Before we forget, about poetry and the technical side thereof, my knowledge is limited.
The one thing that worries me profoundly, '''what if the Christian bible is correct?''' and the book of Revelations is fact? Then we are watching a play that has been written years ago, and it is not a comedy.
As a seeker with a reasonably open mind, I would dearly love to peruse upon these subjects with like-minded.
If it is not a 'fact', then there will be no happy ending. (Re: The bible as fact)
A pity really; as I truly like some people, even if they do not come from my tree.
Well written. History in the making, an interesting topic.
History tells us of the spirit of the adventurer, the yearning of the seeker and the greed of man.
Since forever, Man has always moved and in very few cases did he 'come in peace' (and in a few cases that are documented) the hosts turned upon their visitors.
From South Africa, (where history is being rewritten) unfortunately, there is no profit in peace and only 'war' will give the spoils.
That is the way of Man.
As for the lessons of sages, who-ever they are, it does look good on paper, does it not?
Nature has its own way, slow, sure and deadly.
Well written and there is much in these few words.
I do not have the sea, so, my pieces are pebbles, round, flat, all shapes and sizes, polished by the ages, all kinds of pebbles, same as your glass. Some rare, others common.
The analogy I did not have, it is a good analogy.
It is a pity that the bike did not have a name eg. Harley or what ? As I am a BMW freak myself, that was in the good old days.(just for the bike people's sake)
May you find the elusive one, which is crystal-glass, a rare one indeed.
I enjoyed the story very much and it is well presented.
A pleasant and interesting read. Everybody needs a Uncle Jim sometime, somehow, to put a bit of magic into life.
The magic is something that should be sent on to the next generation and it not need to be a magic trick, just a bit of time, attention and maybe, the right gift - whatever that may need to be. That is sometimes magic on its own.
An impressive rendition of a sad situation. Impressive because of the 'almost' feeling of nothingness, the lack of anger, carrying on, regardless.
Unfortunately, it is far too common in too many houses. for various different reasons.
Edit comment:
Capitals for Mom or Dad in a few instances.
''''his engine came to life""/"" the car's engine came to life'''''
a few punctuation items, when you reread you should find them.
I enjoyed the read, even if the subject matter is dark. It is reality.
Would I like to be one ... no thank you. Yet, I would love to be in their company and experience their world as they do.
Then I am talking about the movers and not my placid farm sheep or dairy cow.
Book wise, that would give me 'Call of the Wild' by Jack London. White Fang is an impressive story and second, to me.
There is another, which may be foreign to you. It is called 'Jock of the Bushveld' by Sir Percy Fitzpatrick (Do Google it, it is factual, if you have not read it, see if you can find it, it was also made into two movie versions.)
I cut my eyeteeth on 'Lassie' and all follow-up movies.
Your story started a line of thought, the line is that for all the wonder the 'computer world' offers, it cannot beat the imagination for entertainment and a good book for companionship.
I will keep my eyes peeled for Rusty from now on, I cannot say that I knew him.
The introductory sentence, please reread, re-look and possibly, rearrange. Maybe it is only me, I am having a problem with flow and clarity. Other than that, a comma placement else where.
One comment; I would think, that the demon would harass her constantly to drive her to such an ending, see;
'It spoke to her sometimes.' What do you think ?
A sad story, the secret to life is, make friends with your demon, that way, you get to know him (always him?)
and you can live in an uneasy peace.
Rule number one, the demon always forgets a simple rule, it dies with its victim.
Personal demons are not transferable.
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