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Review of Adam's Memories!  
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


IMPRESSIONS: Grand illusions to which we can only revere. I know that you have a good place here with it. These are tearful images in my mind that reflect what you want Eden to stand for.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Irony, at its best, calms the spirit.

SUGGESTIONS: Again, we go forth into heaven after paradise. Shall it be what we all hope for?


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In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (4.5)


IMPRESSIONS: In as much as I understand this poem, it is very clever. The demand for this can be high. Less words yield more meaning.
Saying less is more.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Do you think you played medium in this contest of Larry's? I think so.

SUGGESTIONS: Good follow-ups.


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In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (4.5)


IMPRESSIONS: Dramatic and worthy words. All taken for us to dream about on Larry's list. I can just see the "Northern lights". Nothing more meaningful than a death at sea. I found the words like an examination. They heaved up into the froth for me. Carry me home. It was a spiritual awakening for me.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: A time of sadness for all of us. The little boat tossed. Your own meaning, your own ground and here you are revealing another world to us. Larry would have loved it.

SUGGESTIONS: Writing with such meaningful direction, we cannot help but prick up our ears.

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In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)


IMPRESSIONS: The repetition of the main line to which gives us the key to the poem is very riveting. It commands the poem. It takes on different shades of meaning as your poem opens up to us and laments through years of war and into the arms of Christ. How sad that Larry Powers cannot be here today to affirm this. Your deepest tears are felt here. I feel them in lines like this in a tribute to Larry. He was deeply a great contest runner. Your own life shines with difficult times and agonizes over life's problems. This is very commendable and I sympathize.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: The irony of giving Larry one last list is a rare and wonderful job. You have a poem with much to say about yourself. You can see here that WDC will not rest without prayers for Larry.

SUGGESTIONS: Write on! It is another day now.

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)



IMPRESSIONS:*Star*: For all those Twilight Fans, you all should read this item. I think that Princess Megan Rose had a great tongue and cheek attitude about going to see a movie, much like the take I recall in a Seinfeld TV show about going off to see a movie. The people she meets there and the fact that this is all a reality in a movie theatre is quite candidly funny.

PRAISE *Star*AND APPLAUSE: There is so much riding on Stephanie Meyers. Three of her books are on the bestsellers list as of this week. She should be recognized. Seeing "New Moon" was a affirmation of such. Your description of the characters was very unique and thorough.

SUGG*Star**Star*ESTIONS: Continue with your off-the-cuff items for us, Princess Megan Rose. They are delightful and a change from some too serious stuff that is too boring. Hail, the vampire queen!

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Review of My Life Thus Far  
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPR*Star*ESSIONS*Star*: I am very impressed with your talking poems, your mainstream. This little biography was so very thorough I feel I know who you are by it. I was glad to note who you are Harry. Seeing that you have a wife, children, grandchildren: this is so vital to everyday life and a biography shines by it.

PRAISE AN*Star*D APPLAUSE: I applaude your accomplishments. I am guessing you are a modest man who just ends up showing up with all these honors. I can feel it in your poetry. A traveler too. A war vet. It is all so praisable. I liked the poem for giving us Harry!

MAIN SUGGE*Star*STIONS: I tell the best of you to write on! It only makes my job on WDC that much more enjoyable. Tell us more.


Thanks for giving us a chance in First Peoples. I am reviewing a Mod for them today.




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In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star*: I am proud to be reviewing a poet whom I think has done superbly in the publishing end of poetry. I noted your collections and commend you. For this: this particular poem, I am quite sure that sestinas ARE very difficult to write. You did remarkably well. I find you have a deep heart for a death. That underneath the words, I could trust you. I don't like vile poems, I don't like bad behavior poems, I don't like hate poems. It's just my preference. This particular poem is a very intimate poem with death and gives a loved one a golden look from the point of view of a January death. Now I think I understand it. I hope I do. I do not sell anyone short when a sad occurence appears. You say you suffered the death over your own guilt. That is intriguing. Many of us have that happen over certain occurences in others fates.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star*: Just to do a sestina is a praisable feat. Your words were clear-cut, not mixed or confusing. From what I took from it, your belief in those in the afterlife communicating with the living may be real. I agree. I love your graphics for this poem.

