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I so enjoyed the clear imagery and flow of this expression with its sad tale of these soul mates. I could imagine the playfulness at the beginning and then the inevitable separation. It was lovely to read aloud as your word choices and use of poetic techniques assisted the soundscape and flow. Cool that I did not miss the rhyme. The title is perfect for the metaphor.
I notice you use 4 line verses and have one too many lines as the prompt calls for 15. 
Still, a well conceived poem that captured the essence of these two mythical creatures.
It would be cool to have added details of the unreal stories maybe about mermaids and dragons! 
Wow! What a great story about using the ancient arts and showing that sometimes things are not in our desired time...but perseverance and focus for the best of all! Interesting how they even left a note telling you they are leaving. 
I was curious as to some of the actions they did to earn the name but then I see one would not want to give power to the negative.
The writing was clear and direct and I had to keep reading. I grinned at the name "McNasty's". 
What a delightful title and the line about happy feet made me think of the dancing penguin in the movie. Happy! LOL The concept of feet walking in a different direction for joy is so inspiring an image. Dancing as a cure is brilliant. How many dance songs and videos make us Happy? 
The rhyming couplets create a light quick paced atmosphere as well. The rhymes are well chosen and I notice the rhythm is not so even in each one as you use 7, 8 syllables and 10. Usually within a couplet the beat is the same. The flow might be improved in some lines.
The theme is so relevant and the voice is clear and upbeat as the poet faces the negatives of life and seeks the positive. I like the idea that he knows he has choice. I am sure lots of us can relate to these ideas especially the one on expecting to be still and silent! I worked with a lot of hyper kids and they need to be active as expression. 
I like the word "vibrant" and I laughed at the line about saying goodbye! Great to send someone on their way. LOL
This poem is inspiring and fun to consider and can give hope to those who may feel restricted and want to break free of the walls not of their making. The image of "prison" is a potent one as the outside expectations can build the walls or we do to be safe. Breaking free takes awareness, courage and Happy feet! 
I do not watch much tv so am not familiar with the shows you mention. I enjoyed your honesty and detail about the pros and cons and why you thought shows were to your liking or not. I used to watch Law and Order and while I have not in, like, forever, I found myself thinking about the new Star Trek. I managed to see an episode and was happy with it as it had the flavour of the original.
The blog entry was fun to read and coherent in structure. I did think this line was a bit awkward to read "The season.....explainers... including on the topics of what...." 
I also stumbled a bit on the first line of the last paragraph.
The lines flow well with a consistent rhyme scheme but some lines are longer than others. The only ones that pulled me out of the flow were in Verse 2 line 4 and verse 3 line 2. I think In verse too you can drop the cumbersome "but sometimes" and just say "Or make them feel..." for smoother read.
Ending in a query is evocative and appeals to the reader to form an opinion. It is a good question and I would say it so depends on the situation. 
Wow! This poem captures the plight of the coal miner vividly. I am familiar with the history of coal mining and it was a terribly hard life and often did involve whole families as they had no other option in these coal towns. 
The title is so evocative and evokes curiousity. The symbolism is perfect.
The imagery of the "furnace", "belly", "the curse" are potent and the description of the effects on the coal miner was effective. I feel bad for him and his family having to notice it too.
I was drawn by the title as I recall my first encounter with silverfish. What an odd creature! LOL Lucky we never had a big infestation. I like how you used "books" as a example of what they can damage. It fits with writing. 
I could imagine you on the net looking a tons of bugs!! LOL It reminded me of when I tried to identify a strange looking bee creature that moved like a hummingbird. Thank goodness for pictures...it was a hummmingbird moth! I had never seen or heard of them before. Quite lovely and interesting.
Wow! You did a great job with the prompt picture. It stumped me so My muse gave up. LOL I like how you use simple language and use contrast of the dance of Easter with the sinister intent of the bunnies.
You painted a vivid picture of these two bunnies and you built up to the idea of homicide. Your rhymes were effective and the personification of axes that could take away funnies is awesome. That the bunnies see nothing "obscene" about their activities is dark. 
