Hello PaulZ ~ Je Suis Le Reve ~,
My name is mmbabyfac and I will be reviewing you for the group "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor as well as for the Newbie Raffle!
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I think you have done a very good job with this piece. It has a lot of emotion in this piece. I really like the line I was kissed with pain and pricked by love!
I like the style you used as well. I think it flowed very naturally with the choice of words you used to express this poem. I found no grammer errors or misspellings either. I thank you for allowing me to read this wonderfully written write of yours and I hope you continue to write and share!
Happy New Year!
Best wishes,
mmbabyfac
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Hello Haley Bryant,
My name is mmbabyfac and I will be reviewing you today from the group "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor as well as for the Newbie Raffle!
Please know that my reviews are my personal opinions only. I can only offer you suggestions I think might help improve your write, if any at all are needed.
Now for your review:
I have really, really enjoyed reading this write of yours! I think this poem speaks volumes. You used very raw emotions in this write which makes it a wonderful read!
My favorite is the last line!
I think you did a wonderful job with the rhythme and meter in this poem. I also like the style. You did an amazing job in my opinion with this write! I found misspellings or grammer errors either.
All in all I have really enjoyed reading this write of yours. The only suggestion I have for you is to maybe concider using red for color to make the crimson in your write stand out. other than that it needs nothing!
Thank you for sharing this piece and do continue writing and sharing!
Have a Happy New Year!
mmbabyfac
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Hello Carlotta/Takg Leave of Absense,
My name is mmbabyfac and I will be reviewing you today from the group "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor as well as the Newbie Raffle!
Please know that my reviews are my personal opinions only. I can only offer you suggestions I think might help improve your write if any at all are needed.
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I think this is a very true poem you have written! It is also a poem a lot of people can relate to.
I think you did a wonderful job at giving us your opinion on trust and I think most people will agree with your view.
I think this is a straight forward look at trust and it is greatly done.
I like the style, meter and rhythme in this piece. I found no misspelling so grammer errors.
At this time, I do not have any suggestions on how to improve this already perfect write of yours.
Thank you for the wonderful read and do keep on writing and sharing!
I have enjoyed reading a few of your writes today. Have a Happy New Year!
mmbabyfac
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All I can really say is AMEN! I really like the ending stanza the most!
I like the whole poem and I get the meaning you are trying to get across to people. I have felt the same way most of my life.
You did a great job on this write of yours and I thank you for sharing this piece with WDC members!
Keep on writing and sharing! Welcome to WDC!
mmbabyfac
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This is a funny little story you have written here. It is hard to believe that a 26 year old wouldn't know what you were talking about.
I enjoyed reading this little story of yours about the birds and bees especially the sons version of it! I found no errors so kudos for that! Thank you for this write and sharing it with us! I really needed a laugh!
Keep on writing and sharing!
mmbabyfac
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Hello Mandi,
My name is mmbabyfac and I will be reviewing you today from the group "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor as well as the Newbie Raffle!
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Now for your review:
I found this a lovely short little poem you have written for the one you love. To express what a person means to you is to use raw emotions and I think you did a wonderful job in this one.
I like the flow of the poem as well as the style. The meter is a little off in the last stanza but does not take away from the loveliness of the poem.
I found no misspellings or grammer errors either.
Thank you for allowing me to read some of your work today. It has been a pleasure!
Keep on writing and sharing!
mmbabyfac
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Hello Mandi,
My name is mmbabyfac and I will be reviewing you today from the group "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor as well as the Newbie Raffle!
Please know that my reviews are my personal opinions only. I hold no degrees in writing. I can only offer you suggestions I think might help improve your write, if any at all are needed.
Now for your review:
This is definately a poem that a lot of people can relate to! i think you did a good job at describing the things you have to do to prepair for a wedding as well as the emotions involved. You sound as though this person is going to make you the happiest person in the world for the rest of your life and that is exactly how it should be!
I like the flow of your poem as well I think the meter was good. I like the style as well.
I found no misspellings or grammer errors so therefore i think this is a pretty good write and i have no suggestions for you at this time.
Thank you for sharing and do keep on writing and sharing!
mmbabyfac
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Hello Jessica,
My name is mmbabyfac and I will be reviewing you today from the group "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor as well as the Newbie Raffle!
Please know that my reviews are my personal opinions only. I hold no degrees in writing. I can only offer you suggestions i think might help improve your write, if any at all are needed.
