. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Cute little story about a girl walking to school limited by a word count. Mother always told Jane to think ahead but she forgot her umbrella and it started to rain.
Plot: A girl who has trouble thinking ahead forgets her umbrella and a very young man shares his. She then gives him directions to the school library. He is too young for her romantically but later in life start a business together.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: A billboard sign has the entire town wondering what those mixed-up letters mean. A $1,000 prize was even offered to the winner; but no one was able to figure it out. Much later it was revealed that it was part of a Chinese restaurant menu.
Plot: Mixed up letters on a billboard have the entire town wondering what they mean.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: What a nice poem to acknowledge those who have sacrificed their lives to protect our country. I like the phrase 'freedom's price'.
Rhyme & Meter: This was not a rhyming or metered type of poem.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any spelling errors.
What I liked most: I appreciate anyone who acknowledges our servicemen and women.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: This was a heist that was not well planned. Two men, in a museum to rob a safe with no idea of how to open that safe. Turns out one man was undercover. He slaps handcuffs on his partner in crime stating that he has been watching him for some time. With the poor planning that went into this heist, it's hard to believe that Steve is much of a threat to anyone.
Plot: Two men plan to rob a safe in the museum with no idea how to open it.
Characters: Steve, Tony
Dialogue: No errors that I could find.
Grammar: No errors that I could find.
Suggestions: Just wished Steve could have grabbed something on the way out so it wasn't a wasted effort.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Imaginative but sad story. A homebound person pondering on good and bad luck. He found some comfort in socializing with others over the net, but it wasn't the same as actually meeting them face to face. He never went out; even having his groceries delivered. He was unhappy to the point of considering death. This was a lonely person.
Plot: A homebound man considers his options in life.
Characters: A homebound man.
Dialogue: Not existent in this story.
Grammar: I found no errors.
Suggestions: Keep writing. You had a surprise ending to this story, so you kept the reader's attention.
the race (13+) tomorrow is the first day of the rest of my life #1921346 by Rhyssa
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This poem points out that it's not whether you win or lose a challenge but that you have tried your best. It encourages you to try again even if you may have failed the first time.
Rhyme & Meter: This was not a rhyming or metered poem.
Grammar/Spelling: No errors found.
What I liked most: I like the message of the poem most of all.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: Keep writing and sending those encouraging messages!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: You got me on this one! Just when I was thinking, hummm, why were they sleeping together if she's so sad about this other person. . There's a lot to like in this story. The word warmth right away brings comfort to the reader. Your adjectives throughout described the story so well (fuzziness invigorating). I love this: like a gentle sort of dance. . And of course, the shock ending. After hearing it was a dog, I didn't get her drinking coffee.
Plot: A man wakes up to find Ellie gone. He meanders into the kitchen and finds Ellie there drinking coffee.
Characters: A man and Ellie.
Dialogue: n/a
Grammar: Only one little thing. As I entered the lounge had (she had, or he had?)
Suggestions: Keep writing! You know how to keep the mystery until the end.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Such a fun poem full of action and description. I think you touched on all the things that you can do in a park and described them so well.
Rhyme & Meter: Not knowing if this is a certain type of poem, I cannot judge the meter, but I do think the rhyme was good although a tad awkward on the last stanza.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any spelling errors.
What I liked most: What I liked most is that you were able to bring into the poem a lot of action and senses (smell the flowers, sway like a tree, etc.)
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: Keep writing. You have the ability to convey to the reader what is happening in a very descriptive way.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: That was fun! I got Kalnesian right due to his recent illness but did not connect Shelley. You could become a mystery writer and make lots of money. Good plan and solution!
Plot: Software is missing, and Detective Clark has been called in to find the culprit.
Characters: Dr. Jering, Det. Clark, Karin, Shelley, Balbur, Kalnesian
Dialogue: I didn't find any errors.
Grammar: I didn't find any errors.
Suggestions: Keep writing. Explore your talent as a mystery writer!
Tribute (ASR) A poem written for my father's 75th birthday. #486738 by Sophy
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: What a nice tribute to your father; I'm sure he would be proud. I'm sorry you lost him at such a young age and then had to stomach a stepfather who was abusive. The loss of your sisters, a war, and poverty continued throughout your life. All of these experiences, as horrible as they were, will make you a great writer for you have experienced a lot of feeling, good and bad. I'm happy you found a family and are determined to give them a different type of life than you had!
