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Let my opinion be only one opinion. Take what you can. I am reviewing for the Simply Positive Forum.
From the get-go, the poem speaks with a statement and officially gives you a stance as an author. What has happened here? Although the slight ambiguity exists, merely the poem is very good. I find it in all stages, a thoughtful piece that lends credibility to free verse and prose moments inside of a poem that examine a move in life that may be consequential and life-changing. I had to "float away" from several jobs, that came to mind. By romance standards, it stands. And even politically.
Good that it does that. No, mindless poems are usually stiff with misgivings and ultimate mistakes of lost words without meaningful blends.This poem had a mind. It spoke wel. It gave us a trace of metaphor and gave us that visually.
No spelling, no grammar mistakes. Freedom in it. Good.
May I say, Megan, you have such stamina. You are listed as a top reviewer presently and I humbly bow to you when it comes to reviewing. Nothing less than excellent is your style.
I loved this piece. You again have us enjoying princesses and princes. I like to think of myself as Cinderella at one time, even presently. I did get the kiss from Prince Charming, but I'm still doing all the dirty housework. Did Cinderella do anything for chores after the Prince kissed her? I wonder.
You can be so enchanting. Nobody knows a magical spell more than you, I think. I love to rip through your winding tales and unweave them to find the details of a particular Princess or Prince. Whatever comes from their substance, you surely get to it.
What else can I say for this review? Most times you obey all laws of spelling and give good enough effect to grammar for WDC to be proud of
Nothing can really be sure on WDC, it is kind of a test to me, I think. If you do well, you might do well on the market. You have. That's proven. I hope your next books sells and it has interesting characters like you give us on WDC.
Have fun with your next project. I'll be here to read it. I enjoy everything you write and I'm not ashamed to say, I'm addicted.
Such a great little poem. I liked your concise quickly solved solution to a long-time and lifetime journey of sisterhood with someone. True blue. Your valuable words give me hope that the someone I am thinking of for this poem, can keep me standing up to others ridicule with a hug or a smile. Nothing is greater than loving one's sister or having sisterhood with someone. A testimony can be found this way. That is the way of life for a good person. Many words can sometimes say nothing or just be confusing. This one lets emotions give way to honesty and then a statement
of spiritual continence with that last line.
Best that Spiritual Newsletter knew this as they put this in this week's Newsletter. Glad to ponder it.
I would like this review to be just an opinion. Take what you like, and remember each of us has their own opinion.
Right off the bat, I think this piece has much honesty. It rifles through my mind as an active voice like an active wave of an ocean. With much to say on enchantment and the reality of no enchantment, I found it enchanting. This sizes words and it gives life to them.
I know this kind of torment with "endless barriers", I believe. I find this in perspective when I write, to be "don't make me out to be so much" "make me out to be what I am". I find justice in this poem. It flys through phrases and gives us home base to end on. It is a natural poem, like the seasons, I
believe. Has a kind of metamorphosis built in. You could have said anything, but you claimed one "comes down to earth" with this. Very good.
I think your audience here at WDC will adapt well to a good review for this piece.
I saw no spelling/grammar mistakes. Your style was fine with me with the long sentences to get across what you wanted to.
I am reviewieng this piece for the Simply Positive Forum:
April Summer (ASR) A free-verse poem about it being so blamed hot in Dallas yesterday. #1552948 by Harry
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Wow, Harry! This is just your style. That masculine scent to a wonderful jaunt with a depressing day to Target in the heat is more a good prose style than just an autobiographical memoralbic piece of yours. You love to talk I think. I like that. You get a bit, Salingereque and give us
a downright honest string of lines here.
I like to read you for your storyline. This one is no exception. With no grammar problems, really, you do great. Irony hits me with this and I recall Florida weather {I am a Pennsylvanian} in April doing the same thing to me at the Walmart! He he.
Excellently explained the poem is a simple yet fun poem to read in giving us a character sketch of yourself, Harry. Great stuff!
Kayla (E) For Darth's "I Am An Animal" Contest #540231 by Sophy
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First of all, I have always felt that you are one of the best on WDC. A soul of a poet maybe. It is inborn. I love your curious images, that pop up at any given moment in a poem. You know what you are doing. Your psychology rises above. And you make statements. It's all so terrific.
Your poem speaks with "that animal" in mind, so well. Could you have done more with spacing? I don't know. This was probably a quick response to a contest, I have a feeling. In it's truest form, with caution, a perfectly acceptable damn good poem!
Thanks for sharing with Sherri's Simply Positive Forum.
