I suppose everyone will have there own interpretation of this wonderful poem- mine is: tell me what I want to hear, enlighten and comfort, truth or no- but what i like about this is it is fun to read again and again! Keep writing! God Bless!
For me your poetry is more about understanding what your writing than form- I see the form and know that is effecting me in some way- maybe understanding that for the reader is immaterial- and if I'm sounding vague, I don't mean to- all I can give you is what i feel and see- I know that I like your poetry- My favorite stanza here is the second to the last- I won't copy it here because I can't stay true to the form- But it reminds me of many wasted nights in my life- nights that seem wasted anyway. Nights that i revisited, dark and empty, over and over again! I guess my point is that this poem has effected me profoundly. And I think that is what poetry is suppose to do! So for that I thank-you! I will quit rammbling now- God Bless and keep writing!
linear poems are hard in my opinion to write- I think you pulled it off very well- Content was very discriptive- the last stanza made me FEEL the cold! God Bless and keep writing!
Wow, again very discriptive and real! Reminds me of New York and Philly. I felt as if I were part of the night again! Great job! Bravo! God Bless and Keep writing!
Intense, powerful free verse- One line sounded funny to my ear: "I cannot bare the light no longer, cast in misguidance." I think its the "No" in the line. Wonderful writing- Bravo! God bless and keep writing!
I like this little poem- it has an interesting beat- the rhyme is good- and i like poems that have a conclusion- good or bad- resolved or not. Good Job. God bless and keep writing!
Interesting poem- the writing is good- feel you need to work on rhythm- line structure- This is just my opinion- good poem, just needs work. God bless and keep writing!
The form is certainly interesting- the writing is good- the form for me is distracting- takes away from the rhythm of poem. God bless and keep writing!
WoW! I really like this poem- good free verse- with a rhyme here and there- very discriptive- this poem put pictures in my mind- looking forward to reading more of your work! God bless and keep writing!
Again- your writing is wonderful- A few things bothered me about this poem though- the word "pyle"- some how this word does not fit the poem, but i could be wrong. And i would break this up into stanzas- maybe five four-line stanzas and a two line stanzas at the end. That might help the word "pyle" flow better as well- This is just my opinion- what I see and hear! You are a wonderful writer and I always look forward to reading your work! God Bless and keep writing!
Don't know why- but I love this one! maybe it's the word pomegranates. and the content- stop and have some tea- i'll work later! God bless and keep writing.
This poem has some wonderful moments- very good writing. I would take out the word "And" in the last line of the third stanza- I would rewrite the fourth line in the fourth stanza. Just my opinion. Good job though- excellent writing- God bless and keep writing!
I like the beat in this one- This has short, sharp lines- works very well- I also like the use of- love and hate- and- demons and angel- Bravo, again! God bless and keep writing!
"Ah, man! you wonderful villan! you faithless divine!"- man, you have a way with words! You have a special quality about your work! When I saw your name I knew something good was coming! You seem to have a mixture of the old verse and todays language as well- this is hard to do in my opinion- but you pull it off magnificently! Keep writing and God Bless!
I really like your poem- very discriptive! Left me with a feeling of serenity- like I was looking at the desert with you! Good Job. Bravo! God bless and keep writing!
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