Aprildesiree,
Thank you for sharing a thoughtful and beautiful love-song of a poem.
I appreciate the reality of the risk one takes in becoming vulnerable to another soul.
It is worth being two hearts, souls together enjoying the view of the vast world before you.
You shared this gracefully and eloquently.
Thank you!
Write On!
Deb
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> offer. Sometimes I might find a bit of your work I thought that I might express feelings
> about. If it struck a chord etc. If there should be such an entry under 'EMOTIONAL
> CHORD STRUCK' that is just my feelings and not meant to hurt or take liberty with the
> author's work.
>
>
> TITLE: Love the title, it suits the posts, and I am "drawn" to it.
>
> IMAGERY: Nicely put, I have sampled your blog on soul-passages, flowers, and typerwriters... I could relate to, and your imagery "drew" me in to the posts.
> EMOTIONAL CHORD STRUCK: Pleasure, joy, I enjoyed all you have shared!
>
> TONE: Varied with each blog, overall, matter-of-fact, and positive.
> SPELLING ERRORS: None noted, or maybe there is white-out covering them?
>
> FLOW: Well-paced writing, a pleasure to read.
>
> OVERALL: I am happy to have discovered your blog. Nice sized essays as response to prompts. Well Done! I shall be following you!
DISCLAIMER: This comes to you as a reader would see your work. I have only my opinion to
> offer. Sometimes I might find a bit of your work I thought that I might express feelings
> about. If it struck a chord etc. If there should be such an entry under 'EMOTIONAL
> CHORD STRUCK' that is just my feelings and not meant to hurt or take liberty with the
> author's work.
>
>
> TITLE: The title fits the subject and intent of the poem.
>
> IMAGERY: I appreciate the image of life's river: a current moving on.
> EMOTIONAL CHORD STRUCK: I felt sadness at expressed loss, and resignation, not so much peace achieved with letting go. Perhaps I am projecting my own lost relationships onto the poem... Finally, a clap of hands, and onward we go.
>
> TONE: mellow, sad, yet resigned to press on.
> SPELLING ERRORS: None noted.
>
> FLOW: Somewhat choppy reading, though it does not distract from the message.
>
> OVERALL: A meaty moral undergirds this poem. Don't dismiss today's gifts, don't sit in regret over yesterday's missed opportunities. Press on!
DISCLAIMER: This comes to you as a reader would see your work. I have only my opinion to
> offer. Sometimes I might find a bit of your work I thought that I might express feelings
> about. If it struck a chord etc. If there should be such an entry under 'EMOTIONAL
> CHORD STRUCK' that is just my feelings and not meant to hurt or take liberty with the
> author's work.
>
>
> TITLE: Appropriate to this piece
>
> IMAGERY: Nice, the picture you paint is vivid.
> EMOTIONAL CHORD STRUCK: Gently, mostly peace-filled and contented.
>
> TONE: Again, it is gentle, and alive with activities, people, animals, the life of the water. A hint of conflict with the water attempting to escape its confines.
> SPELLING ERRORS: do you mean "alluring" instead of "luring"?
>
> FLOW: Steady, easy, and smooth reading.
>
> OVERALL: A well-written description of an enjoyable moment in time.
Ah, Brian, this is a piece to chew on. Or certainly to read and re-read. I resonate on many levels with this poem.
I especially want to savor these thoughts:
Life
The spark
Strife
The start
Living
While dying
Not meaning morbidity, yet, while we are dying, I have been told that imminently we are living, and that is more true than the potential imminence of death.
It was meant to settle the fears/thoughts of death which are pervasive at night.
And, I believe it helps. Imminently, We Are living.
So let us live, and share the thoughts which about this life God brings into being...
Thank you for sharing, and
as always...
Write On!
Deb
Dragonline,
Thank you for sharing this unique poem.
I appreciate the subject, and your handling of it...
I especially appreciate your threat/promise to send the subject "right back into the far realms of imagination."
This is a new poem form to me.
I appreciate your work with it.
