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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello ruwth

My Thoughts:This is a very nice reminder. Well thought out and on point.

My Favorite Part:I like the quote from HWL..."Into each life some rain must fall"...I didn't know where that came from; now I do. Thank you for sharing.

My Suggestions/Final Comments:I like the subject you wrote about and I hope you did well in the Writer's cramp with it, even though it's been a while since written. Still relevant today! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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Review of GIFT POINTS  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Penelope Moonbeam

Do not worry! You have to start somewhere, just as we all do. You'll get there eventually. Until then, review, enter things like Writer's Cramp with a chance for awards every day, and you'll get there.
I like how you've made the typing bold...my poor ol' eyeballs much appreciate it. Well done!
Until I see you next, keep up the great job!

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for entry "What Makes Me Happy?" 
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating }

My Thoughts:Simplicity, yet so beautifully written. You do have a way with poetry.

My Favorite Part:Autumn day, hot coffee...I also can smell and feel a fireplace burning and having a home-made blanket around my shoulders...mmm *Smile*

My Suggestions:I enjoy reading your work, and I am glad you post the note so I can read your writing. Thank you for sharing your heart through your words. Never change that. *Hug1**Smile**Hug2*

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Review of Building Castles  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Joy }

My Thoughts:Your words paint a riveting picture of building sandcastles on the beach. Not exactly sure of the time frame, noting "the impossible, Papa's return"...is it that he went off to war? or did he die? The question popped into my head while reading.

My Favorite Part:Constructing fine castles...I am assuming it's your family life you are speaking of. Then you go back to your childhood memory on the beach. Trying to fix that castle...within yourself.

My Suggestions:I saw no mechanical errors in your writing. It is a well written story in prose. Thank you so much for sharing your writing.

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Review of TENNIS SHOES  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Penelope Moonbeam }

My Thoughts:A piece of nostalgia. I remember keeping my children's shoes, and even having them bronzed so many years ago.

My Favorite Part:It is short and sweet, and has so much to say at the same time. It brings up memories of when my kids were little. As they are grown now, and have kids of their own, I get lost in the memories.

My Suggestions: I like the way you bold the type. Just one...in your intro under the title: We all have thar first pair...I think you mean that? or their?

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Review of WDC  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Penelope Moonbeam }

My Thoughts:A very nice (and apt) tribute to WdC...one I wholeheartedly agree with.

My Favorite Part:The third stanza about each room...there is so much here...one CAN get caught up for hours here. I know I do! Not only rooms, but contests, forums, how to articles, things for improving your writing, navigating the site, and loads of friendly people to ask questions, if you don't understand.

My Suggestions:Enjoy your time here, and write your blues away! I usually like centered poetry, but the way you have it enlarged and bold throughout makes it easy to read. Well done! You are on the start of a marvelous journey.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating

My Thoughts:What a wonderful time of silent communion with the Creator.

My Favorite Part:The 3rd stanza gives such a vivid image of fall where I grew up (NW Lower Peninsula of Michigan). A riot of colors and I can just imagine the smell of burning logs in a bonfire and the taste of hot cocoa.

My Suggestions:The font is perfect size and the flow is smooth. I can find nothing to suggest. Perfectly done.

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Review of Spammy Diet  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello ⭐Princette♥PengthuluWrites

My Thoughts:This poem resounds with me so well. Visually appealing in form.

My Favorite Part:This diet will make me die! How many times have I thought the same thing? Even the cartoon cat Garfield said "Diet is Die with a T". LOL

My Suggestions:I saw nothing amiss in your writing. I like a little larger reading font, but that is me. Also, is there a special format for your poem? It looks pretty cool. Perhaps a description of the style of poetry in a footnote? Just me talking out loud. I did look up diatelle, it ends with an "i" and is a form of pasta...LOL.
Well done...Won't grow Sleek...story of my life *FacePalm*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating }

My Thoughts:What a chuckle this poem has brought to me. I, too, have had some one-sided conversations with my muse...and 1/2 the time I was probably just talking to myself...My muse gets a little contrary at times.

My Favorite Part:helter-skelter thoughts, half-remembered movie lines...just way too relatable. I know that it's been a while since you've written this; it looks like a possible contest entry (with emboldened words in the poem), but it still resonates today.

My Suggestions:I saw nothing to suggest, other than a little larger font, for "my poor tired eyes" LOL. Well Done!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Maiveen Chambers First of all, Welcome to Writing.Com! Please make yourself at home and enjoy the experience and the community.

