Fred (E) His cell phone is insulted. #2175904 by Paul
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: I loved this story. It was not only humorous but it got the reader thinking about what might be taped out there; our conversations....how do we really know? Not that I think there is really a Fred but who knows. Anyway, great job!!!!!
Plot/Characters: A man and a talking interceptor.
Dialogue: Perfect!
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: Send more items to review. I thoroughly enjoyed this one.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Nice flow to the poem about a young man who didn't take time to enjoy a nice stack of pancakes because he was too busy. All the poor guy got was grapefruit for breakfast and he didn't even take time to sit down. Poor fellow.
Form of Poem: Rhyming
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: It was a cute little poem.
Errors found: None.
Suggestions: I have read your work before and find that you are a gifted writer, and it seems you explore all types of poems. I know some of them were a little over my head. You are very talented.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This is a well written dark poem with a lot of description. Nice job. I believe it was written for a contest and it seems you kept to the theme very well.
Form of Poem: Free style I believe
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: The mood of the poem.
Errors found: None.
Suggestions: You have the ability to set a tone to your poem. Keep writing.
The Omega (13+) This is my entry for the "Dystopian Scrawlings" Contest. #2290449 by Moonstone
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: The story was very descriptive so the reader did understand what was going on in the factory. You also were able to convey the reluctance that the new employee had.
Plot/Characters: A new employee, the person who was bringing her to the facility, a supervisor and other new employees.
Dialogue: I found no errors.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: In my opinion, spacing between paragraphs would make the story easier to read.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: I do apologize but I did not understand this poem at all. I see that there were a lot of rules about what you can and can't do - maybe that distracted from the overall flow of the poem or maybe it was just me, not understanding it.
Form of Poem: Not sure. Possibly free form.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any errors.
What I liked most: n/a
Errors found: None
Suggestions: Not sure what to think here. Definitely keep writing and do not let any review stop you from continuing your progress.
Driftwood (E) A journey of self discovery... a journey of hope. (Free Verse) #1530675 by 🌕 HuntersMoon
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: I loved that the reader could get lost within the words of this poem. You descriptiveness took me to the moment you were expressing and I felt a freedom for just that brief moment.
Form of Poem: Free verse.
Grammar/Spelling: No errors that I found.
What I liked most: The way the writer was able to transport the reader to feel they were there.
Errors found: None
Suggestions: You have the ability to make your words felt by the reader. That's a great talent to have!
Snapshots (13+) Through Amalfi... For the Third Son of Slam Contest #722449 by Joy
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This was a very detailed poem with lots of description. I didn't understand the story that well; but that is just me.
Form of Poem: Free style.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: The detailed descriptions.
Errors found: None.
Suggestions: You seem to have a grasp on how to write more advanced poetry. Keep up the good work!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: A sad little poem but so true. I always wonder if it's harder on the patient or the loved one. So many spend endless hours beside a victim, and it drains their energy because the patient cannot even respond to the loved one. Maybe somewhere inside they do and we just don't know that. One can hope.
Form of Poem: Free style?
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: The emotion.
Errors found: None.
Suggestions: Keep writing with emotion and you will go far.
Snow Time (E) Poem describing dogs playing outside after heavy snowfall #2290504 by Beth350
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Isn't it funny how most dogs like to play in the snow but do not like rain? This was a cute poem about dogs playing in the snow.
Form of Poem: A mixture of free style and rhyming
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: The joy of the poem.
Errors found: None.
Suggestions: Keep writing using descriptions and emotion.
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: This was a great story. Nostalgic as well. I was going to enter this contest and just couldn't come up with anything, so I thought I'd see what others did. I'm glad I read this and hope you win. PS: For some reason the b-item 3546905 would not show me the file.
Plot/Characters: A lonely astronaut.
Dialogue: Good.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: Keep up the good work. I thought it was a great incorporation to bring in a familiar song and weave it into your story perfectly.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This truly is a mystical poem. I loved the last 2 lines, 'waiting for someone relentlessly she sheds her light and wakes the day'. So much description and imagination in this little poem.
Form of Poem: Free form.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: The writer took me there.
Errors found: I found one little thing.
1) it prey (it's prey)
Suggestions: Keep using your beautiful words and sharing.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: I thought this was a very thoughtful poem. By that I mean, it made the reader think about the words and how they could relate it to others but more so how they could improve themselves by slowing down and thinking about the impact we make each day.
Form of Poem: I haven't ever seen a poem written this way but I did enjoy it very much.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: The points that were made in the poem.
Errors found: None.
Suggestions: Keep writing from the heart and you will go far!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This is intriguing. I'm guessing it is meant to be a song. I would love to hear the melody and/or seems like it would make a good video.
Rhyme & Meter: Free poem.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors
What I liked most: The song begs for more details, keeps the reader's interest.
What I liked least: That I don't know more about what happened. More please???
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This is a very heartwarming poem that makes you proud and sad all at the same time. It is true, our Veterans do not get the credit they deserve after giving up everything to defend our country.
Rhyme & Meter: Very good.
Grammar/Spelling: No errors that I found.
