There’s amazing enthusiasm for life in spring in this free style poem.
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Features of both spring and winter are shown in respective images.
For the winter stricken people and places, the sun and winter of March are a welcome change.
“Spring has brought my laughter back”
The sober, solemn and the drab winter undergoes a mercurial change with the onset of spring and summer.
Warm days with cool winds, and overflowing exuberance find a spontaneous expression in this beautiful poem.
Wonderful story on the bonding between the brothers.
Simon is both caring and sensible. His sense of humor stands out. Jamie is quite successfully diverted from being a frightened boy to one who enjoys being a part of his brother’s swashbuckling pirate story. His imagination lights up too.
“I want one with pirates….A dragon!…or may be ….”
An inspiring story for brothers!
Language, style, character and dialogue are excellent.
Hello Marie,
expressing your mind through writing is the right way to get your mind cleansed of worry and anxiety.
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I can understand how hurt you are by the circumstances.
But the fact that you are raised by great foster parents balances the hurt and “abuse” you went through.
You say you love your parents. You trust them alright as I understand.
The experiences you had might have taught you the importance of living with satisfaction.
Edit-
“lieing”
(lying)
Use capital I instead of i when you refer to yourself.
Hi Rebecca,
I totally agree with you. We should learn to be grateful for the nice things we are given. One should be particularly thankful if he or she is blessed with good health and able to enjoy life fully.
More often we hear people complaining which could create problems springing from discontent.
“I have learned to love my life everyday,”
If this happens to all, the world would be bereft of discontent.
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Scars are inevitable for every human being. I appreciate the way you justified scars.
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As you rightly pointed out, every life has a story behind it, which is secretive, unknown and less talked about. Often it is hurtful and scary. A person’s effort to get away from its grim shadow, makes his life. Scars do not matter anymore.
“ stitch me shut
Seal wounds
…… cling to some hope.”
It sums up the life with scars.
There’s nothing shameful about scars. They are like a hero’s mementos.
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You told your story with appeal. It sounds like an autobiography in brief. Season, age, place of living, weather, likes , health and social status and tastes are honestly and humorously stated.
All in all, it mirrors a contented and a light spirited person, whom anyone would like to be friendly with as I do.
I like the rhythm and flow of the free style poem.
I appreciate your essay on perfection. My review of it is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
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As you have pointed out, achieving perfection is a good goal. It challenges our abilities and efficiency.
It also serves as an inspiration to do better.
On the other hand, it might put a dampener on one’s enthusiasm. Failure to achieve might cause disappointment, hopelessness and depression.
After achieving the goal, the biggest challenge is to maintain that momentum. It’s humanly impossible to continue with perfection whatever might be field we choose. Brain and body are not forever lucid, young and active.
Working towards perfection is good both physically and mentally. It contributes to our overall wellness and happiness.
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Heart break is shown vividly as a day dawns. What a shock to have discovered that love has left your side and that you find yourself absolutely miserable.
“Pieces lay scattered on the floor…”
Love is not love if it alters at any point in time.
So this is not true love if it’s not steadfast.
It is better to be alone than to trust the wrong person.
Imagery is visual and effect of being lonesome is crystal clear.
Scriptophobia is supposed to spring from some source. It could be a bad experience of writing while in school or working at home.
Ability to imagine but inability to put pen to paper might be due to fear. Fear of being criticized or looked down on. It could also be due to laziness. Writing takes an effort. It needs the writer to gather his thoughts together and write them down with clarity. It should be well organized as well.
It’s really a strange case. I have never come across someone with imagination could not write.
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My review of it is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
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I notice that you deal with what, why and how regarding subject i.e gold light.
There are two sides to this topic , physical and spiritual.
While it has the golden sun spreading light and joy around world, it could also mean the dawning of spiritual enlightenment that spreads joy through the world.
I find the article vocal enough regarding the effects of “change” in life.
I am glad to note that you have not only defined change, but also gave an example from your personal life. It’s an inspiring example that could help people understand the benefits of change.
I, for one do not welcome change. Yet, when circumstances push me to it, I take it into my stride and get best out of it.
Change certainly makes me not to become too attached to a place, people and routine.
It brings in a soul search persuading a person to see the hidden potential of self.
This is what had happened with me and I appreciate the same.
Hi Tracker,
the nightmare of having a heart attack and coming out of it is very clearly shown.
I find the article informative and useful.
The exact state of mind while you go through it is brought before the reader very well indeed.
Human beings are truly unique. Even under extreme circumstances, you were aware of the past and the possibilities of future.
Congratulations on coming back to normalcy after going through a rough heart condition.
I largely appreciate the conclusion in which you told us the lessons that you learned from the above experience.
Language is lucid and the style is simple and easy.
Looks like an interesting intro to the story you have on your mind.
A twelve year old in a seat of authority, sounds curious. It makes me to want to know the back story that led to the present situation.
Description of the young one and his or her trained emotions certainly makes the reader expect a good story.
She died like the warrior she lived. A warrior of peace and love. I can see the price she paid was high. Obviously, there are people in power, who hated her guts and extracted the price. One voice was silenced. But several others might rise, inspired by her sacrifice.
