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Greetings Lou-Here By His Grace !

I am currently navigating through the Read and Review section of this site and this poem appeared. I enjoyed reading it and I decided to leave it with this review. May you'll find this helpful, uplifting and encouraging.

In this review, I mainly focus on the positives that I noticed after reading the piece. Without much ado, here's my review:

Positives

Evocative Setting: The choice of Lake Pontchartrain as the backdrop adds a layer of specificity that grounds the poem. Lakeshores often evoke feelings of tranquility and escape, adding to the sense of a special, shared moment away from the everyday world.

Focus on the Senses: The poem engages the senses in subtle ways. The "distant light" of Venus is a visual cue, the "gentle whispers" and the implied taste of the wine bring in other senses. This makes the poem more immersive and helps the reader feel a part of that intimate scene.

Contrast and Juxtaposition: The poem plays with contrasts effectively. The beauty of the natural setting (the lake, the dawn light) juxtaposes the simplicity of "cheap wine in plastic cups." This juxtaposition emphasizes the idea that the beauty and joy of the moment aren't dependent on material things, but on the connection between the lovers.

The Personal Voice: The poem has a strong sense of a first-person voice. It feels like an authentic expression of feeling rather than a constructed observation. This personal touch makes the poem relatable and invites the reader deeper into the experience.

Overall:

Your poem extends beyond its simple structure. The specific setting, the focus on sensory details, the use of contrast, and the strong personal voice all combine to create a poem that has a depth of feeling and a sense of genuine emotion. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!

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Gervic

Greetings wild flower !

I am currently navigating through the Read and Review section of this page and your poem appeared. I enjoyed reading it and I decided to leave this with a review. May you'll find this review helpful, uplifting and encouraging.

Without much ado, here are the things I notice after reading your offering:


The poem's unflinching portrayal of the damage caused by lies can serve as a powerful wake-up call. This awareness could be the first step toward actively choosing honesty and building a life based on truth. Experiencing the pain of deception, even through a poem, can lead us to deeply appreciate the beauty of genuine connections. It may inspire us to prioritize honesty in our own actions and gravitate towards trustworthy individuals.

Though the poem depicts a battle with despair, that very struggle suggests an underlying will to resist. The determination to overcome the effects of lies can cultivate an unyielding inner strength.

There's a raw power in the poem's vivid descriptions of pain. This honesty in portraying difficult emotions can be both moving and potentially cathartic for a reader who sees their own struggles reflected in the verses.

The word "lies" might serve as a potent symbol for wider experiences of deep betrayal, broken trust, or the shattering of illusions. By using this powerful word, the poem opens space for the reader to project their own experiences onto it, adding layers of meaning.

The Value of Negative Experiences: It's important to remember that art doesn't always aim to be uplifting. Sometimes its value lies in helping us confront the full spectrum of human experience, including pain, sorrow, and disillusionment. This poem allows us to sit with these uncomfortable emotions, potentially helping us understand and process them in a safe space.

Ultimately, this is a good poem. Thanks for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Isedora Klopper

Here's a review of your poem "No dice, no nothing", focusing on its strengths, areas of improvement, and possible interpretations:

Strengths

Vivid Imagery: The poem effectively uses powerful images of sparks, flames, burning, ashes, and whistling winds. These create a strong sense of destruction and loss.

Repetition: The repetition of the opening line, "No dice, no nothing", throughout the poem reinforces the sense of finality and a lack of possibility. This emphasizes the speaker's determination to leave a situation behind.

Emotional Arc: The poem follows a clear emotional journey. It starts with the destructive power of ending something, moves into a feeling of lost potential ("limbo"), then concludes with defiant resolve against returning to the past.

Areas for Improvement:

Specificity: While the images are strong, the poem could be even more impactful with greater detail. What exactly is being "burned down"? Is it a relationship, a situation, a part of the speaker's self? Some more concrete hints would give the reader something solid to grasp onto.

Variation: While the repetition has its intended effect, consider mixing it up slightly. A variation in one or two of the repetitions could add emphasis and break the monotony.

Interpretations

Your poem has a feeling of intense personal closure. Here are a couple of possible interpretations:

Ending a Toxic Situation: The imagery and language suggest the poem is about leaving something behind that was ultimately harmful. The fire is necessary to purge this toxicity and the speaker is determined never to return.

