. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Great story to pull off with the limited word cout that you had to work with. I read along wondering why the dogs were out to get the character. When the husband also stated "get away", I still thought, what is wrong with everyone?. You left the mystery to the end.
Plot: A woman is being rejected from animals and humans alike only to find out that her daughter, after a fight, had put a spell on her. Further, we find out that both of them are witches.
Characters: Dogs, Woman, Daughter, Husband
Dialogue: I found no errors.
Grammar: I found nothing amiss.
Suggestions: Keep writing. Great imagination and descriptive script.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Totally relatable. I feel the same about driving although in my younger days had no problem. It is hard to see when you can see distance with your glasses but then have to see GPS close up. That being said, thank you for GPS. You're correct, GPS can get you back to where you need to be but please, keep that gas tank filled!
Plot: A womans' experience with driving when she is not comfortable doing it.
Characters: One woman
Dialogue: None
Grammar: I didn't find any errors.
Suggestions: Keep writing. Writing from one's own experiences generally makes a better story. I did take into account that this is a very limited word contest.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: This is a sad story and a reminder that left to the government only, people will suffer. The story revolves around a woman named Sarah who is aimlessly wandering the streets noting the poverty and hopelessness around her. I was hoping that there would be a spark of something in thi story; maybe just the gift of a smile or small belonging to brighten up the ending.
Plot: A picture of a country ruined by too much government and people who lived in poverty and hopelessness because of it.
Characters: Sarah, a homeless woman.
Dialogue: I found no errors in dialogue.
Grammar: I found no errors in grammar except I wanted to point out one little thing. In Paragraph 8 you refer to the people as "gaunt and hollow". This is repeated in Paragraph 11.
Suggestions: Maybe a little gesture of sunshine in the story to leave the reader with the thought that no matter what you do, be it ever so tiny, it might make a difference to someone else out there.
The Jar with Ears (E) A jar with candy hears gossip in a store and then a new life begins with sad news. #1415339 by Redtowrite
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Loved it! This was such a cute and endearing story. You put a lot of effort in the dialog about various people in town and I could picture that old country store with the candy jar sitting on the shelf.
Plot: A candy jar that was going to be disposed of turns into a money jar to help people.
Characters: A candy jar and it's perspective about the people in the town and the owner of the store where it resides.
Dialogue: Great!
Grammar: I only found one little thing that really didn't make a difference to the story. I thought there should be a new paragraph after 'presents to be seen'.
Suggestions: Keep Writing! I would like to read more of your stories.
Four Feelings (18+) Written in 2005: A poem I wrote to get the feelings out. #2288713 by Jinxx
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This is a very dark, depressing poem. I hope the writer has overcome these feelings of pain. Hate should be put aside for it will not harm the object as much as it does the person feeling it. That is hard to do but time can heal.
Rhyme & Meter: The rhyme was good, but I thought the meter didn't work well.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any spelling errors.
What I liked most: That the writer was able to express their feelings.
What I liked least: That the writer thought the only way out of pain was death. It would accomplish nothing as the person who caused the pain would most likely not care.
Suggestions: Work on the meter. That being said, there are some forms of poems where meter is not important so take that advice with a 'grain of salt'. It's just my preference. Keep writing!
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Humor Plot This would make a good movie. I can see Jill, ignoring the poor Salesman in the passenger side; becoming more agitated as the story goes along. I like the description in the first paragraph that brings into play the scene very well. The characters you introduced were so funny and the imagination behind it was genius. "Hop in", said to bunny was hilarious.
Plot: A woman tests out a car with the salesman riding along. She drives way to fast and picks up some sketchy characters along the way which brings the salesman to a near panic attack.
Characters: Jill, driver. Joe, salesman. An Easter Bunny, Leprechaun, and Cupid.
Dialogue: Perfect.
Grammar: I did not spot any errors.
Suggestions: None but I will take some advice on my writing.
