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Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
Chris

I am reviewing this for: Anniversary Reviews.This is a fantastic chapter. You open up the chapter by outlining the setting and the overall plot. This focuses all the reader's attention on the chapter. They will read on. Wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. The reader is pulled along by suspense and gets completely involved in the action in the chapter.The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job...Sindbad


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Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
Chris

I am reviewing this for: Anniversary Reviews.This is a nice and elegant take on army life and conditions with nice expression of command structure.The tone is full aggravation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is pulled along by suspense. They will read to the last word to see if the regime X and Y are subjected to works or not.The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job..Sindbad


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
ForgottenDreams

I am reviewing this for: Anniversary Reviews. This is a nice and interesting twist on lies. The character of Prince Shakar has been deftly handled and was one of the highlights of this sequel. This is a wonderful chapter as it opens with a combination of anxiety and the peace that normal routine always brings. The combination captures all the reader's attention and makes them anxious to know what comes next. They will read on. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. The reader is completely immersed in the plot and continue to read to the final word. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable with nice and elegant twist in the end.. They come across as real people with dynamic twists however some more exploration of King Arnthio will go a long way . Great job...Sindbad


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "9 - Doubts" 
Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
ForgottenDreams
I am reviewing this for: Anniversary Reviews. This sequel was very well balanced and creative. I was impressed with Tammarils take and Ayala explores. I like your careful balance of both the dialogue and the narrative to develop the characters, which helps maintain readers interest. Too much narrative and no dialogue can get boring.
Your handling of the dialogue is good; it sounds natural and fluent. Even the longer speeches, when the characters declare their intent, read as authentic.I'd also like to see you trying to use more literary devices such as metaphor, simile and personification. While your story is a nice piece, you have a tendency to tell the reader e.g she felt angry, rather than show e.g a volcano was exploding inside her. Writing becomes more vibrant and involves the reader more deeply when it uses these devices, and they are fun to write!
It was a pleasure to read your work, and if you'd like me to reread it after you have done any editing, I'm happy to do so.

Sindbad


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
ForgottenDreams
I am reviewing this for: Anniversary Reviews. I have finished with seven of sequel and did find this sequel interesting and beautifully connecting to the previous sequels. As commented I find the scenario and sequence of event very interesting and story takes me to a time wherein my imagination and smooth flow of the story creates a memorable moments.You handle the content of the story well. Having a first person narrator is a useful device in such an emotional story, as it allows the reader to feel closer to the events, thoughts and emotions being portrayed. I like the way you slip in the narrator's back story, so we know a little more about her, but you do it with a deft touch so it does not detract from the focus on the present. Indeed a very strong and well balanced sequel.Thank you for sharing this piece of yours I am looking forward to see and read more of your works again.
Until next reviewing, just keep smiling while stay in writing and reviewing.

Regards

Sindbad


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Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
Chris

I am reviewing this for: Anniversary Reviews.This is a nice and rather detailed introduction on legend of x the boy. There wasn’t too much dialogue in this story as you were recounting events in this story. But what dialogue there was looked good to me. I don’t see any problem with this little of dialogue. Some of, if not most of, the other Reviewers might. They would probably call this telling instead of showing. Personally, I disagree with that. I think that you can show a story with or without dialogue. It all depends on how you write your paragraphs. I did like the free flowing and simple style you have adopted here.I liked your story very Much. Keep on writing..Sindbad


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "7 - White Woods" 
Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
ForgottenDreams

I am reviewing this for: Anniversary Reviews.This is an exciting, fantastic story. The tone is full anticipation and aggression and maintains a clear and subtle flow connecting the previous sequel. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is pulled along by suspense. They will read to the last word to see if Tamairal effort sustains. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about an ancient tradition with technical inputs done beautifully by you. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. I loved that you made Ayala so normal and unassuming. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people.The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

Sindbad


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Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
Sean M. Howland

I am reviewing this for: Anniversary Reviews. This is a nice and interesting title and poem and identifies with lot of readers who have similar past. From the title, the reader got the impression that it would be something like a freefall poem with lot of ups and down. After reading your poem, I can say that the title was perfect for your poem and suited it. It's a freefall with events to follow but the reader can sense the poet's personal feelings, the hits and misses in it as he watches the time go. You have poured so much emotion in it that although I am not a huge fan of turbulent life, even I feel a bit not finished. The vocabulary you had used in your poem was very effective and strong in conveying this emotions to the reader. Other than the conveyed emotions, your vocabulary painted a very beautiful and vivid image in the reader's mind about man wishing his life had been different. That was perfect and my favorite aspect from your poem. Beautiful!

