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Review of A Real Haiku  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
As a haiku, you nailed the syllable count...5-7-5, but thematically you missed the mark. I think the idea is to connect the experience in summation...and while Christmas Melodies is correct, it's hardly a revelation. Winter Wonderland is not religious like Hark the Herald Angels Sing. Maybe, Christmas traditions for last line?

Just some thoughts, anyway.

B


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Review of Smile  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed what I think was supposed to be a Haiku, a tribute to what I imagine could be the birth of a newborn child. I believe the haiku form is 5-7-5, and that first line, a fragment, had four syllables...could become a sentence with five with a gender assignment...his/her. Or you could make radiates into radiant, an adjective...'Her radiant smile...'

Might work better. Nice haiku,

B


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Review of Night Watch  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautifully written poem "Night Watch"  about someone who has to work at night while their loved one sleeps alone. The only thing that gives him comfort while apart is knowing when they are together, he will be able to have someone to care for.

A nice rhyme scheme with use of? quiescence? Had to go look that up. Keeper! Well rhymed and meted with this pondering during the 'Night Watch,' obvious time to pen an ode. He wants to be there, imagines being in the sleeper's dreams to give comfort, "to linger gently..." He wishes the feather soft bed..."the actual moments shared..." Thinks about how little time they get to spend together, because of this night time responsibility no doubt.

"(T)hinking of you makes me bold..." reminds me of the strength gained by being in a committed relationship. When you are separated like this, there's comfort in knowing that a special someone is ther to come back to. Sad in knowing this obligation cannot allow them just a simple slumber together.

As a husband who had to spend many weeks on the road, this poem strikes a chord. It has a Romantic flavor with its word choices like "to-morrow" and solilquizes (yes, I made that up) like poor Hamlet with no Ophelia to love.

A pleasure to finally read and comment on your writing,

Brian

Sorry it took so long

"Stanley 😔" 


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Review of Tomorrow  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
There is a chilling disconnection between two people who have realized their relationship is ending in a poem that avoids discussing why love is no more.

The impression is they have gone through trial and tribulation but now reside alone inside the same house. This has a profound affect on a reader. It's tragic when you are trapped, still close to that one that the future was supposed to be spent with. It's that knowing there is an even darker reality of another day coming with its finality.

The pain of fresh rejection, love's finality is felt. Using the house in that open was crucia to this themel. The form of repeating rhyme was helpful in some instances to show the long-drawn out feeling of reexamination, processing even in poem about this love's demise. It's brutal.

Brian


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Review of MY SPIRIT  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
There are some powerful words in your poem, My Spirit. In fact, I'm hearing song lyrics that empower oneself to rise above a heartbreak.

Your lines and thoughts move freely, poetically,; though, what you pen calls not on imagery or poetic devices to connect a reader indirectly to these emotions. It's always good to show rather than tell feelings with poetry. That's why I feel this is capable as lyrics to drive a musical score, that dance you do with the language, the feelings we want to punctuate with sharp expressions like these.

For that, I say Kudos, sing strong!

B


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Review of Soulful  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
While there is some intriguing elements to this short vignette "Soulful" , it lacks good story structure to help a reader assess what is going on.

While it can be assumed a woman is in peril and in with the wrong crowd with talk of crack and potential for rape, I cannot piece together these events cohesively. She's running away and to things. I get a few mannerisms, but no real introductions. I sense she is lulled into submission, maybe coerced. It reads like it's a short fantasy that is unrealized by author based on real events, unable to take it further with a developed plot.

I see small grammar issues like "seen them." But overall, it's a writer that has potential for growth, with time given to work with their prose. I'm not disappointed by what I see. I see potential. I wish this could be developed more.

Brian


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Review of I Walk Alone  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Anyone reading this poem now is likely to shed a tear. So sad learning late of your passing and wondering about the beloved spouse who brought you those two comforting verses to light up a lonely life come full circle.