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It is pleasure reading this haunting story from your port.
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I like the way she controlled the crowd purely by her peaceful attitude.
No wonder the guards too held her in deference.
We all have our heroes of freedom struggle from whom we draw inspiration and try to emulate their courage and selflessness.
Language and style, characters and location win my heart.
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The new snow is like a new playground for the dogs,
When winter comes, outdoors become rather restricted for fear of cold and snow. But as a mild sun breaks through the clouds, it's time to let the dogs out.
I can see the dogs and listen to their barking at the squirrel in the tree and chasing bunnies under the fence.
What cheer it would be to the doggies!
They look obedient to have followed the call and run back into the house hoping for another day of frolic in the snow come tomorrow.
Summoning the storm is none other than the familiar evil, the serpent.
Poet's imagination takes us all the way to the Garden of Eden and the serpent that despoiled its peace and glory.
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What I like-
The imagery which makes me believe it.
The gathering storm on the horizon.
Its quality of damaging stability and safety.
The figures of speech you used.
" Cold and envious, his anger seethes," (Personification)
"Their soft pink petals
basking in the orange glow of the moonlight --(visual imagery)
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Indeed, plumbing is an important part of house construction.
Like the elements that take care of life, the skilled personnel see to the long life of a house. Antiquity and environment seem to weaken houses, at least in my part of the world.
“weak pressure
crawl space flood”
Onomatopoeia helps me see the damage to pipes and the purse as well.
You are right.
Nothing much to do except
“watch
wait
wonder”
It could truly be a testing time when it happens with guests at home.
this is truly a captivating story.
I loved the narrative style and the first person point of view.
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Here is the gentleman lost down in the memory lane even as he went fishing.
This is one way of rediscovering the pleasures and pains of past, which certainly plays a pivotal role in our present and future. Isn't man a summation of all the three phases of life?
The decision to let the big fish go is clearly an indication of change of heart. He was able to relate with it with regard to age and experience.
I can see that fishing is good for mind and spirit.
"They seemed to share a moment of understanding and of respect as she was lowered into the water."
The end seems to show the gift for an act of kindness loud and clear in the return of his long lost son's family back to the fold.
This poem sounds like a tribute to winter beauty. Each season has its own merits of glory.
I am lucky to have chosen this poem that won accolades to review for your WDC Account Anniversary.
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Winter goes against your "expectations". Glad it did so. The coolness in the January snow, the joy of spring, the rainy skies of July, the clear blue of summer skies; the list of nature's charms is endless.
You have a perfect eye of appreciation as I could glean from the poem.
"No melancholy, only contentment,"
Thank you so much for three definitions of the word “momentum”.
It’s great to maintain momentum in reaching goals.
I have different goals needing momentum. Some slow, some rapid.
I found out by experience how tough it is to keep the progress undisturbed.
I try to maintain the progressive nature of work both domestic and in work outside of it.
Sometimes, procrastination intercepts my momentum. I need to put in double effort to bring it back to my normal speed.
I realise we need to be disciplined to maintain momentum.
I would call them perfect things of contentment.
I spotted this poem of things of beauty in "Random Scribblings." Lucky to have found a kindred soul.
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Books, pens and people colour your choices, your favourite things.
I am impressed that you have wrapped up an entire life of joy in this free style poem.
"Big Mom, Aunt Minnie, Aunt Mae" make it even more interesting and set me thinking of your warmth towards them.
I will add new books with a delightful scent of their own to (my) list.
The little girl's love for mom is depicted with great imagery.
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The infant is described so well that her sweetness reaches out. The spark divinity is so tangible in her angelic face.
"Captured the moment when tears met the smile.!"
Her bond of affection to her mother dear is something that never fades, loving her forever.
Human beings are so lucky that they have a mother to bless them and take care of them till the end.
I like the way she found out the long awaited answer to a question on her mind.
This boy seems more knowledgeable than the others, who couldn't help her understand the stars.
I am impressed by the fact that we rediscover here, namely, the stars are forever, lasting for eons.
" “I think they mean forever. I think they mean lasting longer than we are alive. Shining out like that. Like they want to be seen.” "
Come to think of it, I do see the glitter and twinkle of a star that lend company for countless lonely people, anew.
Language and style are a true draw besides the meaningful message.
Old Hull wears a historic grace, catches the eye of the viewer during the pale sunset.
The colours captivate. Only nature can do that. I can imagine the quiet streets and the silent stores.
"Huddle" shows their close proximity to each other. The feeling of looking at an old town is successfully conveyed.
As opposed to the small stores, comes the looming tower against the same horizon. A visually impressive description comes through clearly.
And then we go back to the sky, where started the tale of Old Hull, now smeared in color, apricot.
I found this short and sweet verse in your port. I am glad to have come across it.
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My first reaction on reading this poem is " what a precise rhythm!"
You see, we don't all get it that smoothly or spontaneously.
In crisply flowing lines, you gave me taste of dreams, love and the vital things that comprise life.
"Of love that's deep, divine
Of life with hope within"
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