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Guten Morgen! Ich bin Jessica and I'll be reviewing Lurid Visions.
My First Impressions:
I wasn't really crazy about it; maybe because I probably never read the novel (where does it come from?). However, I like how you give it a constant flow and keep it dead on subject.. you don't deviate to another point. Imagery was also present and its modern -- a lot of people nowadays are going through this, especially with the war.
Mechanics:
I found no mechanical errors. It looks perfect. The spacing was also perfect.
Rating: ***
Final Impressions:
I'll check out the rest of your port later. You're a very good writer; keep up the good work!
Guten tag! Ich bin Jessica and I'll be reviewing Memories Unmade.
My Impressions:
Beautiful, absolutely beautiful. I love how you characterize and gave us the synopsis at the beginning... you follow poem and story well. I also like how you characterize... I felt like I was the girl going through the same issues and felt the same way. You have wonderful flow; just beautiful.
Mechanics:
I found no mechanical errors; this is perfect. I also love the spacing... it made it easier to read.
Rating: ****
Final Impressions:
You're a talented writer and I can't wait to read more. Good luck with your novel and keep writing!
Guten tag! I'm Jessica and I'll be reviewing It's Hard To Receive a Gift.
My First Impressions:
I felt the same way when I first joined WDC and I underwent the same type of treatment too. Isn't this a great community? I know I made a lot of new, great friends. =] Anyway, I love your descriptions and the tone of it made me feel happy and like the expectation was great. Great plot and great flow.
Mechanics:
I found no mechanical errors. Just check your spacing. =D
Rating: ****
Final Thoughts:
I really enjoyed this. You seem like a talented writer. I hope to check out more of your portfolio in the future. Write on!
Guten tag! I'm Jessica and I'll be reviewing Addiction.
My Impressions:
This is a very unique approach on addiction and I think you were very successful. I really loved the imagery and how it paired up with an actual addict. I've also never seen this approach before either. I especially like the end.
Mechanics:
I found no mechanical errors. The flow wasn't bad (I like the aabb rhythm), but some parts were a bit long. However, it still works and it still sounds fine.
Rating: ***
Final Thoughts:
I really enjoyed this; you have a lot of talent. Thanks for sharing and remember to write on!
Guten Morgen! Ich bin Jessica and I'll be reviewing Wearing Prejudice Like a Badge of Hate.
My First Impressions:
I really agree with this poem... especially the ending. We all do hang on our pride too much; I hate to admit because I try to be a non-judgemental humanist, but sometimes if I'm angry enough the preducided pig persona comes out in me. However, through a few years of observation I have seen it come out in all of us; its only human. As humans we have tiny prejudices ingrained in us and sometimes they come out. I thought you have characterized this poem well, especially with the imagery.
Mechanics:
The only mechanical error I found was in the title; capitalize it. Other than that, the poem itself looks error free. I also loved the flow; it added to what I stated above, and spacing.
Rating: ****
Final Impressions:
Thank you for sharing; this really made me think. Keep up with the good work and remember to write on!
Guten Morgen! I'm Jessica and I'll be reviewing Castle.
My Impressions:
I thought this poem was very beautiful and it made me tear up a little bit. I love your descriptions as well; I could really imagine this. I also like how it's free verse... it really sets the mood of the castle because to me a castle doesn't have specific rhythm. You're rhythm also worked well.
Mechanics:
I found no mechanical errors and I like the spacing between the stanzas.
Rating: ***
Final Impressions:
You're a very good writer, especially with poetry. Just keep practicing and you'll get a lot better. =] Thanks for sharing and remember to write on!
My Impressions:
I thought this site was well laid out and I love your designs. You are really into this and it shows. I commend you for this site and I loved looking at it.
Mechanics:
I found no mechanical errors. I think the site is laid out perfectly, it's easy accesable and it's easy to read (font and colour) and the colours and graphics really make it. However, I'm at school and the choosing box didn't work.
Rating: ****
Final Impressions:
Good work as usually, especially with the graphics. May I apply for a membership? Keep up the good work and write/design on!
Guten abend! I'm Jessica and I'll be reviewing A Case of Forgetfulness.
My Impressions:
This isn't bad, I actually liked it. I liked how you played with the words and the imagery it created. I could really picture everything that was going on. It is also very creative and the plot is well constructed, especially for how short this is. What contest is this for?
Mechanics:
I found no mechanical errors. I liked the spacing and the flow worked well. =]
Rating: ****
Final Impressions:
Overall, this is a funny piece and very creative. Good luck with the contest! Remember to keep up the good work and write on!
Guten abend and I'm so happy you joined WDC! I'll be reviewing One Chance.
My Impressions:
I really loved this poem and the imagery you associated with him. I could really picture him sitting here playing the guitar. I also liked how you included two emotions: how he makes you feel and how you wish you had him.
Mechanics:
I found no mechanical errors. I also love the flow of this; it really brings the poem together.
Rating: ****
Final Impressions:
I can't wait until you post more on this site. Thanks again for joining. You're going to love it.
Guten Morgen! I'll be reviewing Can You Imagine: Heart In Concrete.
My Impressions:
Bravo! Again, I applaud you for being so open and honest and I know exactly how this feels. I wish more people would understand. = I really like how you used examples and you did a good job using figurative language so people could understand it better. I also like the flow and content of it.
