Amen. Now stick to believing it. It can be hard, but think of the people you can help just by being a you that is okay to be you.it is an important self revelation that everyone needs to come to. Being you,whomever that is, is the most important person to be.
Awe how cute and sweet. I liked it very much. I love the young dragon. It is the perfect poem for a child. What child doesn't want to grow up to be like daddy or mommy. I can see his little face as he has the discussion with his mommy. It has so much character a wonderful story poem. There is a contest of writing for children you should look it up this poem tells me you would be able to write perfect entries...
This is a very focused entry for having four separate subjects involved. It sticks to the prompts and flows from one subject to the next very easily. It was a pleasant read despite highly unpleasant subject matter. It disturbs me too that we all could become so desensitized to things that really bothered and disturbed us not long ago. How can we have settled into an attitude of annoyed apathy at disturbing subjects.
Oh my, what a story. There is a little to be done about grammar and typos but the story itself is lovely and inspiring. I love it. The child is a wonderful character. The villagers were awfully mean for chasing them off, but the child returned and saved the village in the end. Nice ending.
It is an interesting start. It sounds like you have a lot to share that might be helpful to other people who have gone through troubles or who face them on the horizon. I would continue working on this but might I suggest you turn it into a blog and make this the main page of the blog describing it. It would save you space in your portfolio. And it would offer an effective structure for what it sounds like you are working towards.
This is disturbing. the idea of zombies having any form of consciousness bothers me considering the state of their existence being half dead and forced to feed on other humans. i like the story I like the main character. I hate zombies. But I do like this. I think it is the point of view.
What a sweetly romantic story. The idea of fated dreamers is a creative and hopeful one. i love that she found her fated so quickly and I hope her life with him is everything she dreamed of, pun intended. Really nice story here. very entertaining and the dreamer is very likeable.
this is an interesting idea. This guy could get rich trading weed for objects of value that have been lost. it is safer than trying to sell it on the street. I do wonder who he made his deal with though. Being that he fell through into this strange place does that make him lost too? does that make him the old man's property?
Brave, very brave, speaking on the behalf of the closeted me generation. You left out garbage pail kids and back to the future DeLorean and dollar signs. You only passing mentioned the hair so high You had to duck to go through doorways. I wonder why you highlighted what you did.
This was a fairly good story but I was confused as to why his father didn't notice the monster. I started reading with the thought that the monster might be an abusive parent or something but the story confounded that idea. All in all it followed through logically from beginning to end. Good story
I am pretty obsessed with the tiny too. I actually make tiny little dolls, about three inches tall, complete with fingers, toes and individually stitched on threads for hair. I make their tiny little clothes, shoes, toys. I make them food with polymer clay, originally I used salt clay made with flour but we had roaches attack our storage unit at one point and the little buggers actually ate the fake food I made. Point is that there is no shame in finding beauty in the tiny or enjoyment in crafting minute things. I hadn't thought of writing tiny things being an extension of that obsession until now. I too have been doing each of the writing challenges you named I especially enjoy the microfiction challenge I have entered hundred word stories in other contests just to have another reason to write one. Thanks for enlightening my world by revealing this connection.
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THis is such a concise poem. It says just what it needs to for meaning and artistically takes you right to the blank page. It treats the blank page like a romantic partner rather than the horrifying abyss I tend to see. I am always worried that I will "ruin" the pretty white paper so perfect and pure with my words. Like I will soil the perfect beauty of its potential.
I wish I could see a blank page the way this poem does. it almost makes me think you could create art with your words rather than an abomination. Which you did, create art, not an abomination. It is a really nice story too. the idea of a blank page becoming something more than it was before. Which if you see the endless potential of a blank sheet of paper that I see is a really tall order.
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I like the way this poem feels like it is drifting from side to side in the wind slowly to the ground like a leaf. It feels like fall. The phrases are perfect and it really brings the fall breezes and smell of musty leaves to my mind. I enjoyed this poem immensely.
