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This is a beautifully written poem. I very much enjoyed reading and reviewing this piece. Your words were so well spoken and well-written. I am at awe over this.
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You gave beautiful imagery and visuals.
Flow:
This had excellent flow and form.
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I didn't spot any grammatical, spelling, or punctuation errors.
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Well done! Keep writing!
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I enjoyed reading this piece. For something so short it says a great deal.
You gave terrific detail and visuals in this short story. I could almost feel the sandpaper, and cool metal, and taste the scrumptious chocolate chip cookies.
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
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Well done! Keep writing!
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You bring up a really good point. Curse words technically aren't bad, and that they are just perceived as that.
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I had a hard time reading this piece because of the use of the word 'badness' too many times. The over-use of certain words can affect the quality of an item, unless it's part of a prompt. I would suggest using different words other than 'badness'.
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I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
This is piece with a lot of potential. Keep writing!
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I feel that many people can relate to this story. I have been down that road myself. I am going through it right now.
Emotional Impact:
Reading this made me feel sad. Love and relationships are most definately difficult and hard to understand.
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I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
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Thank you for sharing this piece. Sorry that it took so long to get to your request, I had a lot happen to me in the past few months. Good job on this piece. Keep writing!
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This was a well-written story. I commend you on writing this. I express the same opinions as you do in this piece. Sometimes it's hard to believe that such evil exists in this world. Maybe one day, we won't have to worry anymore. Fighting and violence has been going on since the beginning of time.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
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Well done! Thank you again for your request. Sorry about the delay in getting to your item sooner, I had some things happen to me in the last few months. Write on!
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This novel has a lot of potential, and I hope to see more with this.
Plot Comments:
A prologue is a good way to determine the plot for the story, for both the author and the reader alike.
Character Comments:
The names of the characters are very unique for this story, very medieval.
Imagery:
You gave great imagery and description in this.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Good job! Sorry that it took so long for me to get to your request, I had some things I needed to get straightened out. Thank you for y our patience and understanding. Write on!
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I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
A very bright and colorful forum. I really love the banner at the top. Very cool!
The prizes are definately worth it, I would recommend that all members that are into writing fiction or someone who would like to try something new, to give this a shot.
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Well done! I hope that this contest is a great success! Here's a donation for your contest!
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This is a very heartwarming story. I am not much of a dog person either, but when a pooch comes up and hops on my lap, how can I resist?
This is a well written story with great narration.
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Well done!
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What a cool idea for an add-on story! It looks to be very popular! Seventy-two additions, wow! I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors. So far this is turning out to be a great story. Well done and Write On!
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"And the moral of the story, ladies and gentlemen......"
This is a great article that you wrote. It's sad that people rely on silly pills and fads only to be disppointed with the end results, whether little or not at all. There is such a thing as eating less and exercise, or just being happy with yourself.
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I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
You were right.....be careful what you wish for, you may get something really bad in return.
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I know how you feel about those types of reviews. I get those every so often. They tick me off to the point where if it's extremely mean and nasty, I won't even return their emails. I have done exactly what you and many others have done. LOL. A review is pointless and has no meaning if they can't state what would make it better, or why they gave you a lower rating. This is well written and you make a very good point. I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors. Well done!
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I really enjoyed reading this. I loved the story and how nicely it ended.
I think you're on a role. 
This is very unique. The easter bunny getting into a fight with poor old St. Nick! 
This was a very sad and moving piece. It's a shame that this happens to a lot of people everyday.