Mechanics:
>>Can you imagine you’re too scared to out<< Can you imagine you're too scared to go out
Other than that, mechanics look fine.
Rating: ****
Final Impressions:
Again, you really amaze me and I applause you for being so open. I believe being so open in writing is one step closer to healing.
Guten Morgen! I'm Jessica and I'll be reviewing Why Do I Write? Who Am I?.
My impressions:
You're a very interesting person. I love your tastes in TV shows; I love CSI type shows as well. I like how you also admitted the XGC literature (writing wsie) wasn't for you. I'm attempting one and I know this is definately not going to be my genre either, but it is fun attempting a new genre. I also thought your published novel was interesting.
Mechanics:
I found no mechanical errors. I really like how you broke this up into sections and the flow.
Rating: ****
Final Thoughts:
I can't wait to read more of your work. One final question: how hard was it for you to get published? Keep up the good work!
Hallo und guten morgen! I'll be reviewing Vegas, Baby.
My Impressions:
WOW, this poem is amazing. You really capture Vegas well, especially the allure and why people want to escape there. Again, your strong point is imagery. I also really liked the flow; I think this should be more like a song. It could definitely work as a song.
Mechanics:
I didn't find any errors. The flow also worked really well with this poem.
Rating: ****
Final thoughts:
I'm very impressed with your work. You really have a lot of talent to you.
Hallo und guten morgen (Hello and good morning)! I'm Jessica and I will be reviewing Choke.
My impressions:
I really liked this poem because it describes unrequited love well. You do an excellent job with your words to create very strong imagery. The flow also really made the poem.
Mechanics:
I found no spelling errors. It looks perfect.
Rating: ****
Final thoughts:
As I said earlier I really like this poem. I think we have all felt like this one point in life. Keep up the good work and I can't wait to read more.
Hallo und guten abend (Hello and good evening)! I'll be reviewing Why I Rate Items The Way I Do.
My impressions:
I agree with you on this matter wholeheartedly. I think reviews should be for encouraging, not devastating. I also agree with you on the fact that the reviewer should look at the age of the person they are reviewing because age does effect the experience and maturity.
Mechanics:
I saw no errors. This is well written and you present your arguments logically and in order. You also back them up well.
Rating: * * * *
Final thought:
I can see why this piece got a medal. I wish a lot more people thought like you did instead of ripping some work to shreds. I honestly believe feedback should be to help, not criticize.
Hallo! I'm Jessica and I'll be reviewing Conspiracy Theory Thursday.
My impressions:
This brought a smile to my face. I really enjoyed the humor and satire of this. It's the truth about surveys, especially how annoying a lot of them could be. You also kept consistent with the satire and sold on what makes it a conspiracy (and ultimately funny).
Mechanics:
I saw no errors of any sort. I thought you had wonderful spacing and the flow/tone worked really well also.
Rating: * * * *
Final comment:
I can't wait to read more of your conspiracies. I like your humor.
WOW, this poem is amazing, Kiya. You really capture the fear of being kidnapped and I really liked the flow. You followed the rules to a tee and it sounds perfect. You should really enter this. I found no errors; perfect as is. Keep up the good work!
This is amazing. With your details it felt like I was actually in the room and know your characters personally. You really captured the time period well. You had a good plot and I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. I found no errors; this is perfect. Also, you were the only one to join my contest: you'll be rewarded 500 GPs. Congratualations!
This poem is beautiful and very sad. I really love the soothing tone of this, it sounds like you're actually talking to your friend in the present tense as he/she was still alive. You also had profound imagery and the flow really supported it. You should really make this into a mass card; I think it would soothe mourners as well. Keep up the good work; I saw no errors.
Very interesting. I love historical pieces and you brought a lot of insight into this article. I leanred a lot of new things about the carousels. Thanks for sharing. =) This was very well written; everything was worded properly and found no spelling or mechincal errors. However, only a minor however, would you mind indenting and leaving a space between each paragraph? It's much easier to read that way. Other than that, it's perfect.
This is very interesting. Though it is short, I can imagine what you are trying to portray very well. I also think this is very creative. I think I want to try one. I also like the flow; it works well. I found no errors; this is perfect. Keep up the good work and thanks for keeping me entertained.
This poem is very true. It really does ponder the question "What is happiness?" Though it is brief, you cover a lot in your search to find the truth of "happiness." You also use great details and imagery. I also found no errors; this is perfect. Keep up the good work and keep questioning!
Awww... this story is cute, but so sad. I really love your imagery, I could really picture the butterfly in each stage of life and you transition very well. The flow also ensentuates it... it almost sounds like a song. There were no errors of any sorts; this is perfect. Keep up the good work!
This poem is very beautiful. It reminds me of a mideval poem; set up in an old fashion way, especially the language. I think it works well with you are trying to convey. You also have wonderful imagery... I could really picture everything. With all you incorporated and the lack of mistakes, this is perfect. Keep up the good work.
Awww... this poem is so beautiful. =) I can really imagine her lonliness and everything that you have described (because I know how it feels too well). I can really picture all the dark, sad, gloomy images associated with lonliness really well. I also liked the flow, it best suited the poem. I found no errors in spelling or grammar. It looks perfect. Good job!
Jessica
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