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Review of My Little Star  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jean, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The poem paints a picture of the poet's firstborn.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and found a mother's deep love for her daughter very touching. I am retired, look back to my youth and wish I had four children, not two, of these wonderful creatures...children. Nice statement made. The rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. Polishing your rhyme pattern will make it more consistent. There is a smooth flow of words. Description in your poem is very expressive, eg God had plucked for me a star.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of In Transit  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Logan, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints picture of a short journey.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem about a short journey. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. There is a nice flow of words. Good use of metaphor,eg, the ghost of you just stood and stared.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the benefits of sweet tea.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem about sweet tea. I was reminded of the things that go with sweet tea: energy and summertime. Your poem is Unrhymed. Rhythm flows naturally. Oh! Those nasty flies! No issue with poetic technique.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Travelin Minstrel  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi T. L. Finch, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, , which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes Bob Dylan's contributions to the world of poetry and music.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem, recollecting the days of Bob Dylan from the 60's. I remember his stories of the toil of the common man and his superior talent. The rhyme pattern of your poem is consistent. Your cadence is good and there is a smooth flow of words. Description in your poem is expressive, eg, soft spoken young man with unruly hair. Truly a legend.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi GreyPoeticSky, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article describes the writer's experience in the public school system.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your article about your experience with public school education. I am a retired educator myself so I have some sympathy for your situation. I taught mainly at the middle school level, so I have no background at the high school level. I think there is some validity to what you have to say, especially with regard to test scores and disadvantaged children. You can't undo children's backgrounds, as you only have them six hours a day five days a week. I'd do the best I could in your situation. Frustrating, for sure. Well-written article. Best wishes on your job search. I have no language issues with your article.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of What Am I?  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Intuey, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of one of nature's grand shows.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I thoroughly enjoyed your poem of a shooting star, one of nature's most brilliant shows. I like your concept of what am I? The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent, and you have a smooth flow of words. The description in your poem is vivid, eg, a trail of fiery light.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Don Two, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems,, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This picture paints a picture describing that there is a serious change in the pet stream.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I fully enjoyed reading your poem and its nuances. . Talk about raining cats and dogs. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. There is a good cadence and smooth flow of words. The description of your poem is quite expressive, eg some ominous thunderheads rumbled around.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Gachoner  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Brokenhunter, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for our March Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a fairy creature from Irish folklore.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem of Irish folklore, especially the wonderful Irish brogue. What fun reading for St. Patrick's Day or any day! I found the background information was very helpful. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Very good rhythm and flow of words. Suggestion: ne'er listen ye to words so dear NOT ne'er listen you to words so dear. You might want to check the referent for to gachoner man, while tending sheep. No other issues. Well written poem.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Cerulean Son, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review one of your poems for our March Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a lesson from a wise Irishman.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I truly enjoyed reading your poem and found the message and brogue were delightful. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. The cadence is perfect and you have a smooth flow of words. The description of your poem is wonderfully expressive. eg, me lids have barely met their mates when me peace was broken. No issues with poetic technique. Happy St. Patrick's Day.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi HOOves, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for our March Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a trip to the Dingle Peninsula in Ireland.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I truly enjoyed reading your very sensitive poem about the Dingle Peninsula in Ireland and your mother's sweet, dying face, reminding you Christmas joy is "not in getting, but deep in giving". The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. The cadence and smooth flow of words is delightful. The description in your poem is vividly expressed, eg Will I ever return to this southern town, softly singing, soothing this enduring frown. Your poem is loaded with description and moves like silk. Thank you for this St. Patrick's Day gift. Here's to a rainbow and a pot of gold on his day. No issues of poetic technique. Happy St. Patrick's Day.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
H Bloodrebel, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the hand the poet has been dealt. N

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I am reviewing your poem entitled "The Hand". It is very cleverly written and makes a good statement. Description in your poem is expressive, eg, I seem to have been dealt such a hand, just in the wrong game. Rrhyme is sprinkled through your poem. There is a smooth flow of words in your poem.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The City  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Donald, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the atrocities created in Flint, Michigan by leaded pipes and polluted water.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You have done a good job reporting the atrocities in Flint, Michigan. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. There is a nice cadence and flow of words, Description in your poem is vivid, eg, the stench, creating madness.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Bridge  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sum1, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your story poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This story poem describes how things aren't always better on the other side of the bridge.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your story poem and truly I agree with counting your blessings. I as the reader was slightly distracted by reading your choice of rhyme...see and se...two homonyms. You might think about omitting one of the words and using a different word. Your rhyme pattern is consistent. Good cadence and flow of words. Your description is vivid, eg, a tropical forest where fruit did abound. Beautifully written.


