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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: This was a great story. Nostalgic as well. I was going to enter this contest and just couldn't come up with anything, so I thought I'd see what others did. I'm glad I read this and hope you win. PS: For some reason the b-item 3546905 would not show me the file.
Plot/Characters: A lonely astronaut.
Dialogue: Good.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: Keep up the good work. I thought it was a great incorporation to bring in a familiar song and weave it into your story perfectly.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This truly is a mystical poem. I loved the last 2 lines, 'waiting for someone relentlessly she sheds her light and wakes the day'. So much description and imagination in this little poem.
Form of Poem: Free form.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: The writer took me there.
Errors found: I found one little thing.
1) it prey (it's prey)
Suggestions: Keep using your beautiful words and sharing.
Virtue (ASR) My first attempt at free form. Companion piece to "Sin" #2001038 by Jeff
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: I thought this was a very thoughtful poem. By that I mean, it made the reader think about the words and how they could relate it to others but more so how they could improve themselves by slowing down and thinking about the impact we make each day.
Form of Poem: I haven't ever seen a poem written this way but I did enjoy it very much.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: The points that were made in the poem.
Errors found: None.
Suggestions: Keep writing from the heart and you will go far!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This is intriguing. I'm guessing it is meant to be a song. I would love to hear the melody and/or seems like it would make a good video.
Rhyme & Meter: Free poem.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors
What I liked most: The song begs for more details, keeps the reader's interest.
What I liked least: That I don't know more about what happened. More please???
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This is a very heartwarming poem that makes you proud and sad all at the same time. It is true, our Veterans do not get the credit they deserve after giving up everything to defend our country.
Rhyme & Meter: Very good.
Grammar/Spelling: No errors that I found.
What I liked most: The writer was able to evoke a reader's feelings in this poem.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: You have the ability to strike emotion in the reader; this is a great talent.
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: Such a sad story about an accident that happened to Bantay, the dog. To me, it seems that this memory might haunt the children in dreams as I didn't get the impression that there were any tears shed for the dog after the accident. It appeared as though the only concern was that they would get away with it and not get caught. Maybe they were that much afraid of the Grandfather but I would hope that he was more understanding of an accident than that.
Plot/Characters: The children, a dog, and a Grandfather
Dialogue: I found no errors.
Grammar/Spelling: Only 1 tiny thing. 1) says a word (say a word)
Suggestions: The story, although recounted from memory lacked description and feeling, in my opinion.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: I really loved this story. I have a cat so it was endearing to me. It took me a few seconds to actually get that this was a cat and not a human. Tucker was quite the cat, wanting to make sure that he was able to take care of his elderly mother when he got older and not abandon her like the rest of his siblings had done. What a shame that he may not find his way back to her. I thought the story was very well written and interesting.
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: What a big mistake but I can see how that would happen and most likely has. Poor Pearl wanted to believe that her husband was not cheating on her but gossip played a big part in the way this story played out.
Grammar/Spelling: A couple things to point out. 1) The next day (in my opinion, this should start a new paragraph. 2) cabinet and return (returns). 3) his husband (or possibly her husband. I could be wrong here. You never know in today's society, Pearl could be another man.
Suggestions:
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
It's Easier (E) A poem based on when life takes a difficult turn and it becomes harder to live. #2247393 by Dr Perry Ride
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: A poem about trying to stay strong when you feel depressed or think it is to hard to continue in life. The poem mentions that even suicide is a consideration but we must hope to overcome and conquer.
Rhyme & Meter: Not a ryming or metered poem in my opinion.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: That you can overcome if you just summon up enough courage to do so.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: You seem to have deep feelings. Keep those feelings in mind when you are writing.
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: Wow! So short and yet so on point. I love this. It took a lot of imagination to think of our shadow in the eyes of the 'shadow itself'. The setting was perfect.
Plot/Characters: A person and their shadow.
