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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (2.5)
Hello Prashant, I liked your creative approach to linking politics of attending to the work of the Prime Minister with computer concepts. I get lost in some of the technical jargon. For example near the end there is an exposition of Divide and Conquer and then various numbers and acronyms such as MLA and MP's. Another example:Greedy algorithm-
July 08, day for railway budget and also my b'day Smile.
My dad called me and said "news dekhi ??? tere modi ne train ka kiraya badha dia hai."
From a blog standpoint it makes sense. You know exactly what you are saying. From the perspective of me the reader from America, I need more information. Thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello deep within, I am an idealist and therefore see nothing wrong with dreaming. Maybe miracles can happen. I enjoyed how you developed your main points. There is a dream of a world that is available, happy, eternal and sweet. I think the miracle begins with the person who has the vision. It can be too easy to think of all the reasons that it can not happen. Without a person with vision the people perish. The biggest trouble with illusions is that they are left in the wilderness as a mirage that can never take place.
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Review of Contrivances  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I continue to be amazed at the depth of your poetic prose. Everything build to the word that you talk about as contrivances. As a reader I wonder if I can be satisfied being caught in such machinations. A couple lines particularly caught my attention.
They are alone
In a sea of nothing
Contained by something
Beyond each horizon
Past any obtainable distance
Or reasonable perspective
I read from this work two ways to ponder the relationship to God. It is mechanistic or maybe something else yet to be determined. Once we accept the idea of merely being a contrivance maybe all of us can decide life can be something better.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Harry, I liked the way you built to your conclusion. We just had come from a nursing home just before I picked up your poem, so that it was very relevant. More and more people are getting older and it is time to stir the dialogue that offers some kind of solace as the spectra of aging chases after each and everyone of us. I am able to resonate mostly with your last words about merciful deliverance from the indignity of old age.

One of the more integral issues is how does any one person weigh these words. All of this is grist for the mill. I an grateful for your words about what makes life haunting and frustrating. Another piece of the puzzle is how is someone cared for and loved when they fall between these parameters. Too many people throw people in a nursing home and conveniently forget them. I pray that your words will stimulate discussion and caring.
Thanks for your very thoughtful recitation.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Ina Tales, I liked your short story. I did notice a hints of dialect, for example getting down from the car instead of out of the car near the end. At some levels it makes me stop and think and at others it is a little distracting. On the whole I will remember the tale about how a migraine lingers and affects those around them. From the husband who can not get enough loving to the child who is outside playing, the clear message is that migraine can reek havoc on those one loves. At some level one can fake it and believe it will go away. The offering about seeing a doctor at the end is a glimmer of hope worth holding on to.

