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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year Prosperous snow. Congrats on all of your fine work at the Contest challenge. *Salute* YOU rocked it!
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I have been really enjoying reading through all the poems you have been doing and came across this one with its celestial title and I love stars! *Wink* Also I see it is a poem form with which I am not familiar so I am checking that out too.

Your cameo is well structured according to the note you helpfully added to the page. *Wink*
The poem imitates a brief image of deep space with its stars and light travels, kind of like a cameo. It seems that the beauty involves the stars, and how light travels as well as the sparkling effect.

I wonder if having a colon after "space" might indicate that it refers to stars, and light when you say Beauty in the first line.

I like the use of the word "bawls" as it is so unique and has a sound that mimics a wide space and means "loud sound". Cool! I wanted to put a comma after "hydrogen" as the next word seems to refer back to the word "light". I had to reread it. *Wink*

This was pleasing to read aloud for your words are well chosen for sound effect and thematic content. I could easily imagine this star magic. {e;starstruck} You share a lot of science in a short poem.

Thanks for sharing this expression and craft as well as your prolific imagination and scope of vision! *Starstruck* I am inspired to give this form a try.

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Review of Restless  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC Madeleine.
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Wow! I enjoyed reading this unique expression and can relate to restless night musings. Great topic to share. The genres you chose are relevant for the work as well.

I admire the way to have two poem streams in this free style presentation. It makes it seem like there are two voices and we all know the mind can have conscious and subconscious musings going on in our heads at the same time. Cool! *Cool* Using italics to separate the trains of thought was effective. It took me a minute to get the flow.

The contrast of the dark and light vibrations is vivid. I could see the image of the poet's and positions and feel the eerieness of the creeping night. Cool latin word. I had to go look it up as I have not taken latin in a while. The image in the first verse is so clear I felt for the sleeper.

I appreciated the soundscape as I read aloud too. Some awesome use of assonance and consonance as in "soft covers on cold feet", repeating "ee", "s" "d". "c: etc. add to the flow and atmosphere of the poem. *Star*

I was happy at the end when peace is found. The metaphor of the stranger into a friend is wonderful.

Thanks for sharing your startling vision. I appreciate the effort it took to get this into twin form and it did feel like a meandering night mind. *Starstruck*

Write on and I hope you find a home here at WDC.

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Review of Not Thinking  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Greg!
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I was drawn to the interesting title that made me curious. How often we do things without thinking? LOL Also I enjoy limericks so looked forward to a laugh.

*Laugh* What an original theme for a limerick! You really capture a vivid picture of this "guy" and his strange way of travelling. I liked reading it aloud for its steady rhyme and repeated "t" sounds. Nice work with the bit of alliteration in the last line too.

*Smile*The limerick has its five lines and seems to have the syllable count of 9, 9, 6, 6,(or 5, 5} 9. I noticed that line 3 -4 do not match : one is 5 count and the other is 6.
Also the last line is longer than 9 syllables and broke the flow for me.
Perhaps something like: : "by the huge hole in his..."

Otherwise it was quite a humourous read! *Thumbsup* That I think is the challenge of limericks.

*Quill* A few grammar glitches I noticed:

In the second line I think "That" should be "who" as you are referring to a person.

"ride's" I think needs to be "rides" as it is not a possessive useage here.

Also to make "torpedo's " plural, it needs to be "torpedoes". *Wink* I wonder why you used a captital letter here.

*Thumbsup* I think the poem really shows the idea of the title. I can so see him maybe going to his wedding or special event and thinking this was the way to get there quick! *Laugh* I was thinking his "bride" might not be amused. Actually using that instead of "tailor" might fix the beat in the line and add another layer of inferred humour.

*Star*It was so fun to enter your vision. Thanks for letting me play in your world. Take what suits you and leave the rest. *Wink*

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Review of I can't sleep  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
*BalloonP* Happy New year whiskerface. I am here with a review to celebrate you as this popped up on the random Reads! *Delight*

I could so relate to the title and its theme. I have nights even when I am tired that sleep seems to keep at bay. I like that writing is one of your go to activities when sleeplessness strikes.