Rhyme & Meter: This wasn't really a poem of rhyme or meter but rather of feeling.
Grammar/Spelling: I didn't find any errors.
What I liked most: n/a
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: Keep writing. Draw from your experience.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Great story to pull off with the limited word cout that you had to work with. I read along wondering why the dogs were out to get the character. When the husband also stated "get away", I still thought, what is wrong with everyone?. You left the mystery to the end.
Plot: A woman is being rejected from animals and humans alike only to find out that her daughter, after a fight, had put a spell on her. Further, we find out that both of them are witches.
Characters: Dogs, Woman, Daughter, Husband
Dialogue: I found no errors.
Grammar: I found nothing amiss.
Suggestions: Keep writing. Great imagination and descriptive script.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Totally relatable. I feel the same about driving although in my younger days had no problem. It is hard to see when you can see distance with your glasses but then have to see GPS close up. That being said, thank you for GPS. You're correct, GPS can get you back to where you need to be but please, keep that gas tank filled!
Plot: A womans' experience with driving when she is not comfortable doing it.
Characters: One woman
Dialogue: None
Grammar: I didn't find any errors.
Suggestions: Keep writing. Writing from one's own experiences generally makes a better story. I did take into account that this is a very limited word contest.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: This is a sad story and a reminder that left to the government only, people will suffer. The story revolves around a woman named Sarah who is aimlessly wandering the streets noting the poverty and hopelessness around her. I was hoping that there would be a spark of something in thi story; maybe just the gift of a smile or small belonging to brighten up the ending.
Plot: A picture of a country ruined by too much government and people who lived in poverty and hopelessness because of it.
Characters: Sarah, a homeless woman.
Dialogue: I found no errors in dialogue.
Grammar: I found no errors in grammar except I wanted to point out one little thing. In Paragraph 8 you refer to the people as "gaunt and hollow". This is repeated in Paragraph 11.
Suggestions: Maybe a little gesture of sunshine in the story to leave the reader with the thought that no matter what you do, be it ever so tiny, it might make a difference to someone else out there.
The Jar with Ears (E) A jar with candy hears gossip in a store and then a new life begins with sad news. #1415339 by Redtowrite
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Loved it! This was such a cute and endearing story. You put a lot of effort in the dialog about various people in town and I could picture that old country store with the candy jar sitting on the shelf.
Plot: A candy jar that was going to be disposed of turns into a money jar to help people.
Characters: A candy jar and it's perspective about the people in the town and the owner of the store where it resides.
Dialogue: Great!
Grammar: I only found one little thing that really didn't make a difference to the story. I thought there should be a new paragraph after 'presents to be seen'.
Suggestions: Keep Writing! I would like to read more of your stories.
Four Feelings (18+) Written in 2005: A poem I wrote to get the feelings out. #2288713 by Jinxx
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This is a very dark, depressing poem. I hope the writer has overcome these feelings of pain. Hate should be put aside for it will not harm the object as much as it does the person feeling it. That is hard to do but time can heal.
Rhyme & Meter: The rhyme was good, but I thought the meter didn't work well.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any spelling errors.
What I liked most: That the writer was able to express their feelings.
What I liked least: That the writer thought the only way out of pain was death. It would accomplish nothing as the person who caused the pain would most likely not care.
Suggestions: Work on the meter. That being said, there are some forms of poems where meter is not important so take that advice with a 'grain of salt'. It's just my preference. Keep writing!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Humor Plot This would make a good movie. I can see Jill, ignoring the poor Salesman in the passenger side; becoming more agitated as the story goes along. I like the description in the first paragraph that brings into play the scene very well. The characters you introduced were so funny and the imagination behind it was genius. "Hop in", said to bunny was hilarious.
Plot: A woman tests out a car with the salesman riding along. She drives way to fast and picks up some sketchy characters along the way which brings the salesman to a near panic attack.
Characters: Jill, driver. Joe, salesman. An Easter Bunny, Leprechaun, and Cupid.
Dialogue: Perfect.
Grammar: I did not spot any errors.
Suggestions: None but I will take some advice on my writing.