"She felt cold claws groping her naked skin. Shivering. she hugged the bed sheet around her as she made her way to the washroom." You have a nice way of using word descriptions to make your point.
thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello ajabsen, It was fun to read your dream filled impressions. I like to dream and your dreaming reminds me of what I call dreamscapes. As you said it is kind of disjointed. One thing leads to another. The part about you becoming awareness and the portrait of the phoenix gobbler, stay with me. I always wonder what the dream means for me or another person. Do you feel small or even invisible like a fly on the wall, seeing and wondering if others look at you. I wonder if you see yourself as the big bird consumer, beautiful and awe inspiring at the same time. All of a sudden everyone turns to dust and the bird transcends it all. Thanks for your ruminating. I will look forward to the next installment. There seems to be no stopping this bird!
God bless and thanks
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Review of Mildred  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Spidey, I enjoyed your quip about Mildred the super hero. You were able to follow the rules about not repeating. I was not real sure that afflicted might mean gifted. The punch line came at the end. She was able to read minds and that made people uncomfortable, so that she ended up in customer service. Now I know more about what creeps me out about customer service.
Thanks for sharing, God bless
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Turtlemoon, it has been too long since I have frequented your port. I love the way this poem reads.
At a seasoned time, I was born among the elders;
more than a sage, both before and beyond.
Dear Essence of Me awoke, and now remembers.
In our culture birth seems to focus only on something new with incredible potential. Your poem offers another perceptive jewel. The best part of embracing the magick of getting older is knowing the essence of me can get to places the younger part of me would not think to look. As a reader I can not wait to get up and see what I was born to see. Thanks for sharing your journey. It will be worth the wait!!
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
That was a tearjerker. Thanks for sharing your heart iluvhorses. The slip of ribbon is a powerful symbol that represents how life can seem to slip through one's fingers. The unraveling has a liberating quality. Revealed amidst the memories is the shared 3-day Breast Cancer Walk. At the end of the journey is a quilted reminder of what life means when we learn what it means to love life. People who were once strangers are forever family!!
thanks
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Review of The End of Her  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
As I read this Katwoman I know that someone knows the depth of sorrow that attends the loss of one's mother. My sisters have been particularly distant since mom's death. I can picture them calling and looking at an empty doorway waiting...
The most disturbing aspect of loss is being freed from someone who seemed to have all the answers. Now what!!
Swimming, without water
reaching at nothing
there is a hum around me which is
menacing in its subtlety and thoughtful strategy.
Thanks for the sentiments. It is nice to know that someone else knows "MOM".
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Review of Music to the Ears  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Bravo Tim, I enjoyed the tune from beginning to end. I think one of the lessons that a good poet learns is that beauty is in the eye of the beholder. I am not real sure what you might be implying by a country tune's absurdity. Absurdity has a nonsensical connotation. As a reader of that line I want to know what makes the tune so absurd? I like the rhyme and the rhythm, as long as it is a song/ poem makes you feel more at home musically I would not change a thing. Thanks for sharing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Thanks for your sharing Em. I am guessing these words that others offer have been like wounds that will not soon heal. I have known anxiety and am not always sure of myself socially, especially in crowds. It would help me to have a context. It is easy to see how people do not get what you are wanting them to say. I would welcome any way that others have been supportive. I pray that life is getting more manageable. God bless
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Review of Eww!!!  
Review by drifter
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Candy, I see that your mission has been accomplished in terms of the style that you are wanting to use to express your truth. I think of my grandson still trying to figure out how it all works. In that context all that you say makes sense. The spotty chair speaks to me of imperfections in the whole exercise. Naughty could just as easily refer to the parents who dictate as the child who can not understand. I am guessing the child is Blair, who I think is wondering about what the point of it all is anyway?

I think it has potential to be a place where parents can dialog about what the whole toilet training mess is all about.
thanks for sharing
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Review of Eve's Loss  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello spidey, thanks for sharing your sentiments. In the beginning is innocence. By the time one gets to the end there is the reality of betrayal. The environment is one of beating one's head on the ground, as one clutches the stomach in shame sickness. The serpent promised a greater paradise and delivered a venom that corroded the purity of once was. I read into the aura of forsakenness the words on a cross. "My God, My God Why hast thou forsaken me?"
Thanks for sharing!
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Review of Trust issues  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hello Pink Leo, thanks for sharing your heart. The general tone of the poem sound like rap. You let loose your deepest feelings and then are open to sharing the origin of trust issues that are not going to go away quickly. There is a sense of betrayal and violation. There is movement from wanting to see to darkness that screams for some kind of reason to trust again.

