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Review of The Terrible Gift  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I feel honored to read your poem GeminiGem, you offer to the reader your heart. The words that speak the loudest is how do I survive this? I have no answers. I work with a woman who could empathize. She had a mastectomy and her siblings have experienced the same trauma. It seems like a terrible gift that nobody could want. I have watched this woman take care of a severely ill husband for thirteen years and I find myself asking why. I really do not know. I pray that over time you will know the love that can heal. Thanks for the gift of your words. I have no doubt that they can be a tool that can allow other woman and men to know the same blessing that you seek.
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Review of Foggy Landscape  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
I love reading all your aphorisms Worry Rock. They are proverbs with a rhyme and rhythm. My favorite in the midst of the fog is the one that talks about moving slowly through the fog and experiencing the mud sticking us to the illusion.
Suggestions: I get lost (overwhelmed) by all the words (thoughts). I am not sure if this is meant to be one all embracing philosophy or if there are stanzas of four lines or more that break up your overall theme of fog. Maybe that is part of the task to sort through for a reader. It is a great place to start with. There is a lot to think about.
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Review of The Deep Forest  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Woods, I like the image and experience that you offer. The woods has always been a favorite place of mine, the canopy of leaves and quiet breeze easily come to mind. The metaphor of an untamed universe calls for a person who is not afraid of adventure lit up by the light with the branches of the trees pointing the way toward a place previously unseen as the plants and trees look on.
thanks and God bless
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Review of Extinction  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Wood, I sense a climate of foreboding in the specter of the Hawk that flies overhead. I am reminded of the demarcation between the hawk and dove. With all the modern weaponry and terroristic rhetoric the Hawk hovers waiting for the day when all will become extinct and he will get to eat the leftovers of our greed.
thanks for sharing, a lot to ponder.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Doctor Dirt, I like the point of empathy. I can not hardly imagine what a person goes through to walk in the shoes of the person(s) that you are describing. I think to have survived what you have and be able to write about it is a miracle. The lines toward the end are the most touching. In the midst of the mountain and valley I discover in the midst of the rainy weather I find strength to go longer.
thanks as always and God bless
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Review of Cusp  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed the sights, sound and aromas that accompanied your walk outdoors with the dog. I can sense the cool crisp leaves and the crabapple tree amidst honking geese. I enjoy the invitation into this sacred place of which you write. I leave not only imagining that it is there but longing that one day I might go back to it again.
thanks!!
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Review of Faith  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Misty thanks for the meditation on faith that you offer. In a world that tends to lead one into a fog and into darkness, it is nice to know that there is a presence that will be with one forever. There are further assurances about discovering God and you can handle it along with knowing that there is a plan. I am remembered of a scripture in Jeremiah 29:11. Blessings be upon you and your work/words!!
suggestions: I did notice seams(seems). well done
Rev. Gary Alan Peterson
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Review of Rendering  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I had done a similar type of story using the picture and was amazed at what you were able to imagine Fyn-Buried. I loved the down to earth overtone that invites all to be a part of Miss Emily's picture making enterprise. I thought it interesting how you found this place for Emily and brought others to see her artistic display. The title fits as far as I can see. I am impressed by the rendering.
Thoughts/suggestions: I am from Massachusetts so the allusion to Salem was fun. I was left wondering about Walter and the shaggy head at the end. It seemed to be begging for a sequel.
thanks for sharing
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Review of Starlight Parlor  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Alala, Thank for your touching poem. It was an invitation to be with you as you camped under the stars. I like the image focus of a parlor where anyone might go.
Suggestions: It feels like you twist words in the first and last line of the second stanza. The first line reads talking keep and reads better as we keep talking. The last line might be read better as you and me. Thou and I seems awkward, unless that is what you truly intend.
Overall I enjoyed it much, a great place to start.
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Review of The Better Me  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Care, inside the shell of a wounded self is the potential to emerge and discover there is more to life than the place that I have used to isolate myself from the world. I experienced the lure like a fish yet to be caught. I see the green grass, blue sky and in the end I am caught in a very wonderful way. I am lucky to be alive!!!!
thanks
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Review of The Tide  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello DFWghostwriter, I like most that you invite me to a place that I have been before. I can see in my mind's eye the vignettes you offer. There is the image of the waves on the rocks anchoring me to the scene, whispering winds and the cascading of waters on to a land thirsting for rain/love. In the end I am awakened by the thought that the tide will forever flow, while I am faced with the call of the world to move on.
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Review of Stationary Bike  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
It is a very curious piece Care, I am left wondering how fertile imagination and creativity can be in the most ordinary of circumstances. In the case of this story one is riding a stationary bike and is led to a meadow, a stream and the stone house of one's grandmother. Their is a thread of paradox that is weaved in an out. It is like the stationary bike, wondering what awaits one after the bell goes off making one ready for the next fight.
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Review of Faces Plenty  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello Keaton, the main message I get is the mathematical assembly of so many faces leads one to wonder what identity means in the face of so many faces. The part I liked best:
Every mind
Finds belief
In what
Not a clue
Maybe that God
You know
The one
Of the sky
The one
In which I speak
Or maybe
Another
Even as I write I still seek out who I am in the midst of so many faces and I call myself a man of God.
suggestions the symbols are a bit distracting. I am not sure what role they play.
thanks for sharing-it was very insightful. I felt like you were saying you were one face among many.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Mew Squared, it was a pleasure to read your story about how black and white came to be one. In a sense the formation of words on paper are a reminder of the interplay that leads to communication that speaks to all people. My favorite parts were the connections that were part of an ongoing passion about what makes love work. It starts with admiration of a body and finds meaning in relation to God and a greater plan.
I only wonder about the crossed out words. What role to they play in your communication?
thanks for sharing. I was touched and inspired. God bless your time together.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for the cameo and tribute ellenp. I remember her mostly for her acid wit in discussing what was going on with various people and herself. I had seen her on the fashion place and was humored by her rants about what was in fashion and what was not in a very bellicose voice. As you have said she will be missed.
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Review of Drawing Summer  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Mandragore, I never knew that a mosquito could serve as such a powerful metaphor for what one person pictures the environs of summer to reside. I hear loudest the shrieks of children being sucked out and the idea of finding a way to draw summer out of my skin.
thoughts/suggestions: I leave your poem thinking that summer for this person must really suck. It may help to use the word mosquitoes.
thanks for sharing.
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Review of Life  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
I liked the way you caused me to look in the mirror and take a pause to ponder what it is that makes one alive. The line that speaks loudest is that life is life. What else could it be? There is no use sugar coating it. You offer a gut retching glimpse of all life works for you. It is more like a jungle painted with words like a raging river, jabs at faith and complicated. I like how you give me pause to really look in that mirror to see what life really looks like.
Suggestions/thoughts: I think as your experience and vision this poem really works. I aware that other people crazy or not tend to look at life through any number of colored glass lenses.
Thanks for inspiring me and challenging to know what is going on at a deeper level.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Harry, your ode to the Muse is worth the read. I can relate readily to the drought in August. Who knows how to revive an unconscious muse. Maybe a poem and inquiry into what is wrong and new conviction to get it right this time. I like most the image of fully flowered creations of joy and beauty fulfilled in contrast to the drought. The ear is ready, when will the muse finally decide to speak.
thoughts: engaging. After you hear from the muse, tell it to come my way.
thanks
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Review of A sad reality  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello blue, a poignant look at what it means to be adopted in a different home through no fault of there own. Aileen spews rivers of tears on papers that will seal her fate. The ogress takes the form of Mrs. Fay who glares with hatred in her eyes. The verdict is voiced at the end. She wishes to awaken and be with her biological parents. Instead she faces a new reality, a bad dream that will not go away.
suggestions: The story reads a bit choppy. You left off an "s" in the word chooses and other portions seem to awkward: Tears fill her eyes as the writing seems to blur. It be better to just say it blurs. There are parts about the monster in the room that are unclear and the diary and journal seem disconnected in another sentence. I like the subject matter. Keep looking at how you can improve. It will be an important piece for others to know about as they get ready for new reality.
Thanks for sharing
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Review of Complaining Him!  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Sarah, what you write is very provocative. I looked at the idea of complaining God and wondered what that could even mean. As I carefully read the words I knew what it meant for me. It spoke to me about God coming in flesh and expressing humanity. At another level it spoke to me about creation itself puzzling at what God meant or means to imply by creative expression.

