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Review of Dreamer  
Review by Jeff
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hi Grace -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that these comments are my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard anything in this review as you see fit.

Overall, I think this is an interesting and engaging setup for a story. I like the uniqueness of Elsie's gift, and her relationship to the other characters is well-developed and intriguing. I did notice a couple of typos:

"... and I slow down to take a peak peek."

"'You can just call me Elsie,' I say without braking breaking eye contact."

Also, you mentioned that this is a work in progress. A few of the issues that I would hope to see resolved in the finished work are how Charles Thompson figures into the larger narrative of Elysie's life, and what affliction has overcome her fiance.

Within the confines of this part of the story, the only real issue I noticed was the fact that Elysie - at the beginning - says, "I don't want to sleep anymore" (on account of her nightmares), but then - later in the story - says, "I'm excited when they finally leave and I rush upstairs to bed." After ten years of not having the nightmares, and then having them begin again, even more forceful and violent than before, I feel like Elysie - no matter how tired - would be a little more apprehensive about closing her eyes at night.

Other than that, I really enjoyed this story and look forward to you finishing it! *Smile*

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Also, it would be a pleasure to feature this item in an upcoming issue of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


SoCalScribe

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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .



Hi Revelry new writings soon -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* I think this is a wonderful tribute to a talented actor who created perhaps one of the most memorable Joker roles that I can remember. Reading this item reminded me of how great Heath Ledger was in this role, and I can't think of any higher compliment than the fact that reading this item made me want to pop The Dark Knight into my DVD player and watch it again!


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* While I liked the inclusion of the quotes, I think the "you're a freak... like me" line would have been more impactful as the last line of the poem, rather than the "evening, commissioner" line which, to me, doesn't come across as well in this poem as it did on the screen. I think that by ending with the "freak" line it brings together the rest of the poem a little more. *Smile*


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, this was a wonderful item that reminded me of a great actor and a truly phenomenal role. Thank you for sharing!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


SoCalScribe

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Review of You are You  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi SonofDrogo -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that these comments are my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard anything in this review as you see fit.

Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant. I thought you did a great job with this piece... Dr. Suess has such an original, unique voice and you managed to capture (and corrupt? *Laugh*) it for your own purposes. I have absolutely no suggestions for improvement, other than to say more, more, more! This is truly one of the more original poems I've read on WdC and I think you really knocked it out of the park. Well done! *Bigsmile*

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


SoCalScribe

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Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chook -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that these comments are my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard anything in this review as you see fit.

This was an original and entertaining poem. I thought the subject matter was excellent and unique, and you really did a good job of presenting your observations. I particularly liked the last line of the poem, which really drove home your point.

If I had one suggestion for improvement, it would be to remain consistent with your rhyme scheme throughout the poem. Your first two stanzas are in the ABCB ABCB format, but then you transition to ABAB ABAB ABAB for the following three. I think the poem would have slightly more resonance with a consistent rhyme scheme throughout the piece.

Other than that, this was a really innovative, enjoyable read. Thanks!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


SoCalScribe

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Review of Urban Sprawl  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Aratena -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* I think this piece presents an important, topical theme for the reader to consider. Urban sprawl is truly becoming a problem as many of our undeveloped wilderness areas are being converted into urban spaces for the latest exclusive housing development, strip mall, or business park. It's truly concerning, and writing like this will hopefully cause people to think about what is happening to their planet. *Thumbsup*


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* I felt like the focus on the Summerhill's cat and the squirrel was a bit unnecessary, especially in a work so short. If it were a longer piece, I think specific anecdotes and narrative threads like that would be a welcome level of detail and description... but with so few words, I felt like they should all work toward the greater purpose of the narrative, IMO.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I really enjoyed this piece of writing. I thought it was engaging, interesting, and certainly topical. Well done!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi Hereward -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* I liked the theme of this poem. The idea that love will always prevail is a popular and effective theme, and you really did a great job expressing it in this simple and engaging poem.