A Moment of Transformation: The focus on ashes suggests not just an ending but also a potential for renewal. The speaker might be burning away aspects of themselves or their life to allow for growth.

Overall Impression

The poem "No dice, no nothing" is a forceful expression of severing ties and moving on. With a few small edits to hone the details and structure, it has the potential to be even more evocative and impactful.

Best regards,
Gervic

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Greetings Lilliad !

I am currently navigating through the Read and Review section of this site and your poem appeared. I enjoyed reading this and I decided to leave it with this review. May you'll find this helpful, uplifting, and encouraging.

Without much ado, here are the positive things I noticed after delving deeper into your poem's content:

Catharsis: The poem doesn't hold back on the raw intensity of emotions, spanning from the sadness of lost memories to the searing anger of betrayal. This unfiltered honesty is a key part of the cathartic process. Expressing these difficult experiences unfiltered can be the first step towards acknowledging the hurt and ultimately moving towards healing.

Self-Awareness and Growth: The poem traces a shift in perspective. It begins with a sense of loss, but gradually the speaker realizes they've been wronged. Lines like, "I've got nothing to hide, nothing to be guilty for" demonstrate growing self-awareness and a refusal to internalize the blame. This turning point signals the start of the speaker reclaiming their own worth.

Resilience: Despite the hurt, there's an undercurrent of resilience driving the poem's conclusion. The act of symbolically filing the memory away, the defiant tone of the last line, and the poem's overall refusal to soften the blow all point to the speaker's strength. They acknowledge the pain, but with an unwavering determination to move forward.

Honesty: Raw, unfiltered emotional honesty is the core of this poem. It doesn't try to sanitize or romanticize the pain of heartbreak. This unflinching portrayal of betrayal, particularly the detailed accusations, can be a powerful source of validation for others who have experienced similar hurt and might feel silenced by societal expectations around how breakups "should" be handled.

The Power of Metaphor: The poem's central metaphor of the filing cabinet beautifully captures the act of trying to compartmentalize a past relationship, particularly one that was based on lies. It's a universally relatable image and gives the poem a tangible quality, grounding the emotional turmoil in a physical action.

Ultimately, this is a great poem about heartache and how to cope and move on from it. This poem portrays a deep message and I learned a lot from this. Thank you so much for sharing this to us. Write on!

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Gervic

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Greetings 🌖 HuntersMoon !

I am currently navigating through the Read and Review section of this site and your poem appeared. I enjoyed reading it and decided to leave it with this review. Well, this is an excellent poem - as always.

The poem's direct plea to Morpheus conveys both a sense of desperation and a lingering hopefulness. This balance between weariness and longing makes the speaker's voice feel authentic and adds to the emotional impact of the piece. The lines "I know that others call you fraud / but your great name I'd gladly laud" contain a subtle touch of self-awareness. The poem acknowledges there's no guaranteed remedy for sleeplessness, but maintains a wistful belief in the transformative power of sleep.

The poem plays with contrasting language like "fickle god" or "death-like facade." These contradictions highlight the complex nature of sleep – it is both desired and, at times, slightly ominous. The repetition of "Oh, Morpheus" creates a chant-like effect, mimicking the obsessive nature of insomnia and the circular thoughts that trap the sleepless mind. By mentioning different poetic forms, the poet invites the reader to consider how structure could shape their experience of the poem. It encourages a deeper reflection on how artistic choices contribute to the meaning of a work.

Indeed, another magnificent poem from you! Thank you so much for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

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Greetings Gaby !

I am currently navigating through the Read and Review section of this site and your poem appeared. I enjoyed reading it and decided to leave it with this review. Hope you'll find this helpful and encouraging.

Without much ado, here are the things I noticed:

The poem cleverly plays with the power dynamic between writer and critic. Initially, the reviewer holds the power, but as their feedback becomes more absurd, this power shifts. The writer, in their increasing defensiveness, starts to hold a strange power – they willfully ignore reality as they please. It's darkly humorous, but also a commentary on how the willingness to reject valid criticism can become a type of power.