Dialogue: n/a
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: I think you will go far. You have a knack for keeping reader interested even in such a short story. Makes you think.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: You got the title right, he NEVER should have opened that box; but then how many of us wouldn't. You know curiosity always gets the best of us. Not good for him though if all the neighbors found out what he had done.
Plot/Characters: A man receiving a pkg. that ultimately brought plagues and death.
Dialogue: n/a
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: Very imaginative. Good job!
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
Out of Mind (18+) My friend swaps bodies with my sister's friend! #1939360 by 124235
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: What fun to have an intereactive story! I think you set tis up perfectly; both the story and the ending line for someone else to jump into. Great job.
Plot/Characters: 4 kids: Dave, Johm, Cassie, Jess
Dialogue: No errors that I found.
Grammar/Spelling:No errors that I found.
Suggestions: Looking forward to seeing more of your work!
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: The story (although I hate the subject) was great. You kept the reader in the dark wondering what was so bad about the date. Congrats on the win, I can see how that prompt would be somewhat difficult. The thing I hate most in life is 'snakes' and yet at the home I purchased a few years ago there was one in my backyard this summer. I almost sold the house. Anyway, I'll take Hello Kitty any time over snakes. But good job!
Plot/Characters: Rob and his buddy Dave. A sassy bartender.
Dialogue: I thought the dialogue was spot on and believable.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: None. You got this.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: This one gave me a laugh. It was such a clever way to thank the husband and then to find out he is going to suffer dance lessons now was a great payback.
Plot/Characters: A husband and wife.
Dialogue: This was written in a letter form.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: None. Keep up the humor!
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: What a cute story! It reminded me of something that Native Americans might tell to their tribe at a meeting. I thought it was very imaginative and had an occurence, drama, and solution.
Plot/Characters: A Chief, his wife and many other animals
Dialogue: Very good.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
Suggestions: You kept my interest throughout. I enjoyed this.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: What a nice, but sad little story in so few words. I hope you won the contest! It's very hard to create a story in 300 words or less. The reader could relate to the fond memories you brought out in the story. I think we all have cousins, aunts, and uncles that we rarely see anymore but who have been so influential in our lives. You had a surprise ending, again hard to do in such a short story.
I am sending you a review of your story (b-item:2289316}.
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.
Overall Impression: At first, I thought this was about an actual hurricane. Then, I realized it was yet another story about the Royals. I know that everyone seems to be obsessed with every detail of the Royals, but I am finding it hard to digest the rumors and innuendos of publicity. In my opinion, it would have been better for Harry and Megan to keep the details of their dispute between the families and not broadcast it to the world. Of course, there is the money! I appreciate your thoughts on the subject. I did not know what pegging was but I do now.
Plot/Characters: The Royals
Dialogue: n/a
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any errors.
Suggestions: It's always good for a writer to write what is on their mind. That is what gives us freedom to express our views.
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero
Overall Impression: I am so frustrated. This is my 4th attempt at reviewing this story (nothing to do with you) and I keep hitting something that deletes it. Because I thought this was such a great story, I was persistent until it worked. So much to say about this. I was there, with the writer at the docks, smelling those flowers, looking at all the different fish, watching the boats come and go. Then, the nearly deserted town, 'boat yards like graveyards'. I pictured the general store with the indifferent clerk and felt the frustration of the Builder. The description of the house that needed repair. All of it, great! I am only sorry that I didn't get to read Chapters 1 & 2. Hopefully this is going to be a novel. It is the very kind I would like to read; no, the kind I would like to experience is more accurate.
Plot/Characters: A Builder and an irritating store clerk.
Dialogue: Very little dialogue. I found no errors.
Grammar/Spelling: Just a few things to point out. Many of the sentences ended with a lot of space. At first I thought maybe the writer entered a return, but it happened so frequently that I put it down to a preview error. It did not detract from the story. 1) Every once and a while (every once in a while).
Suggestions: You need no suggestions; I think you have it down pat. Let me know if more chapters come up!
