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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Tim, you have articulated very well the culture of the professional athlete. They work hard and seek to maintain that dedication to inspire others.
thoughts/impressions: I like what you say about athletes. I leave wondering how sports culture reflects the struggle of the everyone to be satisfied with accomplishment without the need to win championships or hit home runs.
thanks for your insightful pondering. It reads well!!!
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Review of Spider  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E
I found myself laughing at your diatribe Fhionnuisce only because it has always been a major issue in my new work environment. I like in particular the line that looks at them as demonic. Many of the drivers of our security company complain of spider bites and while on patrol at night I see guards take pleasure in squishing out their lives. The webs are ever present as I walk through garages. It is as if they are seeking to catch humans in their webs. Just hope that you are not one of many that get caught in the webs they weave.
God bless, praying the spiders keep clear
Rev. Gary Alan Peterson
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I am glad that I read your words Keaton. I had just returned from home a few weeks ago and it was ghastly. I had hoped to find something different, but it was the same. I read in your poem that one can try to stay away, but the trauma of a nightmarish past is always stalking no matter how hard one tries to stay away. The past follows wherever one goes, even if one tries to steer clear of it.
My favorite lines speak of this:
Those who destroyed me
All, since deceased
But what they meant
How they impacted me
Is very much alive
Inside my bones
God bless, I find a kind of home is where the heart is nuance in what you write.
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Review of All  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Kings, thanks for the focused meditation. I am offering the most precious parts of my self to the only one that I know that can keep them safe for eternity. I celebrate its ability to speak to "all" persons of faith. I thank God for you inspiring thoughts.
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Review of The Candiru  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Harry, that sure struck my fancy. I was able to learn something and be entertained at the same time. I still have this image of this candirus fish sucking out life from the one place that all of us know most. I am glad you make it clear "Urinating in the water attracts the candiru fish to enter your urethra – the last place you’d wish."(a classic). The remedy does sound kind of weird. Does it work?
thoughts: keep them in the Amazon, even if they are a good feeding fish or whatever else.
Thanks for sharing you words of wisdom. God bless
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Review of Of Love or Stone  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E
Hello Fhionnuisce ,I like the singing soulful lilt of this poem and the message. You add a good springboard in your introduction. It is all about choice. We can let ourselves be tough as nails/rigid as stone and cold or let out hearts flow flush with love. My favorite lines speak about the kindness warmth and joy that can ensue as opposed to the loving of things cold and hard.
Suggestions/thoughts: How does this all happen? Is it just a choice?
thanks
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Review of One True Hope  
Review by drifter
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello bobxdarker, you offer a different way to look at the evolution of success. You last words sum it all up "Question Everything". No one can trust the perceptions of others because as you say in the beginning no one knows what they are doing.
Your gut will give you one piece of information at a time, and it is the mind's responsibility to continually examine and digest and improve upon these isolated feelings in real time.
According to your view point all are subject to how one decides to use words and point of view.
Suggestions: The piece comes across as very esoteric in terms of the hope department. You begin by telling people who they are and then somehow extricate and become the person they can aspire to. How does it all connect?
Thanks for your insightfulness.
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Review of Shimmering Scales  
Review by drifter
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hello Mad Milo, an intriguing look into what a romantic encounter with a mermaid might look like from a male/female perspective. The mermaid comes out of nowhere and the main character is caught in her love. The description of the mermaid seemed accurate from a main character perspective. I liked the idea of somewhat slimy hands, as if something is "fishy".

Suggestions: I have a difficult time buying into the fact that their is love going on. I can imagine sensual pleasure and even ecstasy. It seems like a stretch. Watch out for spelling mistakes. panicing does not look right.
God bless and thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello Jamz, is a poignant story about someone caught in a fire and then is faced with healing from the burns and emotional scars. The title makes me think of a bush burning. I might even liken it to the burning bush in the Hebrew scripture. I was not grabbed and thrust into the story as the main character as much as looking from afar to see what would happen. I see this man survive and wonder what that means for me or for him for that matter. I have been on a burn unit and the description is fairly accurate. You move from feeling like years to get better to years to get well which was a good parallel process. Christmas, as a healing time might be explored in relation to what one sees in relation to family.
God bless and keep writing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Tim, I read this over and feel like you have hit the nail on the head. We will likely taste and experience everything in this riveting (spelling correct), enduring results (could be consequence). I especially like the last line about life's tragic merciful scepter.

In the second stanza I might use the word neatly as also defining the following line about productivity. Neatly seems more apropos than nearby. It reads well thereafter (whimsical chimes of destiny!!)