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Sindbad


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Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
The Phantom
I am reviewing this for: Anniversary Reviews. I was impressed with the opening sentence and this short story with style of dialogue and movement of events did leave a deep impression.This was a great read! You accomplish a lot of content with such few words. It also gives lots of opportunity for thought between each sentence. So, many different scenarios that could take place between. Nicely done..Sindbad


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Review of playing with fire  
Review by sindbad
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
sundog

This is a nice and short story I enjoyed reading the same. I was thrilled and excited the way your paced your short story. You were able to relate to childhood memories concurrently with your current feeling. I was impressed with your creative grasp on the topic. Wow. A good style with a nice word flow and a good scenario. A nice play on words and I haven't seen explosion of emotion in so few a word in years. Well written details that were given special attention and good descriptions. Creative, good presentation and great writing. A pleasure to read this...Sindbad


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Review of A Drifting Shell  
Review by sindbad
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
Blackjynx
This is a nice and moving poem with lot of emotions.Overall, I found this to be another well-done and very strong poem. You have a way with words that I really enjoy what you've written and what I've read so far. I hope this little review of mine is helpful. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! Sindbad


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Review of The frozen eyes  
Review by sindbad
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
little red pen

This is nice and mesmerizing poem you have written on a blue eye beauty. A good style with nicely written details and good descriptions. Colorful and fantassy plays a big part here specially-
And she wears her skates to glide over the frozen water some how
She hides her blue eyes behind her eyelids.

Good selection of words and I can see the scenery. Easy to follow with a nice flair. A neat hidden rhyme pattern gives this the right texture and sets the scene. A good imagination at work. Creative with a nice presentation. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure..Sindbad


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Review of WALK ANON  
Review by sindbad
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
Improxablity

This is a nice and elegant take on future of constant connection.A good style with well defined details that you gave special attention to. Good descriptions and you did a good job with 7 steps. I think the 5th step is indeed unique i.e. Access only the suggested services. The words flow well and the message is clear. Good play on words. Good and bad reflections. Colorful and beautifully stated like - Mod. Grant me, the read rights to the content that I can not change, the authority to edit the content I can access, hereby agreeing to the terms of service.. Excellent writing with a good presentation. Thank you for allowing me to view your work. It has been my pleasure...Sindbad


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Review by sindbad
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi
Joto-Kai

This is a nice and short poem on the wire, with beautiful punch stand of at line.A good style with nicely written details. They got special attention. I like the rhyme pattern in some of these lines. They give them a nice flair and a nice bounce like -

When the hammer-coach passes, can I say
I have once again chosen life?

Creative, good presentation and excellent writing..Sindbad


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Review by sindbad
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
inkwell

This is a nice and elegant take on effects of a dream-catcher. You have captured the crux with Art that dulls erratic behavior.A good style with nicely written and defined details. Special attention was given to these. Easy to follow. Nice word flow and lovely reflections. No errors. Creative with a nice presentation. Excellent writing. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure..Sindbad


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Review of The Armory  
Review by sindbad
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi
Aelyah

This is a nice and creative take on old and pristine history. As a reader I did appreciate and learn your creative talent in creating an interesting read with lot of research to maintain readers interest as well. A good style with this and you said a lot in a few words. A neat rhyme pattern sews the words together and gives this a nice bounce. A good presentation and a pleasure to read..Sindbad


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Review by sindbad
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi
The Milkman

This was a pleasure and correct occasion to explore your interesting and informative portfolio. Wish you a very happy and eventful 16th anniversary with WDC. You have distinguished yourself and have made a role model with your contribution and involvement. The poem has left deep impression with nice and strong yearning and subtle nuances like
Eyes closed, what's she dreaming about,
these feelings, make me shout,
above the clouds, above the rain
"Does she feel the same?"