Traditionally, we assume the poem's speaker is the writer, but it could be even more interesting if the poem is told from the reviewer's perspective. This makes the writer's delusion even more pronounced. The reader becomes a co-conspirator with the reviewer, witnessing firsthand how difficult it is to give meaningful feedback to someone unwilling to consider it.

The poem subtly challenges what we consider "good" poetry. Its simple language and direct dialogue aren't traditionally poetic, but that's the point. Sometimes, focusing too much on being 'poetic' prevents us from exploring messy, uncomfortable, yet important human experiences like defensiveness and the clash between artistic intent and critical feedback.


Ultimately, this is a beautiful piece worth reading. Thank you for sharing this to us. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

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Greetings Tim Chiu !

I am currently navigating through the Read and Review section of this site and your poem appeared. I enjoyed reading it and decided to leave it with this review. May you'll find this helpful and encouraging. Without much ado, here are the things I noticed:

Themes of Excitement and Idealization

The Power of Anticipation: The speaker grapples with uncertainty ("Imagining thou shalt reply", "Situation must improve"). This longing intensifies the positive feelings. Sometimes the anticipation and hopefulness of a new attraction can be just as exhilarating as the certainty of returned love.

Love as Inspiration: The speaker's thoughts are completely consumed by their beloved ("Fills my mind in every way"). This fixation is common in early infatuation. Whether healthy in the long term or not, it shows how a powerful crush has the potential to spark inspiration and reshape how we see the world.



Archaic Language: The use of words like "thou" adds to the old-fashioned romanticism, creating a sense of timelessness. This choice could be appealing because it distances the poem from the everyday, elevating love into something extraordinary and even otherworldly.

Sensory Details: While not overflowing with them, the poem does hint at the senses – "Seeing you, my heart does quicken" and "Now that beauty, oh so sweet." This grounds the overwhelming emotions in physical sensations, making them more tangible for a reader.

Positives

A Snapshot of Human Emotion: Whatever the long-term fate of this particular love, the poem preserves a beautiful, if fleeting, emotional state. We don't need to agree with idealized love or find it sustainable to appreciate how the poem captures this specific human experience.

Potential for Growth: Perhaps the intensity of this infatuation will lead to a mature love. Even if it doesn't, this type of overwhelming emotion can be a catalyst for self-discovery and understanding what qualities are truly important in a partner.

Ultimately, this is a beautiful piece worth reading. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

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Greetings Prosperous Snow celebrating !

I am currently navigating through the Read and Review section of this site and your poem appeared. I enjoyed reading it and I decided to leave this with a review. Without much ado, here are the things I noticed:


The poem doesn't just highlight hope in a general sense. It emphasizes that EVERYONE experiences hardships. The lines "just when it seems the soul can take no more" remind us that even the strongest individuals have moments of doubt. This sense of shared experience can be comforting. While focusing on the temporary nature of storms, the poem also subtly celebrates the strength within us. It acknowledges the intensity of the pain ("the spirit will give in...") but ultimately reinforces that spirit's ability to endure and find the sun again.

The poem's strength lies in its simple and direct language. There's no complicated symbolism or flowery literary devices. This makes the message accessible and relatable, creating a sense that anyone could glean comfort from its words. Notice the short, punchy lines at the beginning ("...storm never lasts / eventually the rain must stop...") mimicking the relentless feeling of a storm. This contrasts with the longer, flowing line at the end ("the sun comes shining through") mirroring the relief as the storm passes.

Overall, the poem's power lies in its balance. It's honest about the intensity of pain and the moments of despair we all feel. Yet, it refuses to stay in that darkness. By reminding us of change, cycles, and the unyielding nature of hope, it offers a powerful message for anyone weathering life's storms. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!

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Gervic

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Greetings Jacky !

I am currently navigating through the Read and Review section of this site and your flash fiction piece appeared. I enjoyed reading it and I decided to leave it with this review. May you'll find this helpful and encouraging.

Without much ado, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:



The Charm of 'Opposites Attract': The ending, with the twist of a successful long-term marriage between very different individuals, carries a unique appeal. It reminds readers that love can blossom in unexpected places, defying the cliché of 'perfect pairings.' This adds a layer of endearing whimsy to the story.

Potential for Deeper Themes: The brief mention of "comics and required reading" vs. Andria's passion for books hints at underlying thematic possibilities. This contrast could be explored to symbolize differences in worldview, intellectual curiosity, or how people find meaning and joy in life.



