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Title: "Those Special Moments"
{c:blue:Opening: A beautiful beginning here as you take us straight into the subject ..How much happiness your husband brings/or gives to you.
Body: A wonderful job here describing the love you both share. A wonderful job.
Closing: Simply a lovely love poem. I hope you will grow old together. On March 25th my hubby and I celebrated 47 years of marriage. It is great. I can offer nothing to suggest improvementd here.
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I love this. I am giving you a five stars as it touches my spirit. I like the togetherness of walking in the park. I felt so empty when you walked alone and when you never bother to take the walk. I felt happiness for you to walk again and to see her/him standing there. I hope you will continue to walk together forever.
Hello there. This is Funnyface returning a review. I appreciate your support. I can not give you a title for this poem but it is simply a lovly love poem. I especially like your first verse. Panning for gold.., prospect for love.., are two outstanding lines. A great job!
Beginning:What a delightful way to begin your poem. The butterfly flowing on the wind and sailing across the sky is very viviid in my eye.
Body/Plot:Your body or plot continues to paint vivid pivtures as each verse shows us yet another scene.It is very colorful and grapic.
Closing: An excellent ending.
Comments:I really like this poem. I enjoyed the scenes you created. I like the colors you used and your rhymning. There is nothing I can suggest that would improve this poem
Simply wonderful. This is so funny, I laughed so hard, and I had to go pee. I can picture you going out to tackle the yard work, needing to hunt for the tools, running inside for a pee and coffee break..you sound like a lady after my heart. Great write here. Well constructed and filled with humor. There is nothing I can suggest for improvement.
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Opening: It must be hard to write about a person who is suffering from senility, Yet your opening takes us straight into it.
Body:I find this story to be very emotional. You are doing a good job. I think this could be developed in to a much longer write. We can all relate to the subject for who knows we might be next.
Closing: A fitting ending.
Comments:I enjoyed this personal write here. I wish you well on W.D.C. Good luck int he contest. I see no errors.
Opening: I really like your beginning. The things you want to marvel at are ones we all should all marvel at.
Body:Your body or plot is well developed and solid. We do need to live life with hope and faith
Closing:Very nice and fitting for this write.
Comments:I enjoyed reading this , and I found it very inspiring. I welcome you to W.D.C and hope to see another entry from you next week. I see no errors.
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Opening: A good opening. I like the first two opening lines.
Body: I feel a lot of hurt, disappointment to a love that has gone sour, or a one sided love. Either way when one realizes it is over, the hurt is real. I am sorry you are experiencing this now. Hugs for you to draw on for comfort if needed.
Closing: Solid closing. Your closing two lines is as strong as your opening two lines are
. Comments:I enjoyed reading this poem. It brings back memories of these heartaches and shattered dreams.You have done a nice.I want to welcome you to W.D.C.. I see no errors.
Opening: Super nice. How much better to taste the flavor of lips like plum and sugar after feasting on bread and water.
Body: The words in the plot of this poem appeals to me. You have showed us what a great banquet you were feasting at, with the flavors you never knew. A great job here!
Closing: I felt sad that you had to move on so your heart wouldn't be stolden.
Comments: A unique way with your writing here. Presented lovely. I smiled at times as I read it. I will look forward to more of your writing..Enjoy Writing.com I see no errors.
Opening: Great! A strong beginning and a nice brief description.
Body: Your plot is so well developed as you cry out in prayer to our Creator. I love the lines "Who else will listen Who else will understand" God does understand indeed.
Closing: Outstanding, what a wonderful prayer you prayed in this last verse.
Comments: A very inspiring read.Thank you for writing it. Good luck in the Challenge.. I see no errors.
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Opening: The beginning to your novel is nice. We all have been inpatience while in traffic and wonder what is the hold up.
Body: A solid body. To hear the news caster tell that there has been an fatal accident does nothing to prepare one for the tragey that lies ahead.
Closing: Wow! The closing is powerful. To come acoss an accident which has claimed the life of your children is heart breaking.
Comments:Chapter one here of your novel shows your writing talent shining through. All the best with the rest of the writing for the book. I see NO errors!