thoughts/suggestion: The poem has a lot of potential. I am left searching in a lot of different directions. It would be helpful to have more of a focal point. The title offers a glimpse. I would like to know more about the clay and who or what "me" implies.
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Review of The Prayer Quilt  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Gemini, I was touched by your inspirational expressions that spout forth out of the inner workings of a quilt. I enjoy the divine voiced intonation. Trina realizes their is a time for letting go upon celebrating her own wellness and is met with a voice that says it is not for her. Another divine voice says to be still and it is that moment she makes a divine connection. She discovers that her friend Leah is going through her own battle with cancer. With the love from a comforter, the healing prayerful touch of God would prevail.

Thoughts: I liked the idea of a comforter/quilt as a means of explaining the role of the Holy Spirit in healing. I am in prayer for other quilt blocks of prayer to fill your written expositions. Thanks for prayer and God breathed joy.
God bless and above all thanks to God.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello the Ripper Returns, I feel privileged to have read your rhythmic rendering from the beginning of the snow filled resolve to the powerlessness that ends the journey. My favorite part was the description of what happens in the pedantic wait in endless traffic. I have been in that same place. It seems like forever to reach home, wherever that might be. Thank you for the advent of the journey into snow filled bliss. I hope by now you have your power on.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
I can see a bit of what makes you who you are. I would like to know more about what makes summer such a drag. I like the portion which speaks tongue in cheek about the cruel sweet summer and taunting gentle spring. Why not settle for solitude and decay? Thanks for sharing. You offer to me a different perspective.
God bless
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Review of To be alive  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love the lucidity that you bring to your writing craft. I can experience through your writing the taste of a raindrop, to feel petals and critters, and smell the fragrance of nature. I am invited to see, hear, smell and taste what it means to be alive. As you say in your last line. If you do not use it you lose it. I do like the way you say it much better. God created this world for our toil and so we appreciate life and
so we deserve the next one in heaven.

I like what you say in the end and yet puzzle about whether anyone can truly deserve what the love of God has given despite any word we say or act we accomplish. Maybe we are created for more than toil. This is mainly my opinion and in no way detracts from the good job you have done.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello J.A., I love the message of the story, although the FOFU lingers in my mind. One cat, Magnus, a kingly sort hears the cries of a scrawny tabby and finds a way of delivering a message that his human will not soon forget. The most endearing part of the poem is that it looks at life through a cats eye. Food is important, and yet even more important is heeding and attending to the needs of others. Us humans have much to learn from them.
thanks and God bless
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