In the first stanza I think you could define the problem better.
Changing the past defines/identifies an onerous task.
Another words it is not easy to change the past.
Over all well done. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of End the Cycle  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Hiroshi, the dramatic tension is very obvious. Nicole was going nowhere, due to the fact she was in dead end jobs, a failing romance and in a lousy neighborhood. I am not sure about the resolving of the tension by escaping into another place far away. Maybe I speak out of my own learning. The past follows a person wherever they go.
Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Prompts?  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well done Katrina's daughter, even the slip ups could be cause to exercise creative license. "I was very dry outside " definitely gives room to exercise the muse. As it says in the good book- "out of the mouth of babes".
Thanks and God bless
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Review by drifter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Winnie, I watched my Dad die to this humiliating condition and currently work with a caregiver with a husband who is end stages. There is the admonition to look closer and see me. There is forever the eternal soul that transcends and condition that might render one lost and alone. Behind the mask of fear is one who is forever dear!!
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Review of Loy's Faux Pas  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello Winnie, I am amazed by ability to proclivity. It is positively obviously and fully funny. I have been in various states of gracility that have lead me to a similar states, but never to the heights/depths of pisstivity. Thanks for sharing a new word. My wordsmith within is blessed to read your poem.
God bless
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow, a cute way of sharing about the legend that is Punxutawney Phil. In this version Phil takes a sleeping pill in hopes of waking up just in time for ground hog day. Instead he wakes up on Valentines day. I guess in this case love was more important than spring. It was just in time for a heart to thaw and mind to revive.
thanks and God bless
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
It was a fun read Lacy. It can be easier to think about writing than to actually do it. The reward of a quarter is a clincher. I think you are saying you are filling up a bank with reminders about why to write. The motivation is absurd. I will give to something stupid because it is stupid not to write.
Suggestions: watch out for typos. "but staring(starting) now. A parenthesis is missing in the next to last line.
thanks for sharing
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Review of The Dare  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the metaphor of a words like fragile shells appearing out of the netherworld of the mind onto the blank campus of a computer face Hunters Moon. I hope to be lucky enough to experience the calling of a muse. Your written words are worth the read because of a calling out of nothing to create life.
thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow Tim, I read into your poetry the heart of a man who has been won over to God and the gift of the beloved.
such a unique and priceless treasure
That the naked eye becomes mesmerized.
The beauty that is time and space
Becoming perfectly encompassed
By your amazing style
And angelic grace!
I feel invited into a wonderland of sparkling wonder only an embrace away.
Thanks and God bless
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello F.H. Hadley, I enjoy how you set the scene. I find myself confused and lost in a maze with no way to get out. The person who has the key is the one who put me in the mess in the first place. At the bottom, feeling far away from God in the depths of hellish despair I cry to God for healing. It is only as I admit that I am at the bottom that I am able to be released and healed.
Impressions/suggestions: I liked the way that you paint the picture. In a sense you paint yourself into a wall. The recognition of anger seems to be the key and learning from it is the only way out. I wish you well my friend. I am very sure the light is in sight and help is on the way.
God bless
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Ruthy, you offer a vision of what it believing in oneself means and can mean as we practice developing a skill set that can communicate with others what makes it work. I am a pastor and tend to look at this from a spiritual perspective. The belief has to come from somewhere before it can be delivered into the world. I think all youth have a lot to learn from what you say. Maintain a conviction of positivity, be able to identify skills, learn from all that happens (mistakes), give oneself a second chance and set realistic goals. All of us can learn from what you share.
thanks and God bless you.
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Review of A bird  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello teen story writer, I thought the theme was provocative. As a reader I want to know/experience what this means. I enter into the experience of not being able to fly, which I thought was the essence of what makes one a bird. The poem leaves me scratching my head about what a bird is after all.
Suggestions: It seems like there is a need to define in depth want makes this bird different. Is it a penguin for example, wounded or even too young to fly. Otherwise I find myself looking forward to the next chapter. Another words I leave with more questions than I want to answer.
Thanks and continue writing. I will enjoy seeing how you continue to grow and even fly.
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Review of Strange Forces  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Turtle, I resonated most of all with your last two lines. I thought it interesting how you found your way there. There is the reality of an aches and pain world. There is every reason to want to panic and yet there is the comfort that accompanies letting go of pain to know the healing warmth and healing massage as if from nowhere.
There is fatigue, itself that knows what it means to rest and relax. Rest is proclaimed savior! It is a good message for us all to consider what keeps us going back into the adventure. There is rest for the weary and comfort for those in distress.
Thanks for the reminder.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (2.0)
Hello nhlanhla, I was left pondering what your initial snippet would lead to. The main character is very obviously is in a dark mood. She eats too much, dreams, and needs a job. She is tired of feeling sorry for herself. What will happen now?
The grammar and spelling needs work. I will offer a few examples:
"Just a useless dreamer". You need a subject and verb to make a sentence you offer a clause that leaves me hanging.
There are numerous misspellings and typos. I dnt, is one example.
The story has potential. It will help to get your grammar in order.
thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Redtowrite, I was enchanted by your impression of soul catcher. It is in the joyous imprint on the spirit one sees in ways that one remind one of eternal youth. There are cartoon clouds, elves that cook in trees, fairies that twinkle, balloons, hummingbirds and much more. It is a place where eternal imagination reigns supreme. Thanks for being an angel messenger. May the internal genie grant you all the best in this life and the life to come.
God bless
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Princess, I enjoyed the flowery adornment of flowers that express the result of the poem's affect. I have two cats and can relate to the love that they have for an owner and their place, which in your story is reflected in how the garden becomes a meeting place for life to arise. Animals like the deer come to it, along with a kitty and a hound. The hound is owned by the handsome man next door. All of a sudden life from a kitten's understanding makes sense. To love and be loved is the greatest joy.
Thanks for sharing the metaphor of the garden. May all connected with it continue to grow more and more beautiful.
thanks and god bless
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