GRAMMAR*Star*: Excellent. Good form. No spelling mistakes.

MAIN SUGGESTIONS*Star*: Continue to write on! I imagine you know that your sig shop has got to be matchless on the WDC circuit. Lots of things
I just loved to browse. Thank you for that too, ShiSad.



*Leaf1**Leaf2**Leaf3*I am writing this with RAOK in mind. I am a proud member of RAOK.*Leaf1**Leaf2**Leaf3*


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Review of I FEEL THE STORM  
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star*: What a well-constructed poem! It examines much when it warns of the storm. I see the menace that it claims. I see the difficult ending that is justified. Good sense of wisdom. Knowing this, I can only guess what is next with the last stanza.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star*: I think I can be pretty certain that this poem speaks for higher ground. With that in mind, you have done an excellent job of a universal gamble.

SUGGESTIONS*Star*: Write on. I see calm after the storm for you, with many other writings.


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Review of Beautiful Day  
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star*: A commandingly nice poem with its color and depth. I like your sentiment.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star*: With that last line, you have captured me. A good wish for all time.

SUGGESTONS: Keep writing. This is perhaps, not your show, with your mind on long novel pieces, however, poetry of the soul can be healing and very healthy to express.


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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSONS: What an impressive piece. Sharp-witted and brilliant. It becomes a station in life for some and others a warning. I am warned of just such a bird in the cage. Your pursuit of an answer, your pain that comes from where you are at, and your usage of the bird as a symbol gives rise to comment. I liked the line: Surely a song remains in the heart until the soul dies. This piece is indeed a lesson.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I applaud this piece because I identified with it.

SUGGESTIONS: Write on! There is a whole world of discovery on your website. I just touched the surface with this fine piece.

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star*: A Simply Positve Forum feature that I liked. Candid. Well-written with its funny and yet embarassing details.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star*: I like a "Reader's Digest" kind of moment like this. I applaud your honest style with giving me a story about yourself.

SUGGESTIONS*Star*: Write on! A fully competent writer's piece.

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)


FIRST IMPRES*Star**Star**Star*SIONS: At first I was leery of the first line. But as the poem went along, I noted the "Sounds Of Silence" in it. It became for me a times piece and I liked it immensely. I like the activity going on: "humming and buzzing" and "gas-guzzling" and then your wish for silence. A good strong last stanza to get across!

SUGGE*Star*STIONS: Write on, as a newbie you show real talent. I liked seeing on the Newbie Page. It caught my eye immediately. Glad I visited your port.

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Review of Her Lament  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star*: So many writers have taken up this subject: a forlorn heart that cannot mend. Your subject is admirable. It can be very complicated to deal with this subject. Your lines come up with a real drive to show us the sadness and unfortunate consequences of this young woman. I feel you did very well. Your words seek that woman. As if you do not know her, really. "From far away?" Perhaps, you are affected by just this kind of woman in your dreams of her as you write the poem. You praying for her and your advice to her. Applied well, this can be a very good kind of poem. One line has me only slightly confused: The prior beauty must surely delight. This line stands away from the other lines in the stanzas. Delight about what? Then the line: The final moment of agony. This is very consequential. Words such as this imply a deliverance such a death or something sad. If the line were replaced with an optimistic line the stanza would run better. Now the last line has very good capabilities. Its premise is very admirable. However the word "self-hindering" implies what you mean but more than that a word that is more poetic might work.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: This poem took many directions as the lines played out. It became interesting to find the meaning and although it might have been a little forced by the end of the poem it was well-done and equally complicated.