Thank you for sharing your story!Keep writing - we will keep reading!
The Unicorn Danced (E) A man witnesses a strange occurrence in his yard. 2018 Quill nominee. #2145365 by Dan I Am
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: I loved this fanciful poem that gave some humor and lots of fantasy to the reader.
Rhyme & Meter: The rhyme was perfect. The meter was off on stanza 4 & 6, in my opinion, but that did not seem to detract from the overall flow of the poem.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.
What I liked most: I liked a lot of things about this poem. 'waltzed w/cat Twinkletoes', 'cha cha'd w/a fawn'. Very imaginable. The fact that he didn't want to tell his wife about it and blamed his kids. It was all very enjoyable!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: I thought your story was great, if not horrific! You incorporated a lot of people with believable dialogue. You were able to keep the mystery a secret until the end which is a real talent.
Plot: Sarah is seeing visions of bloody, recognizable faces on her computer and mirror. In reality, these people end up murdered.
Characters: So many. Sara, the med student who sees visions of bloody faces; Bonnie, nursing student, Sara's roommate; Dr. Hastings, the killer; Tommy, 1st victim suspect; Carol Johnson, friend of Allie, 1st victim...more.
Dialogue: Perfect!
Grammar: Perfect!
Suggestions: Please give me some when you have time LOL! I think you are a terrific writer. Keep writing, we will keep reading!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This poem captured my heart because it has happened so often to myself. Those words we write, come from the heart and the moment; likely never to return again exactly the same.
Rhyme & Meter: This was not a rhyming or metered poem.
Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors but I do wish the poem was not entirely bolded.
What I liked most: So many, many, things I liked about this poem. Here are a couple: 'maple syrup morning magic'; 'illusive scent of wood smoke'.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: Keep writing! You have the knack of making the reader feel the words you are expressing. Watch for a surprise!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Unfortunately this hits home. Every summer, the same thing, why didn't I lose some of that weght. Familiar story for a lot of us.
Rhyme & Meter: I thought the rhyne and meter were great. I only found 2 lines that I felt the meter was 1 sylabble too long.
Grammar/Spelling: No errors found.
What I liked most: The honesty and truth of what some of us experience; also the comedy of it.
DND PIRATE CAMPAIGN (13+) Please keep in mind that this is vague on purpose, since it's for DND! #2288994 by v
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Very good writing on this story that kept the reader interested.
Plot:j Captain of a ship sets out to find out what happened to her family. Quwest for a pearl ensues.
Characters: Sasha Brenard, Capt. Ferris, Faerie; Great Dragon
Dialogue: I found no errors.
Grammar: I found no errors.
Suggestions: This is probably just me, but I didn't get the connection to finding out what happened to her family with the incident of the pearl nor the letter that was left behind. Not sure what DND stands for.
A Measured Response (18+) Arnold finds a tape measure. Winner of SCREAMS!!! January 17 2021 and Weekly Winner. #2242039 by Beholden
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: It's funny but I've always been leery of those tape measures snapping back and cutting my finger. Your story started with the find of a tape measure, not unusual, but certainly in this story it was. I wonder how many other lives it had claimed previously. I'm guessing someone on the construction site will pick this up and suffer the same fate. Good job for leaving the mystery to the end.
Plot: A man finds a tape measure in an old desk. But was that a good or bad thing?
Characters: Arnold, the construction worker.
Dialogue: n/a
Grammar: I found no errors.
Suggestions: Keep writing! The story flowed well and had a surprise ending.
Thank you for sharing your story!
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Overall Impression: This was a great story. Nostalgic as well. I was going to enter this contest and just couldn't come up with anything, so I thought I'd see what others did. I'm glad I read this and hope you win. PS: For some reason the b-item 3546905 would not show me the file.
Dialogue: Good.
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This truly is a mystical poem. I loved the last 2 lines, 'waiting for someone relentlessly she sheds her light and wakes the day'. So much description and imagination in this little poem.
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