This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: What a cute story! It reminded me of something that Native Americans might tell to their tribe at a meeting. I thought it was very imaginative and had an occurence, drama, and solution.
Plot/Characters: A Chief, his wife and many other animals
Dialogue: Very good.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: You kept my interest throughout. I enjoyed this.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Such a terrible thing; Alzheimers. So much more when it happens to a loved one. I felt the pain, frustration, and anger of the victim. You wonder sometimes, what is inside that damaged mind. Do they know more than we think and can't get it out. I feel so much sympathy for the son; it must be an awful burden to bear.
Rhyme & Meter: The rhyme was good. I felt the meter was not consistent.
Grammar/Spelling: I didn not find any errors.
What I liked most: The writer showed a lot of emotion and ths was felt by the reader.
What I liked least: I wish the entire poem would not have been bolded. That did not detract from the writing, just a personal preference.
Suggestions: Work on the meter a little although I'm not 100% sure that is required in a poem and there are so many variations of poems out there of which I am not an expert so I can't say for sure it is required.
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: What a nice, but sad little story in so few words. I hope you won the contest! It's very hard to create a story in 300 words or less. The reader could relate to the fond memories you brought out in the story. I think we all have cousins, aunts, and uncles that we rarely see anymore but who have been so influential in our lives. You had a surprise ending, again hard to do in such a short story.
I am sending you a review of your story (b-item:2289316}.
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: At first, I thought this was about an actual hurricane. Then, I realized it was yet another story about the Royals. I know that everyone seems to be obsessed with every detail of the Royals, but I am finding it hard to digest the rumors and innuendos of publicity. In my opinion, it would have been better for Harry and Megan to keep the details of their dispute between the families and not broadcast it to the world. Of course, there is the money! I appreciate your thoughts on the subject. I did not know what pegging was but I do now.
Plot/Characters: The Royals
Dialogue: n/a
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any errors.
Suggestions: It's always good for a writer to write what is on their mind. That is what gives us freedom to express our views.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero
Overall Impression: I am so frustrated. This is my 4th attempt at reviewing this story (nothing to do with you) and I keep hitting something that deletes it. Because I thought this was such a great story, I was persistent until it worked. So much to say about this. I was there, with the writer at the docks, smelling those flowers, looking at all the different fish, watching the boats come and go. Then, the nearly deserted town, 'boat yards like graveyards'. I pictured the general store with the indifferent clerk and felt the frustration of the Builder. The description of the house that needed repair. All of it, great! I am only sorry that I didn't get to read Chapters 1 & 2. Hopefully this is going to be a novel. It is the very kind I would like to read; no, the kind I would like to experience is more accurate.
Plot/Characters: A Builder and an irritating store clerk.
Dialogue: Very little dialogue. I found no errors.
Grammar/Spelling: Just a few things to point out. Many of the sentences ended with a lot of space. At first I thought maybe the writer entered a return, but it happened so frequently that I put it down to a preview error. It did not detract from the story. 1) Every once and a while (every once in a while).
Suggestions: You need no suggestions; I think you have it down pat. Let me know if more chapters come up!
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
The Unicorn Danced (E) A man witnesses a strange occurrence in his yard. 2018 Quill nominee. #2145365 by Dan I Am
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: I loved this fanciful poem that gave some humor and lots of fantasy to the reader.
Rhyme & Meter: The rhyme was perfect. The meter was off on stanza 4 & 6, in my opinion, but that did not seem to detract from the overall flow of the poem.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: I liked a lot of things about this poem. 'waltzed w/cat Twinkletoes', 'cha cha'd w/a fawn'. Very imaginable. The fact that he didn't want to tell his wife about it and blamed his kids. It was all very enjoyable!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: I thought your story was great, if not horrific! You incorporated a lot of people with believable dialogue. You were able to keep the mystery a secret until the end which is a real talent.
Plot: Sarah is seeing visions of bloody, recognizable faces on her computer and mirror. In reality, these people end up murdered.
Characters: So many. Sara, the med student who sees visions of bloody faces; Bonnie, nursing student, Sara's roommate; Dr. Hastings, the killer; Tommy, 1st victim suspect; Carol Johnson, friend of Allie, 1st victim...more.
Dialogue: Perfect!
Grammar: Perfect!