I like the directness of the first line to set up the experience. Just letting the pen scribble on the page is as the mind rambles I think can settle things. And it looks like you found a gem in that the ponderings led to ideas for your challenge. *Wink*

I was as surprised as you were with your "Really?" when you mentioned the prompt! Who thinks these things up? Also, how is a defunct band "covered" by someone who is dead? What does that mean? *Facepalm*

I laughed at the polarity of it will be tricky and then the vast flow of names (all of them I am familiar with) and the realization that it won't be a problem. I infer that it may have been that keeping awake...the muse wanting to get a handle on it. LOL

The writing feels like flow of consciousness that relates to the tag line of musings.
I think "its so much rubbish" should be "it's..".

Now I am curious as to which one you did! *Smile* I also wonder if this was all of the musing of the evening or just a shareable snippet. It is a short "Pouring out"! *Laugh*

Keep on writing and musing into the new year.*Star*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC Vincent.
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*Laugh* Oh my gosh! What an interesting title and the concept of a fashion virus is hilarious. This story in the form of a letter from a Lord of a township to the Kelpstone Minor people is so original and I had to keep reading.

*Penr* It does indeed read like a political response and the lord's voice is clear as he gives his advice as to what is to be done in a variety of cases that are being questions. I burst out laughing at the first line about the stovepipe pants and having troops sent out to assist and wiards researching the fashion plague that are luring the young folk. *Laugh* It is quite imaginative.

Your language suits the time and theme. I loved "rogue tailors" that "stitch these monstrosities" and the concern about "lips" from pork and the meanness of kicking Gnomes. *Smile* Your satire rocks!*Salute* "not dump garbage....in debate forum" *Laugh*

*Smile*The lord's name is unique and the way he speaks shows his character and concerns vividly. The letter was well structured and paragraphing made coherent sense.
I wondered if this comma after "state of unrest" should be a semi colon.

I was really entertained by your vision! Thanks for sharing this highly creative and well conceived letter! *Starstruck* Keep on writing and I hope you find a home here at WDC.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC Rhacun!
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*Delight*Congratulations on posting this first item. The title sets the theme of beginnings and it suits your mini bio theme. The genres you chose are applicable as well.

I could relate to your first forray into WDC. Ten years ago I joined as a free style writer as well and you will find many who write for relief, fun as well as more professional reasons...all are expressions and we value that in everyone. I liked your notion of writing being a "reliever". I am sure many of us can agree. *Smile*

Your piece considers two questions which are clearly outlined on the page. One about your rationale and how you found WDC. Thanks google! The other about how you began writing and a bit about your background. I so get how differently the two sides of the brain operate and real life can sometimes not allow the muse's work! *Wink*

Wow!You learned Japanese? "jap_eng'? Brilliant.

*Quill*A few little glitches:

Continue to use the past tense in the first lines of your second section:
eg:
In my childhood days, at elementary school, I loved..."
When I "entered" college..
when I asked... instead of "ask". *Wink*

*Star*I like how you end your piece and am curious as to where you will start. What do you like to write? And remember there are all kinds of online helps with language and grammar etc, so be brave and write on! *Smile* Have fun and hope you find a home here at WDC.
Also, reading and reviewing others is a great way to get back into the swing of the language. *Heart*

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year Prosperous snow!
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*Laugh* Your evocative title caught my interest as I was curious as to how good luck has a cost. It reminded me of some things are too good to be true..or watch what you ask for. LOL

*Confettir* I was not disappointed as I had a good laugh! I like how you use the "tradition" or black eyed peas as a good luck item. I wondered about adding an author's note about how that came about. I read you had to eat 365 peas for prosperity to come about. *Shock*

You capture Uncle Joe vividly in his belief and his new year activity in his man cave! The cost of his choice was hilarious and realistic! I like how you leave us in no doubt of our inference.

*Star* Your double etheree is a fine model of the form and it is amazing how you managed to get the story streamlined to fit the syllable counts. I appreciate the time it must have taken. *Salute* It has a coherent flow and was pleasant to read aloud with its instances of assonance and consonance. ( eg.hard c, long o, l, ea words) Well conceived and written. The imagery was vivid and I was drawn into the story. Hey you could add the recipe in a note..if Cora will share! lol

*Quill* One little typo in line two I think...should "New Year" be "New Year's"? *Wink*

*Star* I had fun entering into this vision and felt bad for Joe, although he should have known better. *Laugh* Thanks for sharing your craft and entertaining poem.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp*Happy New year and Welcome to WDC Samrat Roy! Congratulations on posting your first item, which I found on READ a Newbie page. *Delight* I am celebrating you with a review for "Talent Pond New Year Review Dinner Party!*Glass**Tiara*



*Smile*The title fits the theme and content of your posting and the genre settings are relevant as well.