Play to Win Big (E) "...The truth is, walking the talk and playing to win must forever co-exist..." #1472531 by Tim Chiu
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Don't we all like to brag about our favorite team and put down the other team. We have high hopes that they will win and if they don't; oh well, next time they will or the umpire made a mistake. Likewise we go to the casino with high hopes; generally they are dashed but we will return.
Rhyme & Meter: Rhyming and meter were not present in this poem.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not spot any spelling errors.
What I liked most: I like the truth behind the words.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: Keep writing. I have seen other pieces you have written.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Laugh out loud. I so laughed throughout this story, and you did so much in such a few words. I never guessed that it was a dream until the end because it sounded so 'on point'.
Plot: The Things people will do on Black Friday.
Characters: A woman shopping on Black Friday and various unknown peole within the store. The woman's husband.
Dialogue: I found no errors in dialogue.
Grammar: I found no errors in grammar.
Suggestions: Write more stories. We all need a chuckle, and you have the gift of humor combined with realism.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Overall the poem had great feeling and reader could understand the agony writer was going through. If I understood the poem correctly, it seemed the writer was in love with someone, but that love was not returned. He/she thought of themselves as a fool, and it would not matter if they lived or died. They thought their life was unfilled. I was curious at the end if the character was contemplating killing themselves and the person they loved, so they could always be together but maybe I got that wrong.
Rhyme & Meter: I thought the rhyming was good but felt the meter was off in parts.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any grammar/spelling errors.
What I liked most: My favorite verse in the poem was stanza 5. I felt that had so much descriptiveness and feeling and it flowed so well.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Poem brings to light the sensationalism that reports can make by exaggerating the facts.
Rhyme & Meter: I thought the rhyme was great but felt the meter was off in some instances.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any spelling errors.
What I liked most: If I got this right, I agree with the writer that today, we can't depend upon accuracy in the news because a simple statement may be twisted into an entirely different meaning than intended. It's common for an event to be over dramatized in order to obtain more readership or viewership, and the methods used to obtain information may be deemed nothing more than voyeurism.
What I liked least: n/a
Suggestions: You know how to write a poem and bring a subject to the forefront giving the reader a lot to think about.
Thank you for sharing your poem!!!!! Keep writing!
Bee Purgatory (Haiku) (E) I had to move a hive today and I always think of the bees that may not have come back! :( #2288622 by Rhee R. Lee
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Thank you for explaining that this was a Haiku poem. It shows how much you can say in so little.
Plot: A little bee was searching for his home, but it had moved and now he was all alone.
Characters: A bee
Dialogue: No dialogue in this poem.
Grammar: I did not find any errors.
Suggestions: If you can capture a moment in a small poem like this little Haiku; then I believe you are capable of expressing so much in a longer poem. Keep writing.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Ah, the Vegas vacation where everyone thinks they will come home a winner but the odds are always with the house. This writer was smarter than the house though; he knew when to quit.
Rhyme & Meter: The rhyme was great. I thought the meter was off in some of the lines.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any errors in spelling.
What I liked most: I like the way the story flowed from the anticipation of going on the trip to the fun at winning and then the realization that; hummm maybe I should slow down a little bit. Something that the friend did not do. Writer hit on the shows and so-so buffets and seemed overall to have enjoyed the trip; even coming home a winner; glad to be back.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
{e :check2}Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: First of all, thank you for pointing out that this is a Rictameter Form. I enjoy learning about the different forms of poetry, and there are many. Secondly, it is a shame that any person, young or old, has to go through a war not of their own making to satisfy greed and ignorance.
Rhyme & Meter: I am not familiar with a Rictameter so I am going to assume it is written as the form dictates.
Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any errors.
What I liked most: I liked (although like is not the correct word for the struggle here) but the writer made the reader feel how hopeless and unfair the situation is.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression: Fantastic imagination.
Plot: A factory whose inventor made candy that became dangerous to humans. I really liked this story. It was as entertaining as it was imaginative. Who knew a person could be entertained by a story about candy killing people.
Characters: Two survivors and various candy.
Dialogue: I did not find any errors in the dialog which was very good and entertaining.
Grammar: I did not find any grammar errors.