I can understand the realism. I am not as sure about everyone being privy to reading the poem with all the language. Thanks for sharing
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Review of Ode to the Moon  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Shafayet, You offer a laudatory commentary on the moon's role in adorning what might otherwise have no rhyme or reason. In your poem/story you share about the mood of the moon lonely or in a snit. The flower is in the shadow awaiting a chance to bloom even apart from the lack of a garden. The last verses sound Shakespearian. There is a seeming ignorance and yet in the long run as we learn amongst ourselves: Ignorance is bliss!
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Review of A Longing Heart  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello ray, you do well to give the reader a window into your own soul. There is a woman who seems to have total control. She is seen as the dark side of Love's flicker. In knowing this there is the awareness that losing is the only option. Maybe part of the secret to knowing peace is finding the light in oneself before leaving the fate of one's soul in the possession of a woman who could care less.
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Review of Divorce  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hello Fabio, I am not sure that a peaceful divorce is possible. I like the idea of being able to restructure relationships and values as a result of experiencing the hurt. I am glad for the tonight that you talk about. It sounds like you are still in process. I pray that you can both see together what you were unable to see apart. Maybe marriage means a lot more than divorce.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Survivor, The first line grabs me. Misery wants to hold my hand. I think the hardest thing to figure out is who the real helpers are. Sometimes the people that you think will help you most make you the most miserable. The bottom line is to let go of false hope and reach out for the hand that can lead out of darkness and into light.
Thanks for the good word- God bless
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Review of Feeling Fall  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Jatog the Green, I feel the mood of the season that portrays what is going on inside you.
With summer fast asleep beyond the call,
rustling leaves--dead of night--I’m feeling fall.

Much of what ensues is to be found in the rustlings of Halloween. There is the chill in veins, autumn rains and a piercing howl. After summer is the reminder that the death of winter is not far away. The night and spookiness of a new season calls us to find in darkness what we cannot find in light.

The title might say more about Halloween, since is the poem's essence.
Thanks for sharing.
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Review of The Patriot  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
The last line is the one that rings the most clear Misawa. I can recall the shot heard around the world on the eve of the Revolutionary war. It is in the air that has been shattered the realization that freedom always comes at a cost. There are persons/family that die for us so that we can look forward to the beauty and potential of the young woman and a crowded market. Thank you for your sentiments. The shattering of the air can be disturbing in light of the grief and hurt. It also loudly resounds in a way that others cannot fail to recognize the power and joy of knowing one who might dare to die for us.
Well said and done.
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Review by drifter
Rated: E | (5.0)
I was deeply touched by your poem SWPoet. I was reminded of the pain of my own divorce. For a number of years I wondered if I could ever know love again. The image of the unlatched door is fitting. Both I and my new beloved had known the pain of divorce. We trusted that we could know love again and have not regretted it. Thank you for your words and above all for sharing your heart. I have no doubt it will open doors of hope for others!!
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Review of Received  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello SWPoet, I enjoy that you are able to expose the essence of you are in a poem to the beloved. You share your future, present and soul (the entire passion of who you are). The beloved shares in the reflection of what is meaningful. The title is fitting. Both beloveds received. I am sure that love does not get better than that.
Suggestions: I half way expected an allusion to the past. It could be that knowing the present and future puts regrets in the past.
Thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello stylewiz, There is an awful lot of wisdom shared in your paragraph. It can be too easy to get caught/trapped by computer gadgetry and never see what is really out there. I enjoy the various views that jump into this persons sight. There are the monkey bars, flowers, swing sets, a boy and a dog. The last line about beauty in the eye of the beholder captures a greater truth. We can sit behind a computer and almost be imprisoned within or go outside and discover what it means to be free.

suggestions: I only wonder where you are going with #nature.
Well done!
Thanks for sharing
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Review of Hospital Visit  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Denzel, it is a curious tale. I have spent a lot of time in hospitals visiting and can almost imagine someone as obsessed as the young man you portray. What made it funny for me was that the boy did not even seem to have a relationship. He was getting all worked up about something that may or may not happen. The irony is that his search leads to seeing an old man instead of the beloved he had hoped to see. Now what?

Suggestions: I think that your comments about doctors saying he has mental issues is not real. I think if he was seen as a danger he would be dealt with. I realize it is just a story. That being said, it is important to consider how others relate to what you are writing, begging the question: Is this really what you want to say?
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