*Star* It is a wonderful letter to the WDC friends who you may meet here and expresses vividly how you feel about joining. I like the positive vision you have of being part of a family. Many of us fell that way here as we write and share together. The word "treasure" is evocative and a vivid way to imagine the gift joining WDC might be for you.

*Flowerv* The piece is written in a letter format with a greeting and sending of wishes at the end. I like the idea of all being brothers and sisters and the sentiment you share suggests your hope and faith in people and the divine. We get a sense of your desires. I like the pink font which suggests peace and kindness of the heart as well.

*Quill* I wonder about expanding it to share what kind of writing you want to do, or what kind of works you like to read and review. I think also filling out a little bio could let us know more as well. You can also share in your notebook and on newsfeed to say hi to community members. *Wink*

*Quill* I think you can drop the commas after the word "we" in "we,all" and after "From".

*Star*Thanks for jumping in with your first written item and bio block. I hope you will find a home here at WDC. Write on!

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Review of A Baby Born  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New year and Happy WDC Anniversary
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*Heart* It was cool to find your title as a friend's daughter just had a baby boy yesterday!

*Delight*Wow! This is fascinating expression that was a surprise given the lovely title about a baby. The language is philosophical! *Thumbsup* The short form says volumes in an original way. I love it! I can see how it sums up your longer version.

*Smile*I enjoyed the imagery and thought in the longer version too. The free style of two line verses matches the factual tone. I enjoyed the flow and imagery of the first two lines with the atoms and voices. The repeating consonants are fun. My imagination took flight here. *Thumbsup*

*Bigsmile*The flow and soundscape of the language was pleasing with elements of rhyme, assonance and consonance. I liked reading the rhythm aloud as well. I like that you ask a question in the middle verse even with minimal punctuation it fits the idea of a boundless space....from which it begins. LOL

*Star*I like poems that give me lots to think about and I enjoyed entering into your unique vision. Thanks for sharing your wonderful expression.

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Review of Screens  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Jeff!
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*Tv*Scanning for newer poetry and came across this diamante with its interesting topic. I thought of all kinds of screens, like on doors, or room dividers, or computer or tv! LOL So I was curious to see which screens you would choose to compare or contrast in this form. *Smile*

*Computer* The glyph on your page is evocative...talk about mind control, hypnosis and the matrix. Wow! Scary.

*Smile* I enjoyed reading your diamante aloud especially line three with its alliterative seamless flow that seems to mimic the mind's connecting with the screen! Brilliant! *Star* The descriptive words you chose were vivid and so effective in showing the effect of screens on people. Contrasting the more positive qualities with the negative ones in the second half of the poem was well conceived and gives us lots to ponder.*Thumbsup*

*Tv* You really fit the theme to the format, using the rules to advantage. The first half of the poem had a good vibe and as I read the atmosphere got heavier. The idea of "desolate" is a good choice as is "dangerous" ...one hears so many sad things with people addicted and buying into online elements.

*Smile* You made good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance that assisted the flow and pleasure of the read.

*pen0* The last word seems to used as a synonym for screen and makes sense when one considers how the screens are separating folks. True concept! It also fits in with the screens that actually are dividers. LOL

*Star* Another well crafted and evocative poem that bears a wisdom and truth for us to ponder. Thanks for sharing your vivid vision.

Write on and good luck in this year's I Write activity. er.. it is week 2 now, don't forget. *Binoculars* *sink*


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Review of Baseball  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC George. *Smile*
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I found your poem on baseball on the Read A Newbie page. I used to love to play catch when I was a kid. I was a terrible batter as I usually had to pitch to smaller kids. LOL It is cool that it did become a national past time. It is interesting that you refer to the creator of baseball. I went to look up the name. Cool. I wonder about putting a little author note with a link at the bottom of the page for interested people. *Wink*

It was a pleasure to read your poem for its even flow and effective rhyme that tells the basics of a baseball game and its effect on the watchers! You make it sound fun and use vivid details. *Thumbsup* The poem is well structured in balanced lines that make it flow with an even beat.