Play to Win Big (E) "...The truth is, walking the talk and playing to win must forever co-exist..." #1472531 by Tim Chiu
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Don't we all like to brag about our favorite team and put down the other team. We have high hopes that they will win and if they don't; oh well, next time they will or the umpire made a mistake. Likewise we go to the casino with high hopes; generally they are dashed but we will return.
Rhyme & Meter: Rhyming and meter were not present in this poem.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not spot any spelling errors.
What I liked most: I like the truth behind the words.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: Keep writing. I have seen other pieces you have written.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Laugh out loud. I so laughed throughout this story, and you did so much in such a few words. I never guessed that it was a dream until the end because it sounded so 'on point'.
Plot: The Things people will do on Black Friday.
Characters: A woman shopping on Black Friday and various unknown peole within the store. The woman's husband.
Dialogue: I found no errors in dialogue.
Grammar: I found no errors in grammar.
Suggestions: Write more stories. We all need a chuckle, and you have the gift of humor combined with realism.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Poem brings to light the sensationalism that reports can make by exaggerating the facts.
Rhyme & Meter: I thought the rhyme was great but felt the meter was off in some instances.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any spelling errors.
What I liked most: If I got this right, I agree with the writer that today, we can't depend upon accuracy in the news because a simple statement may be twisted into an entirely different meaning than intended. It's common for an event to be over dramatized in order to obtain more readership or viewership, and the methods used to obtain information may be deemed nothing more than voyeurism.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: You know how to write a poem and bring a subject to the forefront giving the reader a lot to think about.
Thank you for sharing your poem!!!!! Keep writing!
Bee Purgatory (Haiku) (E) I had to move a hive today and I always think of the bees that may not have come back! :( #2288622 by Rhee R. Lee
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Thank you for explaining that this was a Haiku poem. It shows how much you can say in so little.
Plot: A little bee was searching for his home, but it had moved and now he was all alone.
Characters: A bee
Dialogue: No dialogue in this poem.
Grammar: I did not find any errors.
Suggestions: If you can capture a moment in a small poem like this little Haiku; then I believe you are capable of expressing so much in a longer poem. Keep writing.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Ah, the Vegas vacation where everyone thinks they will come home a winner but the odds are always with the house. This writer was smarter than the house though; he knew when to quit.
Rhyme & Meter: The rhyme was great. I thought the meter was off in some of the lines.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any errors in spelling.
What I liked most: I like the way the story flowed from the anticipation of going on the trip to the fun at winning and then the realization that; hummm maybe I should slow down a little bit. Something that the friend did not do. Writer hit on the shows and so-so buffets and seemed overall to have enjoyed the trip; even coming home a winner; glad to be back.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
{e :check2}Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: First of all, thank you for pointing out that this is a Rictameter Form. I enjoy learning about the different forms of poetry, and there are many. Secondly, it is a shame that any person, young or old, has to go through a war not of their own making to satisfy greed and ignorance.
Rhyme & Meter: I am not familiar with a Rictameter so I am going to assume it is written as the form dictates.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any errors.
What I liked most: I liked (although like is not the correct word for the struggle here) but the writer made the reader feel how hopeless and unfair the situation is.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Fantastic imagination.
Plot: A factory whose inventor made candy that became dangerous to humans. I really liked this story. It was as entertaining as it was imaginative. Who knew a person could be entertained by a story about candy killing people.
Characters: Two survivors and various candy.
Dialogue: I did not find any errors in the dialog which was very good and entertaining.
Grammar: I did not find any grammar errors.
Suggestions: None. Thank you for sharing your story.
Good to know that you can always get out of trouble in the Lilliputian World by bribing them with a coin. Maybe Gulliver has used that tactic before, we will never know.
I'm guessing this story was limited by the number of words because it would be interesting and fun to find out more about Gulliver's travels. Just a suggestion: maybe once the contest is over you could expand into a novel or novelette. I would be interested to read it.
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Overall Impression: Cute little story about a girl walking to school limited by a word count. Mother always told Jane to think ahead but she forgot her umbrella and it started to rain.
This would make a good movie. I can see Jill, ignoring the poor Salesman in the passenger side; becoming more agitated as the story goes along. I like the description in the first paragraph that brings into play the scene very well. The characters you introduced were so funny and the imagination behind it was genius. "Hop in", said to bunny was hilarious.
