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Every word we put to paper comes from someone else. We learn from parents, teachers, books, movies, idle conversations - our entire life becomes our source material. The only thing that's original and unique is our choice of how we put the words together. To be 100% honest, we'd have to credit the Dictionary, Thesaurus, and Google for every poem and story. I may suggest changes in my review. This is not meant as 'serious' literary criticism (I’m no expert). It's merely my record of the ‘bumps’ I encounter as I travel through your words. If I'm thrown by a typo, an awkward word, or a line that doesn't scan, then it's likely that others will be as well. My intent in giving a review is to applaud your work and maybe help you to improve it. A review is merely another reference to consider. If the suggestions prove useful, then use them. If I ‘just don’t get it’, then by all means ignore me! Only the author can take credit for the final words, no matter what the source.
I'm good at...
My co-workers used to call me a 'typo savant'. Apparently, I read letter by letter instead of word by word. This is both a gift and a curse. I am often distracted by a typo when I should just move on in the story.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Mystery
Least Favorite Genres
I'm not a big fan of romance writing.
Favorite Item Types
Poetry
Public Reviews
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice piece with a lot of interesting facts about our favorite author! I enjoyed learning more about his background, and the questions from and about the various books are a nice touch. I taught my preschool age kids how to read with the help of the good doctor and they surprised their teachers when they went off to kindergarten. You could add something about his political cartoons, but they are definitely not intended for children!

Words Whirling 'Round


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Review of I Miss You  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a beautiful poem that describes the grief of losing a loved one. It also touches on the regret of interpersonal tension and lost opportunities.

You've done a good job of evoking the recurring feelings of loss and regret by thematically repeating the last line in successive verses.

My only critique is for the line "Was I can see you no more". It doesn't seem to scan properly and interrupted the flow as I read. Perhaps your line "I cannot see you anymore" would work better?

I think you show real talent, please keep writing.


Warm regards,
Terrence Fisher


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Review of The Struggle  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Congratulations! This is very well written.

I don't always agree with the judging in the poetry contests, but I have to agree that this one deserves the prize. I don't see anything that I would change.

I know depression is difficult to deal with and even more difficult to admit. I had a bout with depression some years ago. Medication made me functional and counseling helped, but it wasn't until I took 'control of my will' that I actually came out of it.

Thank you for sharing,
Terrence Fisher


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Review of HEART ON A TREE  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Monty,

This is a beautiful thought and well written. I especially like the first verse.

I do have some suggestions to submit for your consideration:

1. 'much the same' instead of 'as the same'
2. 'still it remains' instead of 'still there remains'
3. 'love's old mark' instead of 'that old mark'

Please let me know if this kind of suggestion is inappropriate and I'll leave them out of future reviews.

Warm Regards,
Terrence Fisher


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Review of No excuses  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome to Writing.com! I've been posting poetry here for about four months and I've found it to be a positive experience. I hope it works for you as well.

There is some heartfelt truth here. Congratulations on putting it out there! I know it isn't easy to open up about such personal feelings. Honest reflection is the first step toward a positive change or a more peaceful acceptance of who we really are.

Good luck and keep writing,
Terrence Fisher




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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "March 25, 2019 II
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Well done!

You've captured something worth reading as well as adhering to the required format. The images are slightly disturbing and that's what makes it interesting. I've known elderly princesses who smell of 'boozy' perfume and your verse evokes those memories well.

My only nit to pick is the dash in 'Cinder-Ella'. To me it seems an unnecessary break? Of course it's your poem and you may have a good reason for adding it.


Keep writing well!
Terrence Fisher


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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a well constructed poem with good advice for anyone.

I'm not a big fan of free verse, but this hooked me and made me want to read on to the finish. The grammar and punctuation look good to me.

My one humble suggestion: I think "repeat past glories" is a more active statement than "relive past glories".

Either way, it's a good piece.

Keep writing!


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Review of Daddy's Way  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well written!

I really enjoyed this bit of nostalgia (for me). I remember well the struggle to contain my son's little 'fire-hose' while simultaneously keeping track of a wet diaper, a dry diaper, and a couple of sharp pins. Success was ending up with the same amount of wet things that I started with!

Your characters are true to life and there was a nice chuckle at the end. Sure, he got the job done, but Will knew well that it wasn't done well.

Also, you might be amused to know that I've started carrying a bag (OK, purse) in my old age (cell phone, wallet, notebook, sun glasses, reading glasses, etc). One of the items in the bottom of my bag is a roll of one inch wide, Gorilla Brand duct tape!

Keep writing and giving us a bright spot in our day!

Terrence Fisher



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Review of The Artist  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice story. It's well written and I enjoyed reading it.

You have some good images, the characters are believable and the dialogue felt natural.

However, there are some small typos and grammatical issues that I would like to point out in the spirit of making it even better:

         with their complements compliments and whispers

         grabbed some fancy appetizers and a napkin

         make them buy some of my other artist’s work

         in the twenty's or thirty's twenties or thirties,

         He sat set the empty plate

         a man in his thirty’s thirties

         some photograph’s photographs of his other work

         David recognized the attention to detail and the potential

         That first day, when he walked down this hill and set up his easel, was the beginning

         rock wall below him, waiting at the barrier that prevented her from coming with him


I hope you find these suggestions helpful!

Terrence Fisher


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Review of Beach-stained  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Nice job!

You've got some great images here and the rhythmic flow is good.

The poem works well with the photo.

I don't quite get the title, the word 'stained' doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem. I think a more positive word would work better. But that's just my opinion.

Overall, a nice piece.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
It takes a lot of courage to put this out for the world to see. I hope writing it helps you to work through the conflicting feelings and emotions. We can't really know what you're dealing with, but you've given us a glimpse into an unfulfilled want that is all too common.

Keep your head up!


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Review of Saving Grace  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Well done!

I like the overall tone of the story and it developed nicely. The ending may not have been entirely unexpected, but it felt a bit 'tingly' even so. The characters were believable and the dialogue seemed natural.

The only nit I have is a typo - "pants and shirt with bunched up in the corner."

I'm pretty sure you meant 'were' instead of 'with'

A nice piece overall


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow! That's powerful imagery. I like your use of "approved poisons". There's a tension here because some of your "dangerous masses" actually do have venom. It's safer, but cowardly, to sacrifice the innocent along with guilty. I'm not expert enough to give you advice for improvement, but I think you're on the right track here. Keep up the good work.

- Terrence Fisher


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I like what you've done here! I'm a fan of poetry with rhyme and meter and you've included both. Your rhyme scheme is a bit different, but I think that's a good thing. Your narrative is consistent and makes sense within the confines of your chosen structure - something that takes real skill. I don't presume to be knowledgeable about poetry, I merely applaud what I like. I like this.

- Terrence Fisher


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