Suggestions: None. Thank you for sharing your story.
Thank you for showing what type of poem this is. This reader always likes to learn more about the various types of poems.
We all have dreams; many which do not come true, so the first stanza is very familiar. I think dreams are something we expect may not come to fruition, but hope is different. I don't know what it would feel like to give up hope. Hope keeps us moving forward day after day.
However, I think you are correct. You don't need hope or dreams if you have true faith because you know in your heart you will be saved.
Good to know that you can always get out of trouble in the Lilliputian World by bribing them with a coin. Maybe Gulliver has used that tactic before, we will never know.
I'm guessing this story was limited by the number of words because it would be interesting and fun to find out more about Gulliver's travels. Just a suggestion: maybe once the contest is over you could expand into a novel or novelette. I would be interested to read it.
Nice poetry, I really like it. It was inventive but also meaningful.
Your first stanza about the stately oak brought me to the moment and held me to the end.
The tree captured this so-called love by means of a carving that was made into its bark. But was it a true love or puppy love? Whatever it was, magic prevailed and the two were caught up in a cycle.
When the spell was finally broken, wrath erupted and the love died.
I can't help but wonder if the poem was a warning not to let love take hold of your heart until it has been tested for truth.
That was quite the party. I could see from the first paragraph that there was going to be some trouble. Unfortunately, same thing happened to me when I went to a business meeting overnight; lucky for me, the cops were never there - that I know of.
Anyway, the story moved along, and I could feel the panic Charlie was in trying to stop what was happening and then after, getting the mess cleaned up before the parents came home. Something tells me that they're going to find out anyway, probably from that neighbor.
Social media really messes with stuff; seems there is nothing that doesn't get put out there.
I only found a couple of things: 1) I didn't understand this: gone midnight 2) unauthorised should be unauthorized
Darkness can be a problem for a lot of people; making them depressed. With rain, does come dark days. On the other hand, some people find a rain can be soothing to the mind and spirit.
It's good to know that for all people sunshine does bring great joy and warmth.
You can make the reader feel your emotion so keep writing.
I didn't find any errors except a tiny one that really doesn't matter and that's a double .. at the very end.
First of all, thank you for the 'link' and letting reader know what type of poem this is. I found that a Rondeau is interesting and challenging.
You start off describing the days' events from parades, to cookouts, to the fireworks display.
Next, if I am interpreting this correctly you mention that as much excitement as the man-made event created, we can find an equally explosive event right in nature.
What a great description of a thunderstorm. Although lightning storms can be frightening, one does have to admit they create an awesome sight!
I give you kudos on imagination and this could really be full blown into more chapters as it is very inventive.
However, the grammar is lacking in a lot of places. Too many to point out but here are a few things I found: 1) A lot of your sentences do not end with a period 2) I saw the names Lilianna, Grace, and Lili that were not capitalized. 3) In a couple of places, you missed on the following: Im instead of I'm. Wasen't should be Wasn't.
Generally, when you have created a static item and are typing, there will be items underlined in blue or red. These are errors and if you click on the blue, it will usually help you with spelling and/or grammar.
Hopefully you will keep writing. The imagination is there - just watch the rest.
If you fix this grammar I would give you a much higher rating as the story itself is good.
The dialog in this story sounded authentic, like a familiar couple, always "friendly' arguing with each other.
All women know that it sometimes takes a little work to get a husband to take what they say at face value. Surprisingly, we are often right. At least in this case LOL.
It appears George might not have remembered his own instructions.
A little humor for an early morning. Thank you!
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Overall Impression: Great story to pull off with the limited word cout that you had to work with. I read along wondering why the dogs were out to get the character. When the husband also stated "get away", I still thought, what is wrong with everyone?. You left the mystery to the end.
This would make a good movie. I can see Jill, ignoring the poor Salesman in the passenger side; becoming more agitated as the story goes along. I like the description in the first paragraph that brings into play the scene very well. The characters you introduced were so funny and the imagination behind it was genius. "Hop in", said to bunny was hilarious.