SUGGESTONS: Work with meaning. Find more exactness in your poetry so that you know where your stanzas are going and just what your words mean. WRITE ON!


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Review of Angels Listened  
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: Such a heavenly poem! It speaks with irony and glistens with good cheer and comfort and joy. I liked the earthiness of the stanzas as they examined Christ's death and then jumped back to Mary and Her Son at birth. Nice theme with repitition. Very thorough poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No mistakes appeared to me. Nice formulaic rhyme used.

SUGGESTIONS: Write on! Divine poems are itemized in this folder. Great reading.

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Review of Dare  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star**Star*: Such a natural and fearless poem! I like the description of what you were talking about included so we might really understand it. Your words are quite beautiful and romantical.

SUGGESTIONS*Star**Star*: Write on! I like your style. It has very good magic to it and does not fade even at the last line. Was the horse named "Dusty"?

Saw this in the Noticing Newbies Newsletter. Good show!


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Review of Our Sharing  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)



IMPRESSIONS*Star*: Good lines, succinct and natural, and artistic. I like your philosophy in it. It is a kind of spiritual thing. I like your calling to another, an artist. You have a pen as a shield, a tapestry of words that can colour the world.

PRAISE AND APP*Star**Star*LAUSE: Good sensibility. I like a poem that explains itself. It does not get obscure. Excellent advice in certain lines. I'd love to say it is a "green" poem but I cannot be the one to say.

SUGGESTION*Star*S: The first line seemed a bit too long. Ortherwise, all lines in a free verse form, were very viable.

SPELLNG/*Star*GRAMMAR: No mistakes.

WRITE ON!

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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I liked your awarded poem. You have a consequence that lives up to a good morning. It may even be an emotional poem if you think about it: filled with freedoms.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Good theme to it. Nicely imaged on a "porch". Good finality to the lines which give us that consequence of grace and hope at the end for answers to our problems.

SUGGESTIONS: Write on! You have a very satisifying poem here.

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Review of A few  
In affiliation with  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I am very impressed with your stuff, Edgework. I had asked to see "NEW YORK POEMS", I read them all and gathered a great deal from just noting what a good "voice" you have. Somehow, "GETTING INTO BROOKLYN" is my favorite. And the others that are shorter. Yet the long match-play poems explain themselves and our outstanding even though not as formative. I also love what you did for Haiku in a viable way. I think you know the end of the kite string pretty well and reel it in without too much effort.

CRITICAL: Saw no spelling mistakes. I just wouldn't want to edit these poems. They are simply artistic and very good. No problem.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Your cartoon-magic I guess, I must praise you with. Have you read the comic "Nancy"? It is very famous. Bring it up in NEW YORK and it is affluently an original take on life. Landscapes are great with you.

SUGGESTIONS: Keep writing! I like your style and determination to give us some better place to take us to. Your hunger for the deli man is always advice.

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Review of Ariadne  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)



First Impressions*Star*: When a voyage comes along and we take it, we want to be delivered from our uncertainies, our anxieties. With a good line like "vast ocean of love", the expanse of the poem comes across and I find really involved with the poem even though it is short. I think that Danielle Steel's "Safe Harbour" was a good novel and I read, and offers comfort as in poems like these on WDC. I like the innuencdos of a quite a few poems in WDC. Yours is well-placed and marks time. A good poem to have gathered from '05.

CRITICA*Star*L: I can't catch the form but the three stanzas with a last rhyming line are formattically interesting for verse I did not feel you forced lines and they were good sensation words. No spelling, no grammar that was wrong.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star*: I feel you have a golden moment poem here. It is intriquing and finds an interesting finale with a provoking two last lines.

SUGGESTIONS*Star*: None. This poem I may indeed remember.