What I liked most: The writer was able to evoke a reader's feelings in this poem.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: You have the ability to strike emotion in the reader; this is a great talent.
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression:This was a case of someone getting caught in his own trap. I thoroughly enjoyed the story. The dialect and descriptions were right on. I could picture in my mind exactly what you were describing.
Plot/Characters: Mauricio, the flitter. Chuckie, the witness, Susan, the fiance, Various other women.
Dialogue: Excellent.
Grammar/Spelling: I only found 1 little thing. This did not detract from the overall story. 1) stars have planned for both us (both of us).
Suggestions: You have a great handle on how to move a story along in an interesting way and saving the zinger to the end.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: Such a sad story about an accident that happened to Bantay, the dog. To me, it seems that this memory might haunt the children in dreams as I didn't get the impression that there were any tears shed for the dog after the accident. It appeared as though the only concern was that they would get away with it and not get caught. Maybe they were that much afraid of the Grandfather but I would hope that he was more understanding of an accident than that.
Plot/Characters: The children, a dog, and a Grandfather
Dialogue: I found no errors.
Grammar/Spelling: Only 1 tiny thing. 1) says a word (say a word)
Suggestions: The story, although recounted from memory lacked description and feeling, in my opinion.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: The story had a lot of emotion and description which kept the reader's interest. The story is way too familiar in today's society; not sure what is happening but twice as sad when a young life is taken. I felt the agony of the medical worker who did his best; but it wasn't enough.
Plot/Characters: Medical worker; woman losing child; medical partner.
Dialogue: Good.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: Emotion that is felt by the reader is a talent and you have it.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: I really loved this story. I have a cat so it was endearing to me. It took me a few seconds to actually get that this was a cat and not a human. Tucker was quite the cat, wanting to make sure that he was able to take care of his elderly mother when he got older and not abandon her like the rest of his siblings had done. What a shame that he may not find his way back to her. I thought the story was very well written and interesting.
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: What a big mistake but I can see how that would happen and most likely has. Poor Pearl wanted to believe that her husband was not cheating on her but gossip played a big part in the way this story played out.
Grammar/Spelling: A couple things to point out. 1) The next day (in my opinion, this should start a new paragraph. 2) cabinet and return (returns). 3) his husband (or possibly her husband. I could be wrong here. You never know in today's society, Pearl could be another man.
Suggestions:
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
It's Easier (E) A poem based on when life takes a difficult turn and it becomes harder to live. #2247393 by Dr Perry Ride
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: A poem about trying to stay strong when you feel depressed or think it is to hard to continue in life. The poem mentions that even suicide is a consideration but we must hope to overcome and conquer.
Rhyme & Meter: Not a ryming or metered poem in my opinion.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: That you can overcome if you just summon up enough courage to do so.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: You seem to have deep feelings. Keep those feelings in mind when you are writing.
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: Wow! So short and yet so on point. I love this. It took a lot of imagination to think of our shadow in the eyes of the 'shadow itself'. The setting was perfect.
Plot/Characters: A person and their shadow.
Dialogue: n/a
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: I think you will go far. You have a knack for keeping reader interested even in such a short story. Makes you think.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: You got the title right, he NEVER should have opened that box; but then how many of us wouldn't. You know curiosity always gets the best of us. Not good for him though if all the neighbors found out what he had done.
Plot/Characters: A man receiving a pkg. that ultimately brought plagues and death.
Dialogue: n/a
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: Very imaginative. Good job!
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
Out of Mind (18+) My friend swaps bodies with my sister's friend! #1939360 by 124235
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: What fun to have an intereactive story! I think you set tis up perfectly; both the story and the ending line for someone else to jump into. Great job.
Plot/Characters: 4 kids: Dave, Johm, Cassie, Jess
Dialogue: No errors that I found.
Grammar/Spelling:No errors that I found.
Suggestions: Looking forward to seeing more of your work!
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: The story (although I hate the subject) was great. You kept the reader in the dark wondering what was so bad about the date. Congrats on the win, I can see how that prompt would be somewhat difficult. The thing I hate most in life is 'snakes' and yet at the home I purchased a few years ago there was one in my backyard this summer. I almost sold the house. Anyway, I'll take Hello Kitty any time over snakes. But good job!
Plot/Characters: Rob and his buddy Dave. A sassy bartender.
Dialogue: I thought the dialogue was spot on and believable.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: None. You got this.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: This one gave me a laugh. It was such a clever way to thank the husband and then to find out he is going to suffer dance lessons now was a great payback.
Plot/Characters: A husband and wife.
Dialogue: This was written in a letter form.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: None. Keep up the humor!
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
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Overall Impression: I loved this story. It was not only humorous but it got the reader thinking about what might be taped out there; our conversations....how do we really know? Not that I think there is really a Fred but who knows. Anyway, great job!!!!!
Dialogue: Perfect!
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Nice flow to the poem about a young man who didn't take time to enjoy a nice stack of pancakes because he was too busy. All the poor guy got was grapefruit for breakfast and he didn't even take time to sit down. Poor fellow.
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