Alan Peterson
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Review of Fae justice  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Merillwen, I am glad for your story. It speaks to me about what happens when reality and fantasy meet. The faery king has commanded respect from someone who is merely human. After all it was her kind that murdered his brother. Her only way out is a knife that cut away that which keeps her from living in the moment.

My only suggestion is to consider what a treacherous body means in the context of your story. There are some things that seem to need a little explaining. The fact she has a treacherous body means that she may be implicated in the crime of the brother being killed after all.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
It was fun to read Tim. I happen to like the Bruins. I hesitate to want to correct you since this seems to be more a rant than anything else. In places it comes across as wordy. One example is at the first stanza which shares about:
For victory stands at the forefront
Of everyone's hopeful
Though now chastened mind -
And that cherished goal of winning
Stays well within everyone's seemingly oddball reach...

Thanks for sharing. I feel your pain, even though I see the Bruins as having more problems with winning lately.
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Review of What's the point?  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
hello Delicate Angel, I am immediately grabbed by the title of the story. You offer a very intimate portrayal of what the world of your title is like. I, too have asthma and know about the uncontrollability of the condition. I am stopped dead in my tracks as I get to the end of the story. We all need each other and without that assurance life can seem futile. Thanks for sharing. I am praying for you.
Some of the sentences have typos. You have a lot of good things to say. Ask someone to read your story and see what they see-maybe get access to a grammar check.
Thanks for sharing.
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Review of The Storm  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for the succinct format. I am in the Midwest and it reminds me of the tornadoes around here. At the opening of the funnel is the a large world that needs a place to for me to b. There is a cause for reflection on the storm that is the world and human race. What can we do to bring the greater world into a healthier focus. Thanks for sharing. It gave me something to think about.
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