You had some really fine enjambments too as "never roam" and "enthralls". *Smile* You really capture the energy of the crowd when the ball is flying. The punctuation assisted the read well too. I like how you make the title part of the poem as your first line refers to it without saying the name of the game.

I really felt your appreciation of the game in the tone. Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. *Starstruck*

*Quill*Keep on writing and I hope you find a home here at WDC!

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Review of Oh Canada  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Jatog the Green!
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*Countryca* As a Canadian I could not resist the title "Oh Canada"! *Delight* I like how your focus is on the expanse of land especially its Arctic and wilderness places. Using Niagara Falls as a Canadian landmark is cool too seeing as the US also has part of them.

*Quill* A well constructed quatrain poem with pleasing rhythm and cool rhymes. I loved "few" and "caribou". I did notice in your last verse the rhyme scheme changed and in the first two verse the first two lines do not rhyme.*Confused* It is hard to rhyme with Canada. LOL I looked up fireworks and it is apparently 2 syllables...I still say as 3.

*Delight*You add some really neat information like the origin of Hudson bay and seaplane access. I did not know fireworks were taboo where you are from. I wanted to know more about crossing the border..as it seems you are adding experience to the poem.

I enjoyed some of the soundscape too with consonance like "stark cabin" and other "c" sounds and assonance as in the repeating "O" sound words. The punctuation assisted the read as well.

*Leafr* Thanks for sharing your vision and tribute of Canada. *Heart* I have not been to the Arctic yet but have friends who have taught up there with the Inuit people. And yep, they could only fly in and winters are long, dark and cold. *Snow4*

Keep on writing into the new year with flair! *Starstruck*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC Holly Wogan!
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*Turtle1* Dinosaurs are a favorite topic for kids so this poem will surely appeal to them! The title reveals the name of a restaurant! How orginal. *Thumbsup*

*Dragonflyb* I enjoyed reading your creation of this "dino diner" which is a place for all types of dinosaurs. Your first two lines set the invitation with a lovely flow and rhyme. It is like an advertisement for the place. Cool idea.
The poem has an effective rhyming structure that adds to the flow of the lines that have a variety of lengths. Punctuation assists the read and I like the exclamations, which indicate emotion or excitement. I liked the change around line about meat for Carnivores.

*Quill*I wondered why words like Eat, Lunch, Dinosaur and Then (in line 4} are capitalized. *Think* I figured you wanted to emphasize the types of Dinosaurs..with capitals like "Herbavores".

*Quill* I wanted to put a period after "some more" as the first read through I tried to connect it to the next line when the line refers back to line 3. A pause there would really be helpful.

*Quill* In terms of flow, I wanted to drop the word "can" after Omnivores as it slows down the read. Yet I do see you are advertising that they can eat what they like at the restaurant. *Wink* I wondered about putting "can" after "fish" to make the line a bit longer. It feels short.

*Delight*I love the last line that perhaps you could make food for dinos in the audience! It sums up the piece effectively. I did wonder why you would have to cook it. LOL

*Turtle1* Your poem is fun with a quick pace and kids can learn a lot of facts about dinosaurs as you were clever to get the types of eaters into the poem: carnivores, omnivores etc! The chosen vocabulary is kid friendly, eg. green stuff! *Delight*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your appreciation for dinosaur theme, entertaining kids and me with this unique expression. A thought came to me now. I can imagine a diner for dinosaurs and imagined the mayhem as maybe they will all be eating each other as the herbavores eat greens. LOL

Keep on writing and all the best in the New year! *Wand* I hope you find a home here at WDC.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC NorahMae! I am celebrating you with a review for "Talent Pond New Year Review Dinner Party!*Glass**Tiara*


*Cool* I was drawn to the intriguing title as it suggested to me that one is trying to meditate or something but loses track. Your poem presents a more pressing scenario: focus while trying to study or learn. *Smile* I get it!

The first lines were appealing for its image of reading upside down and I laughed that it was poetry the poet was trying to understand. I wonder if that pose helps. LOL The image and voice is so vivid.

