A nicely written poem, TL.
It's clever, smart
and taut. You chose your
words well and kept the
message on point. I like
your work. Thanks for
sharing it. Always fun to
discover capable writers
here. All the best,
Gabriella
Beauty is a gift and a challenge.
I agree, it is complex
and has many faces. This is both
thoughtful and direct.
You have real ability. I look
forward to reading more of your
work. Warmest best,
Gabriella
This is awesome. Thank you for the
wonderful reminder. The message is
always fresh, vital and helpful.
Believing in a greater
power provides important balance
to our lives, doesn't it. Thank you
for sharing your beautiful message.
It's touching, obviously written
from the heart.
Warmest best, Gabriella
Julie, what a loving tribute
to your mother. She must have
been so proud of you.
I'm sure she wanted you to live
life fully. What a great
tribute that would be.
Keep on writing. You have
a great beginning here.
I hope you write lots more.
Best wishes, Gabriella
What a glorious ode to your Dad.
It's such a precious thing to
have a great relationship with
a parent. Your dad sounds
really great. As a parent, I believe
our shared commitment is
to provide sufficient love and guidance
that in time each child will be
strong enough to fly without us.
Your poem ia lovely and thoughtful.
It's also well written and nicely structured
too. Bravo ! Warmest best, Gabriella
A very open frank poem,
written with style and
well chosen words. Most
of us have experienced weird
times when the night
seems to last forever
draped in black, so bleak, lonely.
It's easy to relate.
Thank you for sharing it.
Good luck with your poem
and your writing. You have
real ability.
All the best, Gabriella
My heart aches reading this poem.
It is a good one, Nick. You have
real ability. It's true, kids whose
parents fight and divorce blame
themselves. A drinking problem
is a tough one to overcome. Your dad
is the only person who can do that.
What you wrote is profoundly honest
and loving. Good luck with this
poem and your writing, Nick.
All the best, Gabriella
I like this poem ! It is
written from the heart
and has real substance.
You do a good job of showing
us how it felt when your
special someone just walked away.
I like that you ask what
would happen if you disappeared.
Bravo ! I hope you keep
on writing. You have
real potential which will
surface as you write more.
All the best, Gabriella
A lovely poem. Its ethereal
and haunting. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
I like " the fullest of lights,
to surround my soul to the end
of my days"........bravo, Auctus.
I hope you'll write many more
poems. Good luck with this piece.
All the best, Gabriella
A wonderful piece. It is curious and intriguing.
And, it was fun to read. I like your style and
ability to think out of the box. Thank you for sharing your work. Good luck with this piece and your writing.
All the best, Gabriella
A wonderfully imaginative fun story.
One that has a lesson attached to it
for young girls Loretta's age. A special bonus.
I love the quirky feel of this story
which makes it a little different
and better than others like it.
Loretta Poinsetta is a great name :)
Go through your piece and fix the words
that are misspelled. Ask if you need
help. I'd be happy to point out the words
that need attention.
Good luck with your writing.
All the best, Gabriella
This is a short but very sweet poem.
It's wonderful that you are able to
communicate well and write from the
heart too. I thoroughly enjoyed reading
this lovely message to an absent friend.
It's loving and sad.
Best of luck with this poem and your
writing, Gabriella
A lovely tribute to your lady.
I enjoyed reading it.
This piece is nicely structured,
articulate and sweet.
It's elegant and romantic too.
Good luck with it and your
writing. All the best,
Gabriella
Keep writing and keep your chin up.
There is a place for all of us if
we're patient and believe in who and
what we are. Everyone is special in
ways that are important. Nice people
often feel invisible. But, in the
end it's the nice people who count
most, are the most loyal of friends
and the best relationship material.
This is a thoughtful piece. Good
luck with it and your writing. All
the best, Gabriella
I like the message and your poem.
If you were to clear up a few
misspelled words, you might clear
the way for good reviews.
1) Where you wrote: "An language" ...do you mean And language or A language ?
2) Where you wrote: "These words are not owned or ARE mine"...take out the word ARE
3) Where you write: "Where the wind shall BLOWN, replace blown with blow.
4) Where you wrote: "Do not judge MY on my heart"
change to Do not judge me on my heart.
5) Some thing should be changed to something --in
the last sentence.
Good luck with your poem and your writing. You have
ability. I know you'll do well. All the best,
Gabriella
A very sad wrenching poem, written
with a heavy heart. I appreciate
how tough and what a bitter pill
it is to lose someone you love.
You conveyed your
feelings very effectively. Thanks
for sharing your poem.
Good luck with it
and your writing. Warmest
best, Gabriella
A "novel" name and poem :)
I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
The structure is fun and the
words, intriguing. All of us know what
it is to be at a loss for words.
And, the choices we make to use words
to help or cause grief is a
daily challenge.
Good luck with this poem
and your writing. I hope
you'll enjoy Writing.com
as much as I do.
All the best, Gabriella
A very thoughtful message.
You make a powerful point.
If you want to give readers
a chance to read this
without being distracted by
a few unneccessary errors,
here are a couple of suggestions
as to what could be
easily repaired.
The seventh line down:
"Everything we do or say follows
a LIN" should it read "follows a LINE" ?
The eighth line down:
"... the end of the line we start AGIN"
should it read "start AGAIN" ??
The tenth line down:
"For if we stay TO long...should it
be For if we stay TOO long ?
Hope this is a help. Good luck with your
thoughtful piece and with your writing.
All the best, Gabriella
It's intricate and lovely.
Thanks for sharing your
poem. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
I hope you'll write many
more. It's fun to read your
work for the first time.
Warmest best, Gabriella
A sweet tribute to cats and cat lovers.
This is a touching poem. Thanks so much for
sharing it; I loved reading it.
It's nicely structured and its message
is succinct, clear and compelling.
From one cat lover to another, bravo !
Warmest best, Gabriella
This is one of the best poems I've read since joining in January. Thank you for sharing it. It's so well written and beautifully articulate. I'm going to save it to read again. I hope you'll write many more wonderful poems.
All the best, Gabriella
This is a beauty.
Bravo !!
Your poem is clear,
nicely constructed
and lovely to read.
Thanks so much
for sharing it.
Congratulations on
being selected for this
week's poetry newsletter.
A much deserved treat.
Warmest best, Gabriella
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