The poem has a pleasing flow to read aloud with effective rhyme and soundscape. The tone reminds me of the Lizzie Borden tale. 
Good job.
Wow! This poem really does play the opposites as the prompt dictates and you have captured the crisis of the pandemic in a realistic way with lots of detail. The feelings about the crisis are clear as well and it was awesome to see the benefits as well as the detriments. There always are polarities if we but see them. I like how you bring out the varying ideas like government plot, fate, a lesson to be learned by humanity etc. The last line made me smile as it would indeed be a strong positive effect of the crisis. Love rocks! 
Reading the poem aloud was pleasant. Good use of rhyme, assonance and consonance with bits of alliteration and personification added to the flow. I did not notice a specific rhythm scheme and that gives it a changing flow much like the seasons. Shorter lines for winter suggests sparseness and quiet while the longer lines in the springtime verse indicate growth, activity and liveliness. It adds to the contrast element of the form. 
This is a concise and easy to follow teaching that shares a key summary of the beginning of the faith and why it continues. The writing is coherent with effective paragraphing. It is so sad as usual that holy teachers trying to bring love and peace are persecuted. Yet those who have ears and hearts stay the course! 
I really enjoyed the eloquence of BAB's declaration. What a tribute. Words like "lamps of God" and "stars of sanctity" are beautiful. I had not heard this before. Thanks for sharing.
Wow! I could so hear the plea of this mosquito! I am not fond of those creatures but they LOVE me!! Ouch and major itch. It is hard to feel sorry for them and yet I don't really like swatting them. They don't even bother some folks I know but if there is one in the room it will find me! LOL Great topic for the contest...the victim mosquito! 
I enjoyed reading your expression aloud. It has a pleasing flow and soundscape using effective assonance and consonance. Your rhyme scheme is consistent with only one off-rhyme. I did not notice a regular rhythm but it did not throw me out of the piece. Your details were wonderful, even to telling us the life span of the poor creature. I like the idea of a hard struggle and indeed, in my case, I can hear it coming so I do try to swing away! LOL Yet, they do have a stubborn streak for getting what they want. 
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What an interesting idea for a poll and the title draws curiosity so I had to check it out.
The possible choices you give the reader are inclusive and gives the chance to choose all or none. I had to smile at the last one about not getting irritating. I would pick that one. LOL
The response about one being dead and worry feels like an odd thing to say to someone.
The other sayings are indeed common and have been heard quite often as philosophical sayings that may be true... perhaps after one has time to process the pain or situation they are in at the moment. Good choices. I can see where they may not be helpful in an emotional moment when folks may just need our presence, not words to by pass the moment.
Word choices were effective, eg, Hobble, grating, burning, etc in creating a scene that engages the senses. Bless folks who need to deal with this daily.
Wow! This is such a romantic acrostic for Valentine's Day. Your details on loving elements of relationship are well conceived and vivid.
The Acrostic format is effectively created with theme appropriate words for each first letter. Good for you on the N and V : I find they can be tricky! 
I love forests so I chose to check out 'Moss". Wow to you, on creating a double acrostic poem. I have not yet had any luck with that, even with a short one like this. And what a quick study you are doing it in 15 minutes! 
Your poem has captured the essence of the prompt picture of the forest as you focus on the moss as a main feature. The green font complements the theme and feels soothing as the tone in the poem. 
I loved the soundscape as I read aloud. All the s and alliteration s really create a soft flow and feel. Wonderful word choices for effect. The idea of moss comforting nests is appealing. I like the use of the word "comforts". I had never thought of it this way. Brilliant. 
The title was appropriate for the piece and it was unexpected to see that the magical leprechaun would need to sew! Nice twist.
For a poem written in 15 minutes it is coherent and flows in a poetic way with consistent rhyme scheme and vivid imagery and tone. The flow of rhythm is inconsistent with some longer lines that are clunky but the point comes across. With more time later to tweak, it could be done. 
Line 4 I wanted to drop "suddenly" and add "to" before "disarray"