I'm not unfamiliar with feeling disconnected with the world around me. You could paint scenes of a lonely sole in a diner within a coffee cup or those who must stroll a country lane alone. Then, your knight sees your sad lone verse all alone and scribes 10 lines of eloquent bliss.

Why did it have to end so soon? So sorry we didn't meet. I adore this poem, the sentiment; but, the tragedy of imagining your Prince alone, waiting for his turn to join you in heaven where a hundred more beautiful verses will ascend...

God bless,

Brian


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I read your 50-word story to see if anyone is able to really tell something encapsulating in such short form. What you have done here is build a nice vignette that could be incorporated into a longer piece. We don't know the characters well enough, hard to do in three to four words; then, difficult building rising action, conflict and falling action. But a worthy effort.

It's fun and easy to dabble with short fiction like this. You got the creative juices flowing, using italic to accentuate the tension between the two characters. You've implied a desire between the two just by innocent touch of a hand hovering a computer mouse. Good detail and scene.

Nice read; sorry my review could not match the micro power of your words,

B


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Review of Guarantee  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A poem that reveals our pessimistic view of an all or nothing society that calls on unity rather than divisiveness to make the world a better place. Your poem for being so dark has an easy flowing read that culminates in a message for those who need to step up. It reminds me of my children who say 'I'm not doing it, if they're not doing it.'

The world is divided by varied interests and distractions. It takes near calamity to get anyone to notice for a day, an hour or a even minute.

I really appreciate the effort put into this poem, the thought. It's too bad that it feels defeated before we get rolling. The world's problems so overwhelming, it feels like it's the prophesized end of days, at times. And with more nations building nuclear technology...

Yeah, let's just stop there. Thought provoking poem,

B


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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was fun. My reply to the prompt:

Once upon a time there an underpaid, unvalued man fired from his job of eight years. Finally free, he sought after his inspiration. He Googled and found a writing community. He created an account and started writing. Not long after, people he didn't even know were suddenly there with encouragement, praising his writing.

Everyday, his inspiration grew. He felt he found a home. He wondered if God had directed him to this website to find himself and realize his true ideal of traditional publication. He penned verses of glowing words for adoring reviewers, who kept heaping praises. He blossomed, envisioned his words of love for these kind people.

One day, someone gifted him an upgraded account. He was hooked, trying to write for contests, support auctions, played games and chatted in scroll where he met many new writers. A mentor helped him become a Rising Star. He was on his way. But now other writers needed help, needed him to read and give feedback to what they wrote. He did his best to be honest and helpful. He reviewed with earnest -- joined a reviewing group. They had contests to further spur him on.

Because of that, he became one of the site's top credited reviewers. The more he reviewed, the better his ability to process words, making him a better writer. He began to realize he could earn gift points to pay for his membership. He started to get lazy, sat in scroll and picked off those games for gift points like there was no tomorrow. Someone got mad at him. One of the first people to praise him. He didn't know about etiquette in this writing community. It made him sad when his items were seldom reviewed and the praises diminished.

Until finally, he was estranged from many cheery, supportive people. Rising Stars and the Circle of Sisters still supported and urged him on through a dark period. He wrote about rejection, the longing for acceptance, about being misunderstood, about being among people who referred to themselves as angels, but did not administer forgiveness. He changed his name.

After years of life experiences and reflection, and love of family, the dark cloud lifted. God filled him with joy, a container from which he could share love. He chose a higher love, without expectation. Negativity did not unnerve him. It strengthened his belief in sharing a message of love. He would show them in poem's like "Efflorescence Song." He was a simple man who loved to commune in and write about nature. He would be a beacon to new writers, as long as the writing community would have him. His writing still reaches for higher plateaus, seeking eternal peace within.


I'd spend more time making this better, but it's a bit long as is. Thanks for this opportunity to share.

Brian

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A higher love exists when you're alone amid nature.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked the sound of your prose. It seems very natural, reflective and not forced. I have a few ideas for you, as you are developing this.

