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Review by drifter
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello stylewiz, There is an awful lot of wisdom shared in your paragraph. It can be too easy to get caught/trapped by computer gadgetry and never see what is really out there. I enjoy the various views that jump into this persons sight. There are the monkey bars, flowers, swing sets, a boy and a dog. The last line about beauty in the eye of the beholder captures a greater truth. We can sit behind a computer and almost be imprisoned within or go outside and discover what it means to be free.

suggestions: I only wonder where you are going with #nature.
Well done!
Thanks for sharing
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Review of Hospital Visit  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Denzel, it is a curious tale. I have spent a lot of time in hospitals visiting and can almost imagine someone as obsessed as the young man you portray. What made it funny for me was that the boy did not even seem to have a relationship. He was getting all worked up about something that may or may not happen. The irony is that his search leads to seeing an old man instead of the beloved he had hoped to see. Now what?

Suggestions: I think that your comments about doctors saying he has mental issues is not real. I think if he was seen as a danger he would be dealt with. I realize it is just a story. That being said, it is important to consider how others relate to what you are writing, begging the question: Is this really what you want to say?
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Review of A new beginning  
Review by drifter
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello mina, the main thought that comes in the end envisions changes and differences that arise out of the perception of events. Your vision for reality is very idealistic. There is hopefully no crime and hope for newness and lots of smiles. I pray that your new year is everything that you envision it to be. I leave with the thought it is much better to face the new year with hope and optimism. I pray that this year for you is the best ever.
God bless
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Review by drifter
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Well done Sharon. The poem reads like a true story that wrenches a person into a new appreciation of reality. I applaud the authentic spirit that attends the reawakening. The title spoke to me initially of jewelry. I was jolted by the redeeming aspect of handcuffs. Maybe given a second chance someone will change. As you say in the end, the most difficult task ahead is learning to forgive oneself!!
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Review by drifter
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello Duane, I am near shock as I see a boa as a substitute for what seems more apt to attract another person. I then read about how there is disconnect. The Boa which I know as a constrictor is a rallying point. Upon him experiencing petting the snake the beautiful woman relaxes as if she knows something, even if he does not. I leave curious and puzzled. How does one use a boa to regain memory? The yellow dress seems to be another possible connector. The Boa seems to allow for the possibility of knowing what is unreal and real in a world that is at this stage very elusive. A rejoinder might be: What did you expect? Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Selfish  
Review by drifter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Max, you did well to put the enigma of being selfish in the mind and heart of the reader. I feel caught up in trying to conjure up who this woman is that seems to cause such consternation. At one point I wondered if it was a part of you that you are not at peace with.
My overall impression was that you were hooked into selfish like a plug into an electric circuit. At what point does the perseverating stop. Maybe that is part of what makes it so selfish!
thanks for writing
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507
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I love the picture Kristina. When I think of Vulcan, I think of star trek. The introduction reads like a new beginning in a new world. I wish you well on your new adventure. The picture of the Indian lady and wolf add to the intrigue of wondering what it is like to enter into the world that you create and recreate with your writings. Thanks for writing.
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Review of Consequences  
Review by drifter
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Your poem is worth the word that brings it into being Fyn. It is the internal manifestation that burns brightly within. I think it curious that you offer a number that might almost be quantified then move from there to the reality that even the darkest times can become light and precursor to better days to come.
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Review by drifter
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Kids Trek, that was a lot of fun. I have read the Sam I Am legend many times to my children. You offer that one only need to experience God's creation to like it. The last two lines are priceless. It sounds like Satan's troubles are just beginning. Thanks for sharing.
I only ponder how Satan is tied up in the creation myth.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
The spirited interpretation is the most attractive quality of what you write. There is much literature about not knowing the true day of Jesus' birth and the timing of the wise men's arrival at the manger. What is more important is that you capture and express the meaning of the day for you and persons, like you ever longing for the day we celebrate as Christmas.

My only critique is to ponder what you are expressing as the centerpiece of the expression of epiphanal glory. I hear the clamor for Jesus. I long to hear his place in the panorama of salvation.
Thanks for sharing, Merry Christmas!!!
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Review by drifter
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hello Prince Tommy, thanks for sharing your poem. It shares well your perceptions about what it means to be a friend and lover to someone you care about. My only critique is sorting out what bffel means in the context of Bestie. I can capture a sense of romance. The pet names clash for me in the context of the what appears to be harmonic bliss.
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Review of One Wish  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello Haley, I love your experience of the event that you relay in the real life story that you share. I am invited to be with you in the car with your sister and know with you the sense if being out of control, hoping that someone will come in time to put out the flames.