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Whitemorn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of aging.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem about aging which was compared to the sea, with ears crashing and vision fading to sea fog. Effective use of metaphor takes place throughout your poem. Your poem is Unrhymed free verse. Nice simile, eg Old bones and thin skin, like cooked kelp.


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Sweetest Love  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems,mwhich I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem tells the story of love for the poet's beloved.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem of love for your beloved girlfriend. Your poem is Unrhymed and has a very nice flow of words. The description in your poem is vivid, eg, As the fledgling spark of sunlight gives birth to the rosy deep hued dawn. Effective metaphor, eg, in that wonderfully woven, predestined fabric.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Even for A Moment  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Shami, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece is a lovely spiritual realization.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your spiritual piece and found it very insightful. Nice transitions from one paragraph to another.
Suggestions:
Paragraph 3: and any other human set NOT and any other human sets
Paragraph 3: Its NOT it's
Paragraph 4: flow NOT flows

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Sarah's Bunny  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Moarzjasac, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the sadness of a sweet baby lost in her sleep.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I was greatly saddened and sympathetic when I read your poem. What a fabulous picture to think of your closing her bedroom door so Sarah's spirit can sleep. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Rhythm creates a sweet cadence and smooth flow of words. Your description is vivid, eg, He cuddles his hoard of empty plastic Easter eggs.
Suggestion:
Stanza 4: held close to my beating heart NOT to held close to my beating heart

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Dear Diary  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dragon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your children's diary entries, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This children's diary entry paints a mighty dirty picture of a foster dog.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I fully enjoyed reading your children's diary entry about Ghostie, the lost dog you captured and acted as a foster family for. What an adventurous day in your life. Remember to close the bathroom door before putting Ghostie in the bathtub if you want to survive your parents' anger!
Suggestion:
Kelly, Kaylie and I NOT me, Kelly and Kristy.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Paradise+ TO  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Mary Ann, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem celebrates holidays at the beach.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem about spending holidays at the beach. Description in your poem is vivid, eg White sands beneath my feet. The rhyme pattern is consistent. Rhythm is enhanced by a smooth flow of words.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of AUTUMN (1)  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Maria, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of autumn.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem about autumn, with the cold months of winter ensuing. Description in your poem is vivid, eg blankets grace the foot of each bed. Metaphor is used effectively, eg sheets over the furniture of Summer's retreat. You might want to consider the suggestions below.
Suggestions:
Stanza 2: announces NOT announce
Stanza 4: below. NOT below...
Stanza 5: stop- NOT stop ---


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of A Reason To Live  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jaya, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of nature.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem; very sensitive to nature and a reason to live. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. It has a smooth flow of words and cadence. Description in your poem is vivid, eg My heart glows at the vocal silence. Good use of personification, eg I hug the emerald ranges in my mind. Your description throughout this poem is excellent. Good job!

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of What AM I?  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a few scribbles laying claim to words.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem "What Am I?" and discovering the answer. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Description is expressive, eg bleeding ink flows through quilt staining the sheet with my identity. Nice cadence and a smooth flow of words. No issue with language usage, punctuation, grammar or spelling.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Waiting  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
H Rainy,. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a relationship that is failing.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, but I was saddened by your failing relationship with your beloved. Rhyme in your poem is sprinkled throughout. Description in your poem is expressive, eg sparkling blue eyes. The rhythm in your poem could be smoother. You might want to try reading your poem aloud to create a smoother flow of words.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Sweet #9  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Fivesixer, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a day of glorious awakening and a new lease on life.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem. I am saddened by your bleak situation but I'm elated for the hope you've found to live in moderation, to recapture your soul and spirit. Congratulations. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Description is expressive, eg It is now that I can take a deep breath, and catch my bearings and ready myself properly for what lies ahead.
Suggestion:
Stanza 2: awakened NOT awaken

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of SURVIVAL  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Shami, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article describes the writer's hope with Our Lord's help.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your article, your realization that Our Lord is always there for you and loves every hair on your head. The hope that you've found is magnificent. I agree! Congratulations!
Suggestions:
Par. 2: But it happened one time, NOT It happened one time...
Par. 4: Everything in the world is in it NOT The world is evil. Everything in it. You might want to think about the many phrases you are using as complete thoughts. One phrase occasionally is acceptable, but I think you have used too many phrases rather than sentences. Your whole first paragraph is phrases.
Par. 7: Tears ran down my face NOT tears run down my face. Please consider using past tense or present tense and not varying between tenses.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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