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Review of The Umbrella  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Creepy the umbrella takes possession of its bearer to what end? I wonder what happens when the rain stops. Or is the umbrella causing the rain. It has planned its next bearer probably has its endgame planned out too. There are so many ways to expand this into something more.
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This is an interesting poem. It warps reality a bit for me. It is almost as if you are personifying the muffin. I really like it. It made me hungry. It made me think of muffins and their pure, simple enjoyability. It really is well written in my opinion. Though the notes on the poem should probably be better separated from the poem. They confused me at first. Until I realized that they were notes.
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Review of Promptly Poetry  Open in new Window.
for entry "Write and Live" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice poem! Mine for this week sucks! Your's looks like any ordinary poem that just flowed out of you onto paper effortlessly. Like inspiration struck and wham bam thank you ma'am you have an good poem sitting in front of you. I struggled to get down something terrible.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a sweet Christmas story. I loved the characters they were vivid even the dead grandpa. The setting was clear in my mind. Or should I say settings? I don't usually like a bunch of scene and pov changes in a story that short. But the transitions were smooth and clear and totally necessary. It was really well written and smooth from beginning to the end I loved it. I have come to expect quality writing from you and this did not disappoint in the least bit. It was a bit unseasonable for a summer read. It would be even better if I were looking out the window at a snow storm.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a really nice story. It builds in tension from the first line. I do not know why they are down there. But they do seem to have a serious purpose. I almost want to say this is post-zombie apocalypse. Like they are traveling by sewer because it is safer. Or would have been safer. Then I read it is children and I have to attribute it to a lesser situation. It is well written. In my humble opinion you should have won the contest if you did not.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That's a grizzly story. A little goryer than I typically like them. But it was not gratuitous gore. Every drop of blood and flesh and whatever the red stuff really was belonged there and it would have made the story less vibrant to leave it out. As usual another great thrill ride.
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Review of The Well  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Cute story, I was waiting the whole time for a jump scare that never happened. I think this is a story that little hooligans with ideas about wells need to read. To satisfy their curiosity before something bad happens. What if pa had not been so close?
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good scene, but you got your their, there, they're mixed up in the first paragraph. Not a big, just change their to there. Also if there is nothing beyond the city but void, where did the plane come from? And where do they get their food from? Just a couple of thoughts.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good story so far, but it seems a little rushed. Take a little more time, give us some vivid details. Make us see, smell, hear the city more. You've got space. And time, we'll all wait especially if what you add is as thrilling as what you've already got down.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love it. Your caricatures of each of the colors were perfect. I think you chose their personalities perfectly. Their moods affecting their instruments of creativity is genius. I love how the dominating red is brought down a few pegs into a slot of cooperation. This is a great story and I understand how you won this prompt. Make sure to add a note about winning to your notes.
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Review of The Shame  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a good start to something longer. You could make it a story about recovery. Or rediscovery she could find who she was after the trauma. Or she could go psycho Rambo on the gang that hurt her. Totally taking a complete and satisfying revenge on them.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Good job, definitely twisted and dark. I would put a link to the contest and prompt, also if possible a linked to or written out the original song all into a pop or drop note. Just so people can fully get where it came from. It is well written and I think it has a chance of winning, so if it does don't forget to come back and update the note.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Awesome story! I am so glad you could help her heal herself like that! Sometimes the results of s simple act of kindness can lead you to find a beautiful treasure. It sounds like her creations were only a part of the treasure she found because of your kindness!
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Review of Haven  Open in new Window.
for entry "A Normal Life" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Awesome story! I like the main character! A lot more than i thought i would at first. At first i almost hated her for keeping the rich rich. Then the meeting about the cartel showed how upright and honorable she was. That is a great deal of character growth/ presentation for such a short story. On the way through the story to the end more and more is revealed about her character. It is a deep and nuanced story. I did get a little confused about the two characters names maybe i lost focus reading or maybe you slipped up. Any way around it you should double check that it is clear which is speaking when. Overall i would read it again.
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Review of The Coven  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
That's creepy., and a definite lesson for anyone stupid enough to mess with the forces of darkness. It is well written. I would try highlighting the prompt words by bolding them so the reader can see them, since I wanted to see how successful you were with the prompt. I think I caught them but...
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The first thing this poem made me think of were the poems that strike almost fully formed in the twilight thoughts right before you fall asleep. The kind that beg you to write them down but you pay them on the hand and assure them that you will remember them in the morning and then give in to sleep. Morning comes and the have evaporated into a lingering mist. Unable to recall them, you make a silent promise never to let it happen again.
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Review of Cold Wind in May  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That is a vivid poem. Appreciate the skill with which you put it together. It is relatively short yet it tells a complete story of a lovely spring day. I know this was a writer's cramp entry. Might I suggest a drop or pop note with a link to the cramp, date, prompt, and the fact that you won. Those are all things you might want to remember later.
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Review of The Stick man  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
THat was truely creepy. It was a slow but predictable creep. I still hit me with a thump as I read the note even though I felt something like that coming. Like it but not exactly it. There is one thing double check that your spelling of Shawn is consistent through the story, it felt like the spelling in the last paragraph was a mistake.
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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Ahh- mazing it is the best blend of poetry and prose that I have read here or anywhere else. It would be interesting if you put some information on how you wrote it, what inspired it and how long it took into a drop or pop note to satisfy my curiosity.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice!!! I loved it. It started a little ominously in a cliche way, but the way the story built to a conclusion that brought them both a sense of peace was wonderful and balanced for me. I liked the characters. It was a bummer the uncle was a murderer.
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Review of Spacewalker  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found this poem sad. I feel bad for the astronaut. It must be terrifying to just be floating away with no hopes of rescue. I definitely could not handle being an astronaut, I am terrified of heights and you really can not go much higher than outer space. Good poem! It made me feel things and think about things that is the best kind of poem.
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Review of Activities Blog  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I love it. I was worried it would be about cockroaches from the gig I could not quite make out the insects in it. But ants working together, your butt is going to be thoroughly kicked. Then they are coming after the rest of us and there is not enough ant and roach spray to save the world!
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Review of Mistaken  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That was gross and creepy! Weird with a capital ewe. So what the spider climbed inside him and hijacked his body? Or is he just insane? Very Kafkaesque story. It was unpleasant but I couldn't look away. He ate? Was his lunch meeting with the clerk perhaps?
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for entry "We Met In A Dream " Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Cute little poem. I think the information on the form is helpful in understanding it, but the fact that the information takes up more space than the actual poem is irritating to me. I would put that information in a pop note or drop note title a note on the form. That way I feel I would have more of an opportunity to digest the raw poem before getting into the how and why of it.
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Review of The Dust  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Awesome. As usual. That had real shades of the stand. It oozed the supernatural out the seams. It made me wonder what gift the dark man had stolen from her. Is the neighbor okay? Was the dream just a dream? That bit got a little fuzzy for me. I do not know if that kind of thing was part of the boy's power.
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