Very detailed and well written. It was easy to follow and enjoyable to read. I got into the quest and was pulled along by the action. Each step was complex but satisfying. I wondered what an umbrella could possibly have to do with a mystical quest, but the ending was good and humorous. It really was a complex way of killing someone. I get the feeling the protagonist could have died at any step.
It moves quickly, a lot of showing not telling, but there were a few places I would have liked a little more information. It is a good story, but I don't know it felt like something was missing. There were quite a few details on the car but we know very little about the spaceship other than that it is a saucer. I would have liked to have seen the interaction that had led to the damaging of the ship. It feels like you jumped over some of the good parts.
Good continuation of the previous stories. I look forward to the next one. You really seem to be hitting your stride with Silverbolt. I think that if you stick to the course you have set you could have a novel in no time.
Good origin story, it needs some polish though there are a couple of places with clearly missing or misused words. I think a little more detail at the end might be good. Build on the relationships a little more.
Strong powerful writing, you have done a superior job of presenting your tale. One thing, formatting this with hard returns between paragraphs on this site would make for easier reading. I read several sentences several times because I couldn't keep my place without obvious paragraph breaks. I really enjoyed the read and am glad so much sorrow hasn't left you broken irreparably.
Well written, perhaps would be easier to read if you put a hard return between paragraphs. There was one place where you used the word no when you probably meant know. I would run it through Grammarly, it helps with stuff like that. Overall keep writing and listen to your dreams, you never know when they could be a warning of things to come.
That is a very powerful, personal, and insightful essay. I feel for you having allowed others to turn you from your passions. I was fortunate to have people who encouraged me in mine. It is good to expose oneself to other people's life paths and see where you could have gone. Thank you so much for sharing yourself in this way.
Yeah,the alternate version is way better. This version doesn't even begin to explain how weird things are with him. Though at some point you could revisit this confrontation scene with view to the revisions and sequel revisions. I mean she still would want to confront him about the lies.
Oooh It is a good one. The cop (haaa, ha, haa) is the most inept officer I have read about in a while. I am glad he got the girl. Definitely a good short story. Didn't see anything to complain about...
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