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Review of Crossing Over  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Then, like an intrepid old boat slowly groaning out to sea, he is gone." Love this last line- beautiful free verse. Your first attempt was a success! God bless and keep writing!
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Review of Game of death  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
I thought this was a very good poem. Rhyme scheme was good- For me, when you use a plural, and singular, in a rhyme scheme- it throws off the rhyme a little bit: "Load"- "roads". And when you have an end rhyme with one syllable then the rhyme word with two syllabes or vise-a-vresa it throws off the rhyme as well: "Nothing"- "bring" But thats just me! Aside from that I thought this was a great read- Good quantitative lines as well- Bravo! Well done! Keep writing. God Bless...
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Review of Scars  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
The content is powerful and real- on that point I say Bravo! Language and structure needs work- Even free verse needs a beat. Try syllabe consistency pre stanza. This will help with language as well- God bless and keep wriring.
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Review of Her Hand  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
You obviously have talent- but this is to convoluted. It seems to be a mixture of Shakespeare and Robert Frost- The language is old. can't tell if this is poetry or prose. I would love to see this in todays language. It would be more original. My guess is that you can write circles around me and a lot of other people- In my opinion, For what that is worth, try writing this in todays language and see what you get- God Bless and keep writing...
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Review of Mother-Wings  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
best poem i have read today- magnificent. I think the rhyme was good- there was good rhythm- and the content was touching. Bravo- keep writing and god Bless!
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Review of Love Song  Open in new Window.
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
I have yet to be able to figure, with any consistancy, the differance between the stressed and unstressed syllable- So I can be no help there. I can tell you that this poem flowed very well- has a nice beat- and the content was clear and understood. Good job. and keep writing.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
descriptive- loved the first six stanzas. Good free verse! Last two stanzas were good, but seemed out of place to me- good poem, and good writing. God Bless and keep writing.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I very much like your interpretation of the night before christmas- Thought this might be a little mushy before I clicked in- but it was real and i got a little chuckle out of it! Good write! Will be checking in from time to time to view your work- I keep the poets I like in my favorites so I can read and learn. God Bless and Have a great Day!
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Review of The Guest  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Caught me by surprize at the end of that one! good Job! good rhyme and flows well. will be dropping in from time to time to check out your writing- God Bless and have a great day!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Again, exquisite! Beautiful done! God Bless.
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Review of Bi-Polar  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I think this is very descriptive and powerful- I feel if you worked on line measure- you could give this more of a rhythm. Good Job! Keep writing!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Original! Exuberant! Exquisite! Excellant! A magnificent triumph! I had a blast reading this poem. I normally don't care for poetry that is all over the page, but i wish this one would have went on for another twenty stanzas... Plus I got a tickel to boot! Bravo! Author! Bravo! Keep writing and God Bless! P.S. If I could have I would have rated this six stares!
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Review of William Writer  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
A nice friendship poem! The Rhyme was perfect, and the poem had a pretty good beat- You had six 9 syllable lines- Six 8 syllable lines- one 7 syllable line- and one six syllable line- which accounts for the nice rhythm. Good job! keep writing and God Bless!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
There are a lot of religions! Just being Christan counts for six that you have up there and there are well over a hundred different denominations. And there are a great many other faiths than Christen in the world- that is why you are getting so many "Nones" Myself- I believe in a Higher power- God- But follow no particular Faith or denomination of one- so what does that make me? Keep these polls coming- I enjoy them!!! Keep writing and God Bless!!
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Review of Grocery Isle Fate  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Felt that this poem flowed very well. Felt you lost your rhyme scheme a little, but a very intresting poem none the less- I enjoyed reading this- Keep writing. God Bless and Happy New Year.
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Review of Fade  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is one of those poems that leave a "Feeling" or impression on me- The kind of poem you read through many times and always "Feel" the poem. It has a life. It breaths. Good Job! I give this five stars. God Bless and Happy New Year!
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Review of Others  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
beautifully done- Masterful. very nice rhyme consistiency. flows well- reads stright through. Very interesting form- Content is inspirational. reminds me a little of frost. "Road less traveled" Bravo! Happy New Year!...