I am not clear as to whether Vince and Lucas are the same person. Maybe this is another storyline to be developed. There were spelling errors, yet I focus more on the story and what it means for you and others that enter the journey of the story to know what rescue/help means for them.
Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Aquarian  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow Rhyssa, what a resounding bellowing response to the astrological sign inquiry. In the signs of nature; the pregnancy of rain, flames whipped into frenzy and tumbling too quick too be caught or held are signs that ripple through and capture my attention. By the time I get to the end of you poem I want to climb back up the hill and see what other signs you have to share.
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Review of Number One Guy  
Review by drifter
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Kare Enga, it was funny in the sense of putting the Santa Claus myth in perspective. There is Nick, the dad and Klaus who has been on vacation. The part about the reindeer presence was enough to make me want to grin. I was not able to get at what it meant for there to be all the mice going here and there. The foot note helped some. I do not like mice either, how do you get rid of them when Guy Thomas is on vacation?
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Dallas Drayton, it was an offering so surreal. I recently talked with a man who was dealing with the affects of a heart attack. I work on a campus where the boundaries between life and death can seem forever blurred. I entered into you tale wanting to be the hand that held and the eyes that looked through the dark to see the light of hope. In the end the pain can be endured because someone cares and in tone of voice says I am okay even if I do not feel it. Because of all this I want to live!!!!
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Review of Cumbersome  
Review by drifter
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Keaton, you masterfully share what cumbersome is by your language and tone. I can envision this big awkward mass that seems in the way and at the same time unavoidable. We all need our cumbersome. Without having an understanding of it we become it. These lines were especially sharp and inviting.
I am part of the system
A cog in the machine
Continually breaking down
Displaying an error message
No one dares to read
No hand lends an ounce of oil
Along we all somehow keep
When in reality we should be still
Motionless, unable, unwilling
Life, such an implausible feeling
Cumbersome
The invitation you offer is inescapable
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Review of Caged Bird  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
The story of the caged bird comes across as a metaphor for life. None of us can know love apart from having the freedom to come back that called our name in the first place. In your story you share about a dark trap where a bird can not feel it's wings. It can only be a bird if it has a place to run/fly and so it is with love.
Suggestion: frolic was spelled strange. I could not be sure if that was your intent. Are any of us ever free?
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Review by drifter
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello Count, I enjoy how you grabbed me in the end. I am from back East and laugh when people say ant instead of aunt. I am left focusing in on the funeral that takes place in an ant world view. There is a casket, pall bearers, the dump and the origin of all the trouble a stomping foot. I like to thing the ant is happy in a glad. What about the ants who are not? Thanks for your very clever retort.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I enjoyed the sculpting of a story that evolved out of a vision of pen in hand waiting for a story to write to an affliction with writing everything and anything that flowed within and through the pen in hand. I experience a lot of telling of the tale in respect to throwing a lot of images at me that I can not quite digest. I have no doubt that you have a lot to offer. I tend to respond to words more than images. If I can get a better handle about what you are seeing I can move on to sift through the meaning of your words.
thanks for sharing, I am amazed at the passion and enthusiasm that blasts through the yet unwritten page. I wish you nothing but the best. I tend to enjoy poetry most. I will see where my own spirit leads.
God bless. Keep writing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello RebelOnScene, It has a nice hook. The character comes across as someone I want to meet and I am left wondering how she got where she is and where is she going. It is obvious from the beginning that something is missing. How does she get who or what she wants.
thanks for sharing
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Review of Unmade Bed  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Kelsey, I enjoy the sensual feel. I am on that bed with you as you reflect on what it means in relationship to your own life experience. The second is the most intriguing. It speaks to me of the visions and dreaminess that the bed has known. "a splintered bed-frame piercing lunar pedestals.
Impressions: The imagery is full of depth and passion. I was wanting a message and felt like I was lost in the imagery. You paint the picture well. I felt invited to find out what it was for myself.
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Review of Easter  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Carly, thanks for your Easter reflection/meditation. You capture in the season of spring the essence of what Resurrection is all about. Flowers blossom and bloom. It reads like a table prayer. I can look forward to food of the word which allows us to rise again with Him.
Thoughts: I like the idea of quenching thirst, I am his daughter. Could this also be a metaphor for all of us. Thanks for speaking words that many others might live for and express.
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Review by drifter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello David, I like the idea of comparing life to the yearnings for a ball of bubblegum. You offer a lot of incentive in giving to the bubble machine that which defines your life. I can understand the idea of an internal life source as a core value. I just get tripped up with the nagging thought is bubblegum enough. Maybe that depends on the bubblegum you envision.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello David, I love the metaphor of using a bird to express the need for healing, vision and compassion. Hope is offered as a balm that can mend brokenness, so that those who wait can look forward to flying freely as they did before their wings knew brokenness.
Suggestions: I love the idea of believing in a friend and seeing in another what they might not see in themselves. I would like to see more of your final beautiful thoughts. It is a treasure worth seeking after.
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Review of Star Fairies  
Review by drifter
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello InkWellspring, your poetic mythic whimsy worked for me. I can imagine children of all ages being on the look out for the star faeries that come in a glittering stream of sparkly dust. How could one not want to get caught up in the dance? The motivation to be on the lookout is to realize there are always worlds worth looking forward to visiting. It is one thing to be jar caught and quite another to be caught by a vision of fairy nirvana.
thanks for sharing and the invitation to welcome fun.
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