My Thoughts:Being lost is something that resonates with me. There have been several times in my life where I just wanted to find the "exit" of the troubles in my life.

My Favorite Part:Your words paint a vivid image, of looking for a way out of the darkness. Food to chew on, and to "ponder" at the questions of life.

My Suggestions:I would perhaps break the sentences up, so that the rhyme ends on each line:

Example:
To fall into despair is to fall aloof;
to believe shallow words of dark disproof.

But that is my opinion. Your work was easy to read. I hope to read more of your work in the future. Keep up the great job.

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Review of The Supremes  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon }

My Thoughts:Wow! This is an amazing piece. I'm conservative by nature, however, this is a scary thing that you've shown in your writing. I've heard bits and pieces of things going on, but don't listen to the news all that much.

My Favorite Part:How you've incorporated the songs by the Supremes into your poem about "another" set of supremes...Well done!

My Suggestions:I saw no mechanical issues. I like poetry centered, for the most part; however, the spacing and size of text make this easily readable. The flow is smooth and very songlike in its manner.

Thank you for sharing this musical, (if somewhat controversial) "tune". I'm glad to have read it.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating }

My Thoughts:It really is amazing how something so simple can turn one's mind into poetry and verse. I am picturing a Northern Michigan fall, with the riot of colors floating in the air on the cool breeze.

My Favorite Part:summer lovers whispering good-bye...Just changing of the seasons, or maybe a summer romance that is ending? Fall is such a beautiful transition.

My Suggestions:Other than to keep writing? LOL. As always, thank you for sharing.

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Review of Dreams of Light  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating }

My Thoughts:A beautiful poem; full of hope and wonder. Sweet dreams, light dreams; not torment or sadness. Everything points towards God being the giver of these wonderful dreams.

My Favorite Part:"I rise in gratitude to greet a new day." A beautiful sentiment. Thank you for sharing and explaining the style of poetry that you used. I enjoy learning about new styles and formats for poetry.

My Suggestions:It's been a little while since you've written this. I have no suggestions, other than to keep up the great job. I'm glad I get to read your poetry.

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Review of Why?  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Black Panther }

My Thoughts:First of all, I want to welcome you to Writing.Com! You won't find any judgements here...EVERYBODY is welcome. We all have quirks, and so you should fit right in! Thank you for introducing yourself. And thank you for sharing your story.

My Favorite Part:That you would be willing to try your hand at different things. My "thing" is poetry, but I've also enjoyed writing things for children. So, give things a whirl, and all you have to do is ask, and I (or someone) will be glad to review and give pointers. Just jump on in...the water's fine *Smile*

My Suggestions:Sometimes, it's nice to have a little larger font, to make it easier on "older" eyes. I think you will do fine.

Again, Welcome!
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AmyJo

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for entry "Homeless" 
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Ned }

My Thoughts:I was curious about your title. Now having read it, I understand better. Time makes orphans of us all...not just the passing of loved ones, but memories of homes built, families made; and all the little (or not so little) changes. This poem resonates with me.

My Favorite Part:The memory I believe is of the Lawrence Welk Show...I remember watching that when I was little.

My Suggestions:I found nothing to offer, except to keep up the great job. Good luck with your poetry challenge. I look forward to reading more of your work.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating }

My Thoughts:Hmmm. Going to go out on a limb here: My thinking is that if these were resurrected, that the persons doing so was crazy! The wolves already have a hard enough time without having to compete with Saber-cats. The cats would also be oblivious to what is acceptable prey (animals) and what is not acceptable prey (people).

My Favorite Part: The suggestion of an alien invasion strategy. There are some conspiracy theorists that would probably buy into it, and I'm sure even more would be "prepping" for said invasion. *FacePalm*

My Suggestions:I saw that you edited it just recently, and I saw no typos or grammar issues with your writing. I thought wooly mammoths were extinct as well. Hmmm. guess I'm going to have to research. I like your writing, and will continue to check it out. Your writing certainly makes one think. *Thinker*

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AmyJo

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Review of The End  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Iris

This poem is so very heartbreaking. All of the joy once had is now bitter ashes. Unfortunately, I've been there, done that *HeartBroken*. I can empathize with all of the feelings that are shown here. I see a little hope in the last line about the heart "being mended". That is the light at the end of a very long tunnel.
I like that you used no punctuation. The lines clearly showed where the pauses should be.