Suggestions: Please give me some when you have time LOL! I think you are a terrific writer. Keep writing, we will keep reading!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This poem captured my heart because it has happened so often to myself. Those words we write, come from the heart and the moment; likely never to return again exactly the same.
Rhyme & Meter: This was not a rhyming or metered poem.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors but I do wish the poem was not entirely bolded.
What I liked most: So many, many, things I liked about this poem. Here are a couple: 'maple syrup morning magic'; 'illusive scent of wood smoke'.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: Keep writing! You have the knack of making the reader feel the words you are expressing. Watch for a surprise!
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I am sending you a review of your story {b-item:{2146902}. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Very well written piece. Writer was able to portray a lot of feelings into the story so that the reader could understand exactly how terrified the man was. Also great writing in describing the surroundings of the story. The story ends with a bit of humor which is always refreshing.
Plot: A man is being stalked through the streets by a pack of cats.
Characters: A man being chased by cats and a Retail Worker
Dialogue: I found no errors
Grammar: Only 1 thing to bring up and I, myself, do not know if it is correct or not (the word drug as in being dragged.
Suggestions: I think the piece would be better viewed if not all bolded but that doesn't take away from the good writing at all.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Unfortunately this hits home. Every summer, the same thing, why didn't I lose some of that weght. Familiar story for a lot of us.
Rhyme & Meter: I thought the rhyne and meter were great. I only found 2 lines that I felt the meter was 1 sylabble too long.
Grammar/Spelling: No errors found.
What I liked most: The honesty and truth of what some of us experience; also the comedy of it.
DND PIRATE CAMPAIGN (13+) Please keep in mind that this is vague on purpose, since it's for DND! #2288994 by v
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Very good writing on this story that kept the reader interested.
Plot:j Captain of a ship sets out to find out what happened to her family. Quwest for a pearl ensues.
Characters: Sasha Brenard, Capt. Ferris, Faerie; Great Dragon
Dialogue: I found no errors.
Grammar: I found no errors.
Suggestions: This is probably just me, but I didn't get the connection to finding out what happened to her family with the incident of the pearl nor the letter that was left behind. Not sure what DND stands for.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Very direct poem stating opinion. Maybe if more people would stand up and give their opinion, we would not be cascading down the slippery slope we are today. It's true that many of us do not want to take the time to figure out who is the best candidate; we will just accept the decision made by a leader we choose and go with that. If it's incorrect it wouldn't be our fault; after all, we're just a follower. Social media has done a very clever and deceptive job by taking our younger generation by the hand. Most families don't eat together and discuss the day's events or do much at all together. Family togetherness is on the decline. TV and Cell Phone are the norm. Can we trust the news today - absolutely not, it is swayed by power and money just like everything else. Good luck, I won't be here to see what happens to the future, but I pray there is an awakening and changes begin to happen.
Rhyme & Meter: This is not a rhyming or metered type of poem.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: A writer who is not afraid to voice his opinion.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: Keep Writing; along the way, you will be heard.
A Measured Response (18+) Arnold finds a tape measure. Winner of SCREAMS!!! January 17 2021 and Weekly Winner. #2242039 by Beholden
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: It's funny but I've always been leery of those tape measures snapping back and cutting my finger. Your story started with the find of a tape measure, not unusual, but certainly in this story it was. I wonder how many other lives it had claimed previously. I'm guessing someone on the construction site will pick this up and suffer the same fate. Good job for leaving the mystery to the end.
Plot: A man finds a tape measure in an old desk. But was that a good or bad thing?
Characters: Arnold, the construction worker.
Dialogue: n/a
Grammar: I found no errors.
Suggestions: Keep writing! The story flowed well and had a surprise ending.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Cute little story about a girl walking to school limited by a word count. Mother always told Jane to think ahead but she forgot her umbrella and it started to rain.
Plot: A girl who has trouble thinking ahead forgets her umbrella and a very young man shares his. She then gives him directions to the school library. He is too young for her romantically but later in life start a business together.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: A billboard sign has the entire town wondering what those mixed-up letters mean. A $1,000 prize was even offered to the winner; but no one was able to figure it out. Much later it was revealed that it was part of a Chinese restaurant menu.
Plot: Mixed up letters on a billboard have the entire town wondering what they mean.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: What a nice poem to acknowledge those who have sacrificed their lives to protect our country. I like the phrase 'freedom's price'.
Rhyme & Meter: This was not a rhyming or metered type of poem.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any spelling errors.
