First Impression: This is a spooky story and I thought it involved ghosts but it was a paranormal of another kind. I was intrigued and so I had to read more to see what was going on. I read this and will be giving my observations. I wasn't disappointed. I was spellbound and curious.
What needs your attention: I really don't know what needs improving. It was a vampire and not a ghost. The vampire didn't win and that is a good thing. I would like to know what Emily, the vampire looked like.
What part I liked best: This is a castle, not a haunted house. An old man and huis man servant. I like the man servant term. I like that Andrew was fighting a vampire and not a ghost. The characters are well defined and so is the storyline.
Overall Impression: Looks like you spent time with this. A good style and easy to follow. I a glad I read this in the daytime and not at night. Creative and colorful. Spooky an dark. Looks like the mission was successful. A good style. I like the gothic effect of the castle. I wonder if Emily is related to Dracula. An excellent presentation.
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First Impression: I am not a fan of Baseball but this story looked inviting so I am dropping by with my observations. Some of the baseball lyrics are in this story and they blend well into the story. I always liked them. Seems like the young man was anxious to see the game. I went with it. Spending time with one's father is so important and this story does just that.
What needs your attention: I didn't really see a mystery to this. No one was murdered. The man lived his life and remembers his father. His Dad didn't die mysteriously. This story holds a reader's interest due to it to being a family thing.
What part I liked best: The boy was close with his father and in the end, he saw what Heaven would be like so he went towards the light. Heart touching. I like the baseball lyrics. The conversations with the man's father is interesting.
Overall Impression: This is well written and the characters are interesting. Looks like you spent time with this. This makes you want to sing. The conversation tells the story pretty much. The ending is appropriate and ended both happy and sad.
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First Impression: I see this a murder mystery. A woman who is old and no one has seen her. Her and the woman was managing with help from her friends. This looked interesting so I decided to read it and give my observations on this story.
What needs your attention: The mystery isn't solved about who murdered her. Her dead husband talked to her. She played chess and I guess there is mystery to what chess has to do with it. I am not good at solving murder mysteries. Did her dead husband murder the woman?
What part I liked best: The dog is holding chess piece in his mouth. The dog knows something no one else does it seems. This mystery is spooky but draws the reader in. Some interesting characters. A good style and this gets the reader's attention. I like that a portion of the story is in italics. This adds intrigue to the story.
Overall Impression: Looks like you spent time with this. A good story line. Makes you wonder why was one of the Chess pieces was missing. I am curious. Creative and colorful. The reader doesn't go away disappointed. Just asking questions like me.
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Everything you wanted to know about bowling but was afraid to ask. Good descriptions and a nice style. Easy to follow. Creative and colorful. A neat rhyme pattern puts the words in motion and rounds this out with a good flair. You kept this interesting. Always: Megan
I have a cat who likes to eat egg and cheese off my McDonald's sandwiches. She loves turkey lunch meat. I don't go out a lot. I am retired. Nigel sounds like a good cat. This is creative and easy to follow. Sometimes a cat is all we need. I enjoyed reading this. Always: Megan
Nicely written details and a good word flow. Sounds like a secret love who is mysterious. This draws you in and you are in anticipation with the character wondering who the mysterious character is and what he wants. A good style and well rounded characters. Christmas season is full of surprises. A good presentation. Always: Megan
Nicely written details and tvus reminds me of my father. He died four months ago and he was in pain. I didn't want him to go. I knew it was for the best. Some heartwarming moments and sas reflections. Easy to follow. Looks like you spent time with this. A good presentation. Always: Megan
First Impression: I started to read this and this person parks their car and decides to jog instead of drive. I was wondering if he or she would have an adventure. I was ready to see what happens next. I decided to get right into this. I am relaxed and ready to do this.
What needs your attention: I think you have this covered. I guess you don't want to say what state this is or maybe it is just fictional. Benton Road and Pease Road Hill are good names for the areas.
What part I liked best: Almost bumping into a surprise doe jogging and saying she is beautiful. I drove past one every morning and I named her Felicia. Chatting with the cardinals. I like the descriptions of the scenery. Sweet smelling blossoms. Houses with large gardens,. The sun and the hills. I feel like I was jogging here, too.
Overall Impression: The roads most often taken. Enjoying seeing the doe and birds and the different roads. It seems like you saw more of the land by jogging rather then jogging. Creative an d colorful. A good style and easy to follow as this holds the reader's attention. Looks like you spent time with this. Good call.
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First Impression: I see this short story involved a plant. A Man believing a plant has a bond with him and vice versa I thought this sounds interesting and I want to read more. This looked interesting so I am here reviewing this.
What needs your attention: A man being separated from his wife and kids for years. Seems like there should have been an answer. The plant dying. The man thinking his dreams died, too. I guess I don't think that way.
What part I liked best: The man learned American. Went to an American College. Things were looking up. Baseball fans cheered the man on to be a US Citizen.
Overall Impression: Well rounded characters and looks like you put some thought into this. He did act like the plant was some sort of crystal ball. He decides it is time to go get his family to be with him. Priceless. Creative and maybe the plant did have magic. This holds the reader's interest and has a good style. Some interesting character names. I admired the main character for his progress. I enjoyed reading this. Looks like you spent time with this. A good presentation.