Foreshadowing the Twist: Consider subtly weaving moments into the beginning that subtly foreshadow the couple's future compatibility despite their differences. Perhaps Andria admires the young man's energy despite her dislike of sports. Or maybe he unexpectedly reveals a thoughtful side while commenting on a book's cover design. This will make the ending feel even more delightful and earned.

Heightening the Stakes: Increase the emotional impact of Andria's initial book dilemma by emphasizing how much owning these books means to her. Does she long for a particular author's complete works? Does reading provide comfort or escape? Adding context will make her struggle even more relatable.

Subtext and Nuance: While the surprise ending works, consider introducing hints that the young man might be more than he initially seems. Perhaps he surprises Andria with a thoughtful question about a book or reveals an unexpected interest within the realm of sports. This would add a subtle layer of complexity and make their connection less abrupt.



This piece is beautifully written. By incorporating the above-mentioned Areas for Enhancement, this piece could transform into something truly memorable. Thank you so much for sharing this to us. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

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Greetings Jacky !

I am currently sailing through the Read and Review section of this page, and your flash fiction has appeared. I enjoyed reading it and thought of leaving it with this review. Without much ado, here are the positive things I noticed:

The story highlights how silly the initial feud between the women is. Their drive is less about the pie contest itself and more about overcoming old insecurities— something that gets lost on both sides. They're focused on winning over each other when their real "victory" should be finding a genuine connection as adults.

The ending, where they build a friendship over "Pie Day", reveals how much they had in common all along. It highlights that sometimes all it takes is a nudge toward letting go of past hurts and finding mutual ground to build a meaningful relationship.

There's vulnerability in the narrator's admission of wanting to win as a sort of vindication for her younger self. This makes her relatable and shows she's still human, capable of carrying old insecurities. The fact that we never learn Janice's side of the story hints at a similar possibility. Perhaps she, too, was stuck in old patterns from childhood, failing to see the narrator as a whole person beyond those labels.

Your story uses simple, direct language that's very effective. This allows for the punchline to truly land. The humor is in the situation itself, not elaborate descriptions. The act of the girls unwittingly sabotaging their mothers' pies becomes symbolic. It mirrors the unintended ways childhood perceptions and behaviors can harm our future potential for friendship and connection.

Overall, this is a beautiful excerpt that puts emphasis on friendship. The characters have overcome their past feuds, and new friendships have sprouted. A very relatable piece, and it is worth reading. Thank you so much for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

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Greetings Prosperous Snow celebrating !

I am currently navigating through the Read and Review section of this site and your poem appeared. I enjoyed reading it and thought of leaving it with this review. Without much ado, here are the things I noticed after reading your piece:

The poem highlights the universality of prayer by suggesting it exists across faiths. This presents prayer as a practice that can bridge differences and foster a sense of common humanity. This piece emphasizes how deeply prayer allows a person to connect with the divine. The use of "passion" and "supplications" indicates a fervent, heartfelt engagement rather than a simple ritual. This makes prayer seem incredibly meaningful to the speaker. Although the poem centers on inner peace as the main benefit, it also hints at personal growth. Meditation implies a process of reflection and self-awareness, while petition suggests actively seeking improvement or guidance.

Poetic Style



Overall Impact

The poem's greatest strength lies in its ability to convey the essence of prayer in a compact way. This makes it relatable to people of diverse backgrounds while conveying the profound impact prayer can have on an individual's life. This is indeed a poem with so much to learn from. Thank you so much for sharing this to us. Write on!

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Gervic

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Greetings Naomi !

This review is to return the favor of reviewing my poem entitled "Modern Filipino Heroes". Thank you for that review and rating. Without much a do, here are the things that I noticed after reading this poem:

The idea of a "Flash Prayer" speaks to our desire, at times, for a simple and direct connection with God. It breaks the misconception that prayers must be lengthy or overly formal. In a fast-paced world, your poem offers a comforting reminder that God desires a relationship with us at all times, even in brief snatches of focus.

The core message of this prayer is beautiful—you wish for others to experience God's love, feel secure in His guidance, and be freed from anxieties. Focusing our prayers outwards in this way shows a compassionate heart and reminds us of the interconnectedness of humans and our shared need for well-being and joy.