Easy to follow. A nice tone and a beautiful play on words. Nice romantic sentiments, and wonderful imagination. Creative with an excellent impression to one and all readers...Sindbad

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Review of Soliloquy  
Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
kalai

This is a nice and touching poem on your exploration and final self actualization. As a reader certain words did leave deep impression specially,
That the heart of stone has softened...
that the icy facade has melted..

I got a boost and inspiration with the last line to finally live. No errors as you wrote from the heart. Excellent impression, with all the best for the sixteenth anniversary with WDC...Sindbad

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Review of Bumble Boy  
Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
RadioShea

This is a nice title and story of Bobby was intriguing. I found this to be very engaging. I really loved the plot, but of course as with many stories I read here, I want to know more. It sounds like a great plot for an extended story or novella. I enjoyed it, but also not surprised at your talent for writing. It's so engaging and easy to read. Exactly what I love. Awesome job..Sindbad


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Review of Candle  
Review by sindbad
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
Jim Dorrell

This is a nice and elegant piece I did feel like expressing my take on the same. Candle as we all are familiar with has so many different uses, you have chosen and written this poem in such a way that as a reader I will fall in love with a candle. If not, a reader will certainly place a candle in a high esteem. I did like your style of explaining the nitty gritty- a fuel source, heat, and oxygen indeed. This enhances the reading quotient. However from another standpoint you have expressed all different facet of candle and its usability, so omitting the above words will maintain crispiness in your poem. Overall an excellent and creative take on candles..Sindbad


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Review by sindbad
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
Tim Chiu

As an introductory comment on this prose, I have been a great fan of your poem. Like other poem this poem reflects and highlights the main nuance. Natures lack of precipitation and its consequence has been expressed in a unique and vibrant manner with strong words like -
Harboring ill will on its wild denizens -
An unbroken pattern soon to wreak havoc
On beleaguered, malnourished herds
Of the now ghostly and sickened land.

This makes the reader aware of distinctive and populous realm. I did notice the connection between precipitation and its unique structure with the rest of the poem, however I will appreciate some short background synopsis as that will ignite the true meaning and creative unfolding of your poem. Overall this is a nice and bold step towards addressing the Unholy...Sindbad


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Review by sindbad
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
Tim Chiu

This is a nice and divine idea you have penned in a creative and joyful manner. I have been a great fan of your poem and the way you address certain deep or lighter topic hits certain nuances. Your poem in short leaves a radiance memories. Good job in the chosen words to be the title, and using it to describe chorus of angel, it gives a good reflection to the reader and creates a good imagery...Sindbad


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Review by sindbad
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
RadioShea

This like your other works, is no less a master piece. A good style with well defined in depth details this has good imagery and gives one a peaceful feeling. Easy to follow with a nice tone. Good word flow. A neat rhyme pattern gives this a nice texture and a good flair. Creative with a good presentation. No errors. Excellent writing. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure...Sindbad


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Review by sindbad
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
Tim Chiu

I am so loving reading your work! You have reposited my interest and inclination to explore more of the creative vibes in your poem.

This poem was amazing and I can easily see why it was worth the read for people enjoying vacations in Las Vegas. This tells the tale of truth and the reader can easily fall right into the scene that you have pulled them into. Your expressive words are so soothing and lulling, the reader gets lost like - Saving some dimes while not having to scoff.. I love that as I was reading it. I could almost feel my involvement here...could feel quick burst, that bubble....you write from the heart and soul and you can feel it when you read it.


Great job and so very well written!!

Sindbad


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Review of Cockroach  
Review by sindbad
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
Kalixta

This is a nice and short take on a sleepless night and we beat on.I really liked this poem...in a matter of a few lines you flood the reader with memories of their with bug eyes and probing antennae. Great job and so very well written!!

Sindbad


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