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First Impression: I saw that this was about a man and his car. The car was old and seems to still run. Looks like there is some humor here and a poem that I wanted to read. I sat back and decided to go for it. Here I am. I am reviewing this.
What needs your attention: I am not sure if the title should be about The Car. Maybe it could be called The Views From The Road or Reflections.
What part I liked best: Why does the road have possums in the daytime? Boy, was my face red when she bought out the cat. I appreciate the humor in this. The blossoms not surviving the heat. A fireside chat by the beach. Good call.
Overall Impression: A good scenario. The word prompts blended in well with the story. Easy to follow with a good tone. Creative as well as colorful. A neat rhyme pattern sews the words together and rounds this out with an impressive flair. This poem made me smile and laugh. I have to ask why was the cat bought to the beach? Heart touching the wife was the love of your love. Getting the blossoms for her. Good call even though they wilted. A good presentation. I was able to keep up. I like that.
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First Impression: I saw that you wrote for The Writers Cramp. I have read your poems and stories before so I had no problem jumping in to check this out. Spring time. Cherry blossoms. A few words here but a few words are all you need to tell story or a poem. I am here. I decided to go with my instincts and read this. Good introduction in the beginning.
What needs your attention: Maybe you could have included descriptions of Korea. Like the flowers and trees and if there is a body of water near by as well as birds and squirrels. A rhyme pattern would have been nice but this worked out as well.
What part I liked best: The cherry blossoms. Stopping off for a chat. Getting coffee. Spending time with someone and relaxing. We. I assume you mean your wife. This is in the spring time. Some good reflections and I felt peaceful as I read this.
Overall Impression: A good scenario. This is creative and colorful. Serene. A spring time day that is warm brings out the best in a person. Easy to follow and I could see the cherry blossoms. A good presentation like always.
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First Impression: I saw this was about summer and a couple in love but are having an affair. I thought I would read and see what is going down. The poem had good reflections and got my attention. I read it and these are my observations.
What needs your attention: I wondered where did this couple meet and how they were able to get away from their spouses. This makes you want to read more.
What part I liked best: I like this that this combines summer and winter. Blossoms is more then just flowers. A good romance poem and I do enjoy romance. I appreciate the romantic sentiments and overtones. Heart warming poem.
Overall Impression: You used the prompt words well and they blend in together. Looks like you spent time with this. Do we touch? If the couple is having a relationship, they do touch. In winter, they just talk on the phone. Sad. Looks like the relationship can't go any further. The reader feels for the couple but wonders about their spouses. A good style and easy to follow. The heat of the summer, a distant memory. A blush blossoms pink on my cheek. Colorful metaphors. A good scenario and the words blend well together. This poem was well defined and looks like you spent time with this.
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Nicely written details and a good reflections. Easy to follow we do need God but it is hard. Watching a candle burn makes it easier to think and hope. Some food for thought. This is uplifting and inspiring . A neat rhyme pattern puts the words in motion and rounds this out with a good flair. A nice scenario and I enjoyed reading this. Always: Megan
Nicely written details and the woman ghost sees her husband visits and tries to touch him but he doesn't know she is there. He is sad and so is she. Some good and sad reflections. Easy to follow and looks like you spent time with this. A good style. Sad and a good presentation. Always: Megan
Nicely written details and my father was in Vietnam and was a Flight Engineer. He died four months ago. I didn't always appreciate what he did for a living but I do now. Some good reflections and some sad ones. Easy to follow with a good style. Good descriptions and you honored the military well. A good presentation and we do have respect and love for our military. I enjoyed reading this. Always: Megan
Nicely written details and old man winter is being cruel this year. We are getting snow in April and didn't have much snow this winter and it is cold in Indiana. A good style and this holds the reader's interest and is easy to relate to. Creative and a neat rhyme pattern puts the words in motion and rounds this out with a good flair. A good presentation. Always: Megan
Nicely written details and I am glad someone is having spring and theirvwinter is over. Well rounded characters who are married and in the news business. Suitable dialogue and I appreciate the humor in this. Planning a get away trip that is romantic. Entertaining. Always: Megan
First Impression: I saw that this was about ghosts so I had to read this. I worked in an old county building that was haunted with ghosts and I had encounters so I can relate. I had to read this and I knew it would peak my interest. I couldn't wait to get started. The house stands quietly as it has for years now. It is over a hundred years old and no one has lived there in over a decade. These lines gave me the chills and I knew I was ready for this story. I started reading.
What needs your attention: The ghosts communicated with apps on a machine. Maybe if she saw a real ghost would have been interesting. This is spooky also. The message comes out clear and the ghosts get their message across.
What part I liked best: The descriptions and the beginning. It giver you chills. Messages on the machine. You feel anxious for the character and like I said, there were ghosts where I worked at. This draws me in. I like any ghost stories and I read them and watch them on TV.
Overall Impression: Looks like you spent time with this. These ghosts are well rounded characters and are smart enough to send messages on an app on a machine. Creative and a good style. This holds the reader's interest. The person not wanting to join the track team and driving down the road where the ghost house was. I get that. A well written story.