Your free flow was fun to read and gives the impression of a mind that wanders. The question near the end reminds me of a distraction. Bolding the word focus emphasises the theme and also may be the mind trying to get through. *Smile* The image of the worn pages is evocative too. *Smile*

I like the short lines that sound like one is talking to oneself. I was wondering if the person is hyper as the words "stay calm" are used. I think the word "Take" in "take effort" needs to be "takes".

The theme is relevant and I am sure many can relate to the situation, especially if bored, tired or quick minded. *Wink*

Thanks for sharing your musings in such an appealing way. *Starstruck*

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Review of Through the Mist  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year Tinker!
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*Delight* Wow! The atmosphere and imagery of this expression is appealing and I was hooked in by the first line with the personification of "dawn" yawning! Brilliant.*Sun* Your repeated use of this "au" sound in a few other places is effective too. The poem continues to lure me into the vision with vivid images of the tree in foggy outline and the cocoon image. I can so relate to wanting to stay abed in such damp weather even if the scenery is a delight. *Salute*

I like how we begin outside in the cool damp beauty of nature where even the tree does not show its potency and then leads us inside to the poet mimicking the feel of that chill in the house and like the tree not pop out fully! The descriptive language is well chosen. " a screech too shrill"
is ouchy!! *Thumbsup* I like the link between the cobweb of fog and the cocoon! Cool connection and potent image.

The contrast of the cool damp morning and the warmth of bed and the dream of summer is clear and the reader wants to join you in the latter dream! *Laugh*

The free verse is a good choice though I thought there was a small pattern with verse one and three being 4 lines and the other two being 5..but the last has 6...so I was mistaken. LOL I might have shortened line two verse two to accent the "tree's Green" and make the rest into another line. It would look more neat on the page and give a sixth line. *Think* It works regardless, and I was not thrown out of the reverie.

It was pleasant to read aloud and without rhyme, the flow was coherent and the use of poetic conventions gave the piece a lovely soundscape to read aloud. Your images appealed to the visual and kinesthetic senses.*Star* I could feel the clammy cold and downy quilt. *Heart*

Thanks for sharing your clear vision of this experience in such an appealing way. Keep on writing as your muse leads on into the new Year! *Starstruck*



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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC Greg!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Bird* What a lovely elegant expression about these gulls and your vision of how they affect you. I enjoyed reading it aloud and pondering. I used to like watching gulls when I lived near water!

*Bird*I was hooked by your alliterative and vivid image in the first line and the cool notion of "sip the sunshine". Brilliant!

*Bird*I do not know if you had a specific form in mind but you did a fabulous job with repeating lines in a pattern in the poem. The verses are balanced and coherent in flow and story line. The rhythm and rhyme are effective and true as well. Well chosen words create a pleasing soundscape and appealing inspirational picture that is a tribute to nature and these birds. *Salute*

*Bird* I did at first want to read "aligned" for the word "align" as it struck me as off, but I see it rhymes with "sunshine" and I could imagine the word "they" before it. LOL so all is well. I also pondered at the need for a comma where you have it after "weak". It is likely a matter of opinion. *Wink*

Your poem has a relaxing effect as I can imagine flying with gulls and enjoying the landscape. It is quite inspiring too. Thanks for sharing your gift and craft! *Starstruck* Keep on writing.



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Review of Valentine Daze  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Huntersmoon!
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*Laugh* I loved the play on the word "daze" in the title and it suggests a lover's idealism on Valentine's Day so it is a cool surprise to see that it is Cupid who is also a little "dizzy". Brilliant image!

*Heart*Your limerick was fun to read with vivid images. I like how the last lines leaves it to our imagination as to what goes on in the bedrooms. The alliteration adds to the flow as well.

{e:smile] You composed your poem using the correct format and it has a comical tone and theme.
I liked the first line beginning with "Tis the season" as it puts Valentine's on par with Christmas. The phrase generally refers to that holiday. I liked the repeated long "o" sound and and it was a trick saying "forlorn lovers" yet it flows well. It is funny that the rooms get busy...rather than the people. {e:laugh}

*Star*This is a grand way to celebrate the day and sharing your awesome sense of humour! It is a gift. Thanks for all you contribute to WDC! All the best in the new year! *Wand*

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Review of Dear Me - 2020  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Confettir* Happy New Year Mastiff! I am happy to review your item in the 'I Write in 2019! Welcome back! *Delight* Yay you for entering the site contest too!

