Overall Impressions:
Review 16 of 20. I couldn't pass this one up, since I was born and raised in Michigan. I just chose the one that said that I have been here my entire life. When I was 26 I picked up and moved to Dallas, Texas, and lived there for a year, and then picked up my stuff again and moved to Tampa Bay, Florida, and lived there for almost 3 years. Then my dad died, so I picked up my stuff my moved back here to Michigan. I am glad to be back. I wouldn't have it any other way.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Nice poll! Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
I have been fortunate enough not to have been through something like this. I hope I never have to. I love thunderstorms, but I don't like it when they get violent and cause tornadoes. I live in Michigan and the town that I live in is prone to tornadoes and severe storms. I lived in Florida for a few years and have been fortunate enough not to experience hurricanes either. I am glad to be back in Michigan, not as much weather-drama as some of the other states. ^_^ We just have to deal with lots of snow during the winter time, and constant weather changes, but that's what I am used to.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this story. Write On!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This is so cute! It put a smile on my face. I have the same issues when it comes to men; they are either commit-phobic, or they are losers. What is it with men around our ages? I just don't get it at all. Maybe one of these days........I will just have to keep dreaming and hoping.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Favorite Part:
The part toward the end where you tell the guy off. I wish more girls would be so bold to creeps like that, lol!
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this humorous story. Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This is a really cool story! It's almost like the story about "The Headless Horseman". I really enjoyed reading this piece. You did a great job!
Plot Comments:
Good job on the plot. It was solid through the very end.
Narration/Dialogue:
Great job on the narration and dialogue.
Imagery/Description:
Excellent job on the imagery. The graphic that you provided adds a nice touch to the story, spooky even.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this piece! Good job! Good Luck!
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Overall Impressions:
This is an excellent story that you have written. Of course I enjoy reading your work!
Plot Comments:
Well done on the plot. It flowed smoothly all of the way through.
Narration/Dialogue:
Well done on the narration and dialogue.
Imagery/Description:
Nicely don on the imagery in this piece. I love your descriptions of the eyes and ocean. I really like the ocean representing lovers tears. Very cool!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for the excellent entry! Write On! Good Luck!
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Overall Impressions:
What a lovely poem! I really enjoyed reading this!
Emotional Impact:
I love the romance in this piece.
Flow/Form:
Nicely done on the flow and form. I really like how each new stanza begins with the word of the previous stanzas. I don't think that I have ever seen that style before.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any spelling or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Nice job! Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This is an inspirational and positive piece that you've written. You made some excellent points in this. A positive attitude does a lot for ones morale.
Emotional Impact:
Whenever something bad happens to a person, they feel they are going to crumble to pieces. I felt that way when I found out about my brain tumor. Thankfully it was benign and all that was required was surgery. I hope that you recover soon! My prayers are with you always.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any spelling or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this write.
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This is such a touching story that you have written. I can certainly relate to this. After losing my dad last year, holidays haven't been the same. It felt like when dad died, all of the family traditions had died with him. But then I thought to myself; dad wouldn't want me to stop celebrating holidays because he's gone. I realized that once I meet a nice guy, marry him, and have children, that I will be able to carry on family traditions, or make new ones of my own. After reading this, it made me think of all things that I have to be thankful for.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this lovely story and for reminding me that I have a lot to be thankful for.
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
A well written piece about our peace-loving country.
Emotional Impact:
I get tired of war. Unfortunately it's been going on since the beginning of time. It would be nice if we could go through a period (even if short-lived) when there isn't one war raging.
Imagery:
Well done on the imagery and description in this poem.
Flow/Form:
Great job on the flow and form.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I found one error; Third stanza, third line; it should be "American soldiers". You forgot to pu the 'n' at the end of "American". Other than that, I didn't find anything else.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this great poem! Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This is a well told story about a creature not accepted into society.
Plot Comments:
Nice job on the plot, it was strong and flowed smoothly.
Narration/Dialogue:
Good job on the character's narration.
Imagery/Description:
Nice job on the imagery and details of this piece. You were very descriptive and thorough throughout the entire story.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Closing Remarks:
I would like to see this story expanded and go more more in depth about the creature's origin. These are just my suggestions, do with them what you wish. Nice job! Good Luck!
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Overall Impressions:
I really enjoyed reading this piece!
Plot Comments:
Well done on the plot. It has a strong structure and kept me interested through the very end.
Narration/Dialogue:
Great job on the dialogue and narration.
Character Comments:
You did a nice job with portraying Lisa's character. I love her style and personality!
Imagery/Description:
Nice job on the graphic and gorey details in this piece. I really love the image that you have displayed at the top of the story!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this piece. I would like to see you expand on Lisa's story. It would make for a great mini novel or something. Just a suggestion is all. Great job! Good Luck!
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Overall Impressions:
This is a very educational and inspirational piece about growing up during times of racial discrimination.
Emotional Impact:
Being a white lady myself, I didn't think that I would see a black man get elected as president in my lifetime either. I felt proud the next day when I woke up and found out that Barack Obama had won. Our country made history and that alone put a smile on my face.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this piece. Write On!
Ciao,
Gem
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I couldn't pass this one up, since I was born and raised in Michigan. I just chose the one that said that I have been here my entire life. When I was 26 I picked up and moved to Dallas, Texas, and lived there for a year, and then picked up my stuff again and moved to Tampa Bay, Florida, and lived there for almost 3 years. Then my dad died, so I picked up my stuff my moved back here to Michigan. I am glad to be back. 
I couldn't even imagine going through anything like this.