"One Last Scratch" gave me reason to think..I guess if there is a reason for everything, I haven't found out what it is. Your body of the poem is filled with such lovely descriptive writing. I also want to be that pitch fork that finds the needle in the haystack.This is a fitting ending to this poem. Thank you again for having supported me by r/r/r some of my writes. I am humbled.
Your poem "Little Black Books" is another work well written. All I can really say here is that your writing talent sure shines through. I like the way you go straight to your point. I see nothing that I could offer that could in any way improve this poem. Great writing.
Hello this is Funnyface, I am taking a peek in your portfolio to show my appreciation for the times you have r/r/r at least a couple or more of my writes.
Your poem "Destiny's Steps" is beautifully written. I like the way you have used your words here. To have dreams such as you had in verse one of this poem must have been wonderful Your second verse is just as nice as your first verse, and I hope you are still holding hands..even if only in your dreams.
I enjoyed reading Destiny's Steps and see no errors.
Beginning: Awesome, a great beginning to a beautiful love story.
Plot: I love this story, from the first sentence to the closing line. It warms my heart that Edward met and fell in love with Autumn Moon.. I was delighted that later on he met Summer Moon.I would like to know what happens, are you going to write another part to this love story. I hope so.
Closing:Simply lovely..
Comments:This is such a beautiful love story, that I feel it should be made into a chapter book. I can say nothing negative about this story. It makes me feel happy, and warm.
Beginning: It is nice that you told us the purpose of posting this character sketch.
Plot: You have done some fine detailed writing as you share with us your developed sketch of Sally Gulford.
Closing: I am sure as you keep writing it will come to you clearly how and in what ways that Sally will fit in to your novel.
Comments: I congratulate you on writing a novel. I wish you all the best. I see no errors here in your character sketch.
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Plot:This poem/lyrics will touch many peoples heart. It is sad when a family breaks a part. I sense a lot of pain and sorrow. I am so sorry. It is especially hard when it is a son and dad.
Closing: I like how you close this with the lyrics of the chorus.
Comments:{A nice job here. Good luck with the song. I see no errors}
Beginning: A solid begining. We the readers, know a lady was killed by the semi, and you never even got to say good bye. Time to get the kleenex out. I'm a softy.
Plot: The words to this poem are heart wrenching. To lose a friend is bad enough but to never get to say good bye must tear you apart.
Closing: From the opening to the end of this poem I have tears in my eyes. I am so sorry for your loss.
Comments:A heart touching write and I see no errors.
Beginning: I like your brief description and also your opening paragraph. I am sure some of us, as we age do get paranoid.
Plot: I think the manner in which you tell this story is excellent. I however, see nothing wrong with your Mother taking the tape measure out to measure the washing machine.
Closing: I smiled at how embrassed we can make our children as they grow. I think my kids would agree with you.
Comments: I see no errors! a nice story well written.
Thank you for entering the challenge. Title: " A Pocket Full Of Starlight"
Beginning:A nice strong beginning as it leads us, the readers, right into the plot of the story.
Plot: A very relaxing story when you told us about where Sarah would nurse her little one. so sad when she had her miscarriage. Only a mother who has gone through this can really feel the pain and sorrow this Mother is going through.What a precious gift of love giving John little Jake.
Closing: What a wonderful marriage with unconditional love.
Comments: Congratulations on the awardicon. This story is worthy of wearing this ribbon. {c;red} I see no errors. Good job.
Thank you for entering the challenge. Title: "Face AT The Window"
Opening: You have captured our attention with the first verse of the poem.
Body: The body of this item shows us a very sad tale..a tale that tells us the how a lady felt so alone and and rejected.It is a story that many couldn't understand. Only us that has felt that way can know the hurt, sorrow and pain that she feels.
Closing: Sad from the start to the end.You have tied this poem together nicely. Good job here!
Comments: I see no errors
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Opening: An excellent beginning. You took us straight to the topic of the poem.
Body: Your poem is written nicely. It tales a tale of abuse that ends in death. You have touched the emotions of the reader. I still have tears in my eyes. This story could have been written by the dead little girl.
Closing: Hearttouching.
Comments: Any subject that has to do with children are good. Some funny, some cute and then there is ones like this, that wrenches our hearts and souls. I hope that just even one person who has an anger problem will get help because of this poem. Maybe a dear little one will be protected. I see no errors.
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