First I apologize for not accepting your review request when you made it. I tested positive for covid and didn't have the energy to review anything. I like this piece, it drips with the love and admiration you obviously feel. I like the different metaphors to tap into I just wish you could have found something to tie them together into a perfect little package. Even saying that, it is a good piece that would just push it over the top into being awesome. I think it will definitely communicate your feelings for him in a beautiful way.
This is an unusual guilty pleasure. I can definitely get the guilt part, a lot of the world thinks that bagpipes sound like cats serenading each other. I think they can be quite beautiful, and when they play "Amazing Grace" forget about it! I love that this prompt produced this lovely lyric poem. I wish mine was half as good. Great effort and excellent result!
This poem is a good illustration of the passion of lovers. I can feel the sizzle that they experience reveling in each other. It is amazing what you have done with so few words. I almost wanted to argue your use of fire as a two-syllable word but then I read the poem aloud to myself and that is how I read the word, so I have to give you that one. I love the way you used fire as an inspiration for this. It was the weekly inspiration for the microfiction challenge. I just finished writing that before working on my poem for this week. I wrote my poem with the inspiration of rain.
I like the classical inspiration you took from the prompt. I hadn't even thought of Pandora when I read the prompt. I also went with an acrostic poem but yours is far more structured and quite frankly impressive than mine. I really like what you wrote and believe it evokes far more hope from the reader than mine does. Excellent job.
I like the flow of this poem it holds up well for me until the last three lines then it is like the poem hits a speed bump or hiccups or something. It's a really cool poem and it reads well to me until that point. Maybe you need to read it aloud and play with it a little bit more.
I am so happy for Ezha to be pursuing his dream despite what he believes are his father's wishes. What makes me even happier is that Zafra secretly is proud of him and his gift. I just wish they could have talked honestly about things. It leaves so many doors to understanding closed.
This poem leaves me with a lot of questions. What is it that they must be freed from? What has them standing on the shore? Are they about to "Free" themselves from this life because that would be a dark turn for this to take. I could see them being merpeople finally returning to their home, the sea.
Why is she so afraid of the ocean though? Are they planning to swim to freedom or something darker? I don't know if I really want to know the answer to this. When it comes down to brass tacks I found this poem more disturbing than romantic.
There are a lot of minor grammar errors and typos. One sentence that caught me as particularly wrong was. "I feel guilty beeing the guy that make her so sad." it should be "being" and "made". There are a lot more minor things like this scattered throughout the piece. I would recommend running it through Grammarly because it usually picks things like those up for me. It is the more egregious stuff that it misses and that I don't know about that people correct me on. It is worth the time to add Grammarly to your browser though.
The link at the end is no longer valid. I would have liked to read more but... The story is wonderful. The main character is clearly a very focused researcher. I wonder about the world this takes place in, and about the races involved. Wings on the main character? I can see her getting ink all over her face and clothing. I can imagine the servants getting upset over the stains. Maybe she should just break out and reinvent tie-dyeing. Then the splotches of ink wouldn't look so strange. Or put random splotches all over her clothes in a pattern...
This whole adventure is an absolute blast. If they ever offer a round two I know I am signing up! The graphics for each level are beautiful. The trinkets are all beautiful and this is a visually superior activity. A lot of activities are fun but I don't think I have seen another activity that has gone to the effort this one has to illustrate the challenge.
The writing of the activity is awesome too. Each of the fairy helpers has its own personality. The story is awesome and it lives up to the visual promise. The various tasks stick to the themes of the levels really well and the review requirements broadened my reading variety, possibly permanently.
This is a well thought out poem. It builds to a conclusion that the rest of the poem makes obvious and satisfying. This is an excellent expression of faith and the contrast between your life before and your life after finding Jesus Christ. Everyone comes to a point in their lives where all they can see is the mistakes of their past. They can be consumed by guilt and fall into depression, drugs or other addictions. Their best hope is to find something like this poem to point them into the direction to go to get out of this hole in their lives.
It fits the form nicely. It doesn't act as a single sentence in my mind so perhaps you should remove the single capitalized word and the punctuation just to smooth out the style. I love the words and the images it makes in my mind are soothing in the hot weather. I took the same theme in my poem I wrote about a soothing rainstorm.
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