Wow! I really felt the frustration and panic about job hunting in your tone and like how you give yourself positive images to boost yourself. I can relate to the judgemental comment on how age matters. *Facepalm* Your last line says it all. Perspective can be a real lifesaver.

The letter shows your vulnerability and feelings about the change of role. It fits with the notion of how we need to change how we value ourselves for more than the paycheck. And You are valued just for being! *Heart*

I enjoyed reading the language and flow of the work. I did wonder about the experience in the first paragraph. Perhaps more detail about the job and your role in it would clarify.
Paragraphing made sense and I burst out laughing at the PS in the letter. Laughing can always lighten the stress of it all. Good job!

I am glad you will keep writing...might be amazing what inspirations come when you release all the doubt and go musing. *Wink* Good luck with job hunting and all the best in the new year. *Wand*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Smile* Happy New Year isokarifrancis! I am here with a review to celebrate you!*Delight*

I like to read philosophical and inspirational pieces so here I am. I think You could add the genre "philosophy" to the item for more range. *Wink*

Your bit of wisdom was original and made me smile. I get that one should not let the ego get the better of us, and let folks laugh at folly. Never forget to see Divine help.

The one line quote is well written and coherent with a vivid image. I wondered about the words "go to mirth". I felt there was something off, not sure. Maybe something like "others express mirth" or "shake with mirth". I don't know how one would go TO mirth. *Think*

Thanks for sharing your unique wisdom at WDC! *Star* Write on into the New Year!

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Review of History  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Jacky!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Delight* Wow! I really liked the premise of this sci-fi short story with the evolutionary path the people saw for themselves. It figures that there would be conflict as most civilisations on verge of new always meet this termoil. I was happy that, at least the children of that last generation survived. It was brilliant how you bring the past back at the end of the tale. It is cool to think memory of ancient times might eventually surface. It reminds me of how our unconscious, collective past is hiding in our own memory mind. *Smile*

*Earth*The story seems to tell the details rather than show and yet it suits the title of a history lesson. I liked the name Xenox. The most dramatic part of the story was the last paragraph. It was lively in active description and personal reaction. I was thinking what a great beginning for a story..that goes back in flashbacks. mmm. I want to know more.

*Quill*I am not sure what the exact conflict was about. Perhaps more details about the plans would add interest and fill in the gaps.

I feel this premise could be expanding into a whole story! *Smile* Thanks for sharing your unique vision and craft! *Star* Keep on writing with flair into the new year!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year Rhychus!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Babygirl* I was intrigued by the title and sweet picture on the item. The name of the doll type is new to me. *Wink* The form of sonnet is also unfamiliar so thanks for the reader notes. *thumbsuup*

*Tiara*I enjoyed reading the flow of the weave with its gentle tone and your personification of the doll is so effective. She seems to have a real feel to her. The bit of alliteration, some inner rhyme (grace, face, low, glow) and assonance create a pleasing effect when I read aloud. The first two verses I especially liked for their sing song lyrical flow. *thumbusup*

*Quill*I wondered if a period would be better after the word "stood" as it does complete a sentence and the next one is also a complete thought. The same with "tears" in verse 3. though I realize punctuation in poetry can be choice depending on the flow the author intends. *Wink*

The word "challenging" seems unpoetic. LOL I loved the flow "wonderous worldly" and he next line. "peak to foam" is so unique a description. *Star* Keeping the "things" general allows us to add what we think she might have seen.

*Smile*Your model of the form is wonderful, following the stanza and rhyme scheme well. Amazing how you got that inner rhyme to work so effectively! I love the summative couplet that evoked a sense of peace and home.

*Heart*I loved the notion of the doll going on a journey as I think many young folks have aspirations to travel. It is a bit of truth as well that coming home can be soothing and not as bad as one thought. *Smile*

*Starstruck* I was charmed by this well conceived sonnet and admire how you got all the ideas into the form. I find them challenging to do. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing your gift and vision of this delightful doll! I had fun!

Write on into the journey of the new year! *Star**Quill*



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Review of Inflation  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Joylife!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Salute* Wow! Your really made a potent political commentary in this short poem, a lot in only 24 syllables! Your response to the prompt word is brilliant and makes sense in your thematic opinion. The title is genius for the picture you paint.

