Overall Impressions:
Ah, family trips across the U.S.! Fun. LOL! I can remember arguements on a few trips with my grandparents. Hearing old people bicker is funny.
Narration/Dialogue:
Well done on the narration and dialogue. I especially enjoyed your inner thought process.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Favorite Part:
The "Big Ass Circle"!
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this amusing short story with me! I had a lot of enjoyment reading it! Well done!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This was a very insightful and fun read. Yikes! A bear! I am glad that all of you got away safely. I must walk about 8-9 miles everyday, but not up any mountains.
Narration/Dialogue:
Great job on the narration and dialogue.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Well done!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
What a cute and funny story! I am glad that you had fun, lol. I couldn't imagine anyone calling me by a guy's name, lol. I thought it was cute how everyone had fun calling you "Adam".
Narration/Dialogue:
Great job with the narration and dialogue.
Imagery/Description:
Well done on the imagery. I love the photos of you and your daughter. She looks so much like you.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
What a cool forum! I like this very much! I like watching sports, especially hockey, football, basketball, and baseball. I think this is a great place for all sport fanatics to gather and socialize.
Imagery/Description:
Well done on the imagery and graphics.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Originality/Uniqueness:
To the best of my knowledge, there isn't another forum like this one on the entire site. Nice job on making something unique.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for creating this forum! Well done!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
I can definately relate to this short story, lol. I can't stand men that are that much older than me, and think that they can win me over with gifts and spoiling. I think older men who try to pick up much younger girls are yucky! lol. I hate getting gutter balls, lol. I get embarrassed if I don't do well in any kind of game, no matter what it is.
Narration/Dialogue:
Well done on the narration and dialogue.
Imagery/Description:
Well done on the description and details.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this with me! Very funny and cute! Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
Very cute. I don't care for Winter or Summer.......too cold and too hot for me. I prefer Spring and Autumn weather at all times of the year! Winter doesn't really bother me, it's the ice that I don't like to drive on.
Plot Comments:
Very well layed out. The plot runs smoothly. I didn't have any trouble reading through it. Nice work.
Narration/Dialogue:
Great job on the narration and dialogue. The throught process of the character was very good.
Imagery/Description:
Well done on the imagery and description. You painted a very presentable picture for the readers. Good work!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Favorite Part:
The ending paragraph and the last sentence were so cute!
Closing Remarks:
Well done! You seem to be a great writer! I can't wait to read more of your work!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
When I was a child possums used to freak me out, lol. Mainly when I was out at night with their scary glowing eyes, and would sometimes hiss at me. In a strange sort of way, they are cute.
Plot Comments:
This is well written and fun to read.
Narration/Dialogue:
Well done on the dialogue and the thought process of your character.
Imagery/Description:
Great job on the imagery and description.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Originality/Uniqueness:
I must say that I have never read anything like this before. Very original and well thought out.
Closing Remarks:
Well done on an excellent and very enjoyable read. Write On!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
A well told story of Independence Day and the carefree lives of children. I miss those days of being a kid, with all of the beautiful fireworks. Holidays are a lot more fun when we are children.
Narration/Dialogue:
You did a great job with the narration and dialogue.
Imagery/Description:
Excellent job with the imagery and description. Adding the images to this piece made for a nice touch. And the description of the fragrant apple pie was pleasing ti the senses, and yum!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Great job! I enjoyed reading this piece!
P.S.--You might want to check out my auction again. You've been outbid by Ruby!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This was a very emotional and sad piece. I have been left feeling that way too. For the past year or so. So, I completely understand where you're coming from.
Emotional Impact:
This was hard for me to read. I am going through some similar feelings myself.
Flow/Form:
You did a great job on the flow and form of this piece.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Good job! Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This was cute and yes, it would be rather scary if my computer started talking to me too! I loved it. Very creative and fun to read.
Plot Comments:
The plot was smooth and stayed together until the very end.
Narration/Dialogue:
Great job on the narration and dialogue.
Character Comments:
It was rather amusing to see Vulcan and Walker talking through the computer screen.
Imagery/Description:
Excellent job on the description and visuals.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Well done! As always, I enjoy reading your work. Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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