First of all thank you for being who you are. You have graced so many with the chance to give the Rising Star Program success. I love being a Rising Star Sponsor and hope to sponsor someone else sometime. To be part of Author Appreciation Day is kind of an honor for us all. Many have tread the path of WDC. How many have survived? How talented so many of the list today appear to be.
I just thought I would choose one of your interesting prose/poetry items to rate/review as well. This particular item was three parts genius. The macrame of character studies and the labyrinth of words that equal a veritable inhale of hip-talk with underworld circus gods and godesses in mind perhaps, was just great. I just love a take-off like these three are. I go for following the angles the circus character words take you and found your mix just as potent as Tom Mix itself. Good writing, really. Enjoyed it. Thanks.
Your choice for a folder term was very appropriate towards those items in it. I liked the premise immediately for this short story that speaks of the steps of a blind person. In the first person, you made this piece very spiritual and even suspenseful in its manner. Heart-felt toward the blind, I am very interested in this subject. I know a blind man we have taken into care in a manner of speaking at various times and it is a joy to deal with him. He is always pleasant and extra-special. Even humor is his game and he is such a good young man.
Hope you are at peace and happy today, Sherri L. I just want to say "Happy Appreciation Author Day" to one my favorite authors on WDC in every way. Your portfolio does you only half-justice. As many of us know that your books are fabulous. Simply my favorites.
You have a wonderful portfolio to go to, and I needn't mention "Simply Positive Forum" without telling you it is a smash hit. Everyone just loves it. I haven't reviewed with more enjoyment in years.
And then your folder of poems. This poem particularly caught my fancy. Absolutely lovely. Chosen words for a chosen one. May God bless, Sherri. You are a dearie.
You know, Joy, this poem is a good example of your nicest work. You have a knack for clearing up a word or giving an answer to how poetry examines life. It is a fast-paced write with Slam as it was when I was in it, I hear myself thinking, and I can't help but say, you tune it well even though it was a difficult contest. There is a cryptic message to all your poetry, I believe. You find pictures of things and your imagery is verbose and magical.
Take for instance, from the line,
Suddenly in a fluorescent flush,
I’m young again, singing,
ringing like a wineglass
down into the line,
smiles of solace dribble down my chin,
and in my rocking chair
behind the window-shade
I sit thinking,
I can look at what you might have wanted to say about icy and fiery, {or young and old} , or even, Ying and Yang. I get good vibes from it. Your brilliant musings are high quality. I have reviewed you many times and hope you don't find this another captive fan mail but it is!
Thank you for sharing.
Best Regards.
Feather Duster
vicki
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One must say yes to reading this and its fanastic language. From historical value to emmersing myself in a part of it that I have always been interested in I liked your piece. The style as a contemp example and madcap setting to informative piece it flowed through a good section of words as viable and exemplary. Moveable and active in verbal qualities, it matched play for good short stories and is a section of suspenseful evil and awakening that becomes a good item for vampire-lovers.
I don't want to change a thing. No spelling or grammar mistakes I could see.
I can't help but say I was very wary about hearing anything about Viet Nam. I was a woman who said, "Come on we don't give a damn, next stop is Viet Nam", and have loved Jerry Garcia for quite a long time now. But you open our readers eyes, Old Warrior. In my opinion, the time to speak is always and now. You have done a good, good job. With info we might easily chew up and throw out if we weren't careful, I myself take into account you have as a background and am thoroughly amazed at this item. Good essay.
Why did I find it easy to admit to "third world" countries? I'm not sure. Poverty? Examination of conscience? But you convince me with Sharp's quote that Marines are Marines and they save Americans. I know I am a small speck on this earth, and I cannot much change, but we all can see change if it can exist and we can write essays such as this to make it happen.
Write on, Old Warrior. Loved examining this essay.
Opening up this week's Mystery Newsletter, I was very excited to read your featured item. It had all of the workings of a peaceful piece of lit that commands the day and arrests us in the night with explanations of Mrs. Manekawala. Lest we forget how to kill, why do we and more.
I liked the note at the end as explanation. As a ficiton.
I noted this in the SPIRITUAL NEWSLETTER. I was interested by it because of the title and went ahead and read it. It is a start. Toward what the poem claims at the end. A good sturdy and thoughtful stanza of poetry in the end of the item deepens the piece. Your nature of speaking is God-given and I liked the line: " I myself have not experienced great suffering but I do not disqualify the possibility of it in my future. In fact, I think it would be rather naïve to think that heartache and loss will not be a part of my experience." It is optimistic and exclusive.
Suggestions for this item would be to continue to support these measures of how to live and reassess the Psalms as you continue writing as you so thoughtfully admitted to doing in your piece. Your essayist piece can be shaped with great things in the future, don't you think?