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Review of A love gone  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I give this five stars. I like these kind of poems. Short with alot of emoition packed into it. It makes me stop and think as well- We need more poems like this. Good job! Bravo!
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Review of On getting older  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Amen Brother- At fifty I'm just starting to get comfortable with myself, and would not want to be a teenager again for anything! If there is reincarnation- I will pass! I have noticed that my ears have grown a coat for the winters now that was never there when i was younger- lol.... This story was delightful, humorous, and true. It read through very well- and I enjoyed every word. Thank-you my friend, and God Bless and Happy New Year!!!
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I would like to offer my deepest and heart-felt apoligies- Your bio says you would like some feed-back on improving your writing and I have none. Again, this is perfect the way it is- If i had to struggle to find something i guess it would be when she "thinks" to her self in the beginning of the story I would put that in script- if that is possible, to indicate thought, rather than spoken words, but It really does not matter because you state that as well. Your work is very discriptive and "Real"- I read stright through and became involved with the character. Very humorus as well! Again I say Bravo!!!!!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was very informative. The links you have supplied here will be very helpful as well- Have saved some of them to my favorites. I think the biggest problem I have encountered for myself is coming across a piece that I am not sure how to review. Where I just do not feel qualified. (I think this will give me a better idea how to approch these reads.} And I have seen some reviews where the reviewer drew blood and i felt bad for the receiptent. The biggest reason that I want a review is to be shown, if need be, where i need to improve my work. When someone points out what i need to improve and does it in a callous way without any encouragement- it can be disheartening. I always try to give some encouragement on every review. I have found that it does take a certain amount of courage to give a rating and review that is less than perfect- I know for myself, there is a part of me that becomes self-centered for a moment, and I think if I don't give a good review It will come back to me in my own work- Then I remember the reason i joined WDC. and I give the most honest, and encouraging review I can- I'm here to improve my work, not to be lied to because someone is afraid they will hurt my feelings! I did not know I felt this strongly about this subject till I read this informative piece. On a final note, I sent one anonymous review and it did not feel right to me. I think this can give us licence to be overly harsh- even over-stepping our boundries. I have a long way to go I think on rating and reviews, but through this piece and the links supplied I am starting to feel more comfortable. Thank-you for writing this. God Bless and Happy New Year!!!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Contest set up very nicely. Easy to follow. links very helpful. God Bless!!
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Review of The Trap  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! This would make a fabulous song! I have to admit- I got chills, up and down my spine! Was thinking about the way I lived my life as I read this. For me personally- it fits, and i think anyone who has lived a life of, not only addiction, but abuse as well- will be moved by this beautiful write! I have crawled out of more gutters and walked away from more abuse than i am willing to admit at times- Life has beaten me down till i could no longer stand. When I could not do it on my own any longer, I turned to god- who is now my strength! MY writing, as is yours, is one of the weapons God has given me to stand up and face the world. When I write i heal myself- When I read inspired writing like yours- it heals me! Depending on how we use it- Writing is Gods love! Being a teacher for a living is one of the most noble occupations on the face of the planet. To teach children, and help influence their minds, and prepare them for life- what could be more sacrificing. I had so much anger, and had lived such an extream existance, even by the age of ten- that by the time I reached the seventh grade I was dismissed from every school in the state! I had to teach myself to read and write. the grades i did attend i ignored while i was there- thats why i use so many words the wrong way when i write and my spelling is so off at times- i spend a great deal of time proofing my work, and still get it wrong. Thats why i see your profession as so noble. I wish i could have benefited from your gift of teaching- God has blessed you in two ways- The gift of teaching and the gift of writing! This poem-song. that you have written will touch many hearts my friend... God Bless and Happy New year!!!
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
excellent writing. Free verse that sings! I know that this is already long for a poem but i would expand it even more!!! Make it epic! Or not- either way, good write!! Bravo! Happy New Year and God Bless!!!
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
delightfull! Structure was good. Has a good beat. I love these kinds of poems. they make me want to crawl into bed and put the covers over my head! This would be a good halloween poem. Anyway, good job. Loved the content. Happy New Year. And please keep writing. I enjoy reading your work!
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