I need a name. We as readers like me identify with is someone/something that has some moniker attached. Also, briefly describe what she looks like, habits, mannerisms. What we did get was her love of the night...made me feel like she enjoyed either the activity around her or the ability seek quiet to be alone.

In first line, you could take off 'of the day' to be more concise. Also, to transition to that beach and show you moved the scene from the city, you could change "she sat on a beach" to "she had ventured to sit on a beach." It's the little things you do to keep the reader fixed to the text rather than stopping to ponder.

I wish you success with your story,

Brian


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Review of No More Fear  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear So Lite ,

I read your poem "No More Fear"  and connected with it on an emotional level as a parent. It is difficult watching the awkwardness of our children growing up in those middle years. I could appreciate the relief as a parent knowing the boy is becoming more confident and the parent becoming more at ease.

So supportive and caring but in a way I'm familiar with...detached. It feels like you can only observe at times. Most of their life spent away from home or away in one's room. The line "Mother no longer draws near" sounds out of place, even though it has the right intent. You do want to show the mother is near while not needing to offer signs of support or sympathy anymore.

Otherwise, I appreciated what you shared and thank you as a parent who has gone through/is going through maturation with two offspring who each need unique parenting.

All the best,

Brian


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Review of Child's Spring  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm reviewing you because I am a member of *Star* Rising Stars *Star*, mentored by my friend GabriellaR45 who has sent me on a quest for eye-opening, new talent on this great website, Writing.com. I hope my review will help shed a light on much needed "newbies" like you to help keep this community of authors strong. Let's begin:

Dear M.J. Swayer :

Hello, I am intrigued by your poetic imagery and have been staring at this poem "Child's Spring"  several times over the past few days, wanting to give comment. I fully appreciated the imagery and the use of language with eyes on the children experiencing nature. I wanted to fully soak up this poem so that I could properly comment, to show my understanding of your excellent use of words.

Part of my struggle sometimes reviewing writers is discerning their intent with what they are describing; poetry has unique complexities and meaning that we are to discover...even in the simplest terms. I connected with the description of the children enjoying the ladybug and it's antics within the backdrop you've related. And, by association, got a smile becoming aware of the parent watching/recreating the unfolding scene.

I enjoyed the use of color and description to paint the scene, like an artist. And I would guess that you have artistic talents to go with your writing ability. I had trouble getting my vision calibrated with the opening verse. I'm assuming a flower loses a pedal onto the newborn grass, and I couldn't quite figure out what "it's black-eyed beauty now a shadow…" meant. I was thinking something like a dead plant from the previous year, but assumed I was wrong. A shadow reference, something with eyes, maybe the bug?

I know I don't have to struggle with that open, because the description in the entire poem is light and airy -- has a little ladybug that the children watch with glee. So the rest of the poem was so smooth and easy for me and something I could fully enjoy. Such visual moments like "Six-legged red shell crawls up on it…" and describing its flight (so beautifully portrayed)..."Petal and rider wafted away/A boat and it's sailor…The gliding vessel shipwrecked… Polka-dotted traveler tumbles softly…"

So apt in seeing in my mind. This was all right and it gives a reader sensation to connect with happiness.

Blissful, sweet harmony in your writing, this poem crafted; no doubt with joy. It was a pleasure and I hope I did some justice in standing back to look at and review your great offering. Sorry for the flowery language, but I am a fan of nature and fondly proud of my memories of sharing such distraction with my now growing children. Remiscent nostalgia as I reflect on summers past.

Great poem!

Brian



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Rated: E | (4.5)
That moment at the end of chapter one with realizing she could never love this guy like Ben before saying yes to his marriage proposal was a bit devastating. My heart sank. Your story has potential as a romance novel. Though the scene was cliche, and for good purpose, perfectly illustrates how trying to have that picturesque, perfect moment to propose cannot capture what true love is.

So, we're teased, tempted with the what happened to Ben. Is he dead? Tragic, because he will be in the middle of that union and Mike can't compete. It could tear their marriage apart. When we settle, we are being dishonest with our partner. So, I can see a lot of inner turmoil and drama unfolding because of these unspoken feelings that still remain for another.