I liked your explanation of the poem for those that couldn't understand it. Then I read the poem with that in mind, and thought it was really a fascinating poem. Your eluding to your writing as a journey and giving us lines to that effect, was very brilliant. You come through. And then death, as the crocodile.To make this ellusion is also very original and I liked that. You have a great poem here.
Suggestions might me none except that I thought I would point out that you could use grammar changes with periods and non-capitalization where appropriate. Just a possibility.
Thank you for sharing this piece, it was a pleasure to read. With just an opinon, it grabbed me and I liked its lucidness and clever humor. A pretty piece with a bit of stout, you can be assured that it went fast for me and in my case, I followed it.
[e:star}Suggestions. None. This short piece examines life. A "reader's digest" kind of examination. Reality, sweet. But honest.
No grammar/spelling mistakes that I could see. Did you ever hear of never having just a one line paragraph? It's a possibility.
Only Harry could do so. Your book, "Poetry For The Common Man" sounds exciting. Poetry is a good thing. And yours has style and story-line. As I have emailed you before, everyone loves your work. More power to you!
}e:check2} No suggestions for this particular item. Your story is thoughtful and unfrantic. No spelling or grammar mistakes I could see.
I am reviiewing you, Harry, in return for having reviewed me. Thank you.
I loved it. Seeing that you are published poet, I can see how your stories provoke on WDC. I travel to an extraordinary land when I read some of your stuff. It's exclusive. Thanks for sharing it.
A style of your own, no suggestions. No grammar/spelling mistakes appeared to me.
I am returning a review for having reviewed me. Thank you for the review.
I chose a folder of your verse first of all. I then browsed to comment on this poem. It was a very collectively knowledgeable, active voice poem that is very descriptive. Your story-line like lines tell a story about Mt. Baker in a landscape of words that utilized good language to examine where you live. I liked the nature of this kind of poem. Interesting reading.
No suggestions. No spelling or grammar mistakes. The rythym was a bit off, but not too much.
I am reviewing this item for your review of my piece. Thanks so much for your rate/review. Firstly, this piece is great as a paranormal minimal word piece for a short story. As a short shot it's a knockout knowledgeable examination of sight and sound. Obviously, you are very talented and your expertise never wavers here.
No suggestions and no spelling/grammar mistakes that I could find.
Good choice of setting, people, names, and a charming wise epilogue. Best Regards.
I am reviewing for you something for having reviewed me. Thanks.
This piece is ultimately something I would have to read all of to enjoy. What I have digested is so preciously written. Very intimate and descriptively darling. There is much to describing a woman, a man, a child-girl, a child-boy. You appear to know this like the back of your hand.
These through the prompt of symbolism you headed are taken into careful consideration. Excellent.
Saw no mistakes in spelling/grammar.
Endlessly fascinating book, I think. Best Regards and thanks again.
{i]This has an excellent sense of winter's movements. With just a word such as "spewing shards" or "bruising knuckles" we view winter in its tough shell of earth's cold season in a clever way, one that flows with its lines and moves with verbial delight. I liked the poem alot. Grounded in its landscapes, it becomes a picturesque melody.
First Impressions: I thought that this is a superb poem in Cherokee. I love all the lines. The richness of the many images and the sounds and sights of Indian language and work of its people is awesome. There can be no doubt that these are highly interesting for many other WDC members.
Suggestions: I love the long-short lines. I don't have any suggestions on changing what you have. You might easily have good work here. I just adored the line:
It is these I inherit,
these are my gift to those who come after,
a world of precious possessions,
one by one we share the counting,
what greater gift could one give to another, than our love of each other?
I have been told you will accept the chance to be my Rising Star. I will visit you as your work continues. I have already read a Blog of yours and many of the poems without rating them when you let us view your work in 2008. I have also placed you in my bio as part of our ongoing program to promote highly excellent work.
Loved your cultural recipe. Hopefully an authentic recipe I'd like to give you is appropriate for an exchange.
Beef Barley Soup
1 28oz can of diced tomatoes
1 can of beef broth
1 can of chicken broth place in
crock
saute 3 red onions and quarter cup of
tomatoe paste
add to crock
add tyme
1/2 cup of dry red wine
2 carrots
2 lbs of bleded steak
1/2 cup barley
add pepper and cook 8 hours
tnen finish with adding fresh chopped parsley
Voila!
Best Regards. Saw your item in the Newsletters. Thanks.
Feather Duster
vicki
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No suggestions and no spelling/grammar mistakes that I could find.
Saw no mistakes in spelling/grammar.