The final lines of your poem express a firm trust in a higher power. It's through seeking a relationship with God that the speaker believes ultimate rest and blessings can be found. Whether a reader shares that same faith, there is undeniable power in acknowledging the desire for a source of strength and comfort beyond ourselves.

Acrostics are deceptively difficult! Yet, you've successfully woven the core theme of your prayer throughout each line. Accomplishing this requires thoughtful word choices and a willingness to revise, showing an admirable dedication to your craft.

Ultimately, this is a beautiful poem bearing a deep meaning about faith. I learned a lot from this piece and I thank you for the beautiful and inspiring read. Continue to inspire everyone around with your magical words. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

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Greetings BIG BAD WOLF is Merry !

This review is to return the favor of reviewing my poem entitled "Feline Wrath". Thank you so much for that review and rating! Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after reading this piece:

There's a playful honesty in admitting that sometimes the drive to write comes from less-than-lofty origins like boredom or bouts of craziness. This lightheartedness takes the pressure off the creative process, making it less intimidating. It suggests that even seemingly negative emotions can sometimes translate into compelling stories or poems. This poem hints at how the writer is constantly discovering new things about themselves by exploring their reasons for writing. Using words like "hoard" brings up questions: is it a hoard of emotions, ideas, or something else entirely? This openness to self-discovery makes the poem relatable, as even seasoned writers go through similar periods of creative questioning.

The easy, conversational flow of the poem mimics the way our thoughts often jump from one thing to another, reflecting the sometimes unpredictable nature of the creative process. This natural rhythm, along with the simple yet effective rhyme (bed/head), helps immerse the reader in the writer's state of mind. This poem can be inspirational for new writers. It demonstrates that you don't need complex vocabulary or fancy literary techniques to create something meaningful. Sometimes, the simple act of expressing yourself honestly - flaws and all - can be the most powerful form of writing.

Overall, this is a great piece worth reading. Thank you so much for sharing this. Let your creativity flow and continue to inspire everyone around with your words. Write on!

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Gervic

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Greetings JCosmos !

This review is to return the favor for reviewing my poem entitled "Long-held Dream". Thank you for that review anf for the rating. Without much a do, here are my thoughts about this poem after delving deeper into its content:



Vivid Sensory Details: Your choice of words immediately draws the reader into the stifling atmosphere you're portraying. "Hot", "humid", and "burning" attack the sense of touch, while comparing Korea to a "sauna" cleverly conveys the suffocating effect of combined heat and moisture.

Universal Relatability: Most people have experienced uncomfortable summer heat at some point. This makes your poem relatable, giving your readers an immediate point of connection with the described situation.

Conversational Tone: There's a casual, almost conversational flow to your poem, as if the speaker is venting their frustration about the weather. This natural tone enhances the relatability and creates a sense of intimacy with the reader.




Metaphor and Simile: To make your descriptions even more striking, consider adding a metaphor or simile. For example, you could compare the feeling of stepping outdoors to entering a furnace, or liken sweat to a relentless waterfall.

Internal Impact: Beyond the physical effects of heat, explore the inner turmoil it can cause. Feelings like irritability, restlessness, or a sense of being trapped could add a new layer of depth to the poem.

Contrast: Introduce a touch of contrast to highlight the intensity of the heat. Include a line about the allure of an air-conditioned room, the fleeting coolness of a drink, or the memory of a refreshing breeze – all to be quickly swallowed by the oppressive reality of the heatwave.




Title: "Summertime Blues" is a classic title, fitting but also very broad. To give your poem a more unique spin, consider a title that highlights your specific focus within the theme of summer heat.

Final Thought:

Although the poem is brief, you painted images into my mind and this what makes the poem stand out. It's very relatable the fact that I live in a tropical country. I enjoyed reading this and I thank you for sharing this to us. Write on!

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Gervic

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Greetings Naomi !

This review is to return the favor of reviewing my poem entitled "Bamboo". Thank you so much for that review and rating!