A well expressed image of grace, born of humility, through time.
Thank you for sharing it!
I have no suggestions to improve this poem.
Write On!
Deb
Brian,
Thank you for sharing a backward glance on your 1.1decade anniversary.
I appreciated reading your cell phone poem, Love and Words.
Thank you for posting.
Write On!
Deb
Zeke,
I was drawn to this poem by curiosity.
You hooked me with the title.
I appreciate the sentiments you shared, for it is true, life would be dull without the unknown, the puzzles.
Thank you for sharing this poem here.
Once upon a time there was a little girl who had a song in her heart. Everyday, she awoke to a melody humming within her. The song changed moods: sometimes it was light and joyous, sometimes it was small and quiet so that she could barely hear its notes. Then One day, the little girl noticed the song changed from joyous to melancholy on the days when she neglected to greet the morning with a thankful song of praise. The song she loved most was "This is the Day." When she sang out "This is the day," her heart's melody echoed back "this is the day." Next the girl sang, "That the Lord has made," and back came the reply, "that the Lord has made," The little girl's smile grew broad as she warbled, "I will rejoice," followed by "I will rejoice"... "and be glad in it," ... "and be glad in it!" Because of that, the girl vowed to never forget to be thankful for this good day. Until finally, everyone the little girl came in contact with sang with her the joyous chorus, "This is the day, this is the day, that the Lord has made, that the Lord has made, we will rejoice, we will rejoice and be glad in it!" Phil 4:4
Thank you, Bubblegum Jones for starting this little prompt. It brightened my day.
And I am going to send this little story to myself as a reminder to be glad and rejoice, evermore. Write On! Deb
Angus,
Thank you for sharing some thoughts which I think we are all having recently. The world is rough these days.
And we need to love.
Well said.
Write On!
Deb
This is a fantastic re-telling of all those broken love/fairy tales...
I especially appreciate the old/new telling of the unending lapse the woman/daughters fall prey to.
Beth,
Thank you for sharing this encouraging piece of writing.
I searched your port to give you a review to celebrate your anniversary at WDC.
Though this is a personal piece speaking to anyone who will read it, you have expressed important words of hope.
Thank you for your clear, bold testimony of God's work in your life.
Write On!
And Happy Account Anniversary
Brian,
Thank you for linking this poem to your recent blog post... last autumn poems?
Are you intending to stop writing, or are you simply acknowledging that we each will end one day?
I am in a mournful, yet accepting, moment today as I have been to a memorial service for a too young cousin.
Your words express well the loss, symbolism is beautiful, I am slightly envious.
But, no, I will simply appreciate that you can express similar thoughts and feelings to what I have experienced.
Well written.
No suggestions.
Write On!
Deb
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Imagery:We'll written, I am with you on your mini journey into the country.
This comes to you as a reader would see your work. I have only my opinion to
TITLE: Love the title, it suits the posts, and I am "drawn" to it.
IMAGERY: Nicely put, I have sampled your blog on soul-passages, flowers, and typerwriters... I could relate to, and your imagery "drew" me in to the posts.
EMOTIONAL CHORD STRUCK: Pleasure, joy, I enjoyed all you have shared!
TONE: Varied with each blog, overall, matter-of-fact, and positive.
SPELLING ERRORS: None noted, or maybe there is white-out covering them?
FLOW: Well-paced writing, a pleasure to read.
TITLE: The title fits the subject and intent of the poem.
IMAGERY: I appreciate the image of life's river: a current moving on.
EMOTIONAL CHORD STRUCK: I felt sadness at expressed loss, and resignation, not so much peace achieved with letting go. Perhaps I am projecting my own lost relationships onto the poem... Finally, a clap of hands, and onward we go.
TONE: mellow, sad, yet resigned to press on.
FLOW: Somewhat choppy reading, though it does not distract from the message.
OVERALL: A meaty moral undergirds this poem. Don't dismiss today's gifts, don't sit in regret over yesterday's missed opportunities. Press on!