Showing in writing will be the test. Little actions, events will make it apparent that she loved/loves another more. Probably similar to the news my wife gave me when our first child was born, "You know, this means I love someone more than you now." Ouch! We'll blame epidural for that candid moment.

Good to have reviewed your writing. Much success,

B


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Review of Darkness  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I read this through twice and the impression I was getting by end is of a soldier of some kind who has no control over destiny, must do what is required of these demons possessing the mind, rather than live by one's ethos.

But, that doesn't add up. I think someone is a slave to something darker and more sinister, maybe in their DNA, that compels their demonic ways.

Psychologically sound narrative with some good phrasing, expressions to make points. Not a lot of poetic devices employed in this monologue.

B


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Rated: E | (4.0)
It is a forboding open to this first person narrative. The use of the sea apple and how it kills before it dies was an interesting relation to this character.

She thinks she's old at fifty, thinks she has no worth. Not building up a very likable person for a reader to follow. She has to have a redeeming quality to keep us hoping for her. But, by the same token we like self-destruction like this. What will she do when she needs to turn herself inside out?

I would say an intriguing start for this preface.

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Review of Struggles  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I think your poem "Struggles"  shows some versatility within its structure with concrete writing and style. You've depicted a scene with strong wintry blasts with some attempts at personification of trees and the few remaining leaves, trying to imagine the little truants with minds awondering about when Spring will come. It's naïveté and innocent. And there's a scene with the woman bearing the brunt of this cold affront and how the narrator imagines she is clutching memories, indignant. Very forceful, good imagination. Common expressions and word choices could improve with some tighter sentence structure.

It was good work,

B


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Review of Drink It Away  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is a tragic poem about how addiction can manifest when one tries to douse their troubles away. A simple, melancholy poem about the downward spiral of pain and regret.

Your writing style was simple and rhymed well with clear thoughts and actions. One remedy would be to tighten up the last line that has too many syllables to rhyme with its twin.

Maybe:

"But who should arrive? But Pain and Strife
Then I remember I'm drinking away life."

Still not perfect, but another way to end. I hope it's not actual cancer, but an expression, if this is based on reality.

It's the stuff of country music, a poem of doom and despair, poor agony...

B


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Review of Untitled  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Got a strange revelation for a Patty Loveless song when I read this very well expressed poem about not getting a chance to say a proper goodbye to a childhood friend.

This reminds me how impatient and insensitive parents can be to a maturing child's needs. That image of two faces separated by glass like it's the Berlin Wall nearly caused me to shed a tear, thinking of the country singer's song, "How can I help you say goodbye..." Was her name Jamie? 😢

That "carrying the wall with us" was dynamite. That family carries that glass through life. Children being cut off emotionally like that... I shudder, think of my childhood. This was a poem with IMPACT and POWERFUL expression.

Thanks for giving me goosebumps,

Brian

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Review of Waiting...  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This poem was simple and heartfelt for one that lost out on love, but someone has been waiting. But, look out, I saw a 'maybe'?

It is a short poem with tightly drawn lines and rhyme. I'm reminded of a Journey song where Steve Perry reminds her "if he ever hurts you, true love won't desert you." That means he'll step up. But, this girl in your poem only promises, "...here I am/maybe to stay." Steve's pitching stronger stuff.

"I know your sorrow, I feel your pain..." and another maybe pops up. I know this is cliche stuff, but the psychology underscores what lies in wait.

Fun poem to interpret,

B


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Review of Impressions  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
There are some descriptive word choices with symbolism for this published poem, Impressions.

My impressions are this is poetry akin to smooth Jazz. You wake up to it, do yoga to it, have a drink with it, maybe ride an elevator with it. You need something easy going down for your troubled head. This would be perfect for that.

Hard to tell if we are to build a romantic scene with star-crossed lovers looking at decorations from the rafters at the high school dance. It showed some deft use of adjectives like 'shining' or 'unquenched.' This is worthy of Happy Hour.