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Review of Unexpected Gift  
In affiliation with  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I know that prompts can sometimes be harder to use than easy to and I myself go both way with prompts. I like what you did with this 60's moment of an older woman who had the VietNam vet in mind. The Coke can was carefully placed on the night they shared on the dock. Quite nice as a 60's inuendo Your best prompt was the tabby cat I think. Your usage of her movements and sense of loving her alone as the two men were talked about made the woman curiously distant from goings-on and genuinely mysterious. Despairing, she finds that box an ultimate treasure!

CRITICAL: No spelling mistakes appeared. No grammar that appeared to me as wrong.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I liked the mysteriousness of this piece. I liked its interesting letter-box formula. I liked the use of a letter in it, as I usually do with letters in pieces, and I liked interestingly, Elizabeth as a smaller character, her being brought up as perhaps someone close to Miriam, a young girl who she met at their place of residence and whom she perhaps finds a bother because she is so much younger.

SUGGESTIONS: You could have enlarged on it. But not everything here at WDC is done that way. I'm satisfied. Good job!


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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: What a grand story! And none to sympathetic to a good cause. Love of my family has always been what I have always wanted the crux of my writing to be about. Somehow I have a ways to go.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I applaude the sad case of Bill. Your natural words speak destiny and positivity. I liked the good side of BIll. I know the depth his mighty soul might well take, I think. In general, a good public poem. Good, good stanza:

God made men and men make war, and the graves are filled with tears;
and the weeping voices of the slain, have cried throughout the years

But the end? Even better.

CRITICAL: Nothing spelling wrong. No grammar bloops.

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Review of SAVE A PLATE  
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS: I can't help but tell you how particularly honest you sound with this piece. Being a vet is as our countrymen and women must well know is no easy task. I remember telling you that I admire you and the military. This piece about your grandmother is somehow quaintly nostalgic and gives us first hand impressions of your family. Knowing that your ancestory came from the Civil War is really interesting.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: The way the story was handled deserves praise. I liked the examination you want your readers to think on: what about your social conscience? Is the military getting support? I appreciate your thoughts and it gives me something to lend to my own societal positivity.

CRITICAL: Nothing wrong. Your spelling and grammar was excellent. Good waltzing style of writing that was detailed.


Thanks for visiting my portfolio. I was glad to visit yours.

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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS*Star*: Good little poem concerning the '50's and the beatnik. Very descriptive and suscinct. I think it was good as a tell-it poem, instead of a metaphor poem. Something like a statement. Those who don't know about '50's beatniks would be informed by this piece.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I liked your knowledge of things here. "bagel shops", hmmm, interesting. I'm going to browse the three eras you have to see how this stands up to the others. Excellent jaunt through the times.

SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: In the 10th line, make "definately", "definitely". Other words were spelled correctly.

I am from First Peoples. Glad to read some of your portfolio.


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Review of Love, Mom  
In affiliation with  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Unratable.)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: The thought that I kept in my mind when I read this piece was concentrate on "typos". Where I found one was the last line. where I found a missing word. The piece was done well enough with the last remains of Laura being taken care of. As a writer's cramp, the piece stands with good possibilities for a good story. Cryptically does it stand up? I'd have to think about it. Where does one deliniate what you can get out of a piece and what is supposed to be kept a secret for the author's pleasure?

CRITICAL: A descriptive journey from a cemetary to a will reading is a fast jump. Should it have been? I'm just staying with the thought of a more complete story if it were not a Writer's Cramp. Jake as a symbol? Perhaps?

SPELING AND GRAMMAR: It didn't appear to make mistakes.


I enjoyed criticiquing with A.C.E. in mind.

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star*: What a sweet, comic poem! Your graphics are alive! I like the circus. And when I go, I want to see an elephant!


PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star*: Well-placed colorful lines. I felt that this kind of poem needed to rhyme to be successful and it did. Perhaps, a youngster looking up at the elephant? And then the suspension of disbelief at the end. Cryptic, really. Funny.

SPELLING AND GRAMMAR*Star*: Saw no mistakes.

Enjoyed this feature in the newest Poetry Newsletter.


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