Delving deeper into the content, here are the things I noticed:

The poem's focus on being brought to a standstill by nature's beauty subtly encourages a similar response in the reader. It's a reminder to pause and take notice of the often-overlooked wonders around us. This makes the poem feel like a meditative experience in its own right. Your poem suggests that nature serves as a bridge to a deeper spiritual understanding. This is a universal concept found across many cultures and belief systems, making your poem widely resonant with readers of various backgrounds.

The simple act of witnessing beauty inspires something profound within the speaker of the poem. This speaks to the idea that beauty itself is a force for good, capable of improving not only our outlook but our way of being in the world.





Overall, this is a good poem about Mother Nature. I'm glad you shared this to us. Continue to write more and inspire everyone around. Write on!

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Gervic

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Greetings Mousethyme !

This review is to return the favor of reviewing my poem entitled "Embracing the Dark". Thank you so much for that review and rating. I had read this poem already since you had this submitted to "WDC Dragon Vale "  and I think it's time to give this with a proper review.

Delving deeper into the contents, here are the things I noticed:

The idea of befriending a dragon hatched from a surprising egg is instantly captivating. It taps into a universal desire for extraordinary companionship and a world where the fantastical is possible. We all want that magical friend! The way the poem emphasizes sound is quite clever. It makes Whistler feel alive even before we fully "see" her. This focus on a single sensory detail is an effective way to build a character within a short poem.

While not explicitly stated, the poem hints at a sense of belonging and acceptance found in an unexpected place. The speaker seems surprised by the egg and how things develop - this could symbolize feeling different and finding joyful connection where you least expect it.

Taking It Further (New Ideas):



Ultimately, this is a beautiful poem about your imaginary dragon pet Whistler. Thank you for taking part in the Dragon Vale activity and I'm more than glad that you shared this story of your dragon friend. This is indeed enjoyable. Keep your creative juices flowing and Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

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I am navigating through the Read and Review section of this site and your poem appeared. Being one of the great poets I looked up to here, how could I not read your offering? Plus the title "Silent Witness" alone dragged me to delve deeper to your poem's content.

After reading it, here are the things I found out:

Evocative Language



Unsettling Contrasts



Sound and Rhythm



The Wider Context

The poem is powerful on its own but gains resonance when considering broader contexts:



Overall:

As always, you never failed to amaze me with your poetic prowess. This poem is just as great and beautiful as your other works I happened to read. Thank you so much for sharing this! Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Well, you got me wanting for more so here's my second review to return the favor of reviewing one of my items. Your poem Rowing Down the River is a good piece and it drew me to read more of your works. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after reading the content:

At its core, "Yesterday's Rainbow" succeeds by highlighting the simple joys of witnessing a familiar natural beauty. Rainbows feel both special and accessible, inspiring a sense of shared human experience. Though the poem doesn't delve into it, there's room for the reader to project their own experiences onto the familiar rainbow image. This could involve childhood memories, specific moments of wonder, or personal spiritual meaning. The simplicity allows for this individualization.

The inclusion of the "pot of gold" evokes a wide range of traditional tales and myths surrounding rainbows. While the poem doesn't explicitly expand on them, this single phrase introduces an undercurrent of rich storytelling history with which the reader can engage. The repetitive structure can have a meditative quality. By returning to the rainbow's refreshing nature, it could encourage a momentary escape and an appreciation of the present.

Indeed, this is yet another beautiful poem. Thank you so much for sharing! Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

This review is to return the favor of reviewing my item called "Raindrops and Flannel Wrap". Thank you so much for that review and for the rating. Delving deep into the content of this poem, here are the things I noticed:

More than just imagery, the poem places the reader directly into the experience. Phrases like "your adrenaline really starts to flow" and "relax, smooth sailing" subtly shift the perspective from observer to participant. This makes the poem feel more personal. The poem's charm lies in its juxtaposition of tranquility and adrenaline. This mirrors the natural rhythm of many outdoor adventures, building anticipation and making the payoff of overcoming the "real test" feel more earned. The final line, "Nature's Finest", is simple, even bordering on cliche. Yet, after the journey the poem has taken us on, this simplicity feels honest and underscores a feeling deeper than fancy language can capture.

Beyond just rhythm, the poem uses sound to enhance its themes. The soft 'r' and 'l' sounds in "relax" and "smooth sailing" contribute to the calmness, while the harsh consonants in "rapids" and "test" emphasize the challenges.