Your piece is lovely to read as well as you have made fine use of the techniques of assonance of repeated long "o" and the consonance {p, c}! Very effective and made the reading aloud more potent.

I noticed a typo as I think "porportion" should be "proportion". *whink*

*Heart*Thank you for sharing your original use of "caricature" in this short poem. It was a surprise. Thanks too for your dedication in the 24 syllable contest. No easy feat!

Keep writing with flair on into the New year. *Starstruck*




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Review of The Creature  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC GU35T!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Confettir* The title is intriguing and made me curious as to whether the creature will be a good one or dark! *Smile* Your opening line with its familiar simile urged me to read on to find out who He was! *Thumbsup* I also wondered why no on thought well of him...maybe because he was blind? Another mystery you set at the end of the first paragraph as well. I can't wait to see the "rare"gift. *Smile*

*Smile* Your descriptions are vivid and I could see him sitting in the lovely setting. I like how you slowly bring the creature to reality with clues. I would drop the word "seemed" as the saliva spilled or it did not! LOL

You need a comma at "which he in turn reached" >> which he, in turn, reached..

It was effective the way you describe the blind boy's response to the creature.... using vivid images showing his hand, and senses recognizing the creature. You show understanding of the creature's behaviour. For example, when the creature prepares to lie down. *Wink*

*Quill* I wondered about "in such a lonely earth;" Should it be "on..earth" or simply in...:lonely place". Using the word earth made me think like he is not from here. *Smile* I liked the reference to the "faint star". And did the creature have "limited vision and smell" as well? (the word "him" is right before this description.

The last line seems to change voice. It seemed the boy was telling and then you went to an observant voice ..."you" would see.

*Star* Aside from my few inquiries, I was charmed by this short story and the way you weave the vision. It unfolds in a coherent manner and I see where it could be continued so as to answer the clues you reveal in the beginning. Why he is not liked and what his gift is, though I am guessing it has something to do with his relationship with the creature. *Delight*

I really enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing your gift and vision. Keep on writing and I hope you find a home at WDC. *Starstruck*




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Review of "With God I Walk"  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Netty!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Star*Your title gives the essence of your theme and I liked the way it flowed with the repeated "w" words. I wondered why it was in quotation marks. Is it a quote from somewhere?

*Candleb* The message is clear in this short free verse poem and I like the wisdom of "one day at a time" as being present in the moment is vital to live now and hear the spiritual direction. *Thumbsup*

*Quill*I was a bit confused by the flow of "with his unbound ...." You use "with" twice close together and I was trying to understand. Is it the "unbound hands.. that fills you with Love or walking the path of righteousness? I can get that. Maybe the lines could be tweaked to avoid the two "withs'. *Wink* Make two separate lines for the two ideas maybe.

I notice a typo as "path's" should be "paths" to make it plural. I wondered if "on" would be better than "in" with paths. *Think*

*Fire* Your trust and faith shine through this sage experience. I wonder about adding an example of the promises, or a life experience to bring it more to life. Meantime is serves as a fine reminder of wisdom. *Delight*

Thanks for sharing your wisdom and vision. Walk with your pen onward into the New year on the path of light. *Star*






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Review of To Heat Or To Eat  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New year hullaballoo22!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Teagr* I was drawn to this intriguing title that made me curious. And Yay for you composing such an evocative message in only 24 syllables! *Thumbsup*

*Choco*Wow! Your choice between these two elements truly captures the essence of the key word poverty! It is something I don't even want to imagine and yet, sadly, such a choice does exist in many places.

*Quill*The free verse is effectively structured on the page and I felt the enjambment in line 4 was effective as a pause... like right I am living...and then you hit with the last sad line twist! Rhyming in the middle was a brilliant choice to add some flow and the use of long "e" in three words and y in poverty adds to the soundscape too.

Your point of view is clear and stark, giving us pause. I am grateful.

*Question*I wonder if you played with the placement of the words before choosing this way. I can see varying ways for this to be played out. *Wink* I always find it tough with short poems to figure the best way. so I wondered how you do it.

Thanks for sharing your craft and vision. *Star* Keep on writing on into the New Year! All the best! *Wand*


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