Now for your review:
This is a beautifully written write you have here.
I love the descriptive words and metaphors!
It flows very well and the words just captured me and wouldn't let go!
I absolutely love this piece. I only have one suggestion for you and that is a comma or period after shores and before I'll. Other than this I think this is a great write and I'm so glad I had the opportunity to read it!
Thank you for sharing and do keep on writing and sharing!
mmbabyfac
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Hello Jessica
My name is mmbabyfac and I will be reviewing you today from the group "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor as well as the Newbie Raffle!
Please know that my reviews are my personal opnions only. I hold no degrees in writing. I can only offer you suggestions I think might help improve your write if any at all are needed.
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This is a very interesting look at what others persive as beauty. I was drawn in from the beginning and because of the wonderful details and descriptions I had to finish the story. I have really enjoyed reading your views on this opinion that so many can relate to. I found no grammer errors or misspellings either. Thank you for the wonderful read and do continue writing and sharing!
mmbabyfac
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I have really gotten a kick out of reading the differences and opinions in two types of people. Some of them have been pretty far out there, but hey, I'm only one person with my own opinions!
Alot of these have made me giggle and some have made me roll my eyes, but it has been fun either way!
Thanks for posting this! I enjoyed the read!
mmbabyfac
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Hello Rebecca - expiring,
My name is mmbabyfac and I will be reviewing you today from the group "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor as well as the newbie raffle!
Please know that my reviews are my personal opinions only. I hold no degrees in writing. I can only offer you suggestions I think might help improve your write, if any at all are needed.
Now for your review: I eally enjoyed reading this poem of yours today! I think the title goes very well with your poem. This is so sad yet inspiring a write! I think you did a wonderful job with your descriptions! I think this poem flowed natural with the style, meter and rhythme you chose! I found no misspellings or grammer errors either! I have really enjoyed this sad piece about the way you look at death! Suggestions I have for you: None except Keep on writing and sharing!
I hope you have found this review helpful in some way! Thank you for the great read!
mmbabyfac
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Hello each day is a blessing,
My name is mmbabyfac and I will be reviewing you today from the group "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor as well as the newbie raffle!
Please know that my reviews are my personal opinions only. I hold no degrees in writing. I can only offer you suggestions I think might help improve your write, if any at all are needed.
Now for your review: The title is a wonderful look into what you are writing this poem about! I agree with your poem and the meaning you are putting across in this piece. So many people can relate to this poem of yours and what is most important to them. I think it flows very well with the rhythme and style you have chosen. I think you did a good job with descriptive words in this poem! My only suggestion to your poem would be that you have described what matters to others, I would like to see what of these things actually matter to you.
Other than that, it is great as it stands now and think you have done a great job with this piece!
Please do continue to write and share!
I hope you have found this review helpful!
mmbabyfac
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First off I want to thank you for entering my contest for Dragons! I have read all the entries and have made my decission on winners! It was a very difficult choice as there were so many wonderful stories and poems such as yours. But I need to ask you this would you like an awardicon or a medit badge in Fantasy?! Congradulations!
I felt this story was the best because it reminded me of one of my all time favorite storys The Ugly Duckling! As well it reminded me of myself sometimes!
I also enjoyed the pictures you added they went great with the poem!
You have done a wonderful job with this poem and it has deserved 1st place, so CONGRATS again! I will be posting the winners in the contest forum on the 27th!
Thank you so very much for the wonderful read!
Keep on writing!
mmbabyfac
This is an absolutly beautiful poem you have written!
All parent's can relate to this poem so very much and you captured the emotions quit wonderfully. I like the fact that you added each step of growing up from baby to adult!
I found no grammer errors or misspellings!
In all I have greatly enjoyed reading this poem of yours and I thank you for sharing from a parents view.
Keep on writing and sharing!
mmbabyfac
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AMEN! I have enjoyed reading this write of yours and I find it oh so very true. We all have days, even months that are our hardest seemingly ever and I find it a miracle that we can make it through.
My family is my miracle and I thank you so very much for the chance to sit back and think about what a miracle really is and what your opinion of a miracle is!
Have a Blessed Merry Christmas and Happy New Year!
Keep on writing and sharing!
mmbabyfac
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I think this is a beautifully written poem you have written here. I think you used a great deal of emotion to get your point of view across.