*Checkb* I particularly enjoyed your last stanza. I thought "persecute the joy" was an elegant and evocative phrase that really hammered home the essence of what this poem is about. Well done! *Smile*


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* If anything, I was hoping that the poem would be a little longer, to more fully develop the story. As it is, the switch from fantasizing about the princess to having her appear for real in the bedchamber felt a little abrupt. A few extra stanzas in the middle would - I think - help transition from one part of the narrative to another more fluidly.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I really enjoyed this poem. I'm a big fan of poetry that also tells a narrative story, and I think you did an excellent job with this particular piece. *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of Two Mimes  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Sum1 -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* Original subject matter. I think this might be the first time I've read something about mimes on WdC. *Thumbsup*

*Checkb* Well-written. This item was well structured, well formatted, elegantly written, and engaging. An all around excellent piece of writing!


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* Nothing comes to mind.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I thought this was a wonderful piece of poetry. Inventive, original, and well written. Nicely done!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Hi Kathleen -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* Wonderful detail. Your item is filled with the kind of affectionate description that only an animal owner can truly appreciate and understand. The love-hate relationship of a pet who is so lovable... and at the same time, such a pain in the butt! *Laugh*

*Checkb* I love the photos. They add that wonderful point of reference that allows us to see that demon... er, dog of yours. While words are our stock and trade, sometimes there really is no substitute for a picture. *Wink*


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* This is a very minor point, but I would suggest centering the images in the item, to give the bottom a more balanced, even feel. But maybe that's just me. *Rolleyes*


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I thought this was a great item that really captured the emotional highs and lows of owning a pet and bringing one into your home. The good times are great... but oh, the destruction! *Laugh*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of The Pocketwatch  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there,

I happened across your item by browsing through the Mystery genre offerings on Writing.Com. It would be a pleasure to feature you item in this week's issue of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe
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Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there,

I happened across your item by browsing through the Mystery genre offerings on Writing.Com. It would be a pleasure to feature you item in this week's issue of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe
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Review of Deep Well  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi ~WhoMe???~ -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* Great, vivid imagery. I love the way your simple yet effective word choice paints such a vibrant picture in so few words. *Thumbsup*


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* I honestly have no suggestions. I thought this piece was beautiful, touching, and engaging.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, this poem - for me - is the epitome of simplistic beauty. Well done!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of Forgiveness  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Hi Jezri -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* Excellent pacing and structure. I thought that this whole poem flowed really well... it was fluid, quick and had a delightful cadence as I read it. It was a joy to read.

*Checkb* Great message. Forgiveness is one of the most important lessons we can learn, and you did a great job of highlighting that in this piece. *Smile*


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* I wish I had something to suggest, but I liked this item just the way it is. *Smile*


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Really great job. This was an excellent item, well written and engaging. Well done!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi David Gere -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* I thought that you handled Corbin's character with a delicate touch and effective characterization. It can be difficult to accurately and sympathetically depict a character with a disability (especially one like autism where there is so much going on inside), but I thought you did a wonderful job.

*Checkb* The world you created was vivid and detailed. You did a great job painting an engaging picture in such a short piece. Excellent work!


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* If I had one suggestion for improvement, it would be to expand this piece... it was so engaging, I found myself wanting more! *Bigsmile*


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I thought this was a unique, original piece of writing that handled both description and characterization expertly. Well done!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of All in One Night  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there,

I had a chance to read your item today as I was browsing through the Mystery genre listings, and think it would be a wonderful addition to this week's official Mystery newsletter. It would be my pleasure to feature it, and I hope that being featured brings you many reviews and useful feedback.

Hope you're having a great weekend!


- Jeff
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Review of No Working Title  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there,

I had a chance to read your item today as I was browsing through the Mystery genre listings, and think it would be a wonderful addition to this week's official Mystery newsletter. It would be my pleasure to feature it, and I hope that being featured brings you many reviews and useful feedback.

Hope you're having a great weekend!


- Jeff
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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Dark Society  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

Hi CaesarRupus.... -

The following is my official review as a judge for the Sinister Stories Contest, and I have enclosed the following Dark Society review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and while my decision for the contest judging is final, you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Check* Good use of the prompt. I loved this take on the Father Christmas character, and the way you found a use for your protagonist at the end of the story. A well conceptualized and inventive story. Nicely done!