Welcome to Writing.Com! I found your poem in the Read & Review portal. I hope to read more of your work in the future. Well done.

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Review of A Better Man  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello BB }

My Thoughts:Welcome to Writing.Com! This is quite the poem. Battling addiction is a torment that I haven't had personally, but know of a few people who are. The pain you describe; of the "beast trying to get out", the judgement of others' "glances". It must be an awful experience. You summarize the feelings well, and this poem flows smoothly.

My Favorite Part:You putting your hope in Jesus, and encouraging him to do the same. It comes from a place of love, and of not giving up, although the road is tough.

My Suggestions:"a heavy burden to bare. I think you want bear? Other than that, Well done! I'm glad you shared this story. I hope to read more of your work in the future.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Dr M C Gupta }

My Thoughts:I found this on the random Read & Review site. I liked reading your poem. The points made in your writing is valid. Why teach a starving man to fast? He already knows how...whether he wants to or not. Well said! The other points are equally valid.

My Favorite Part:The last two lines, When you don't know what to do, Surrender to His wish. If only that was taken to heart by more people. I liked how you explained your rhyming format. There are so many types of poetry nowadays.

My Suggestions:Your poem seems well thought out. I like centering my poetry, but this seems clean as written. I also like a little larger font, but that is my preference. You've written this 10 years ago, but it is still relevant today, as it was back then. Nicely done!

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AmyJo

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Angels in my Ear }

My Thoughts:Thank you for sharing this information! I am playing around with opening up a contest, and this is just the information I needed. It's been a while since this was written, so hopefully it is still up to date. I found in in the Newsletter Archives.

My Favorite Part:The step-by-step instructions. I need my "hand held" when trying out new things, and this is wonderful. The different colors make the article "pop" and makes it easier to ensure that all parts covered in your article. I also like how you give ideas on how to get the contest advertised. This is very good to know.

My Suggestions:I didn't see any mechanical issues with your writing. You high-lighted the different parts so that they stood out. You even offered more advice if we just ask. (Hope that still goes...LOL) Taking baby steps...a great start.

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Review of VALENTINE  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello TheBusmanPoet }

My Thoughts:I love the acrostic style you've used for this poem. Very fitting. I sense the beginnings of love, where everything is focused on the loved one, and the feelings that are so entwined.

My Favorite Part:The entire poem is optimistic, rather than a jaded or calloused view of love. It is a poem of hope as well as intimacy.

My Suggestions:Only that you write more! LOL Your poem was easy to read, and I saw no grammar issues or typos. Thank you for sharing your poetry. I hope to read more of your work in the future.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Jay,

You hear the saying, that silence can be deafening. It is a rare thing to actually have that silence. Living in town, it is a rare treasure indeed. I will have to seek out this silence you talk about, to better commune with the Creator. Thank you for sharing your heart. I also like that you give the backstory to better understand. I'm so ready to begin.

Sincerely,
AmyJo
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for entry "A New Road" 
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Jay,

An excellent reminder that we do not walk this earth alone. Even when it seems we do, there is always Someone who is watching out for us. I really enjoy your poetry, and it lightens my load that I carry. Thank you for sharing, and for your encouragement, as always. I had to read it twice to get the flow of the poem, but that just made it all the sweeter. Keep up the great work!

Sincerely,
AmyJo *HeartP*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Wolfkingdom,

I sincerely, SINCERELY hope that I will never have to make such a choice...I just don't know if I could do it. But flamethrower seems to be the least likely to have to touch them. Ewww*Sick*
You do have a creative flair, and I believe most of these things (except pianos, maybe) I've seen used on the Walking Dead show.

Hope your poll does well.

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Review of A WISE MIND  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Dr M C Gupta

My Thoughts:Even a wise mind can only take us so far; it's the matter of the heart and in those unseen forces that ultimately decide where we shall go in life.

My Favorite Part:The second stanza is my favorite. The mind, ok; "Supreme Fate", Yes!

My Suggestions:I see that you have a 7-6-7-6 format for syllables. I feel like the word "a" is missing on the last line of first stanza. Perhaps you could have said "Bestowed on a small heart" and still keep the 6 syllables? Just a thought.

I enjoyed reading your poem. I know it's been a while since you've written it (2005), but it still resonates even today. May we all be ministers of that "Love". I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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