I think it flows naturally and I like how you portray both sides of life.
I like the style and feel it stayed well within meter.
I found no misspellings or grammer so in all I have enjoyed reading this write of yours. Thank you for sharing and do continue writing!!
mmbabyfac
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Oh wow! i just have to say this story is a wonderful read! I couldn't look away from this from beginning to end. you captured my attention and kept it, which is not an easy thing to do, by the way!
I absolutely loved this piece and you really surprised me with the ending!
I have enjoyed this write of yours very much and I would not change a thing about it!
Thank you for this wonderful read and please continue writing and sharing!
mmbabyfac
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I think you have done an amazing job with this story of yours. I found it very interesting all the way through. You kept my attention until the very end and I was surprised by the ending. I had a little giggle about it as well. Out of the mouth of babes.
I think you did a wonderful job with the characters descriptions as well as the surroundings!
You have got one heck of a good write here and i only have one suggestion for you. In your third paragraph where you say it had to be sumptious one I think you should use it had to be a sumptious one. Other than this I felt I could not rate it anything but perfect!
I have enjoyed reading this write of yours and I thank you for sharing it with such wonderful detail!
Keep on writing!
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I personally couldn't help but laugh all the way through this write of yours!
I think you did an amazing job telling this funny little story about your shopping experience for an aunt.
You used just enough detail to keep me interested in finishing the story and describing your feelings during shopping experiences.
All in all i have enjoyed this write of yours and i thank you for the laugh!!
Keep on writing and sharing!
mmbabyfac
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I think this is a very emotional write you have written here. It has a lot of detail and I like the parts where you say, "that's how mamma used to color" It seems so sad but at the same time it is not. I think you did a wonderful job describing the emotions you put forth in this write and I like the style and think it flowed very natural. I have enjoyed reading this write of yours and I thank you for sharing!
Please continue to write and share!
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Oh this is such a well written poem you have here. It started out so sweet and happy but then ended so sad. I think you put a lot of emotion in this write and although it ended sadly, I enjoyed reading it. I think you did a wonderful job describing what you were going to do with her and why you did the things you did when you were younger to be like her.
I found no grammer errors or misspellings either.
All in all I think this is a wonderful write you have here and I thank you for sharing. Please continue to write and share!
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I think this is a wonderful Christmas story you have shared with us. How nice of the woman to take the little amout to make a brother so happy for Christmas.
I think you did a good job at describing the situation and the characters in your story. This is certainly a very uplifting, emotional tale you have written! I thank you for sharing and please do continue to write and share!
mmbabyfac
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I do think this is a very wonderful, romantic write you have written here. It is emotional and drew me in to finish it completely. I think you did a wonderful job describing what you promise to do for this person.
I like the style you chose and I think it stayed well within meter.
It also flows very nicely!
I have enjoyed reading this write of yours and I hope you continue to write and share!
mmbabyfac
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Hello again Vivian ,
My name is mmbabyfac and I will be reviewing you today from the group "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor as well as the Kindness Tree!
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This is a very interesting story you have written. I have enjoyed reading all of your works today! I think you did a wonderful job on this story about an old man set in his ways but learns that he can change. It is wonderful how you made the teen point out the reason his wife is giving him these big words to distract his previous thoughts..
I think this was well written in that I didn't feel rushed into the plot of the story. You did a fine job at describing the situation and all the surroundings as well as the characters.
I found no misspellings or grammer errors so once again, I have no suggestions for you at this time. Please continue writing and sharing! I think you are a very talented writer!
Thank you for allowing me to raid your port today!
mmbabyfac
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Hello Vivian ,
My name is mmbabyfac and I will be reviewing you today from the group "Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor as well as the Kindness Tree!
Please know that my reviews are my personal opinions only. I hold no degrees in writing. I can only offer you suggestions I think might help improve your write if any at all are needed.
Now for your review:
I find this write of yours very good and true in so many ways. I myself realized I have done some of the things you wrote about in this poem and it made me think about how true it is.
I think you choose a good style and feel that it flowed nicely.
You keep my attention through the whole poem and i did not feel rushed in reading it. I was able to take my time in understanding your words.
I found no errors or misspellings either.
I have enjoyed reading this write of yours .
So therefore I feel that there are no suggestions I can offer at this point except to ask you to please continue writing and sharing
mmbabyfac
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I have really enjoyed this sad piece about the way you look at death!