What I liked most: I appreciate anyone who acknowledges our servicemen and women.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: This was a heist that was not well planned. Two men, in a museum to rob a safe with no idea of how to open that safe. Turns out one man was undercover. He slaps handcuffs on his partner in crime stating that he has been watching him for some time. With the poor planning that went into this heist, it's hard to believe that Steve is much of a threat to anyone.
Plot: Two men plan to rob a safe in the museum with no idea how to open it.
Characters: Steve, Tony
Dialogue: No errors that I could find.
Grammar: No errors that I could find.
Suggestions: Just wished Steve could have grabbed something on the way out so it wasn't a wasted effort.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Imaginative but sad story. A homebound person pondering on good and bad luck. He found some comfort in socializing with others over the net, but it wasn't the same as actually meeting them face to face. He never went out; even having his groceries delivered. He was unhappy to the point of considering death. This was a lonely person.
Plot: A homebound man considers his options in life.
Characters: A homebound man.
Dialogue: Not existent in this story.
Grammar: I found no errors.
Suggestions: Keep writing. You had a surprise ending to this story, so you kept the reader's attention.
the race (13+) tomorrow is the first day of the rest of my life #1921346 by Rhyssa
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This poem points out that it's not whether you win or lose a challenge but that you have tried your best. It encourages you to try again even if you may have failed the first time.
Rhyme & Meter: This was not a rhyming or metered poem.
Grammar/Spelling: No errors found.
What I liked most: I like the message of the poem most of all.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: Keep writing and sending those encouraging messages!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: You got me on this one! Just when I was thinking, hummm, why were they sleeping together if she's so sad about this other person. . There's a lot to like in this story. The word warmth right away brings comfort to the reader. Your adjectives throughout described the story so well (fuzziness invigorating). I love this: like a gentle sort of dance. . And of course, the shock ending. After hearing it was a dog, I didn't get her drinking coffee.
Plot: A man wakes up to find Ellie gone. He meanders into the kitchen and finds Ellie there drinking coffee.
Characters: A man and Ellie.
Dialogue: n/a
Grammar: Only one little thing. As I entered the lounge had (she had, or he had?)
Suggestions: Keep writing! You know how to keep the mystery until the end.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Such a fun poem full of action and description. I think you touched on all the things that you can do in a park and described them so well.
Rhyme & Meter: Not knowing if this is a certain type of poem, I cannot judge the meter, but I do think the rhyme was good although a tad awkward on the last stanza.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any spelling errors.
What I liked most: What I liked most is that you were able to bring into the poem a lot of action and senses (smell the flowers, sway like a tree, etc.)
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: Keep writing. You have the ability to convey to the reader what is happening in a very descriptive way.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: That was fun! I got Kalnesian right due to his recent illness but did not connect Shelley. You could become a mystery writer and make lots of money. Good plan and solution!
Plot: Software is missing, and Detective Clark has been called in to find the culprit.
Characters: Dr. Jering, Det. Clark, Karin, Shelley, Balbur, Kalnesian
Dialogue: I didn't find any errors.
Grammar: I didn't find any errors.
Suggestions: Keep writing. Explore your talent as a mystery writer!
Tribute (ASR) A poem written for my father's 75th birthday. #486738 by Sophy
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: What a nice tribute to your father; I'm sure he would be proud. I'm sorry you lost him at such a young age and then had to stomach a stepfather who was abusive. The loss of your sisters, a war, and poverty continued throughout your life. All of these experiences, as horrible as they were, will make you a great writer for you have experienced a lot of feeling, good and bad. I'm happy you found a family and are determined to give them a different type of life than you had!
Rhyme & Meter: This wasn't really a poem of rhyme or meter but rather of feeling.
Grammar/Spelling: I didn't find any errors.
What I liked most: n/a
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: Keep writing. Draw from your experience.
Thank you for sharing your poem!!!!!
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Overall Impression: What a cute story! It reminded me of something that Native Americans might tell to their tribe at a meeting. I thought it was very imaginative and had an occurence, drama, and solution.
Dialogue: Very good.
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Such a terrible thing; Alzheimers. So much more when it happens to a loved one. I felt the pain, frustration, and anger of the victim. You wonder sometimes, what is inside that damaged mind. Do they know more than we think and can't get it out. I feel so much sympathy for the son; it must be an awful burden to bear.