*Check* Interesting mythology. I like the mythos that you set up in this story. It was engaging, original, and entertaining.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

The story felt a little sparse toward the end. Once Santa becomes animated, it seems the narrative goes through a lot of information very quickly (the idea of not having a soul, becoming an elf, etc.), and I think the story would benefit from a little more detail and description as you unfold the main action.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I enjoyed your story and thought you did a good job with the prompt. It was an interesting and compelling story. Nicely done!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Unofficial Erotica Newsletter ...  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

Hi percy goodfellow -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Unofficial Erotica Newsletter Group review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkv* You did a good job with this HSP: Sustaining the Sizzle final assignment. You were able to combine the serialized stories of the previous assignments into one cohesive narrative with compelling characters and engaging action. Well done!


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xv* I was really hoping that you would go back through and adjust the story where - in parts - it was entire solid blocks of dialogue with no action... and entire blocks of action with no dialogue. As I pointed out in some of your other assignments, "chunking" the dialogue and the action can sometimes cause a story to feel forced, unnecessarily theatrical, or unbalanced. By incorporating both dialogue and action into the same moments and same scenes, I think you'll find your stories have a more balanced, well-rounded feel to them.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I really enjoyed your story. I thought the characters were interesting and the setting was well-described. You did a good job this session. Nice work! *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of Laramie Swanson  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Unofficial Erotica Newsletter ...  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

Hi percy goodfellow -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Unofficial Erotica Newsletter Group review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkv* Good characterization. I enjoyed both Laramie and Jeff and thought they made a good couple in your story.

*Checkv* Good use of the prompt.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xv* While I enjoyed the idea of a voyeuristic narrator, I felt like I ultimately didn't get to know the narrator as much as I would have liked.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I liked this story. It was a good take on the prompt, and well executed. I also noticed that you're starting to get the hang of action and dialogue co-mingling. Good work! *Thumbsup*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there,

I found this item while browsing through the mystery genre on Writing.Com. It would be my pleasure to feature this in the next upcoming issue of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe
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Review of The Stranger  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there,

I found this item while browsing through the mystery genre on Writing.Com. It would be my pleasure to feature this in the next upcoming issue of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe
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Review of The Kingdom  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there,

I found this item while browsing through the mystery genre on Writing.Com. It would be my pleasure to feature this in the next upcoming issue of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe
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Review of Scooby-Doo Sequel  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there,

I noticed your request to have this item featured in the Official Mystery Newsletter. It would be my pleasure to feature this in next week's newsletter. I hope it brings you the publicity, feedback and participation that you're looking for.

Happy holidays,


SoCalScribe
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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Legerdemain -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* Beautiful imagery. Your anthropomorphic snowflakes were a joy to read. The writing was elegant and sophisticated, and you created a vivid, grand scene with your words. Excellent!


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* I wish I had something to suggest for improvement, but I loved this piece just the way it is. *Smile*


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Great item! I'm so glad it was featured in this week's Simply Positive weekly reviews. It was a joy to read.


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi fyn -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration as part of the "The Official Mod Review Blitz!" . Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Check* Very informative. I learned a whole lot about salt that I never knew before. *Smile*

*Check* Well structured. This essay was easy to follow, clear and concise. It was very well written and convincing.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*X* The only slight suggestion I had would be to - if possible - have the title be a more direct phrase (or play on a phrase) related to salt.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, this was an excellent piece of writing. Thoroughly enjoyable, educational, and entertaining. Great job!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)

Hi Davy Kraken -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration as part of the "The Official Mod Review Blitz!" . Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Check* An excellent overview of science fiction and fantasy. I particularly like the fact that you differentiated the two genres, but also highlighted their similarities. It can be difficult to define so broad a genre, but you did a great job.

*Check* Great structure. This essay was particularly well presented. It flowed easily from one paragraph to the next, and you made your point eloquently and concisely.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*X* While the example of Swift's classic Gulliver's Travels was well reasoned and well presented, I was hoping for a few more examples... the fantasy genre - especially when considering science fiction as a part of the genre - is such an extensive source of classic stories and famous works, I was hoping for a few more examples of successful genre works that comment upon our daily lives.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I really enjoyed this essay. As a fan of the fantasy genre (in all its forms), I thought you did a great job explaining it and presenting it to an audience who can appreciate the information and insights whether they're longtime fans of the genre or just now starting to delve into it. *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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