Nice going,

B


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Rated: E | (3.5)
This poem made some good use of form among other poetic devices to tell a sad tale of departed love. It's a poetic vignette that gives a glimpse but not a story of loneliness.

What I liked were the weaving lines that end with the title words, just like putting to sleep. There is contrast between the two opposing verses, showing together and apart, both with same end result, which is irony.

What I found with two expressions was a good device and a flawed one. The first, technically, "warm breath / caressing my neck..." seems possible and gives a feeling to describe that togetherness. The second, "clutch your empty pillow..." did not work technically or metaphorically. I get the image you're trying portray, but doesn't sound right.

Overall, good work. You have something to work with here,

B


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Review of Hurt  
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Rated: ASR | (2.5)
This was very sad, a story about a girl who would like their parent to stop being a Scrooge at Christmas time and put the family ahead of responsibility..."for once."

What is categorized as a poem is more of a letter to acknowledge the need to make happy memories during the holidays, maybe a recollection of past events that divided a family in need of parently love.

There are expressions in here "tears running in swells...", for instance, that could be used as poetry, but no form, meter, rhyme to support this category. As a parent, I see this as the basic plot for a lifetime movie or a Suess book. Just needs some development.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I read your short tweet of prose "Sometimes I Wonder"  and stopped to ponder your pontification, if we are left to only wonder about life's greatest questions. There's not much text to go on, but you set up your intimation and sum up with conclusion well, in short order.

My mind goes to..."Whether it is better to suffer the slings and arrows..." A lot of the thinking and theorizing about "Man's questions" has mostly been done for us. Why struggle to wonder when you can just Google something?

There are different approaches in philosophy and some wrong-headed conclusions. Without knowing what unanswerable questions Man has been wrestling with, it can be concluded we are all left to wonder without fact-based evidence. You are right! You sum it up so quick here.

Man is ceaselessly prone to wrestling with matters akin to a strong man who tries so many different ways to load a box he's not meant to lift without machination. We all think we can figure it out, find a new angle no one ever thought of, where many have tried and failed.

Only through new technologies are we getting closer to solving many of life's biggest mysteries. My favorite, the hunt for the God particle. But, won't we still doubt if we find proof of a greater existence?

We are Men.

Loved this mini-thesis,


Brian


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Review of Black Cat  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi The Ink Maiden~ ,

I am reviewing your poem "Black Cat"  because you have been chosen as a Spotlight Author at "Angel Review Forum" .

There are several items in your portfolio that I could review, but my mind kept coming back to this poem. I have a personal/special relationship with three cats in my house and have Respect for felines in general, and was inspired to give you feedback.

Now in your description line you say 'we,' but not meaning you, as in identifying as a cat, but giving voice to an abused, maligned creature. And, I imagine if you Google, there must be some origin to the ignorance towards cats that lasts to this day.

Cats are some of the most beautiful creatures and house pets. Identifying them with witches should have ended centuries ago, except for that infernal Halloween.

Your rhyme scheme did miss a beat and the meter/syllables showed no form, so it's a bit rough structurally. The tone and message are good. I'll bet you could do more to get a nice flow with this. Some suggestions?

You could still rhyme while changing up line breaks. Your first couplet you could remove 'the' before 'moonlight' and Voila! perfect rhyme/meter. Maybe, the next two lines you could mix up lines and words to get:

"Prowling stealthy, he appears a sight
Gives the superstitious quite a fright."

And so on like that. I would have fun with those verbs, make more active. I reach for my thesaurus for a shorter or longer synonym, especially with adjectives, when I need a smoother sounding line. I learn a lot of new words in the process. It's puzzle building really.

I think you've done a nice job with your poem's statement. The repeated words in the same do nicely. If a longer poe, could have repeated. A good poem like this once polished could be used by magazine publications aimed at everything from pet care to children's rhymes.

I hope my feedback was useful. Thanks for supporting our friends,

Brian

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