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First Impression: Characters are important in romance, comedy, crime and every genre. I wanted to read your views so I stopped by and started reading. I was hooked from the first sentence and read this all the way through. I am familiar with your work and style as well as your creativity. I smiled as I read this. We say what a character. It takes on a whole new meaning.
What needs your attention: I know this is about characters in Drama but I was hoping to see romance. Dramatic characters are in romance, too but I think this applies to all characters in a dramatic situation. This is a go.
What part I liked best: Dean Koontz talking about Elvis's ghost. Each dramatic scene should belong to a character. Good call. Daphne du Maurier's character Rebecca stuck a chord with me as it refreshed what I remember about her. Attitude is important in a dramatic scene. Good call.
Overall Impression: You did your research well, had experience writing this and held the reader's interest. Looks like you put your heart in this. A great presentation.
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First Impression: I like daffodils and with spring being at a slow pace, I thought I would read something that makes me happy and optimistic about spring. I like prose poetry about nature and so I chose this. Beneath a frozen blanket, lie daffodils in slumber. Good call. Nice opening lines. I was ready to read some more so I stay in tune and read this prose.
What needs your attention: Maybe you could mention a hint of sunshine. Maybe mention another type of flower and if it slumbers as well.
What part I liked best: Spring rays reaching under. Nodding it's frilled face. Soothing the psyche of a paused observer. Some good reflections and I could picture this in my mind.
Overall Impression: Creative and colorful. Easy to follow. I like the style and I like prose. A nice play on words. Well chosen words. I can picture Jack Frost as he painted the flowers to sleep. This is peaceful and spring seems to be in this poem. I enjoyed reading this.
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First Impression: I have been curious about air balloons so this caught my eye and I decided to read this. I enjoy romance and wanted to read a romance as well as pretending that I am in an air balloon. I am here going to read this.
What needs your attention: A Man who was mean falls out of the balloon and is now deceased. I hope they didn't leave him there. It was an accident. This is an interesting twist to the story.
What part I liked best: Leo seems like a bad guy and picks on Leeann. She dropped the camera. After Leo falls over the side, the story seems to have a happy ending. Every story needs some excitement. I like the description of the scenery. The dialogue is suitable.
Overall Impression: The woman and her husband seem happy and the balloon ride and trip seem to work for them. The characters are interesting and well structured. Some good drama and suspense. A good style and I like the scenery. Looks like you spent time with this.
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Nicely written details and I have been through a lot of hurt and pain from relatives and friends. These are some words if comfort and good advice. Easy to follow and looks like you spent time with this. Sounds like you had experience with this. A good presentation and well chosen words. Acceptance. We do need to practice that. Always: Megan
First Impression: I had a guy in high school who bullied me and others. I had to read this hoping this guy would get what was coming to him for being a jerk. I was drawn to this and wanted to read this. It didn't disappoint. He traveled on a tram a lot so I knew he was bound to get more then he bargained for. I read on.
What needs your attention: A light changed him. I was thinking maybe a Nun would swat him and I was hoping for that. Maybe this could be considered along with the light. Otherwise, everything in this poem was handled.
What part I liked best: Graham singing I'm bad. The Nun and priest keeping their eye on him. The light. Maybe the light was from God and it went through the bully. The point was played out and the bully learned a lesson.
Overall Impression: Looks like this was fun to write. The rhyme pattern worked out well. I wish the bully I knew would have learned a lesson. A good style and easy to follow. Entertaining. A good presentation.
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First Impression: A letter to a family member. My sister and I Met late in life and got to know each other through letters. I was drawn to this and wanted to read this. I was an only child and I am always curious about people and their siblings.
What needs your attention: You have to read this and you realize the brother die. I was thinking you could say it at the top of the letter before you start writing it but you read it and then you get it.
What part I liked best: The words were heartfelt. You ask God why and you told your brother how you feel. I like to think our deceased relatives know we care and if we write a letter, they can read it from where they are now. You told your brother you are grateful. This made me smile.
Overall Impression: The rhyme pattern rounds this out. Looks like you spent time with this. Creative and the words were chosen well. This drew the reader in. I lost my father a few months back, so I get this. I enjoyed reading this.
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First Impression: I like pumpkins, orange and white. I knew this was a poem about a pumpkin so I like Halloween items. I decided to read this. I know your writing doesn't disappoint. I smiled and read the first line. I met Jack. He drove all the pumpkins bats. I am in. I wan to read about Jack. He sounded cute.
What needs your attention: Looks like you got this. Dracula could have adopted this pumpkin and let it guard his casket. Just a thought. Seems like Jack had it handled.
What part I liked best: The ghost became the whiner and Jack was the hero. The ghost got the witch's hat and her cat. The rhyme pattern made this entertaining and I was happy as I read this.
Overall Impression: I enjoyed the rhyme pattern. I like the cat and the ghost. A fun read and looks like you had fun with this. I am ready for Halloween after reading this. I wondered if the black cat dances. This poem has something for everyone who likes Halloween. Creative, a good style and entertaining.
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