The poem's uneven line lengths and simple AAABCDBC rhyme scheme mirror the unpredictable nature of the river itself. There's a pleasing balance between structured control and the sense of something slightly wild.

Overall, "Rowing down the River" is a strong example of how simple language and a clear focus can create a surprisingly evocative poem. Its success lies in its ability to convey the complex emotions of an adventurous experience. Although, there may be a little error for the system to generate the Writing ML tag as it was not configured properly, that doesn't affect the poem's entirety. You may just remove that Writing ML tag.

This is a nice piece and I enjoyed reading it. I'm wanting to read more of your creations. Thank you so much for sharing this! Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

This review is to return the favor of reviewing my piece called "Crabby Dash". Thank you for that review and rating. Delving deeper into the content, here are the things I found out:

The speaker focuses entirely on external factors (the wrong flowers) rather than acknowledging the far greater transgression of the initial betrayal. This lack of self-reflection limits the poem's potential depth. The woman exists only to react, primarily with violence. We have no sense of her personality or the relationship's nuances, making it difficult to invest in their conflict on a deeper level. The speaker's nonchalance about the cheating undermines whatever seriousness the final lines might attempt. This makes it difficult to understand the poem's intended tone – is it purely comedic fumbling, or does it aim (and fail) for a lament of lost love?

If the poem aims for absurdity, then its failures are actually a success. The speaker's complete cluelessness and the exaggerated reaction with the roses could be a skewed form of social commentary, exposing how shallow some relationships and apologies are. The focus on the wrong flowers could be symbolic. It represents a complete failure to understand the woman's needs on even the most basic level, emphasizing the breakdown of their connection far beyond the issue of infidelity. This poem could be a satire of the "bad boyfriend" trope. The speaker embodies every blunder possible, not just in action but in how they completely misunderstand their own culpability.

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For me, this is a humorous poem and I enjoyed reading it. A great piece indeed. Thank you for sharing this to us. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

This review is to return the favor of reviewing my item "Feline Wrath". Thank you so much for that review and rating. Delving deep into the content, here are the things I noticed:

Your piece depicts a mother who isn't swayed by societal norms. She challenges traditional expectations, demonstrating independence of thought and a disregard for what she sees as commercialism. The mother-son relationship in the poem shows genuine communication and acceptance. There's a willingness to understand each other's stances while respecting individual choice. The son respects his mother's wishes regarding Mother's Day.

This poem suggests there's no need for a designated day to show appreciation. It highlights the importance of celebrating a mother's love and presence throughout the year rather than through gifts or a single holiday. It contains subtle bits of humor in the mother's blunt pronouncements. It paints a playful picture of a strong personality who isn't afraid to speak her mind and reject traditional sentimentality.

Ultimately, whether or not you relate to the mother's viewpoint is subjective. Her anti-consumerist stance may resonate with some while seeming overly cynical to others. While the poem has an element of lightheartedness, it also has an undercurrent of deeper emotions. It may prompt reflections on family dynamics, societal pressures, and how we show love and appreciation. Overall, you excel in using unadorned, simple language for maximum impact. This gives the mother's character a direct and powerful voice. A beautiful piece indeed and I enjoyed reading this till the end. Thank you for sharing such a gem. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

This review is to return the favor of reviewing Salty Siren. Thank you for the review and rating by the way. Delving deep into the content, here are the things I noticed:

The poem uses vivid language to create a powerful scene. Words like "blood cells," "bug on the window," "yellow and green," and "kinetic-energy led" transport the reader to the moment of the accident. You implicitly explores larger themes: the inevitability of death, the fragility of life, and the sometimes callous way humans interact with nature. The deer becomes a metaphor for both natural beauty and its vulnerability in the face of human progress.

There's an interesting use of words with specific connotations. "Chimerical" for timer suggests the illusion of how precious time is, while "ersatz" highlights the artificiality of human-set deadlines. Your poem has a driving rhythm that mimics the flow of traffic and the mounting tension of an impending collision. This contributes to the emotional impact of the event.
Points of Interpretation

It's important to note that these positive elements don't erase the tragedy of the deer's death, nor do they necessarily condone the actions that led to the accident. Instead, consider these possibilities:



Overall, this is a beautiful poem worth reading. Thank you for sharing this to us. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic