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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This crossword marks correct answers as wrong until other answers are filled in correctly. I also tried several spellings for five down but it will not accept the correct answer. It was incredibly frustrating to try and solve this. I do not think it is the author's fault I think it has something to do with me filling it out on my phone. Because I had the same trouble with another puzzle earlier today but do not seem to have the problem when I fill them out on my computer. Whatever, I tried, I just could not get it to play nice.
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Review of Virus  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a strong story. The two characters are strangely evenly matched. I wonder if he had ever actually killed anyone before kidnapping her. It would be ironic if he set out for his first murder and ends up being killed by his innocent victim. She of course will not be charged with murder. It could not be more clear that it was self defense. Still she has self applied the label of murderer and no defense attorney can ever remove it or the guilt she will carry. This whole story is well told and we have learned enough of the character to know that she is now as irrevocably damaged by this as if it were his plan all along


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Review of Snowy, My Love  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a lovely poem. And a lovely subject. Snowy sounds like a perfect furbaby. Dogs like snowy are one in a million. and I understand not wanting to dim the memory with "Replacements." But consider that there are millions of homeless animals who need the kind of love and affection you gave Snowy. Some of them are in danger of being put down in shelters to make room for more animals. No one and nothing will replace Snowy but you could legitimately be saving a life if you took in another animal companion. Second love like this can be just as sweet.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Still too fast paced. there needs to be more character development they are all equally frantic without giving one clue about why they would be. so they're spies. if they really are spies they can not afford to be as frantic as they are being. there needs to be more to their character than that sense of impending doom and inability to sit still for two seconds. the thing about the cacao that seems out of place like a product placement commercial if it really was an issue of the character not having it he should have showed frustration that morning as he was getting ready that he didn't have it rather than an infodump three hours later about it.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a fast paced first chapter. It could use more showing of emotions and scenery than telling, I have never been to most of the places it tells about and would like more of a sense of being there with the characters. The pace is a bit fast to get much of a sense of the characters too. Don't feel that just because you set off at a run that you can't take a few breaths and put in some showing details so we can catch our breaths and get into the characters heads. Right now all the characters are to me is several shades of panicked and frantic. Not all of them should or would be yet. Nothing really has happened for them to be frantic.
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for entry "Is there an answer?" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I feel sympathy with the writer and agree that I am glad I am advanced enough in years to not have to see where our population will have pushed the earth in another fifty years. I thought this would be themed around human kindness to each other but it is as much about human kindness to our planet. Either way round humans are less than kind.

Wars, both physical and philosophical tear our societies apart just when we need to pull together to save our future selves. I have little hope for the kind of cooperation necessary to reverse the horrible things this piece predicts. I just hope there will be enough of our wild and beautiful planet left to rebuild after we have had our way with it.

I hope that we won't be the mass extinction that wipes out all life. I would feel a little peace in the extinction of humanity if we left a few bugs and a few plants around to rebuild the ecosystem from. Even better if there were mammals and flowers, fish and fungi, a mild bit of diversity to rebuild from. But I fear that earth will have to rebuild from bacteria.


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Review of The Firemen  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great story. It follows the prompt well, but for me the hopping around from one point of view to the other was a little jarring. I don't expect that kind of thing in a short story. It really didn't seem to give either character the platform they needed to be fully developed. I would really like to see how it would read if you stuck to one character's point of view through the story and built the character of the other character through the thoughts and impressions of him and the way they change through the story. To me the main character, or at least the band "leader" is a real jerk who doesn't want to do what is necessary for the band to have success. The drummer has good valid suggestions to improve the band but he gets shouted down. With the point of view split between the two the characters have equal weight in the story and it is a little confusing which one is the supporting character the prompt requires. I think it should have been all from the point of view of the leader.


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Review of Bumble Boy  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That was an incredibly sad story. The ending was horrible. To have so much talent ripped away like that. I had a twinge of worry when the disposer was mentioned, but didn't think it would end like that. It was not until they were playing in the kitchen that I realized what was about to happen. I stopped reading at that point and didn't finish it until this afternoon. Sad, very sad.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Interesting idea. Dial an age. I would have so much trouble deciding what age to pick. My whole life is a blend of the good and the bad. there aren't many points I would want to suffer the bad again just to get the good. My luck I would dial myself to an age where I couldn't work a phone to try again...
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a disgusting chapter but it fits the genre very well. The state bill is in turns my stomach. I am just glad he has not been captive long enough for his wounds to have drawn maggots. I could see that happening. The backstory is definitely being shown and not told. There are still things we do not know about the characters. The relationship issues seem pretty complicated. Bill and James have both wooed her and both have let her down. The question is whether or not she will accept the psychopath as her man
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Oh boy. A severed finger, a rat, a kidnapped husband, this is a real horror story brewing. I want to know more about James. How does she know him? Why is the husband alive but disfigured. Ho tight is the money in the house? Wife works, husband works, they have a roommate who presumably helps financially. How much are their housing costs? It does not seem like the house is in great shape. Four people in the household three of them financially contribute what other bills do they have? Sorry, their is less story in this chapter than there could be.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Psychopath much. James sounds like a total stalker. Does he actually have a relationship with her or does he just think he does. So he's killed the husband and the roommate. Is he going to kill her if she does not respond the way he thinks she should? There is a child in this mess too? Totally not good. The woman is in desperate need of help and she does not even know it yet. This is scary. Definitely a psychological thriller. Stalkers are very scary especially if the victim is not aware of the extent their obsession.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Poor Smokey he was a bonified hero and then lost the two cats he loved the most. I hope his second life is a good one. One thing, you talked about the Kennedy assasinaton and then shortly after that the girl's kidnapping.at the kidnappers house Christine mentioned leaving her cell phone at home. The time frame for that isn't right. She couldn't have had a cellphone. You also might want to double check that 911 had been created by that point. It didn't always exist. That is the trouble with historical fiction, you have to make sure to avoid anachronisms.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a really original take on the life of cats. Has misty been "fixed" yet? Because surely he would have fathered siblings by now if he hasn't. I love the portal stuff. I can't wait to read the next chapters. I am going to as soon as I finish this review. I love the characters so far. I do wonder who Misty's dad thinks about when he portals. Does he ever portal to see Misty's mom. I also wonder about the kitten with a broken leg. How much does a cat remember when it is reborn. And is it's rebirth like the first one?


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It fits the form. it is rather enigmatic. What are the souls mourning? It is almost a morbid poem to me. Like the sky has died, devoured by night. Does that mean it could be devoured by day as well? The sky is a character in this poem as well as the moon. The light bright enough to wake implies the moon is full. perhaps it devoured the sky if it is so full. Blue moons are supposed to be rare and special. But they are just the name for a regular full moon that has arrived with specific timing. This poem sent my thoughts in some odd directions.


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Review of Unanchored.  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Omg! I won't ask you if you are okay. I know you are not. I have lost fur babies before. sometimes it is harder than others. I know when I lose my Gracie it is going to tear me apart. People will give you conflicting advice. Some will say to wait and the right fur baby will come to help you. Some will say to rush out and buy one to replace her. I don't think either way. I think you should follow the path that helps your hurt. When you do feel like it is time, go to a shelter, be open to anything that calls to you and remember it is your chance to save a life in her honor.
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Review of Take A Breath  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an awesome poem with a strong positive message. It is short with few words but is a mountain of inspiration. The simple instructions on breathing end up bringing the reader to a place of empowerment. It is an open call to improve your situation that makes no restrictions on gender, race, religion, age or political affiliations. It is just a good poem placed in the world to do good for all who meet it. The title is deceptively simply as are the instructions but it is something best shared with others.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Crap, didn't see that coming. The real one to have started the war is the younger prince's advisor. Why was he so set on it though. And how did this lead to the disfiguration of a complete nation? Is there another layer of blame to consider? Does the vendetta go back another generation? I have been so surprised by this story so far that I don't have any clue on the resolution of the conflicts ancient or otherwise. I would like to see the two main characters end up together, and having that somehow be a part of mending everything else.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "9 - Doubts" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
No, I am sure this chapter was shorter than before, noticably so. But it had as much happen in it almost all of the earlier ones. I hope there is enough magic left in this place to fix the damage done to this world. It would suck if it weren't true. I am also really curious about who's fault the war is. Is it the Illian or the Mencun. Or is it everyone's fault and the unicorn just up and left them to sort it all out. I feel like jorcans people were least at fault and that they caught the crap end of the stick.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
There were two kingdoms, but one of the appears to have been split into two and the first appears to be about to be extinguished. The three characters are necessary to complete the healing for all of them. Interesting... This really is a complex and well built narrative. I have certain expectations and they keep being overturned and reset by the progression of the story. Two brothers at each other's throats turn into a multiple generational war. This is a lot more complicated and finely crafted than the simple summary would indicate.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "7 - White Woods" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ooh I thought this was a story of two characters but really it is the story of three. I can't wait to read more of the writer's story. To me it seems like these chapters are getting shorter but so much more is happening in them than the earlier ones. I do wonder about the world outside. How the war is going. I also have begun to question who the real villains behind the war are. I don't think her people are as innocent as she and the writer seems to think that they are. The doors open for him not for her.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "6 - The Guardian" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Amputated? Whoa man. He seems a lot different he really has begun to care about her. too bad this adventure has cost her her arm. What possessed her to leap to his defense?

It is good to know that the writer can affect the situation, but it sucks he does such a puss poor job of it. What I want to know is which faction this city belongs to.

The writing is smooth and well paced this story is far more compelling than I expected it to be from the summary. Something needs to be done with that to improve the likelihood people will move on to reading this it really is worth it
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "5 - Dark Journey" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ooh so there is a reason the all wear masks. But why are they malformed? Is it a case of the cruelty within being reflected on the outside? Was there some kind of plague that altered their DNA? Did the parents systematically deform their own children so they would look alike? If so why did they start? Does it have to do with some kind of magic? The character building is bringing the two characters closer together but to what real end. Will she learn his viscousness or will he take interest in her attitude of compassion?
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ooh interesting. He does not want to kill her. It feels like more than weak thankfullness for her care. He really is different than the rest of his people, but is he strong enough to not get killed for that difference? Why is she the one that was trapped with him? What about the combination of the two of those people could be what brings enough change to end the war. It is already clear the girl is special from the writer's attitude towards her. What doe the writer think of the Prince though? I can't wait to see.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "3 - Departure" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is getting really good. I love the two characters one on each side of the conflict. I question where this man built cave came from. And why it chooses that moment to collapse on these two characters in particular. I wonder if the rank of the Prince will offer him any more credibility than the average soldier when he encounters the world changing knowledge I sense he and the girl are about to encounter together. He is just peculiar enough an example of his people that I believe he might be able to absorbed it.
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